Run: 2026-03-11-01KKFCSF5T1FWGMG9ERHNNMCZA

Run Details

Duration:
57.8s
Cost:
$0.001014
Provider:
DeepInfra

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door slammed against the cracked wood with a hollow thud that rattled the scattered pages on the desk. Aurora felt the scar on her wrist pulse against the cool metal of the knob. She turned, eyes narrowing, the bright blue of them catching the faint amber of Lucien’s heterochromatic gaze. He stood there, cane tapping the floor, the blade hidden inside catching a stray reflection from the streetlamp outside. “Rory,” he said, voice low, resonant, carrying the cadence of Marseille and the clipped precision of London. The words hung in the air, heavy with something unspoken. She stared at the cane, at the way his tailored suit seemed to cut the cramped space like a blade through silk. “You,” she replied, voice steady, “you always arrive when the night is already bruised.” A smirk twisted the corner of her mouth, not quite a smile, more a challenge. The room seemed to hold its breath. Ptolemy, the tabby, lifted his head from a stack of scrolls, eyes glinting with curiosity. Lucien’s amber eye flickered, his black eye deepening. “I have no business here,” he said, “but the city’s whisper told me you were still breathing.” He took a step forward, the cane striking the floor with a metallic click. Aurora moved to the small kitchen area, the kettle whistling unnoticed. “You think you can barge in, flash that smile, and expect me to forget what happened?” She lifted a chipped mug, the ceramic warm against her palm. “We left with more than just a broken promise, you know.” Lucien’s lips curled, a smile that didn’t reach his eyes. “We left with a debt, Aurora. You owe me something.” He tapped the cane again, the blade’s whisper barely audible. “The ledger never closes.” She set the mug down, the porcelain cracking against the counter. “I paid my part,” she said, “but you never stopped tallying.” She glanced at the scar on her wrist, the crescent-shaped reminder of a childhood accident that had once left a mark. “You think I’m still counting?” She lifted her gaze, meeting his amber eye directly. “I stopped counting years ago.” He leaned against the doorway, the cane’s tip resting lightly on the worn wooden floorboards. “You always liked the edge of things, didn’t you? The thrill of the unknown.” He spoke, each syllable deliberate, as if testing the weight of each word. “You used to say you’d never get tangled in my kind of mess.” Aurora laughed, a short, sharp sound that echoed off the books. “I got tangled the moment I met you, Lucien. You made the world feel like a chessboard, and I was a pawn you moved without asking.” She stepped closer, the scent of jasmine from a dried flower on the windowsill mingling with the smell of old paper. “You left me in a checkmate I never saw coming.” Lucien’s hand brushed the edge of the bookshelf, fingers sliding over leather-bound tomes. “You always saw the board,” he said, “but you never saw the pieces moving behind you.” He turned his head, the black eye catching the dim light. “I came back because the board is shifting, and you’re the only one who can read the moves.” She crossed the room, the floorboards creaking under her boots. “The board?” She laughed again, softer this time, a sound that seemed to vibrate the air. “You think you can read me like a book?” She reached out, fingertips grazing the spine of a dusty volume, the leather cool under her touch. “You think you can read my mind?” His voice lowered, the French lilt slipping through. “I can read the silence you leave behind.” He paused, the cane’s blade humming faintly. “I can read the way you hold your breath when you think no one’s watching.” He stepped closer, the scent of his cologne mixing with the faint aroma of curry from downstairs. “I can read the scar you hide, the story you never tell.” Aurora’s hand tightened around the mug, the porcelain digging into her palm. “You always liked to pry,” she said, voice barely above a whisper. “You always liked to know everything.” She lifted her chin, defying the tremor in her voice. “You think you can read the storm behind my eyes?” Lucien’s gaze intensified, the amber flickering like a candle flame. “Storms are just weather,” he said, “the real danger is the lightning that never strikes.” He moved his hand to rest on the arm of the chair, the cane’s blade now exposed, a thin silver glint. “I came back because the lightning struck you, Aurora. It struck you hard enough to leave a mark.” She turned away, eyes fixed on the cat, which now stared up at her with luminous green eyes. “You think you can paint the world in black and white,” she said, “but you forget the colors that bleed through.” She pointed at the cat, its tail flicking. “Even Ptolemy knows when a storm is coming.” Lucien’s lips twitched, a smile that was half amusement, half warning. “The storm is coming, Rory,” he said, “and you’re the only one who can stop it.” He stepped forward, closing the distance between them. The air seemed to thrum, the books shaking ever so slightly. “I’m not here to fight,” he whispered, “I’m here because I need you.” Aurora’s breath caught, the scar on her wrist tingling as if remembering a wound long healed. “You always need something,” she said, voice soft, “but