Run: 2026-03-11-01KKFFJJA0NQ07ZMHMD9W7BYZF

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Duration:
32.8s
Cost:
$0.000000
Provider:
Stealth

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The rain hadn't let up since morning. Rory pushed through the door of The Raven's Nest and shook the water from her hair, droplets catching the sickly green glow of the neon sign behind her. She was off shift. Yu-Fei had let her leave early after the lunch rush died to nothing—just a handful of regulars and two tourists who'd wandered in by accident. Her jacket smelled like ginger and soy and the particular damp of London in October. Silas was behind the bar, polishing a glass with the slow, deliberate rhythm of a man who had nowhere else to be. He nodded at her without looking up. "Rough one?" "Two hours late with a delivery to Bloomsbury because some wanker double-parked a lorry on Lamb's Conduit Street. Yu-Fei nearly had an aneurysm." She dropped onto her usual stool—the one at the far end, nearest the wall of black-and-white photographs. "Other than that, lovely." Silas set the glass down and leaned his hip against the counter. The signet ring on his right hand caught the low light. "There's shepherd's pie in the back. Yu-Fei dropped it off an hour ago." "You're a saint." "I'm a bar owner who doesn't want his tenant starving to death. There's a difference." She smiled despite herself and pushed toward the bookshelf that opened to the back room. But before she reached it, the front door swung open again, letting in a gust of wet air and the sound of traffic on Berwick Street. A man stepped inside. He was tall—taller than she remembered—wearing a dark coat that looked too expensive for the neighborhood. His hair was shorter, cropped close on the sides, and there were lines around his mouth that hadn't been there before. But the eyes were the same. Wide-set, dark, perpetually startled-looking, as if the world kept surprising him and he couldn't quite decide if he liked it. He stood in the doorway and scanned the room. Rory stopped moving. His gaze found her. Held. "Rory?" The way he said it—two syllables, the first stretched thin, the second swallowed almost entirely—sent something cold down the center of her spine. She knew that voice. She'd known it in lecture halls and library corners and the back of a taxi rattling over the Westway at two in the morning. "Marcus." He blinked. Then he moved toward her, and there was something in his stride that was familiar and foreign at the same time—the same loose-limbed gait, but slower, more careful, as if he'd learned the hard way that moving too fast through a room could cost you. He stopped a few feet away. The coat dripped onto the floor. He didn't seem to notice. "Jesus. It's really you." "Last I checked." "How long has it been?" She calculated. Seven years. Seven since she'd packed a single bag and taken the Megabus to Victoria Station with Eva's voice on the phone telling her to breathe, just breathe, we'll figure it out. Seven since she'd deleted her old social media, changed her number, cut herself loose from every tether she could find. Marcus had been one of those tethers. Not the kind that held her in place, but the kind that kept her tethered to a version of herself she couldn't afford to be anymore. "Too long," she said. He looked at her face—really looked—and she watched him cataloging the changes. The sharper angles of her jaw. The scar on her left wrist, barely visible above the edge of her sleeve, crescent-shaped and faded to a pale silver. The way she held herself now, compact and still, like someone who'd learned that taking up less space was a form of safety. "You look different," he said. "So do you." He ran a hand over his cropped hair. "Yeah. I know." Silas appeared at the edge of the bar's main room, drying his hands on a towel. He looked between them with the assessing calm of a man who'd spent decades reading rooms. "You two know each other?" "University," Rory said. "Cardiff." Marcus nodded. "Second year. We had that constitutional law seminar together. Professor Whitfield." "Whitfield who pronounced everything like she was chewing gravel," Rory said. Marcus laughed. It came out rougher than she remembered—lower, with a rasp at the edges, like his throat had been through something. "God. Yeah. I forgot about that." Silas set two glasses on the counter. "You want to sit?" There was a table near the back, away from the handful of other patrons. Rory moved to it without thinking, the way you move through spaces you know well. Marcus followed. He pulled out a chair and sat, and she noticed the way he favored his right leg—a slight hitch in the motion, nothing dramatic, just enough to register if you were watching for it. "So," he said, once they were seated. "Cardiff to... Soho." "London," she said. "I've been here a while." "What are you doing?" She considered the question. It had layers. He was asking about her life, her work, her reason for being in this particular bar on this particular night, and she could hear all of it stacked beneath the simple words. "I deliver food," she said. "Part-time. For a restaurant in Chinatown. I live upstairs." He waited, as if there might be more. When she didn't offer anything, he leaned back in his chair and folded his arms across his chest. "Rory. It's been seven years." "I know how long it's been." "You