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Run: 2026-03-06-01KK1JD942PQP5F10WBHM44SGE
Run Details
Model:
GPT-5.4
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Horror: alone in an eerie place at night
Duration:
1m 11s
Cost:
$0.039845
Provider:
OpenAI
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
95.04%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
57.82%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
83.33%
Name drop frequency
(details)
88.52%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
51.12%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
98.40%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
54.42%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
100.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
28.41%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
67.10%
Technical jargon density
(details)
41.67%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
94.44%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
88.6756%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
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Aurora Carter caught her sleeve
on the thorn and nearly tore it clean off.
She jerked back, swore under
her breath, and clamped one hand over the Heartstone pendant before it could swing free and flash.
The deep crimson gem throbbed
against her palm, warm as a live coal under silver. Ahead, between a stand of bracken and a knot of low oak roots, the old stones waited in a ragged ring, half sunk in earth, dark with age, taller than a man in places and bent like rotten teeth in others. So the note had not lied.
She freed the fabric with
care. No point arriving at a hidden Fae border looking as if she'd fought with a hedge and lost. Dry leaves clung to her boots.
The path behind her had
vanished three turnings ago.
Richmond Park still lay somewhere
beyond the trees, civil and known, with its dog walkers and cyclists and crisp maps nailed to wooden posts.
Here, the air had gone
close and muffled.
Even her own footfalls seemed
to land wrong, as if the grove swallowed the sound and chewed it before giving any back.
Aurora drew the folded paper
from her coat pocket and checked it again by the pale light on her phone screen. Find the old oak stones. Enter alone. Bring the pendant. Ask for Isolde before the grove asks for your name. No signature. No explanation.
Just the same narrow, slanted
hand that had left the package with the Heartstone outside her flat two nights ago. She tucked the note away.
Her bright blue eyes moved
over the clearing, measuring distances out of habit. Six stones that she could see. Seven if the squat shape by the leaning oak counted. Moss over the lower halves. White lichen in cracked crescents.
Wildflowers crowded the gaps between
them, too many, too lush for the season, their faces turned in odd directions,
not up, but inward, toward the centre
. The pendant
pulsed
harder. "Right," she whispered. "In and out." No answer.
Only a rustle in the
undergrowth to her left.
She turned at once, phone
lifted. The beam cut across fern, root, and a fallen branch slick with old bark. Nothing moved. Yet the rustle did not stop.
It shifted instead, circling behind
the nearest stone with a hush-hush drag, like
silk
pulled over dry grass. A fox, she thought first. Then she listened harder. Too steady for an animal.
She stepped between the first
two stones. The change hit at once. Not wind, not temperature, not anything she could name cleanly.
More like walking through the
skin of a soap bubble and feeling it cling for a split second to her face, her hands, the scar on her left wrist. Her ears popped. The world gave a soft, inward click. Aurora stopped. The clearing looked the same. The stones still ringed it. The oak still hunched over one side with roots like knotted limbs. But the space had stretched. There should not have been this much room between the stones. The wildflowers had thickened into low drifts of colour, blue and ivory and red. A narrow stream now crossed the centre where there had been none before, water clear enough to show each pale pebble at the bottom. Its surface did not ripple.
It slid by in a
sheet of black glass. Her phone lost signal. Of course it did. Aurora put it away and stood still, forcing herself to breathe evenly. Panic made people stupid.
She had seen that enough
with Evan, in rows that began with one harsh word and ended with broken crockery. Stay calm, count exits, keep your voice level. Rules learned for one monster often served with another. "Isolde?" she called. The name went nowhere. No
echo
. No return. A petal landed on her shoulder. She looked up. The oak branches stood bare. Aurora brushed the petal off.
It stuck to her glove
for a second before falling. White, thick, almost fleshy. Wrong flower. Wrong tree. Something tapped behind her. Stone on stone, neat and small. She spun. Nothing. Then she frowned. One of the standing stones had moved.
Not by much, perhaps a foot from where she remembered it, but enough to narrow the gap behind her
. No. Not possible. She crossed to it, crouched, and touched the base. Cold grit crumbled under her fingers. The earth around it looked undisturbed. No drag marks. No fresh split roots. "Fine," she said to the clearing, low and clipped. "We're doing this." The stream divided the grove.
She picked a place where
flat rocks rose above the water and crossed, careful with each step.
