Run: 2026-03-11-01KKFEG374XKS3DZM4M17FM37M

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Duration:
1m 13s
Cost:
$0.000000
Provider:
Nvidia

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain hammered the cobblestones of Charing Cross like a thousand tiny fists, each drop slicking the black asphalt to a mirror that swallowed the neon glare of shop signs and threw it back in fractured shards. Detective Harlow Quinn pressed her shoulder against the cold brick of a shuttered bakery, the worn leather of her watch biting into her left wrist as she counted the seconds between thunderclaps. Her breath came in short, white plumes that vanished almost as soon as they formed, swallowed by the night’s damp breath. A hunched figure slipped from the shadow of a lamppost, coat collar turned up against the weather, boots splashing in puddles that reflected the sickly green of a distant sign. Quinn’s eyes narrowed, the brown of her irises catching the faint light as she tracked the man’s gait—uneven, favoring his right leg, a limp she had noted in the surveillance footage from the Raven’s Nest two nights prior. The Raven’s Nest. She could almost see the distinctive green neon sign above its entrance flickering through the rain, a beacon in the gloom that marked the boundary between Soho’s tourist throng and the clique’s shadowed haunts. She pushed off the wall, her boots finding purchase on the wet stone, and fell into a smooth, practiced stride. Military precision, they’d called it at the academy—economy of motion, shoulders level, gaze fixed ahead. The suspect turned a corner onto Dean Street, his silhouette swallowing the light as he ducked beneath the awning of a closed café. Quinn followed, the hiss of tires on wet pavement a constant accompaniment to her own footfalls. The city seemed to hold its breath, the usual midnight hum of traffic reduced to a distant murmur, as if the rain had muffled the world to let her hear the suspect’s every step. He moved with purpose, not the frantic flight of a guilty man, but the deliberate tread of someone who knew the streets, who knew where the city’s veins ran thin and where they pulsed with something else entirely. Quinn’s mind flicked to the case file on her desk—the unexplained death of DS Morris, the strange symbols scrawled on the warehouse wall, the whispered rumors of a market that moved with the moon. She had dismissed them as superstition until now, until the suspect’s path led her past the Raven’s Nest and toward the old railway arches that led north, toward Camden. The suspect slipped through a narrow gap between a shuttered tailor’s shop and a graffiti‑tagged wall, the rainwater pooling at his ankles. Quinn hesitated only a heartbeat, feeling the familiar tug of duty warring with the unease that had settled in her gut since Morris’s disappearance. She pressed forward, the wet wool of her coat clinging to her shoulders, the weight of her service revolver a reassuring presence against her hip. The alley opened onto a deserted side street where the gas lamps had long since been replaced by harsh LED strips that buzzed faintly. Ahead, the entrance to an abandoned Tube station yawned like a black mouth, its stairs descending into darkness broken only by the occasional flicker of a dying bulb. The suspect paused at the top, glanced back—his face obscured by the hood, but Quinn could see the glint of something metallic catching the light: a small, carved bone token, polished smooth, suspended from a thin leather cord around his neck. He slipped it into his palm, pressed it against a rusted plaque beside the stairwell, and the metal gave a soft click. A hidden panel swung inward, revealing a yawning chute of darkness. Quinn’s heart hammered against her ribs, a rhythm that matched the rain’s relentless patter. She knew the Veil Market from the fragmented intel she’d managed to gather: a supernatural black market that relocated each full moon, trading in enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information that could buy or break lives. The entry requirement—bone token—was a detail she had only heard in whispered rumors, dismissed as folklore. Yet here it was, tangible, real. She crouched at the lip of the stairs, the cold metal of the rail biting into her palm. The scent that rose from below was a mélange of damp earth, ozone, and something sweetly rot—like overripe fruit left in the sun. A low hum vibrated through the stone, a sound that was neither machinery nor voice, but a thrumming that seemed to resonate in her bones. She could feel the weight of the unknown pressing down, the same weight that had crushed her partner’s life three years ago under circumstances she still could not comprehend. Her training screamed for backup. She could call for units, seal the entrance, wait for daylight. But the suspect was already disappearing into the gloom, his footsteps echoing as he descended further. If she let him go, the chance to confront the clique, to learn what they had done to Morris, would slip away like smoke. And if she went down, she would be entering a place where the rules of the city—of law, of physics—might