you rarely ask.” She stepped back, the distance between them growing, the tension palpable. “What do you want, Lucien? Why now?” He placed the cane on the floor, the blade flashing briefly. “Because the city is unraveling,” he said, “and the pieces we left behind are scattering.” He looked at her, his amber eye burning. “Because I need you to help me put them back together.” He extended his hand, the cuff of his suit sleeve sliding back to reveal a thin, intricate tattoo. “Help me, Aurora. Help me fix what we broke.” She stared at his hand, the scars on his palm matching the lines on her own. “You think you can fix it?” She asked, the words sharp, edged with hurt. “You think you can fix us?” She lifted her chin, meeting his gaze directly. “What if I say no?” Lucien’s smile widened, a flash of teeth in the dim light. “Then we’ll both watch the world burn,” he said, voice low, “and we’ll both be left with nothing but ash.” He stepped closer, his breath warm against her cheek. “You always were the one who could see through the ash.” Aurora’s eyes fluttered closed for a heartbeat, the memory of their last night together surfacing. The night they had argued over a map, over a promise, over a future that never materialized. She felt the heat rise in her cheeks, a flush that matched the amber of his eye. “You left me with a map that led nowhere,” she said, voice barely audible, “and a silence that echoed louder than any words.” Lucien’s hand rested lightly on her shoulder, his fingertips warm, grounding. “I left because I thought I could protect you,” he said, “but I realized protection is a trap.” His voice softened, a rare vulnerability surfacing. “I never wanted to hurt you, Aurora. I only wanted to keep you safe.” He pressed his forehead against hers, the contact brief but charged. “I was wrong.” She pulled away, the distance returning, but the closeness lingered in the air. “You think you can protect me by staying away?” She asked, eyes flashing. “You think you can protect me by leaving?” Her voice cracked, a raw edge cutting through the room. “You think you can protect me by breaking my heart again?” Lucien’s eyes softened, the amber darkening, the black deepening. “I think I can protect you by being honest,” he said, “by laying my truth on the table.” He placed his hand over hers, the skin against hers, the heat seeping into her palm. “I’m not here to break you, Aurora. I’m here to mend what we shattered.” He let his words hang, the weight of them pressing down like a weighty book. Aurora looked down at their intertwined hands, the scar on her wrist pressing against his palm. “You always liked to touch,” she said, a faint smile forming, “but you never knew when to stop.” She lifted her other hand, brushing the cat’s head, the fur soft under her fingers. “Maybe we’re both too stubborn to stop.” Lucien’s lips brushed her ear, a whispered promise. “Maybe we’re both too broken to stay whole.” He pressed a kiss to her forehead, gentle, reverent. “But maybe that’s okay.” He stepped back, the cane now resting on the floor, the blade hidden once more. She watched him, the room feeling suddenly too small, too intimate. “You think you can leave again?” She asked, voice firm, resolute. “You think you can walk away?” She met his gaze, the blue of her eyes reflecting his amber. “You think you can leave me with this scar?” She lifted her wrist, showing the crescent-shaped mark. “You think you can leave me with this?” Lucien’s shoulders relaxed, the tension in his frame easing. “I think I can’t,” he said, voice barely above a whisper. “I think I’m stuck, Rory. Stuck in this flat, stuck in this moment, stuck with you.” He took a step back, the cane tapping the floor, a rhythmic beat. “I think I’m stuck because I can’t walk away from you.” Aurora’s heart hammered, the rhythm matching the ticking of the old clock on the wall. “You can’t stay,” she said, the words sharper than she intended. “You can’t stay because you have a destiny, a path.” She turned to the window, the city lights flickering far below. “You have a destiny that doesn’t include me.” Lucien’s eyes narrowed, the black eye narrowing to a slit, the amber glowing like embers. “My destiny is tangled with yours,” he said, “and I can’t untangle it without you.” He took another step, closing the gap, his breath warm on her skin. “I’m not asking you to stay,” he whispered, “I’m asking you to help me finish what we started.” He placed his hand over hers again, the contact firm, anchoring. “Help me, Aurora. Help me finish what we started.” She felt the heat of his palm, the strength in his grip, the unspoken promise lingering in the air. “Finish what we started?” She asked, voice low, edged with doubt. “What does that even mean?” She looked at him, seeking meaning in his eyes, in the flicker of his heterochromatic stare. “What does that even mean for us?” Lucien’s lips curled, a smile that was both a promise and a threat. “It means we finish what we started,” he said, “together.” He lifted his cane, the blade catching the light, a glint that seemed to pulse with life. “It means we finish the storm.” He placed the cane on the floor, the tip resting on the worn wood. “It means we finish the night.” Aurora stared at the cane, at the blade, at the man before her. She felt the scar pulse, a reminder of pain and