Her pendant grew warmer with
every pace. The silver chain pinched the back of her neck. On the far side stood a shape she had missed before, half hidden by foxgloves, a little
structure
of woven branches and pale twine, hardly larger than a confessional box. Charms dangled from the entrance, bird bones, dried seed pods, strips of faded cloth.
They clicked together with the
same tiny sound she had heard before. Tap. Tap. Tap. Aurora slowed. The bones were all facing her.
She had no idea how
she knew that, but she did.
Though they hung still, each
hooked joint and hollow eye socket
seemed fixed on her approach with a cold, patient attention
. "Isolde?" she said again. The branch
structure
gave a faint creak, as if something inside had shifted its
weight
. Aurora stood just outside the doorway. The smell reached her first, not rot, something stranger, sweet crushed flowers over damp soil, with a sharp metallic thread beneath. The inside looked empty. A low stool. A bowl made from polished wood. Bundles of herbs hanging from the roof. In the bowl lay three acorns, black as if charred. The pendant burned against her chest. Her hand closed around it. The gem gave one hard
pulse
, then another,
as if answering a second heartbeat near by
. She backed away. A laugh slipped through the grove. Not loud. Not theatrical. A woman's laugh, brief and private, cut off at once. Aurora turned toward it and saw only flowers stirring where no breeze ran. Their stems bent in sequence, one patch after another,
tracing
a path along the outer edge of the clearing. Something moved there. Not a body.
More an absence that pushed
the plants aside and took the shape of a person only at the corners of sight. Tall. Then small.
Then too low to be
human at all. "Enough," Aurora said. "You asked me here." The flowers stilled. Silence pressed close.
Then, from behind her own
shoulder, near enough that breath should have touched her ear, a voice said, "Did I?" Aurora flinched and whirled with her fist already half raised. No one stood there. Her
pulse
kicked hard. She hated that. Hated the loss of control in her body, the split between thought and flesh. She swallowed it down. Across the stream, at the centre of the grove, someone now stood between the stones. A woman in a pale dress, long hair hanging black and straight, head bowed. Aurora's skin tightened across her arms. For one deranged second she thought she
was looking
at her own reflection, hauled upright and dressed for burial.
Then the woman lifted her
face. Not her. Not quite. The eyes were wrong, too dark, too bright at once, with no white around the iris. The mouth smiled before the rest of the face joined in. "You crossed without asking leave," the woman said. Her voice rang clear now, warm and educated, with a lilting cadence that made each word sound polished before it reached the air. "Your note told me to enter." "My note." The woman tilted her head. "How obliging of me." Aurora did not move closer. "Are you Isolde?" The smile thinned. "Names matter here." "That's why I haven't given mine." A
flicker
crossed the woman's face, approval or annoyance. Hard to tell. "Clever girls always arrive with pockets full of caution. Then the grove takes one thing from them, and they empty the rest willingly." "I only need answers." "No one comes here for that." The woman drifted a step to one side. Her feet did not disturb the flowers. "They come for bargains. Revenge. Love. Doors best left shut." Aurora's grip tightened on the pendant. "Then let's save time. What is this?" The woman looked at the gem through the silver chain and went still. At once, the whole grove followed. The tiny clicking charms fell silent. The stream stopped with a smooth, impossible skin.