not apply. Quinn’s grip tightened on her revolver. She thought of the scar on Tomás Herrera’s left forearm, the thin line that told a story of a knife attack she had only heard about in passing. He was the clique’s medic, a former NHS paramedic who had lost his license for treating supernatural patients. His Saint Christopher medallion, a small silver disc, would catch the light even down here, a beacon amidst the gloom. If she could find him, perhaps she could learn the truth without walking blind into whatever waited below. She inhaled, the rain-soaked air filling her lungs, and made her decision. With a smooth motion that belied the turmoil inside her, Quinn swung her legs over the edge and began her descent. The stairs were slick with condensation, each step a cautious negotiation between gravity and the urge to slide. The darkness swallowed her whole, the world above reduced to a distant roar of rain and traffic, muffled as if heard through water. Her flashlight, a compact LED clipped to her belt, cut a narrow cone of pale light that revealed the walls lined with old tiles, cracked and stained with years of neglect. Graffiti—symbols she didn’t recognize, sigils that pulsed faintly in the beam—scrawled themselves across the surface, as if the station itself were alive and breathing. At the bottom, the tunnel opened into a cavernous chamber that defied the notion of an abandoned Underground. Stalls fashioned from reclaimed wood and metal stood in rows, their awnings made of patched canvas dyed deep indigo and violet. Lanterns hung from twisted iron posts, their flames a strange, azure hue that threw no heat but cast shifting shadows that seemed to move of their own accord. The air was thick with the scent of incense—sandalwood and something sharper, like burnt sugar—mixed with the metallic tang of blood that Quinn could not place but felt in the back of her throat. Figures moved between the stalls, their silhouettes indistinct in the eerie light. Some wore coats lined with fur that seemed to shift color as they walked; others had eyes that glowed like embers. Quinn’s hand tightened on her weapon, her training urging her to assess threats, but the scene was less a marketplace of contraband and more a congregation of the uncanny. She drifted forward, her boots making little sound on the packed earth floor. A stall to her right displayed jars filled with luminous liquids that swirled like miniature galaxies, labels written in a script that looked both familiar and alien. Next to it, a vendor—a tall figure with skin the hue of polished obsidian—offered small bone charms that whispered when held to the ear. Quinn resisted the urge to touch them, aware that any interaction could trigger unknown consequences. Her gaze swept the crowd, searching for the flash of copper, the glint of a medallion. Then, near the back where the lanterns hung lower and the shadows pooled thickest, she saw him. Tomás Herrera stood beside a makeshift table covered in blood‑stained linens, his short curly dark hair plastered to his forehead with sweat, his olive skin glistening under the azure light. The scar on his left forearm was stark against the pallor of his skin, a pale line that ran from wrist to elbow, evidence of the knife attack that had forced him out of the NHS. Around his neck, the Saint Christopher medallion caught the light, a small, defiant beacon of faith amidst the gloom. He was bent over a figure draped in a dark robe, his hands moving with the practiced ease of a medic, though the instruments he laid out were not the usual scalpels and forceps but slender crystal wands that hummed faintly when he turned them. Quinn’s breath caught. This was the off‑the‑books care the codex spoke of—Tomás treating those the hospital would not, or could not, see. She stepped closer, the rain’s echo fading behind her, replaced by the low murmur of conversations in languages she could not decipher, the occasional hiss of something being heated in a crucible. Tomás looked up, his warm brown eyes meeting hers for a split second before flicking back to his patient. In that instant, Quinn saw not just a medic but a man caught between worlds—his oath to heal strained by the very nature of his patients. “Detective Quinn,” a voice said, smooth and low, cutting through the ambient hum. She turned to see a woman clad in a cloak of shifting shadows, her face obscured but for a smile that revealed teeth too sharp to be human. “You’ve come far for answers. The market does not welcome the uninitiated lightly.” Quinn’s hand hovered near her revolver, but she did not draw it. “I’m looking for someone who ran from the Raven’s Nest. He had a bone token. I need to know what he was doing down here.” The shadowed woman tilted her head, as if considering. “He sought passage. The Veil does not give up its secrets for mere curiosity. It trades in blood, in memory, in promises. If you wish to follow, you must be willing to pay the price.” Quinn’s mind flashed to Morris’s vacant stare the night he died, the strange symbols etched into the warehouse wall, the feeling that something beyond human comprehension had reached out