Run: 2026-03-11-01KKFFFTQRTD15B32PHDY5JEXX

Run Details

Duration:
52.9s
Cost:
$0.000000
Provider:
Stealth

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
# THE RAIN CHASE The CCTV footage had been grainy, half-useless, but Quinn's eyes caught what three other analysts had missed. The figure entering the warehouse district wore a Saint Christopher medallion visible under fluorescent parking lot light. She'd been staring at that still frame for four hours when her phone buzzed with the patrol unit's update — a match on facial recognition from the Brixton stabbing two weeks prior. Tomás Herrera. Former NHS paramedic, license revoked eighteen months ago, current address unknown. She pulled on her coat in the corridor outside Major Crimes, tugging the collar against the back of her neck. The rain had been hammering London since dusk, turning the city into a smear of headlights and gutter water. She checked her watch — 11:47 PM — and felt the worn leather band flex against her wrist. The time meant nothing. What mattered was Herrera's pattern. Every full moon cycle, someone from the underground medical circuit surfaced to patch up stab wounds, gunshot trauma, injuries no A&E would ask questions about. Three of those patients had turned up dead within seventy-two hours of treatment. Not from the injuries that brought them in. From something else Quinn couldn't name yet. Her unmarked sedan idled at the curb outside Covent Garden. She tapped the steering wheel, eyes scanning the street. Her informant — a twitchy dealer named Grimes who sold information instead of product — had texted forty minutes ago: Herrera booked it toward Seven Dials. Won't be there long. Quinn killed the engine and stepped into the rain. Water hit her like a second skin, soaking through her coat in seconds. She moved down Neal Street at a clipped pace, salt-and-pepper hair plastered to her scalp within half a block. The neon signs of closed boutiques bled into puddles at her feet. She kept her right hand near the concealed holster under her arm. The first glimpse came as she rounded the corner into Earlham Street. A figure in a dark jacket — olive skin, compact build, moving with the quick efficiency of someone who knew these alleys — ducking between two dumpsters outside a shuttered kebab shop. Herrera's left hand held something wrapped in cloth against his chest. Medical supplies. Quinn recognized the shape of a suture kit through the plastic wrap. She broke into a run. Herrera's head snapped sideways. Brown eyes locked onto hers across thirty meters of rain-slicked pavement. Recognition hit them both at the same moment — his widened, hers narrowed. He bolted. "Metropolitan Police! Stop!" The words ripped out of her throat but the rain swallowed them. Herrera cut left into a narrow passage between buildings, his sneakers slapping wet stone. Quinn's shoes had better grip but less flexibility. She risked a misstep on the wet cobblestones and felt her left foot slide. She corrected without breaking stride, arms pumping, coat heavy with water. The passage spat them onto Monmouth Street. Herrera vaulted a bicycle chained to a railing, barely slowing. Quinn had to swerve around it, losing two seconds. He gained ground. She could see his breath coming in white bursts, the medallion swinging at his throat. "Tomás Herrera!" He glanced back. Mistake. His foot caught a raised paving slab and he stumbled, arms pinwheeling, the cloth-wrapped bundle slipping from his grip. He caught it against his chest and kept running. Quinn pressed harder, her lungs burning. Fourteen years of desk work hadn't killed her cardio but they'd buried it under coffee and cigarette smoke. Her legs screamed. Herrera cut right again, plunging toward Shaftesbury Avenue. The main road was alive even at midnight — black cabs sliding through the rain, a cluster of theatre-goers huddled under umbrellas outside a restaurant. He threaded through them like a needle through fabric, shoving past a man in a dinner jacket, ducking under an umbrella that sprang open in his wake. Quinn followed but the crowd slowed her. Bodies turned, faces pulled back in annoyance. She shouldered through, muttering apologies she didn't mean. "Coming through — police!" A woman in a red dress yelped as Quinn pushed past. Ahead, Herrera crossed Shaftesbury Avenue against the light. A taxi honked and swerved, its tires throwing a sheet of water that caught Herrera mid-stride. He staggered but didn't fall. Quinn waited for a gap in traffic, heart hammering, and dashed across. A bus roared past behind her, its wake slapping her back. Herrera was heading north. Camden. Quinn's mind raced faster than her legs. She knew the street layout, knew the dead ends, knew the shortcuts. But Herrera moved like a local, like someone who'd memorized every crack in the pavement. He turned left onto a side street Quinn didn't recognize and disappeared behind a construction barrier. She rounded the barrier, hand on her holstered weapon, and found herself in a courtyard flanked by scaffolding. Dumpsters. Stacked pallets. No Herrera. Quinn stopped. Listened. Rain drummed on plastic sheeting draped over the scaffolding. Somewhere above, a loose tarp snapped