Even the smell in the
air changed, sweetness curdling into something old and mineral, like a crypt opened after a century. When the woman spoke again, all softness had gone. "Who gave you that?" "I was hoping you would tell me." The woman's gaze snapped up to Aurora's face. "Take it off." "No." "Take it off." The wildflowers around Aurora folded shut. Not all at once. One by one, petals furled inward, beginning at her boots and
racing
outward in widening circles, until the whole clearing
seemed covered in clenched little fists
. Beneath the earth came a muted thud, then another, slow and heavy, as if something far below had turned in its sleep. Aurora took one step back. The stones answered. A grinding shudder rolled around the grove. Ancient oak pillars shifted against the soil with the noise of molars crushing bone. The gap she had entered through closed
completely
. The two nearest stones leaned toward one another until only a narrow slit remained between them, black as a cut. "Isolde," Aurora said, her voice steady now because fear had sharpened into purpose, "if that's you, stop whatever theatre this is and speak plainly." The woman's lips parted. For the first time she looked
unsettled
. "That is not a
charm
of the Fair Folk," she said. "That is not grove-work. That thing has tasted Hel." The pendant flared hot enough to sear. Aurora hissed and yanked it away from her skin. Deep crimson light leaked between her fingers, pulsing in time with the blows under the earth. Thud. Thud. Thud. The stream split down the middle with a crack like ice under
weight
. Black water peeled apart and showed
not pebbles beneath, but a shaft descending into red dark
. Heat gusted up from it, foul and furnace-dry, carrying the stench of iron, ash, and something butchered long ago. The woman in the clearing recoiled. "What did you bring in here?" "I brought what your message told me to bring." "I sent no message." The branch shrine behind Aurora burst inward. Bones snapped on their strings. The wooden bowl leapt from its stool and smashed. The three black acorns rolled across the ground, struck the edge of the widening crack, and dropped soundlessly into the glow below. From the opening came a scrape. Then another. Not claws. Nails. Human nails, dragged
slowly
up stone from far beneath, patient as a visitor climbing stairs. The woman took her first full step back. Her pale dress darkened at the hem where the closing flowers touched it. "Give me the pendant." Aurora did not move. "You first. Who's under there?" A face surged up in the red light and vanished before shape could settle, all teeth and blind wet gleam. The grove screamed. Not a figure of speech, not branches groaning in wind. The stones themselves shrieked, a piercing, layered cry that ripped through Aurora's skull and drove her to one knee. Cracks
raced
over the nearest pillar. White light bled from them. The woman across the stream lost her shape for a moment, lengthening into something antlered and thin. "Give it here," she snapped, no longer polished, no longer kind. "Now, girl." The hand that shot out of the fissure looked human until it grabbed the edge of the earth and hauled higher, skin grey as dishwater, fingers too many-jointed, nails black and clicking on stone like polite little knocks. And then a second hand seized Aurora's ankle from the flowers behind her.
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upstream_inference_cost
0
provider_name
"OpenAI"
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
12
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"she said again [again]"
dialogueSentences
36
tagDensity
0.333
leniency
0.667
rawRatio
0.083
effectiveRatio
0.056
95.04%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
2015
totalAiIsmAdverbs
2
found
0
adverb
"completely"
count
1
1
adverb
"slowly"
count
1
highlights
0
"completely"
1
"slowly"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
57.82%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
2015
totalAiIsms
17
found
0
word
"throbbed"
count
1
1
word
"pulsed"
count
1
2
word
"silk"
count
1
3
word
"echo"
count
1
4
word
"structure"
count
2
5
word
"weight"
count
2
6
word
"pulse"
count
2
7
word
"tracing"
count
1
8
word
"silence"
count
1
9
word
"flicker"
count
1
10
word
"racing"
count
1
11
word
"unsettled"
count
1
12
word
"charm"
count
1
13
word
"raced"
count
1
highlights
0
"throbbed"
1
"pulsed"
2
"silk"
3
"echo"
4
"structure"
5
"weight"
6
"pulse"
7
"tracing"
8
"silence"
9
"flicker"
10
"racing"
11
"unsettled"
12
"charm"
13
"raced"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"clenched jaw/fists"
count
1
highlights
0
"clenched little fists"
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
210
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
1
narrationSentences
210
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
234
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
41
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
2015
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
15
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
83.33%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
38
wordCount
1838
uniqueNames
10
maxNameDensity
1.2
worstName
"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity
2.5
worstWindowName
"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Carter
1
Heartstone
2
Fae
1
Park
1
Isolde
1
Evan
1
Aurora
22
White
3
Tap
3
Thud
3
persons
0
"Carter"
1
"Evan"
2
"Aurora"
places
