Run: 2026-03-11-01KKFCVFG9C20TGQNZ6YKJSZ5P

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53.2s
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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Stay back. Harlow’s voice was low, eyes fixed on the twisted shape on the concrete. The body lay face down, arms splayed, a dark stain spreading beneath the ribs. A faint smell of iron clung to the air, sharp against the damp stone of the abandoned tunnel. “Looks like a blunt force trauma,” said PC Evans, shifting his weight from foot to foot. “Looks like someone cracked his skull with a pipe.” Harlow crouched, gloved fingers hovering over the wound without touching. The edges were too clean, the bone splintered in a pattern that reminded her of a fracture caused by something far harder than metal. She glanced at the surrounding debris: scattered pages of a leather‑bound journal, a broken brass compass half‑buried in grit, and a single bone token resting a few inches from the victim’s left hand. “Token’s out of place,” she muttered. “The Veil Market only lets you in if you hold one. He shouldn’t be able to drop it here unless he was already inside.” Evans frowned. “Maybe he dropped it after the attack. Panic, you know.” Harlow shook her head, the motion tight. “The token’s carved with the sigil of the Shade artisans. It’s warm to the touch.” She lifted it carefully, feeling a faint pulse against her palm. “It’s been handled recently, but not by him. The grooves are too shallow for a fresh carve.” A soft click echoed from the far end of the platform. Eva Kowalski stepped into the dim light, her curly red hair catching the sputtering glow of a stray bulb. She pushed her round glasses up the bridge of her nose, the worn leather satchel thudding against her hip as she moved. “Evening, Harlow,” Eva said, voice calm but edged with curiosity. “You called for a second opinion?” Harlow rose, brushing dust from her trousers. “You’re the closest thing we have to an expert on this place. Tell me what you see.” Eva’s gaze swept over the scene, lingering on the journal pages. She knelt, fingers tracing the inked symbols without smudging them. “These aren’t random sigils. They’re a binding sequence, meant to seal a rift rather than open it.” She glanced up, freckles catching the light. “Whoever did this knew the market’s rules. They left the token as a false invitation, then used the binding to trap something—or someone—inside the victim.” Harlow’s jaw tightened. “If they wanted to seal a rift, why leave the body exposed? Why not conceal it?” Eva tucked a strand of hair behind her left ear, a habit that seemed to steady her thoughts. “Maybe the body itself is part of the seal. A life force offered to close the breach. The binding needs a sacrifice, and the killer chose a willing participant—or at least someone they could subdue.” Evans shifted again, uneasy. “So we’re looking at a cultist? Someone trying to shut down a portal?” Eva’s eyes flicked to the brass compass, its casing patinated with verdigris. “The needle’s pointing east, toward the old maintenance shaft. That’s where the Veil Market shifts to on a full moon. If the compass is working, it should be zeroed on the nearest rift.” She tapped the instrument lightly. “But it’s not moving. It’s stuck, as if the needle’s been locked.” Harlow lifted the compass, feeling its weight. The protective sigils on its face were faint but discernible. She turned it slowly, watching the needle waver before snapping back to its fixed position. “Someone’s tampered with it,” she said. “They’ve jammed the mechanism, maybe with a sliver of iron or a tiny magnet. That would prevent it from detecting the true rift.” Eva’s brow furrowed. “Why would they hide the rift’s location?” “To send anyone investigating on a wild goose chase,” Harlow replied, voice flat. “If the compass points to a dead end, the investigators waste time searching empty tunnels while the real breach stays hidden.” Evans stared at the compass, then at the bone token. “So the killer wanted us to look elsewhere?” Harlow nodded, the military precision in her bearing evident. “Exactly. And the binding symbols? They’re a distraction. They look like a sealing ritual, but the ink’s mixed with a soluble resin that washes away with moisture. In a few hours, those marks will fade, leaving no trace of the seal. The killer wants us to think they performed a binding, when in fact they performed the opposite.” Eva’s eyes widened. “They opened a rift, not closed it.” Harlow slipped the compass back into her pocket, the leather watch on her left wrist catching a glint of the bulb’s light. “The victim wasn’t a sacrifice. He was a key. His blood, his bone token—both were used to activate the portal. The killer needed a living conduit to push something through, then abandoned the body once the transfer was complete.” A low hum began to vibrate through the stone, barely audible beneath the drip of water from the ceiling. The air grew colder, the smell of iron intensifying, now tinged with something ozone‑sharp. Evans swallowed. “You think whatever came through is still down here?” Harlow’s gaze locked on the far end of the platform where the maintenance shaft yawned like a dark mouth. The hum rose, a resonant thrumming that seemed to make the walls themselves shudder. She pressed a hand to the cold concrete, feeling a faint tremor travel up her arm. “Stay alert,” she said, voice edged with steel. “Whatever’s on the other side isn’t done yet.” From the shadows, a shape shifted—too tall, too thin to be human—its outline flickering as if caught between worlds. The compass in Harlow’s pocket gave a sudden, sharp jerk, the needle spinning wildly before snapping to point directly at the apparition. Eva inhaled sharply, her satchel slipping from her grasp and spilling books onto the stone. “It’s… it’s coming through.” Harlow stepped forward, hand moving to the holster at her side, though she knew a conventional weapon would do little against whatever waited beyond the veil. She glanced at Eva, then at Evans, and spoke without hesitation. “Cover the exits. Seal the shaft with whatever we have. And keep that token close—if we’re going to close this, we’ll need it.” The hum crescendoed into a resonant bell, and the air rippled like disturbed water. For a heartbeat, the tunnel was filled with the sound of something vast pressing against the thin membrane between worlds, and then—silence. Harlow’s eyes narrowed, her jaw set. She turned to her companions, the flickering light casting sharp lines across her sharp jaw and salt‑and‑pepper hair. “We’ve got a rift to close,” she said, and stepped toward the darkness, the bone token warm in her palm.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.313