in the wind. She moved forward, scanning shadows. Her right hand drew her torch and clicked it on. The beam cut through the downpour, catching rain like a curtain of static. A sound to her left. Metal on metal. She swung the torch toward a service door set into the far wall, rusted hinges, no handle on the outside. The door stood slightly ajar. She approached it, breathing controlled, each step deliberate. She pushed the door open with her elbow. Stairs. Concrete, spiraling downward. Emergency lighting cast everything in a sick amber glow. The air that rose from below carried smells she didn't expect — herbs, ozone, something chemical and sweet, like burning sage laced with acetone. Quinn hesitated on the threshold. The stairs descended at least two stories, maybe three. No railings. The concrete was wet. She heard footsteps receding below. Fading. If she waited, he'd be gone. Quinn stepped onto the first stair. The descent took forty seconds but felt longer. The amber lights buzzed and flickered. Water trickled down the walls in thin streams, carrying a mineral tang. The stairs opened into a tunnel — old, curved, tiled in cream and green. An abandoned Tube station. She recognized the architecture from a case she'd worked in 2019, when they'd found a body in a disused section of the Northern Line. Camden. This had to be one of the sealed-off stations from the post-war closures. But it wasn't sealed off anymore. The tunnel stretched ahead for fifty meters before it opened into a wide, vaulted space. Quinn's torch was unnecessary here — someone had strung hundreds of lights along the ceiling, a constellation of bare bulbs and colored LEDs that turned the old platform into something luminous. The station name — BRITISH MUSEUM, she read from the faded ceramic tiles on the walls — had been repurposed. Below the original signage, someone had painted in black brushstrokes: THE VEIL MARKET. Quinn stepped off the last stair and onto the platform edge. The space was enormous. Stalls had been erected along both sides of the old tracks, makeshift tables draped with cloth, wooden crates repurposed as display cases. Dozens of figures moved between them, bartering, inspecting, carrying bundles. The lighting caught strange objects — glass jars containing substances that shimmered wrong, bundles of dried plants that hung from hooks like dead birds, racks of vials filled with liquids in colors Quinn's eyes couldn't properly resolve. She blinked. The colors shifted. Her stomach turned. A man at the nearest stall had four arms. No — two arms and something else, something shadowy and secondary that moved independently behind him. Quinn's hand tightened on her torch. The man noticed her staring and pulled his coat tighter, concealing whatever it was. He turned away. She swallowed hard. Her pulse thudded in her ears. A woman with silver-white hair and irises that reflected light like a cat's approached from her left, carrying a tray of bones arranged in a pattern Quinn didn't recognize. The woman stopped a meter away and tilted her head. "You have a token?" Quinn stared at her. "I'm a police officer." The woman's cat-eyes narrowed. She looked Quinn up and down — the soaked coat, the torch, the holster. Her lip curled. "You don't have a token." She raised her voice. "Enforcer! No token!" The word rippled through the market. Conversations paused. Heads turned. A collective silence dropped over the station like a blade. Quinn felt the weight of dozens of eyes — human, and otherwise — settling on her. She scanned the stalls. Herrera. Where was Herrera? A figure moved at the far end of the platform, ducking behind a stall draped in black velvet. Dark jacket, quick movement. Quinn took a step forward and the woman with the silver hair blocked her path. "You can't be here without a token. That's the rule." "Get out of my way." "Quinn." She turned. Herrera stood fifteen meters to her right, near the mouth of an old service tunnel. He held the cloth-wrapped bundle at his side. His chest heaved from the run. The Saint Christopher medallion caught the colored light and threw back a fractured glow. His expression wasn't frightened — it was wary, the way a person looks at a loaded gun they haven't decided is pointed at them. "You need to leave," he said. His accent was Spanish — Seville, she'd read in the file. The words came measured, calm. "This isn't a place for you." "You're coming with me." Quinn stepped around the silver-haired woman. "Tomás Herrera, you're wanted for questioning in connection with—" "With what?" Herrera didn't move. "The people I treat? The ones your hospital system refuses to help?" "Three of your patients are dead." His jaw tightened. The medallion rose and fell with a deep breath. "I know." The market had gone still around them. Quinn became aware of figures closing in at the periphery — not approaching, just watching. A hulking shape in a fur coat. A woman whose shadow moved independently of her body. A child with too many teeth. Quinn catalogued them the way she catalogued evidence: systematically, without reaction. "Come quietly," she said. "We'll talk at the station." "You walk out of here with me, you come back with twenty armed officers and