Run: 2026-03-11-01KKFH9TSVHFNVHX5ATV6X0F44

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The deadbolt scraped back. Then the second. My hand froze on the third. "Not a word." His voice, a low curl of smoke through the oak, stopped my heart. Not in fear. In memory. The door swung open, and Lucien Moreau stood on the landing, all tailored charcoal and bad decisions. The dim bulb from Eva’s hallway caught the sheen of his platinum hair, the sharp line of his jaw. He looked exactly the same, which was an insult. He should have looked worse. Haunted. Regretful. He looked like a bloody cologne advert. He raised an eyebrow. His left one, the one above the amber eye. The right, over the black one, remained still. A little trick I remembered too well. "Miss me, darling?" The question landed like a lit match in a room full of old gas. I slammed the door. The wood met resistance with a solid thud; the toe of his polished Oxford was wedged in the gap. "Go away, Lucien." "We need to talk." "No, you need to talk. I need to be left alone." I shoved harder. The leather of his shoe groaned. "Aurora." The name, my real name, said in his particular accent, a blend of Marseille and something darker, slithered past my defences. He leaned into the doorframe, forcing the door open another inch. His scent followed—expensive cologne, old paper, and a faint, electric tang, like ozone before a storm. "It’s not about us." "Everything with you is about you. That hasn’t changed." I gave one last, useless push and stepped back, letting the momentum swing the door wide. A concession, not surrender. He’d always won through sheer, infuriating patience. He entered Eva’s cramped flat like he owned it, his gaze sweeping the chaos of books and scrolls with detached interest. Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby, wound himself around Lucien’s ankles with a traitorous purr. Traitor. Lucien bent, running a long-fingered hand down the cat’s spine before straightening and placing his ivory-handled cane against the wall. It clicked with a finality that made my scar itch. "Close the door," he said. It wasn’t a request. I kicked it shut. The three deadbolts shot home with a series of satisfying clunks. A cage for two. Brilliant. "Talk. You’ve got five minutes. Then I’m calling the police, or a priest. Whichever you’re more allergic to." His smile was a thin, sharp thing. "Still wielding that Irish wit like a shillelagh. It’s comforting." He moved further into the room, his fingers ghosting over a stack of Eva’s research on ley lines. "I hear you’ve been asking questions. In the wrong places." I crossed my arms, leaning against the kitchen counter. The cold metal pressed into my spine. "I deliver food, Lucien. I don’t do questions anymore." "Delivering to the Golden Empress for Yu-Fei Cheung. Ambitious, for a girl from Cardiff." He turned, those mismatched eyes pinning me. "She collects rare things. Rare information. You’re either very brave or very stupid." "Get to the point." "The point, Rory, is that you’ve been seen. You, with your bright blue eyes and your habit of looking too closely, are poking a hornet’s nest that has nothing to do with you." He took a step closer. I held my ground, even as the air between us thickened. "There are things moving in the shadows of this city. Old things. Hungry things. They don’t appreciate being watched by curious little humans." The way he said ‘humans’—a clinical term, an observation—sent a chill down my spine. I’d forgotten, in the years apart, how the reminder of what he was could feel like a physical touch. Half-demon. Not all bad, but bad enough. Enough to make you question every soft word, every gentle touch, for a hidden hook. "Since when do you care what happens to curious little humans?" His jaw tightened. A minute shift, but I saw it. "Since one of them was you." The flat was silent except for the distant hum of traffic on Brick Lane and Ptolemy’s rumbling purr. The words hung there, too sincere to be a lie, too loaded to be simply kind. My chest ached with a sudden, stupid hope. I crushed it. "That line might have worked three years ago. Before you vanished. Before I found that note." "I had my reasons." "Your reasons left me with a broken lease and a landlord who thought I was a lunatic talking about demons and magic." I pushed off the counter, closing the distance he’d created. I had to tilt my head back to meet his gaze. "You don’t get to swoop back in and pretend you’re some gallant protector. You’re a fixer, Lucien. You fix problems for a price. So what’s the price for this little visit? Who sent you?" Something flickered in his black eye, a spark of genuine anger. His hand came up, not to touch me, but to hover near my face, a breath away from my cheek. I didn’t flinch. I wouldn’t give him that. "No one sent me. I heard a whisper on the wind that Rory Carter, who was supposed to be a barrister, was playing delivery girl in a city full of teeth. I came to see for myself." His voice dropped to a murmur. "You look tired." "You look expensive. Same old story." I batted his hand away. The contact sent a jolt up my arm, a jolt of static and memory. Late nights in this very flat, his fingers tracing the crescent scar on my wrist, asking no questions. The sting of betrayal when I woke to an empty bed and a single line on the back of a takeaway menu: *Forgive me. It’s safer this way.* "Safer for who?" I whispered, the old question escaping. "For you. Always for you." He lowered his hand, his expression shuttering closed. He was back to being the broker, the fixer. "There is a man. He calls himself Corvus. He deals in souls, Rory. Not the metaphorical kind. He’s taken an interest in your employer. And in the girl who delivers her dinners and asks questions about ancient bindings." I felt the blood drain from my face. The flat suddenly felt airless. "Corvus." "You know the name." "Eva… she mentioned it. In her notes. A theoretical patron of dark collectors." I gestured to the scrolls. "She thinks he’s a myth." "Eva is a brilliant, paranoid researcher who is usually right about three things out of five. This is one of the three." Lucien reached into his jacket and produced a small, black object. Not a phone. A obsidian disc, cool and smooth, carved with symbols that seemed to drink the light. "This is for you. If you see a man with eyes like polished jet and a smile that doesn’t reach them, press the centre. It will get a message to me." I took the disc. It was cold, unnaturally so. "And what? You’ll come running? Like a knight in Armani?" "I’ll come. And I will be very, very angry with whoever made you use it." He leaned in, and for a heartbeat, I thought he would kiss me. The air crackled. He smelled of night and secrets and a promise I’d once believed in. Instead, he brushed his lips against my ear, his breath warm. "Lock the doors after I leave. Don’t answer to anyone you don’t know. And for God’s sake, Rory, stop looking so deeply. Some truths have claws." He pulled back, his gaze holding mine for one last, searing moment. Then he turned, collected his cane, and walked to the door without a backward glance. The deadbolts opened for him as if by command. He paused on the threshold. "It was good to see you, Laila." The door clicked shut behind him, leaving me alone with a cold obsidian disc, a purring cat, and the echo of a name only he had ever used.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"He moved further [further]"