leniency0.625
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.17% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1122
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"lightly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
3
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"lightly"
2"slowly"
3"sharply"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Evans"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
55.44% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1122
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"weight"
count2
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"echoed"
count1
3
word"tracing"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"furrowed"
count1
6
word"glint"
count1
7
word"tinged"
count1
8
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"pulse"
2"echoed"
3"tracing"
4"flicked"
5"furrowed"
6"glint"
7"tinged"
8"silence"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
highlights
0"eyes widened"
1"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences52
matches(empty)
32.97% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences52
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences74
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen58
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1114
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
46.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions29
wordCount625
uniqueNames4
maxNameDensity2.08
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Evans6
Harlow13
Kowalski1
Eva9
persons
0"Evans"
1"Harlow"
2"Kowalski"
3"Eva"
places(empty)
globalScore0.46
windowScore0.5
28.05% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences41
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"habit that seemed to steady her thoughts"
1"thrumming that seemed to make the walls themselves shudder"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1114
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences74
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean34.81
std18.97
cv0.545
sampleLengths
047
125
267
330
412
550
652
716
824
970
1019
1153
1217
1362
1461
1510
1634
1718
1867
1910
2061
2133
2211
2349
2416
2541
2619
2737
2823
2936
3024
3120
98.52% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences52
matches
0"was filled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs112
matches(empty)
65.64% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences74
ratio0.027
matches
0"From the shadows, a shape shifted—too tall, too thin to be human—its outline flickering as if caught between worlds."
1"For a heartbeat, the tunnel was filled with the sound of something vast pressing against the thin membrane between worlds, and then—silence."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount628
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.028662420382165606
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.012738853503184714
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences74
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences74
mean15.05
std9.77
cv0.649
sampleLengths
02
113
214
318
416
59
610
724
833
96
1024
112
1210
137
1426
1517
1611
1719
1822
1910
206
217
2217
2311
2410
2524
2625
273
2816
2918
3035
314
3213
3312
3438
3512
367
3710
3815
396
4023
413
427
4313
4421
4510
468
479
4858
493
61.71% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.3783783783783784
totalSentences74
uniqueOpeners28
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences47
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount12
totalSentences47
matches
0"She glanced at the surrounding"
1"She lifted it carefully, feeling"
2"She pushed her round glasses"
3"She knelt, fingers tracing the"
4"She glanced up, freckles catching"
5"She tapped the instrument lightly"
6"She turned it slowly, watching"
7"She pressed a hand to"
8"she said, voice edged with"
9"She glanced at Eva, then"
10"She turned to her companions,"
11"she said, and stepped toward"
ratio0.255
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount44
totalSentences47
matches
0"Harlow’s voice was low, eyes"
1"The body lay face down,"
2"A faint smell of iron"
3"Harlow crouched, gloved fingers hovering"
4"The edges were too clean,"
5"She glanced at the surrounding"
6"Harlow shook her head, the"
7"She lifted it carefully, feeling"
8"A soft click echoed from"
9"Eva Kowalski stepped into the"
10"She pushed her round glasses"
11"Eva said, voice calm but"
12"Harlow rose, brushing dust from"
13"Eva’s gaze swept over the"
14"She knelt, fingers tracing the"
15"She glanced up, freckles catching"
16"Harlow’s jaw tightened."
17"Eva tucked a strand of"
18"Evans shifted again, uneasy."
19"Eva’s eyes flicked to the"
ratio0.936
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences47
matches(empty)
ratio0
47.62% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences30
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The edges were too clean, the bone splintered in a pattern that reminded her of a fracture caused by something far harder than metal."
1"Eva tucked a strand of hair behind her left ear, a habit that seemed to steady her thoughts."
2"From the shadows, a shape shifted—too tall, too thin to be human—its outline flickering as if caught between worlds."
3"Eva inhaled sharply, her satchel slipping from her grasp and spilling books onto the stone."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Eva said, voice calm but edged with curiosity"
1"She glanced up, freckles catching the light"
2"Harlow replied, voice flat"
3"she said, voice edged with steel"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.219
leniency0.438
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.063
72.1592%