a warrant." Herrera's voice dropped. "These people have done nothing wrong. They're here because they have nowhere else to go." "I don't care about them. I care about the dead." "So do I." He took a step toward her. "I can show you what killed them. But not here. Not now. Come to the Nest tomorrow night. Silas will let you in." "The Raven's Nest? That bar in Soho?" "You know it?" Quinn knew it. She'd surveilled it for three weeks the previous spring. The green neon sign, the black-and-white photographs, the owner named Silas who never seemed to age. She'd filed it as a low-priority location of interest. Wrong assessment. "Tomorrow night," Herrera repeated. "I'll tell you everything. But right now you need to leave before someone decides to make you leave." She heard the threat underneath the words — not from Herrera, but from the market itself. The silence had shifted from watchful to predatory. Quinn's hand rested on her weapon. She counted exits. The stairs behind her. Three service tunnels. Two passages she couldn't see the ends of. Not enough information. Not enough backup. Not enough anything. She held Herrera's gaze for five seconds. He held hers without flinching. "I'll be there," she said. "Nine o'clock." "Midnight. Silas doesn't open the back room before midnight." Quinn turned without another word and walked toward the stairs. She kept her stride measured, her shoulders squared, her hand visible and away from her weapon. She didn't run. She didn't look back. The lights of the Veil Market watched her go, and the silence held until her shoes hit the first concrete step of the ascent. Then the murmur of trade resumed behind her, as if she'd never been there at all.
created_at"2026-03-11T22:15:15.461Z" 3/11/2026, 10:15:15 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Quinn stepped around [around]"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.281
leniency0.563
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.063
97.48% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1983
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
49.57% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1983
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"scanning"
count2
1
word"pumping"
count1
2
word"raced"
count1
3
word"footsteps"
count1
4
word"flickered"
count1
5
word"shimmered"
count1
6
word"resolve"
count1
7
word"stomach"
count1
8
word"pulse"
count1
9
word"silence"
count3
10
word"weight"
count1
11
word"scanned"
count1
12
word"velvet"
count1
13
word"fractured"
count1
14
word"measured"
count2
15
word"hulking"
count1
highlights
0"scanning"
1"pumping"
2"raced"
3"footsteps"
4"flickered"
5"shimmered"
6"resolve"
7"stomach"
8"pulse"
9"silence"
10"weight"
11"scanned"
12"velvet"
13"fractured"
14"measured"
15"hulking"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences190
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences190
filterMatches
0"watch "
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences213
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2007
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions82
wordCount1802
uniqueNames27
maxNameDensity1.66
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn30
Saint2
Christopher2
Brixton1
Herrera21
Major1
Crimes1
London1
Covent1
Garden1
Grimes1
Seven1
Dials1
Neal1
Street3
Earlham1
Monmouth1
Shaftesbury2
Avenue2
Tube1
Northern1
Line1
Spanish1
Seville1
Silas1
Veil1
Market1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Saint"
2"Christopher"
3"Herrera"
4"Major"
5"Crimes"
6"Silas"
places
0"London"
1"Covent"
2"Garden"
3"Seven"
4"Neal"
5"Street"
6"Earlham"
7"Monmouth"
8"Shaftesbury"
9"Avenue"
10"Seville"
globalScore0.668
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences121
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.498
wordCount2007
matches
0"not from Herrera, but from the market itself"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences213
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs61
mean32.9
std28.04
cv0.852
sampleLengths
04
179
2119
349
465
569
65
730
83
959
1044
112
1259
1382
144
1563
1655
1723
1849
1949
2057
2112
226
2382
246
2579
2692
2748
289
2939
304
318
3221
3312
3436
358
3637
3710
385
391
4069
4128
4219
4317
446
4514
4655
479
4835
4910
99.72% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences190
matches
0"been repurposed"
1"been erected"
2"is pointed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs323
matches
0"was heading"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount23
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences18
totalSentences213
ratio0.085
matches
0"She'd been staring at that still frame for four hours when her phone buzzed with the patrol unit's update — a match on facial recognition from the Brixton stabbing two weeks prior."
1"She checked her watch — 11:47 PM — and felt the worn leather band flex against her wrist."
2"Her informant — a twitchy dealer named Grimes who sold information instead of product — had texted forty minutes ago: Herrera booked it toward Seven Dials."
3"A figure in a dark jacket — olive skin, compact build, moving with the quick efficiency of someone who knew these alleys — ducking between two dumpsters outside a shuttered kebab shop."