disappeared. I mean you actually disappeared. I called your mum in Cardiff—she said she didn't know where you were. Your old flat was cleared out. Eva wouldn't tell me anything, just said you were safe, and that was it." Rory picked up her glass. The water was cold against her fingers. "Eva's good at protecting people." "And you're good at vanishing." His tone wasn't accusatory. It was something worse. Resigned. She set the glass down carefully. The table was old wood, scarred with rings from glasses left too long, initials carved into the surface by people who wanted to leave a mark. She traced one of the grooves with her thumbnail. "I had reasons," she said. "I know you had reasons." He leaned forward. "I knew about Evan." The name landed between them like a stone in still water. Rory's hand stilled. Her jaw tightened, but only for a moment—then the mask slipped back into place, smooth and practiced, and she breathed out through her nose. "You knew." "Everyone knew, Rory. Everyone in your year. The way he controlled you, the—" He stopped himself. Looked at the table. "I tried to talk to you about it. Third year. The night after that party at the student union, when you showed up with bruises on your arms and told everyone you'd fallen." "I did fall." "You fell down a flight of stairs. You told me that three times in one night. And I believed you because I wanted to." His voice dropped. "That's not the part that keeps me up, though. The part that keeps me up is that I let you go. I was afraid that if I pushed too hard, I'd lose you completely. So I backed off. And then you left anyway." The silence stretched between them. Outside, a siren wailed and faded. The neon sign buzzed its low electric hum. "It wasn't your fault," Rory said. "That's what people say when they want someone to stop apologizing. It doesn't make the thing not have happened." She looked at him—really looked, the way he'd looked at her when he first walked in. The grey at his temples, still young for a man in his early thirties but there all the same. The lines deeper than they should be. The way his hands gripped the edge of the table like he was bracing himself for something. "Where did you go?" she asked. "After Cardiff?" "After everything." He exhaled. "I moved to Manchester for a while. Got a job in finance—can you believe that? Me, in finance." A ghost of a smile. "Then I burned out. Couldn't sleep. Couldn't eat. Spent about four months barely leaving my flat. After that I did some traveling. Southeast Asia. South America. Nowhere in particular. Just moving." "For how long?" "Two years. Give or take. I kept thinking I'd find some version of myself that made sense, but everywhere I went I was still the guy who'd watched his friend destroy herself and done nothing." He looked at her. "I found you, by the way. That's how I'm here. Eva told me last month. She said you were in London and that you'd been here for years and that I should know. I think she meant I should make peace with it. But I couldn't. So I came." Rory's throat felt tight. She pressed her thumb against the crescent scar on her wrist—an old habit, something she did when the ground beneath her felt uncertain. The skin there was smooth and slightly numb. She'd had it since she was twelve, falling off a bicycle on a road outside Cardiff, her wrist hitting the handlebar grip. A small thing. A nothing thing. But it had stayed, a pale reminder written into her skin. "I didn't leave because of you," she said. "I need you to hear that." "I know." "Marcus. I mean it. What happened with Evan—that wasn't on you. That wasn't on anyone except him." "I know that too." He released the edge of the table and rubbed his face with both hands. When he dropped them, his eyes were red-rimmed. "But knowing a thing and carrying a thing aren't the same. You know that." She did. She'd spent the first three years in London learning that exact lesson—how the body remembers what the mind tries to file away, how certain sounds and smells could still send her spiraling back to a flat in Cardiff with a lock that only worked from the outside. How healing wasn't a line you walked along but a terrain you stumbled through, lost, without a map. "Silas," she said, and the name felt strange and right in the same breath, "wouldn't have let me disappear. That's why I'm here. He gave me a place to be. Upstairs. Quiet. No one asking questions I wasn't ready to answer." Marcus looked toward the bar, where Silas stood with his back to them, tending to a customer at the other end. The old man's limp was barely visible from this angle—he stood mostly on his right leg, shifting his weight with the practiced ease of long habit. "He seems like a good person." "He is." "Rory." Marcus leaned forward again, and this time the distance between them shrank to almost nothing. "I'm not here to make you feel guilty. I'm not here to drag you back to Cardiff or dig up things you've already buried. I just—I needed to see you. I needed to know that you were real and that you were okay and that somewhere in the world there was a version of things where you were still here." She felt the words settle into her chest, heavy and warm and aching. "I'm here," she said. "I can see that." "You look terrible, by the way." He laughed—a real one this time, not rough at all, and she heard the young man he'd been threaded through the