and taken him. She thought of the weight of her badge, the oath she had sworn, the responsibility she felt not just to the living but to those who could no longer speak for themselves. She glanced at Tomás, who had straightened, his medallion glinting. He gave her the slightest nod—a silent acknowledgment that he, too, understood the stakes. “Tell me what I need to give,” Quinn said, her voice steady despite the adrenaline thrumming through her veins. The woman smiled again, the shadow of her cloak rippling like water. “A memory. One you cherish. The market feeds on what you cannot afford to lose.” Quinn felt the cold bite of the rain on her cheeks, the weight of her watch, the grit under her fingernails from the climb down the stairs. She thought of the last conversation she had with Morris, the promise they had made to always watch each other’s backs. She thought of the scar on Tomás’s forearm, the way he had chosen to heal despite the cost. She closed her eyes for a heartbeat, let the memory surface—Morris laughing over a cheap cup of tea after a long shift, his eyes bright, his hand clasping hers in solidarity. She opened them, feeling the pull of that memory like a thread tugging at her chest. “Take it,” she whispered. The shadowed woman extended a hand, pale and impossibly thin. As Quinn’s fingertips brushed the woman’s skin, a wave of cold washed over her, and the memory slipped away like smoke, leaving behind a hollow ache that was both loss and relief. The woman’s smile widened, revealing teeth that gleamed like polished bone. “Go,” she said. “The path ahead is not for the faint of heart. Trust your instincts, Detective. And beware—what you seek may seek you in return.” Quinn turned, her boots finding purchase on the uneven ground. Tomás fell into step beside her, his medallion a steady pulse of light against his chest. The market’s labyrinth unfolded before them—stalls of curios, whispered bargains, the occasional flicker of something moving just beyond the periphery of vision. The rain’s roar was a distant memory now, replaced by the thrum of the Veil itself, a living heartbeat that seemed to sync with her own. She moved forward, each step a declaration: she would not let the unknown claim another partner without a fight. The chase had brought her into the belly of the city’s secret, and now, with the weight of a sacrificed memory and the steadfast presence of Tomás at her side, Detective Harlow Quinn stepped deeper into the shadows, ready to face whatever lay ahead.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences9
tagDensity0.444
leniency0.889
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.16% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2192
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"sweetly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"lightly"
count1
highlights
0"sweetly"
1"very"
2"lightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
8.76% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2192
totalAiIsms40
found
0
word"fractured"
count1
1
word"beacon"
count3
2
word"gloom"
count4
3
word"pulsed"
count2
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"familiar"
count2
6
word"weight"
count6
7
word"flicker"
count2
8
word"glint"
count2
9
word"fragmented"
count1
10
word"tangible"
count1
11
word"vibrated"
count1
12
word"could feel"
count1
13
word"footsteps"
count1
14
word"echoing"
count1
15
word"amidst"
count2
16
word"uncanny"
count1
17
word"glistening"
count1
18
word"stark"
count1
19
word"practiced ease"
count1
20
word"crystal"
count1
21
word"echo"
count1
22
word"etched"
count1
23
word"glinting"
count1
24
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"fractured"
1"beacon"
2"gloom"
3"pulsed"
4"flicked"
5"familiar"
6"weight"
7"flicker"
8"glint"
9"fragmented"
10"tangible"
11"vibrated"
12"could feel"
13"footsteps"
14"echoing"
15"amidst"
16"uncanny"
17"glistening"
18"stark"
19"practiced ease"
20"crystal"
21"echo"
22"etched"
23"glinting"
24"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"air was thick with"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"The air was thick with"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences95
matches(empty)
7.52% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences95
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"hear"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"managed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences100
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen45
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2172
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions62
wordCount2049
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity1.02
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Charing1
Cross1
Harlow2
Quinn21
Raven3
Nest3
Soho1
Dean1
Street1
Morris6
Camden1
Tube1
Veil2
Market1
Tomás8
Herrera2
Saint2
Christopher2
Underground1
Detective2
persons
0"Cross"
1"Harlow"
2"Quinn"
3"Raven"
4"Soho"
5"Morris"
6"Tomás"
7"Herrera"
8"Saint"
9"Christopher"
places
0"Dean"
1"Street"
2"Camden"
globalScore0.988
windowScore0.833
38.89% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences90