0
"Park"
globalScore
0.902
windowScore
0.833
88.52%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
122
glossingSentenceCount
3
matches
0
"seemed fixed on her approach with a cold, patient attention"
1
"as if answering a second heartbeat near by"
2
"seemed covered in clenched little fists"
51.12%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
3
per1kWords
1.489
wordCount
2015
matches
0
"not up, but inward, toward the centre"
1
"Not by much, perhaps a foot from where she remembered it, but enough to narrow the gap behind her"
2
"not pebbles beneath, but a shaft descending into red dark"
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
234
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
112
mean
17.99
std
21
cv
1.167
sampleLengths
0
14
1
78
2
6
3
93
4
21
5
20
6
24
7
70
8
4
9
6
10
11
11
46
12
9
13
5
14
7
15
54
16
2
17
90
18
4
19
4
20
53
21
3
22
8
23
6
24
3
25
5
26
23
27
4
28
6
29
2
30
1
31
29
32
3
33
28
34
12
35
94
36
3
37
2
38
6
39
32
40
4
41
15
42
57
43
6
44
21
45
3
46
6
47
14
48
70
49
7
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
210
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
294
matches
0
"was looking"
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
0
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
0
totalSentences
234
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
98.40%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1841
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
77
adverbRatio
0.04182509505703422
lyAdverbCount
11
lyAdverbRatio
0.005975013579576317
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
234
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
234
mean
8.61
std
7.05
cv
0.819
sampleLengths
0
14
1
22
2
15
3
41
4
6
5
6
6
18
7
6
8
9
9
24
10
8
11
22
12
21
13
5
14
2
15
3
16
10
17
2
18
2
19
20
20
5
21
13
22
6
23
10
24
5
25
5
26
26
27
4
28
3
29
3
30
2
31
9
32
6
33
14
34
2
35
6
36
18
37
5
38
4
39
5
40
7
41
5
42
10
43
29
44
3
45
7
46
2
47
5
48
5
49
12
54.42%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
21
diversityRatio
0.3803418803418803
totalSentences
234
uniqueOpeners
89
100.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
13
totalSentences
176
matches
0
"Even her own footfalls seemed"
1
"Just the same narrow, slanted"
2
"Only a rustle in the"
3
"Then she listened harder."
4
"Too steady for an animal."
5
"More like walking through the"
6
"Of course it did."
7
"Then she frowned."
8
"More an absence that pushed"
9
"Then too low to be"
10
"Then, from behind her own"
11
"Then the woman lifted her"
12
"Even the smell in the"
ratio
0.074
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
31
totalSentences
176
matches
0
"She jerked back, swore under"
1
"She freed the fabric with"
2
"She tucked the note away."
3
"Her bright blue eyes moved"
4
"She turned at once, phone"
5
"It shifted instead, circling behind"
6
"She stepped between the first"
7
"Her ears popped."
8
"Its surface did not ripple."
9
"It slid by in a"
10
"Her phone lost signal."
11
"She had seen that enough"
12
"She looked up."
13
"It stuck to her glove"
14
"She crossed to it, crouched,"
15
"she said to the clearing,"
16
"She picked a place where"
17
"Her pendant grew warmer with"
18
"They clicked together with the"
19
"She had no idea how"
ratio
0.176
100.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
119
totalSentences
176
matches
0
"Aurora Carter caught her sleeve"
1
"She jerked back, swore under"
2
"The deep crimson gem throbbed"
3
"She freed the fabric with"
4
"The path behind her had"
5
"Richmond Park still lay somewhere"
6
"Here, the air had gone"
7
"Aurora drew the folded paper"
8
"She tucked the note away."
9
"Her bright blue eyes moved"
10
"Moss over the lower halves."
11
"Wildflowers crowded the gaps between"
12
"The pendant pulsed harder."
13
"She turned at once, phone"
14
"The beam cut across fern,"
15
"It shifted instead, circling behind"
16
"A fox, she thought first."
17
"She stepped between the first"
18
"The change hit at once."
19
"Her ears popped."
ratio
0.676
28.41%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
1
totalSentences
176
matches
0
"Though they hung still, each"
ratio
0.006
67.10%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
66
technicalSentenceCount
7
matches
0
"No point arriving at a hidden Fae border looking as if she'd fought with a hedge and lost."
1
"Even her own footfalls seemed to land wrong, as if the grove swallowed the sound and chewed it before giving any back."
2
"Just the same narrow, slanted hand that had left the package with the Heartstone outside her flat two nights ago."
3
"The branch structure gave a faint creak, as if something inside had shifted its weight."
4
"The gem gave one hard pulse, then another, as if answering a second heartbeat near by."
5
"Her voice rang clear now, warm and educated, with a lilting cadence that made each word sound polished before it reached the air."
6
"Beneath the earth came a muted thud, then another, slow and heavy, as if something far below had turned in its sleep."
41.67%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
12
uselessAdditionCount
2
matches
0
"that breath should, a voice said,"
1
"Aurora said, her voice steady now because fear had sharpened into purpose,"
94.44%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
9
fancyCount
2
fancyTags
0
"she whispered (whisper)"
1
"she snapped (snap)"
dialogueSentences
36
tagDensity
0.25
leniency
0.5
rawRatio
0.222
effectiveRatio
0.111
88.6756%