older one he'd become. "Yeah, I get that a lot." "Suits you, though." "Thanks." She reached across the table and touched his hand. Just for a second. A press of her fingers against the back of his knuckles—warm skin, a faint tremor she felt rather than saw. He looked down at the point of contact as if it were something precious and fragile. "You don't have to leave tonight," she said. "The rain's not going to stop." "I wasn't planning on it." "Good." She pulled her hand back and sat with it in her lap, the ghost of that touch still electric on her fingertips. The bar hummed around them—the murmur of conversation, the clink of glasses, the rain against the window. Somewhere a record was playing, something old and slow, and the sound of it felt like a hand on her shoulder, steady and sure. Marcus settled back in his chair and unbuttoned his coat. His eyes moved to the photographs on the walls—faces from other decades, other stories, caught in silver halide and frozen there. "Tell me about London," he said. "Not the broad strokes. The real stuff. The daily things. I want to know what your life looks like now." And for the first time in the conversation, Rory felt something unclench in her chest. Not all at once. Not completely. But enough. Enough to draw a breath and begin.
created_at"2026-03-11T22:16:45.134Z" 3/11/2026, 10:16:45 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences76
tagDensity0.289
leniency0.579
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
83.80% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2161
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"really"
count3
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
2
adverb"completely"
count2
3
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"carefully"
2"completely"
3"slightly"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found
0"Marcus"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
76.86% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2161
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"scanned"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count1
2
word"calculated"
count1
3
word"traced"
count1
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"electric"
count2
6
word"reminder"
count1
7
word"weight"
count1
8
word"practiced ease"
count1
highlights
0"scanned"
1"familiar"
2"calculated"
3"traced"
4"silence"
5"electric"
6"reminder"
7"weight"
8"practiced ease"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences126
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences126
filterMatches
0"know"
hedgeMatches
0"seem to"
1"tries to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences178
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen61
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2137
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions22
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions40
wordCount1421
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity0.7
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
London2
October1
Silas5
Berwick1
Street1
Westway1
Megabus1
Victoria1
Station1
Eva1
Marcus7
Looked1
Rory10
Cardiff2
Seven3
persons
0"Raven"
1"Silas"
2"Eva"
3"Marcus"
4"Looked"
5"Rory"
places
0"London"
1"October"
2"Berwick"
3"Street"
4"Victoria"
5"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
52.60% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences77
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"smelled like ginger and soy and the partic"
1"quite decide if he liked it"
2"felt like a hand on her shoulder, stead"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.468
wordCount2137
matches
0"Not the kind that held her in place, but the kind"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences178
matches
0"knew that voice"
1"learned that taking"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs88
mean24.28
std24.19
cv0.996
sampleLengths
079
129
22
344
436
53
615
741
867
99
103
115
121
1351
141
1547
1617
174
183
195
2087
214
2262
235
243
2511
2637
274
2813
2911
3028
3111
3265
3310
348
354
3639
3714
3826
395
406
4140
4217
4314
4441
455
4612
4738
482
4953
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences126
matches
0"been threaded"
89.35% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs241
matches
0"were watching"
1"was asking"
2"was bracing"
3"was playing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount20
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences178
ratio0.096
matches
0"Yu-Fei had let her leave early after the lunch rush died to nothing—just a handful of regulars and two tourists who'd wandered in by accident."
1"\"Two hours late with a delivery to Bloomsbury because some wanker double-parked a lorry on Lamb's Conduit Street. Yu-Fei nearly had an aneurysm.\" She dropped onto her usual stool—the one at the far end, nearest the wall of black-and-white photographs."
2"He was tall—taller than she remembered—wearing a dark coat that looked too expensive for the neighborhood."
3"The way he said it—two syllables, the first stretched thin, the second swallowed almost entirely—sent something cold down the center of her spine."
4"Then he moved toward her, and there was something in his stride that was familiar and foreign at the same time—the same loose-limbed gait, but slower, more careful, as if he'd learned the hard way that moving too fast through a room could cost you."