survival. She inhaled, the scent of curry and jasmine filling her lungs. “Finish the night,” she repeated, the words hanging in the air like a question. “What does that even mean?” She turned away, the books whispering around her, the cat's tail flicking. “What does that even mean for us?” Lucien stepped closer, his presence a weight that filled the cramped flat. “It means we finish the night,” he said, “with us still standing.” He lifted his hand, fingertips brushing the scar on her wrist, the touch gentle, almost reverent. “It means we finish the night, Aurora, with us still standing.” He let the words linger, the finality of them settling into the room. She felt his breath on her cheek, the heat of his words searing the cool air. “Finish the night,” she repeated, the phrase now a mantra, a vow. She lifted her gaze, meeting his amber eye once more. “Finish the night,” she whispered, “with us still standing.” The cat leapt onto the desk, scattering a few loose pages. The room seemed to hold its breath, the tension hanging like a taut string. Lucien’s hand rested on her shoulder, his touch grounding, his presence a promise. “Finish the night,” he said, voice soft, “with us still standing.” He let the phrase echo, the last words hanging in the dim light. She looked at him, at the scar, at the blade, at the city beyond the window. The storm outside seemed to quiet, the rain stopping as if listening. “Finish the night,” she whispered, the words now a promise, a vow. She lifted her hand, touching the scar once more, feeling the past and present merge. “Finish the night,” she repeated, the words now a promise, a vow. The scene held, time suspended, as the two stood together, the door still ajar, the night outside waiting.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags58
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"She laughed again [again]"
1"He stepped back [back]"
2"She turned away [away]"
dialogueSentences83
tagDensity0.699
leniency1
rawRatio0.052
effectiveRatio0.052
86.28% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2186
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"lightly"
count2
1
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count2
2
adverb"ever so slightly"
count1
3
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"lightly"
1"barely above a whisper"
2"ever so slightly"
3"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
8.51% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2186
totalAiIsms40
found
0
word"pulse"
count3
1
word"unspoken"
count2
2
word"silk"
count1
3
word"glinting"
count1
4
word"flickered"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count4
6
word"porcelain"
count2
7
word"reminder"
count2
8
word"weight"
count3
9
word"echoed"
count2
10
word"pawn"
count1
11
word"lilt"
count1
12
word"silence"
count2
13
word"glint"
count2
14
word"tension"
count3
15
word"palpable"
count1
16
word"unraveling"
count1
17
word"intricate"
count1
18
word"fluttered"
count1
19
word"charged"
count1
20
word"shattered"
count1
21
word"rhythmic"
count1
22
word"flicker"
count1
23
word"searing"
count1
24
word"echo"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"unspoken"
2"silk"
3"glinting"
4"flickered"
5"whisper"
6"porcelain"
7"reminder"
8"weight"
9"echoed"
10"pawn"
11"lilt"
12"silence"
13"glint"
14"tension"
15"palpable"
16"unraveling"
17"intricate"
18"fluttered"
19"charged"
20"shattered"
21"rhythmic"
22"flicker"
23"searing"
24"echo"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences111
matches(empty)
52.77% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount7
narrationSentences111
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences136
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen47
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2186
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions43
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
96.50% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions27
wordCount1402
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity1.07
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Lucien15
Marseille1
London1
Aurora9
French1
persons
0"Lucien"
1"Aurora"
places
0"Marseille"
1"London"
globalScore0.965
windowScore1
8.49% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences106
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"not quite a smile, more a challenge"
1"as if testing the weight of each word"
2"sound that seemed to vibrate the air"
3"as if remembering a wound long healed"
4"glint that seemed to pulse with life"
5"as if listening"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2186
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences136
matches(empty)
19.39% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs38
mean57.53
std12.53
cv0.218
sampleLengths
070
127
251
361
449
534
662
755
868
958
1059
1167
1250
1364
1455
1559
1646
1772
1849
1951
2072
2164
2255
2372
2456
2544
2665
2760
2855
2981
3058
3166
3273
3364
3447
3562
3667
3718
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences111
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs253
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences136
ratio0
matches(empty)
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1405
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"ceramic warm against her"
1"over leather-bound tomes."