4"Recognition hit them both at the same moment — his widened, hers narrowed."
5"The main road was alive even at midnight — black cabs sliding through the rain, a cluster of theatre-goers huddled under umbrellas outside a restaurant."
6"The air that rose from below carried smells she didn't expect — herbs, ozone, something chemical and sweet, like burning sage laced with acetone."
7"The stairs opened into a tunnel — old, curved, tiled in cream and green."
8"Quinn's torch was unnecessary here — someone had strung hundreds of lights along the ceiling, a constellation of bare bulbs and colored LEDs that turned the old platform into something luminous."
9"The station name — BRITISH MUSEUM, she read from the faded ceramic tiles on the walls — had been repurposed."
10"The lighting caught strange objects — glass jars containing substances that shimmered wrong, bundles of dried plants that hung from hooks like dead birds, racks of vials filled with liquids in colors Quinn's eyes couldn't properly resolve."
11"No — two arms and something else, something shadowy and secondary that moved independently behind him."
12"She looked Quinn up and down — the soaked coat, the torch, the holster."
13"Quinn felt the weight of dozens of eyes — human, and otherwise — settling on her."
14"His expression wasn't frightened — it was wary, the way a person looks at a loaded gun they haven't decided is pointed at them."
15"His accent was Spanish — Seville, she'd read in the file."
16"Quinn became aware of figures closing in at the periphery — not approaching, just watching."
17"She heard the threat underneath the words — not from Herrera, but from the market itself."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1796
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"visible under fluorescent parking"
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.013363028953229399
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.0033407572383073497
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences213
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences213
mean9.42
std7
cv0.743
sampleLengths
021
117
232
32
411
520
619
718
84
95
1025
1113
128
137
1410
159
1626
174
189
1913
2019
2112
2212
2312
2432
2511
262
2712
285
294
3011
3113
322
333
3412
3514
368
3714
3811
397
4010
419
423
4315
442
453
461
4719
489
496
45.38% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.3004694835680751
totalSentences213
uniqueOpeners64
40.16% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences166
matches
0"Somewhere above, a loose tarp"
1"Then the murmur of trade"
ratio0.012
92.29% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount53
totalSentences166
matches
0"She'd been staring at that"
1"She pulled on her coat"
2"She checked her watch —"
3"Her unmarked sedan idled at"
4"She tapped the steering wheel,"
5"Her informant — a twitchy"
6"She moved down Neal Street"
7"She kept her right hand"
8"She broke into a run."
9"She risked a misstep on"
10"She corrected without breaking stride,"
11"He gained ground."
12"She could see his breath"
13"He glanced back."
14"His foot caught a raised"
15"He caught it against his"
16"Her legs screamed."
17"He threaded through them like"
18"She shouldered through, muttering apologies"
19"He staggered but didn't fall."
ratio0.319
26.27% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount144
totalSentences166
matches
0"# THE RAIN CHASE The"
1"The figure entering the warehouse"
2"She'd been staring at that"
3"She pulled on her coat"
4"The rain had been hammering"
5"She checked her watch —"
6"The time meant nothing."
7"Every full moon cycle, someone"
8"Her unmarked sedan idled at"
9"She tapped the steering wheel,"
10"Her informant — a twitchy"
11"Quinn killed the engine and"
12"Water hit her like a"
13"She moved down Neal Street"
14"The neon signs of closed"
15"She kept her right hand"
16"The first glimpse came as"
17"A figure in a dark"
18"Herrera's left hand held something"
19"Quinn recognized the shape of"
ratio0.867
30.12% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences166
matches
0"If she waited, he'd be"
ratio0.006
87.20% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences77
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Her informant — a twitchy dealer named Grimes who sold information instead of product — had texted forty minutes ago: Herrera booked it toward Seven Dials."
1"A figure in a dark jacket — olive skin, compact build, moving with the quick efficiency of someone who knew these alleys — ducking between two dumpsters outside…"
2"She could see his breath coming in white bursts, the medallion swinging at his throat."
3"A taxi honked and swerved, its tires throwing a sheet of water that caught Herrera mid-stride."
4"Quinn's torch was unnecessary here — someone had strung hundreds of lights along the ceiling, a constellation of bare bulbs and colored LEDs that turned the old…"
5"The lighting caught strange objects — glass jars containing substances that shimmered wrong, bundles of dried plants that hung from hooks like dead birds, racks…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Herrera repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.125
leniency0.25
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.063
84.2952%