5"He looked at her face—really looked—and she watched him cataloging the changes."
6"It came out rougher than she remembered—lower, with a rasp at the edges, like his throat had been through something."
7"He pulled out a chair and sat, and she noticed the way he favored his right leg—a slight hitch in the motion, nothing dramatic, just enough to register if you were watching for it."
8"Her jaw tightened, but only for a moment—then the mask slipped back into place, smooth and practiced, and she breathed out through her nose."
9"She looked at him—really looked, the way he'd looked at her when he first walked in."
10"She pressed her thumb against the crescent scar on her wrist—an old habit, something she did when the ground beneath her felt uncertain."
11"She'd spent the first three years in London learning that exact lesson—how the body remembers what the mind tries to file away, how certain sounds and smells could still send her spiraling back to a flat in Cardiff with a lock that only worked from the outside."
12"The old man's limp was barely visible from this angle—he stood mostly on his right leg, shifting his weight with the practiced ease of long habit."
13"He laughed—a real one this time, not rough at all, and she heard the young man he'd been threaded through the older one he'd become."
14"A press of her fingers against the back of his knuckles—warm skin, a faint tremor she felt rather than saw."
15"The bar hummed around them—the murmur of conversation, the clink of glasses, the rain against the window."
16"His eyes moved to the photographs on the walls—faces from other decades, other stories, caught in silver halide and frozen there."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1449
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"same loose-limbed gait,"
adverbCount46
adverbRatio0.031746031746031744
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.010351966873706004
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences178
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences178
mean12.01
std11.21
cv0.934
sampleLengths
07
128
24
325
415
522
67
72
840
94
1012
1111
1213
133
1415
1515
1626
174
1816
1921
206
2120
229
233
244
251
261
2723
284
2924
301
312
3245
336
346
355
364
373
385
392
402
4130
4220
437
4426
454
4612
476
4821
4923
41.39% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats18
diversityRatio0.3089887640449438
totalSentences178
uniqueOpeners55
99.01% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences101
matches
0"Then he moved toward her,"
1"Just for a second."
2"Somewhere a record was playing,"
ratio0.03
45.74% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount44
totalSentences101
matches
0"She was off shift."
1"Her jacket smelled like ginger"
2"He nodded at her without"
3"She dropped onto her usual"
4"She smiled despite herself and"
5"He was tall—taller than she"
6"His hair was shorter, cropped"
7"He stood in the doorway"
8"His gaze found her."
9"She knew that voice."
10"She'd known it in lecture"
11"He stopped a few feet"
12"He didn't seem to notice."
13"He looked at her face—really"
14"He ran a hand over"
15"He looked between them with"
16"It came out rougher than"
17"He pulled out a chair"
18"he said, once they were"
19"She considered the question."
ratio0.436
54.06% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount82
totalSentences101
matches
0"The rain hadn't let up"
1"Rory pushed through the door"
2"She was off shift."
3"Yu-Fei had let her leave"
4"Her jacket smelled like ginger"
5"Silas was behind the bar,"
6"He nodded at her without"
7"She dropped onto her usual"
8"Silas set the glass down"
9"The signet ring on his"
10"She smiled despite herself and"
11"A man stepped inside."
12"He was tall—taller than she"
13"His hair was shorter, cropped"
14"He stood in the doorway"
15"Rory stopped moving."
16"His gaze found her."
17"The way he said it—two"
18"She knew that voice."
19"She'd known it in lecture"
ratio0.812
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences101
matches(empty)
ratio0
58.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences51
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Silas was behind the bar, polishing a glass with the slow, deliberate rhythm of a man who had nowhere else to be."
1"He was tall—taller than she remembered—wearing a dark coat that looked too expensive for the neighborhood."
2"Wide-set, dark, perpetually startled-looking, as if the world kept surprising him and he couldn't quite decide if he liked it."
3"Then he moved toward her, and there was something in his stride that was familiar and foreign at the same time—the same loose-limbed gait, but slower, more care…"
4"The way she held herself now, compact and still, like someone who'd learned that taking up less space was a form of safety."
5"He looked between them with the assessing calm of a man who'd spent decades reading rooms."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, and the name felt strange and right in the same breath,"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences76
tagDensity0.197
leniency0.395
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.5212%