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"shadows that seemed to move of their own accord"
1"fur that seemed to shift color as they walked; others had eyes that glowed like embers"
2"as if considering"
3"heartbeat that seemed to sync with her own"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches6
per1kWords2.762
wordCount2172
matches
0"not the frantic flight of a guilty man, but the deliberate tread of someone who knew the streets, who kn"
1"neither machinery nor"
2"no heat but"
3"not the usual scalpels and forceps but slender crystal wands"
4"not just a medic but a man caught between worlds"
5"not just to the living but to those who could no longer speak for themselves"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences100
matches
0"feeling that something"
92.27% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean67.88
std32.1
cv0.473
sampleLengths
090
1105
2108
3101
471
5126
673
795
878
990
1012
11117
12101
1362
1479
15118
1667
1777
1854
1937
2044
2164
2224
2319
2427
2566
2647
274
2853
2926
3074
3163
94.18% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences95
matches
0"been replaced"
1"was bent"
2"being heated"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs324
matches
0"was already disappearing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount20
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences16
totalSentences100
ratio0.16
matches
0"Quinn’s eyes narrowed, the brown of her irises catching the faint light as she tracked the man’s gait—uneven, favoring his right leg, a limp she had noted in the surveillance footage from the Raven’s Nest two nights prior."
1"Military precision, they’d called it at the academy—economy of motion, shoulders level, gaze fixed ahead."
2"Quinn’s mind flicked to the case file on her desk—the unexplained death of DS Morris, the strange symbols scrawled on the warehouse wall, the whispered rumors of a market that moved with the moon."
3"The suspect paused at the top, glanced back—his face obscured by the hood, but Quinn could see the glint of something metallic catching the light: a small, carved bone token, polished smooth, suspended from a thin leather cord around his neck."
4"The entry requirement—bone token—was a detail she had only heard in whispered rumors, dismissed as folklore."
5"The scent that rose from below was a mélange of damp earth, ozone, and something sweetly rot—like overripe fruit left in the sun."
6"And if she went down, she would be entering a place where the rules of the city—of law, of physics—might not apply."
7"Graffiti—symbols she didn’t recognize, sigils that pulsed faintly in the beam—scrawled themselves across the surface, as if the station itself were alive and breathing."
8"The air was thick with the scent of incense—sandalwood and something sharper, like burnt sugar—mixed with the metallic tang of blood that Quinn could not place but felt in the back of her throat."
9"Some wore coats lined with fur that seemed to shift color as they walked; others had eyes that glowed like embers."
10"Next to it, a vendor—a tall figure with skin the hue of polished obsidian—offered small bone charms that whispered when held to the ear."
11"This was the off‑the‑books care the codex spoke of—Tomás treating those the hospital would not, or could not, see."
12"In that instant, Quinn saw not just a medic but a man caught between worlds—his oath to heal strained by the very nature of his patients."
13"He gave her the slightest nod—a silent acknowledgment that he, too, understood the stakes."
14"She closed her eyes for a heartbeat, let the memory surface—Morris laughing over a cheap cup of tea after a long shift, his eyes bright, his hand clasping hers in solidarity."
15"The market’s labyrinth unfolded before them—stalls of curios, whispered bargains, the occasional flicker of something moving just beyond the periphery of vision."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2069
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"short curly dark hair"
1"cold washed over her,"
adverbCount38
adverbRatio0.01836636056065732
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.006766553890768487
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences100
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences100
mean21.72
std9.47
cv0.436
sampleLengths
037
132
221
330
438
53
634
720
815
923
1016
1134
1238
1334
1429
1522
1624
1725
1824
1928
2041
2122
2211
2314
2437
2516
266
2718
2823
2925
3029
315
3211
3316
3424
3522
366
3728
3818
3920
4018
4112
4221
4318
4423
4531
4624
4718
4821
4928
48.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.33
totalSentences100
uniqueOpeners33
35.84% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences93
matches
0"Then, near the back where"
ratio0.011
90.97% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences93
matches
0"Her breath came in short,"
1"She could almost see the"
2"She pushed off the wall,"
3"He moved with purpose, not"
4"She had dismissed them as"
5"She pressed forward, the wet"
6"He slipped it into his"
7"She knew the Veil Market"
8"She crouched at the lip"
9"She could feel the weight"
10"Her training screamed for backup."