adverbCount41
adverbRatio0.029181494661921707
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.008540925266903915
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences136
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences136
mean16.07
std7.77
cv0.483
sampleLengths
019
115
217
319
417
510
622
729
87
915
108
1131
1211
1327
1411
1510
1620
174
1811
1932
2014
215
2215
2327
2413
2511
2647
2710
2813
2927
3018
3110
3216
3326
347
358
3615
3732
3812
3912
4012
4116
4210
4310
4436
4518
4618
4729
488
4911
29.41% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats28
diversityRatio0.16176470588235295
totalSentences136
uniqueOpeners22
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences109
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount76
totalSentences109
matches
0"She turned, eyes narrowing, the"
1"He stood there, cane tapping"
2"he said, voice low, resonant,"
3"She stared at the cane,"
4"she replied, voice steady, A"
5"he said, He took a"
6"She lifted a chipped mug,"
7"He tapped the cane again,"
8"She set the mug down,"
9"she said, She glanced at"
10"She lifted her gaze, meeting"
11"He leaned against the doorway,"
12"He spoke, each syllable deliberate,"
13"She stepped closer, the scent"
14"he said, He turned his"
15"She crossed the room, the"
16"She laughed again, softer this"
17"She reached out, fingertips grazing"
18"His voice lowered, the French"
19"He paused, the cane’s blade"
ratio0.697
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount109
totalSentences109
matches
0"The door slammed against the"
1"Aurora felt the scar on"
2"She turned, eyes narrowing, the"
3"He stood there, cane tapping"
4"he said, voice low, resonant,"
5"The words hung in the"
6"She stared at the cane,"
7"she replied, voice steady, A"
8"The room seemed to hold"
9"Ptolemy, the tabby, lifted his"
10"Lucien’s amber eye flickered, his"
11"he said, He took a"
12"Aurora moved to the small"
13"She lifted a chipped mug,"
14"Lucien’s lips curled, a smile"
15"He tapped the cane again,"
16"She set the mug down,"
17"she said, She glanced at"
18"She lifted her gaze, meeting"
19"He leaned against the doorway,"
ratio1
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences109
matches(empty)
ratio0
21.28% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences47
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"The door slammed against the cracked wood with a hollow thud that rattled the scattered pages on the desk."
1"Lucien’s lips curled, a smile that didn’t reach his eyes."
2"Lucien’s lips twitched, a smile that was half amusement, half warning."
3"Aurora’s breath caught, the scar on her wrist tingling as if remembering a wound long healed."
4"She felt the heat rise in her cheeks, a flush that matched the amber of his eye."
5"Lucien’s lips curled, a smile that was both a promise and a threat."
6"The storm outside seemed to quiet, the rain stopping as if listening."
7"She lifted her hand, touching the scar once more, feeling the past and present merge."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags58
uselessAdditionCount19
matches
0"she replied, voice steady,"
1"He tapped, the blade’s whisper barely audible"
2"He paused, the cane’s blade humming faintly"
3"she said, voice barely above a whisper"
4"she said, voice soft,"
5"he said, voice low,"
6"she said, voice barely audible,"
7"She asked, eyes flashing"
8"Her voice cracked, a raw edge cutting through the room"
9"He let, the weight of them pressing down like a weighty book"
10"she said, a faint smile forming,"
11"She asked, voice firm, resolute"
12"he said, voice barely above a whisper"
13"He took, the cane tapping the floor, a rhythmic beat"
14"She asked, voice low, edged with doubt"
15"He placed, the tip resting on the worn wood"
16"she repeated, the words hanging in the air like a question"
17"He let, the finality of them settling into the room"
18"he said, voice soft,"
17.47% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags37
fancyCount11
fancyTags
0"He spoke (speak)"
1"She laughed again (laugh)"
2"he whispered (whisper)"
3"He pressed (press)"
4"He pressed (press)"
5"he whispered (whisper)"
6"she repeated (repeat)"
7"she repeated (repeat)"
8"she whispered (whisper)"
9"she whispered (whisper)"
10"she repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences83
tagDensity0.446
leniency0.892
rawRatio0.297
effectiveRatio0.265
64.2700%