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.4
leniency0.8
rawRatio0.063
effectiveRatio0.05
77.24% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1318
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"very"
count5
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
54.48% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1318
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"eyebrow"
count1
1
word"electric"
count1
2
word"comforting"
count1
3
word"chill"
count1
4
word"down my spine"
count1
5
word"reminder"
count1
6
word"could feel"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count1
8
word"whisper"
count1
9
word"tracing"
count1
10
word"searing"
count1
11
word"echo"
count1
highlights
0"eyebrow"
1"electric"
2"comforting"
3"chill"
4"down my spine"
5"reminder"
6"could feel"
7"flickered"
8"whisper"
9"tracing"
10"searing"
11"echo"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"sent a chill down"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences89
matches
0"t in fear"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences89
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences114
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords6
totalWords1316
ratio0.005
matches
0"Forgive me. It’s safer this way."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions15
wordCount812
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.49
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Lucien4
Moreau1
Eva4
Oxford1
Marseille1
Brick1
Lane1
Ptolemy2
persons
0"Lucien"
1"Moreau"
2"Eva"
3"Ptolemy"
places
0"Oxford"
1"Marseille"
2"Brick"
3"Lane"
globalScore1
windowScore1
60.71% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences56
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like a bloody cologne advert"
1"symbols that seemed to drink the light"
48.02% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.52
wordCount1316
matches
0"Not all bad, but bad enough"
1"not to touch me, but to hover near my face, a breath away from my cheek"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences114
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs43
mean30.6
std22.64
cv0.74
sampleLengths
013
13
218
359
428
53
637
73
84
920
1053
1136
1264
139
1420
1518
1645
1725
1834
194
2072
2155
2211
2316
2445
2516
264
2777
2839
2946
3071
319
3260
3314
344
3523
3682
3719
3855
3926
4036
4112
4228
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences89
matches
0"was wedged"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs129
matches(empty)
92.73% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences114
ratio0.018
matches
0"The wood met resistance with a solid thud; the toe of his polished Oxford was wedged in the gap."
1"His scent followed—expensive cologne, old paper, and a faint, electric tang, like ozone before a storm."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount676
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.026627218934911243
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.004437869822485207
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences114
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences114
mean11.54
std9.17
cv0.794
sampleLengths
04
13
26
33
413
53
62
717
819
99
105
111
121
137
144
159
168
177
183
1914
204
2119
223
234
2414
256
2622
2711
2816
294
3025
314
327
3321
3412
351
3620
3710
385
394
404
4111
424
431
4418
457
4628
4710
489
497
58.77% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.39473684210526316
totalSentences114
uniqueOpeners45
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences82
matches
0"Then the second."
1"Instead, he brushed his lips"
2"Then he turned, collected his"
ratio0.037
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount46
totalSentences82
matches
0"My hand froze on the"
1"His voice, a low curl"
2"He looked exactly the same,"
3"He should have looked worse."
4"He looked like a bloody"
5"He raised an eyebrow."
6"His left one, the one"
7"I slammed the door."
8"I shoved harder"
9"He leaned into the doorframe,"
10"His scent followed—expensive cologne, old"
11"I gave one last, useless"
12"He’d always won through sheer,"
13"He entered Eva’s cramped flat"
14"It clicked with a finality"
15"It wasn’t a request."
16"I kicked it shut."
17"His smile was a thin,"
18"He moved further into the"
19"I crossed my arms, leaning"
ratio0.561
8.78% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount74
totalSentences82
matches
0"The deadbolt scraped back."
1"My hand froze on the"
2"His voice, a low curl"
3"The door swung open, and"
4"The dim bulb from Eva’s"
5"He looked exactly the same,"
6"He should have looked worse."
7"He looked like a bloody"
8"He raised an eyebrow."
9"His left one, the one"
10"The right, over the black"
11"A little trick I remembered"
12"The question landed like a"
13"I slammed the door."
14"The wood met resistance with"
15"I shoved harder"
16"The leather of his shoe"
17"The name, my real name,"
18"He leaned into the doorframe,"
19"His scent followed—expensive cologne, old"
ratio0.902
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences82
matches(empty)
ratio0
93.60% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences29
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"It clicked with a finality that made my scar itch."
1"Late nights in this very flat, his fingers tracing the crescent scar on my wrist, asking no questions."
31.25% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"The way he said, an observation—sent a chill down my spine"
1"I whispered, the old question escaping"
2"He lowered, his expression shuttering closed"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"I whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.1
leniency0.2
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.05
80.8528%