11"She could call for units,"
12"She thought of the scar"
13"He was the clique’s medic,"
14"His Saint Christopher medallion, a"
15"She inhaled, the rain-soaked air"
16"Her flashlight, a compact LED"
17"She drifted forward, her boots"
18"Her gaze swept the crowd,"
19"He was bent over a"
ratio0.323
29.89% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount80
totalSentences93
matches
0"The rain hammered the cobblestones"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn pressed her"
2"Her breath came in short,"
3"A hunched figure slipped from"
4"Quinn’s eyes narrowed, the brown"
5"The Raven’s Nest."
6"She could almost see the"
7"She pushed off the wall,"
8"Military precision, they’d called it"
9"The suspect turned a corner"
10"Quinn followed, the hiss of"
11"The city seemed to hold"
12"He moved with purpose, not"
13"Quinn’s mind flicked to the"
14"She had dismissed them as"
15"The suspect slipped through a"
16"Quinn hesitated only a heartbeat,"
17"She pressed forward, the wet"
18"The alley opened onto a"
19"The suspect paused at the"
ratio0.86
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences93
matches
0"If she let him go,"
1"If she could find him,"
ratio0.022
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences85
technicalSentenceCount21
matches
0"The rain hammered the cobblestones of Charing Cross like a thousand tiny fists, each drop slicking the black asphalt to a mirror that swallowed the neon glare o…"
1"Her breath came in short, white plumes that vanished almost as soon as they formed, swallowed by the night’s damp breath."
2"A hunched figure slipped from the shadow of a lamppost, coat collar turned up against the weather, boots splashing in puddles that reflected the sickly green of…"
3"She could almost see the distinctive green neon sign above its entrance flickering through the rain, a beacon in the gloom that marked the boundary between Soho…"
4"He moved with purpose, not the frantic flight of a guilty man, but the deliberate tread of someone who knew the streets, who knew where the city’s veins ran thi…"
5"Quinn’s mind flicked to the case file on her desk—the unexplained death of DS Morris, the strange symbols scrawled on the warehouse wall, the whispered rumors o…"
6"Quinn hesitated only a heartbeat, feeling the familiar tug of duty warring with the unease that had settled in her gut since Morris’s disappearance."
7"Quinn’s heart hammered against her ribs, a rhythm that matched the rain’s relentless patter."
8"She knew the Veil Market from the fragmented intel she’d managed to gather: a supernatural black market that relocated each full moon, trading in enchanted good…"
9"A low hum vibrated through the stone, a sound that was neither machinery nor voice, but a thrumming that seemed to resonate in her bones."
10"She could feel the weight of the unknown pressing down, the same weight that had crushed her partner’s life three years ago under circumstances she still could …"
11"But the suspect was already disappearing into the gloom, his footsteps echoing as he descended further."
12"With a smooth motion that belied the turmoil inside her, Quinn swung her legs over the edge and began her descent."
13"Her flashlight, a compact LED clipped to her belt, cut a narrow cone of pale light that revealed the walls lined with old tiles, cracked and stained with years …"
14"Graffiti—symbols she didn’t recognize, sigils that pulsed faintly in the beam—scrawled themselves across the surface, as if the station itself were alive and br…"
15"At the bottom, the tunnel opened into a cavernous chamber that defied the notion of an abandoned Underground."
16"Lanterns hung from twisted iron posts, their flames a strange, azure hue that threw no heat but cast shifting shadows that seemed to move of their own accord."
17"A stall to her right displayed jars filled with luminous liquids that swirled like miniature galaxies, labels written in a script that looked both familiar and …"
18"He was bent over a figure draped in a dark robe, his hands moving with the practiced ease of a medic, though the instruments he laid out were not the usual scal…"
19"As Quinn’s fingertips brushed the woman’s skin, a wave of cold washed over her, and the memory slipped away like smoke, leaving behind a hollow ache that was bo…"
20"The rain’s roar was a distant memory now, replaced by the thrum of the Veil itself, a living heartbeat that seemed to sync with her own."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Quinn said, her voice steady despite the adrenaline thrumming through her veins"
38.89% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences9
tagDensity0.444
leniency0.889
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.222
68.3234%