Run: 2026-03-11-01KKFJSHAN3XN042MJ7KZV1QT5

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Duration:
58.2s
Cost:
$0.000000
Provider:
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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The moss gave way under her trainers with a sound like wet lungs breathing. Rory froze, one foot half-lifted, the other sinking into the spongy ground. She hadn't stepped on moss before that sounded like that. Not in Richmond Park, not anywhere. The standing stones should have been ahead. The ancient oaks that marked the grove’s boundary. She’d counted her paces—forty-three from the last blackberry bramble, same as Eva had said. But the darkness between the trees had thickened, pooling like spilled ink, and the stones weren’t there. Her phone screen cast a sickly blue light on the undergrowth. 2:17 AM. The time hadn’t changed since she’d ducked under the first oak branch. She tapped the screen. Still 2:17. The battery indicator showed full charge. She hadn’t brought a charger. "Right," she breathed. The word hung in the air, too loud. She thumbed the screen off and stood in the dark, letting her eyes adjust. The silver chain around her neck felt warm against her collarbone. The Heartstone pendant, a deep crimson thumbprint against her skin, had begun to pulse. Not a heartbeat—slower, heavier, like a deep drum heard through walls. Eva’s instructions had been specific. Find the grove. Speak the words. Don’t stay past dawn. Simple enough, even for a part-time delivery driver who’d fled an abusive ex and a pre-law degree in the same month. But Eva hadn’t mentioned the sound. A low hum, felt more than heard, vibrating in the fillings of her teeth. Or the way the wildflowers—white foxgloves, purple loosestrife—bloomed in perfect circles despite it being late October. Or the smell, sweet and cloying, like rotting peaches and old library books. A branch snapped somewhere to her left. Rory turned slowly. The movement felt syrupy, as if the air had thickened. Nothing moved between the birches. Their pale bark glowed faintly, the only light in the grove now her eyes had adjusted. She listened. The snap didn’t repeat. No rustle of movement, no breath of wind. Just that hum, and the wet-lung sound of the moss underfoot when she shifted her weight. She should go back. That’s what the cool-headed, intelligent part of her—the part that had calculated the quickest escape route from Evan’s flat, that had mapped every CCTV blind spot between there and the train station—said. Turn around. Forty-three paces to the bramble. Follow the path to the car park. Drive back to the flat above Silas’ bar, make tea, forget this midnight errand for a childhood friend who’d started talking about portals and debts. But the pendant pulsed harder, a warm stone against her sternum. And Eva hadn’t been specific about what she’d owe if she didn’t do this. Rory took a step forward. The moss exhaled. The clearing opened without warning. One moment she was threading between close-grown oaks, the next she stood in a perfect circle of grass, moonlit and silent. The standing stones were here, after all. Twelve of them, rough-hewn and taller than her, arranged in a ring. In their centre, a flat stone altar, waist-high, stained dark with something that wasn’t moss. Her phone screen lit up. 2:17. Still. She approached the nearest standing stone. It felt like granite under her fingers, but warmer, as if sunlight had soaked into its core. The surface was carved with spirals that seemed to shift in her peripheral vision, unfurling like ferns. She traced one with her fingertip. The hum changed pitch, dropping lower, and the pendant flared—a brief pulse of crimson light that cast her shadow long and sharp across the grass. "Okay," she whispered. "Okay, Eva. What now?" The words Eva had given her were nonsense syllables, a guttural string of sounds Rory had practised in her flat until they felt less like choking. She opened her mouth to speak them, but a sound cut her off. Footsteps. Light, quick, circling the clearing just beyond the stones. Not animal. Too rhythmic, too deliberate. Rory turned, tracking the sound. It moved with her, matching her rotation, always staying just out of sight. She stopped. The footsteps stopped. She took a step to the left. They mirrored her. Her heart hammered against her ribs. The cool-headed part of her was screaming now, but she clamped down on it. Analysis. What do you know? Something is here. Something is aware of you. It’s playing. "Who’s there?" Her voice came out steady. Good. The footsteps resumed, slower now, dragging through the grass. A whisper threaded through the hum, too faint to make out words, but the tone was conversational, almost amused. Rory’s skin prickled. The air tasted of ozone and that rotten-sweet fruit smell, stronger now. She faced the altar. The dark stain on its surface glistened in the moonlight. Not old. Recent. The pendant pulsed in quick succession—three fast beats, then a pause, then two. A pattern. A code? The dragging footsteps circled closer. She could hear breathing now, wet and ragged, as if through damaged lungs. It came from everywhere and nowhere, bouncing between the stones. Rory’s hand went to the pendant. Its warmth was almost uncomfortable, the crimson glow visible through her fingers. She squeezed it, hard, and the hum stopped. The breathing stopped. Even the wind through the leaves held its breath. In the sudden silence, a voice spoke from the altar. "You’re late." It was Eva’s voice. But wrong. Too smooth, the Welsh lilt flattened into something metallic, inhuman. Rory’s blood chilled. She stared at the altar. The stain had moved, she was sure of it. It was spreading, seeping across the stone like living ink, forming shapes—letters, runes, a face that dissolved before she could focus on it. "Eva?" "Where else would I be?" The voice came from all around now, swirling with the returning hum. "You’re in my grove. You wore my pendant. You’re here to pay my debt." Rory’s mind raced. The abuse with Evan had taught her to spot manipulation, to hear the trap in a honeyed voice. This wasn’t honey. This was rusted iron. "What debt?" A laugh, like glass breaking underwater. The wildflowers around the altar’s base withered, blackened, and crumbled to dust in the space of a breath. The stone altar cracked down its centre with a sound like a bone snapping. "Every debt must be balanced. You came to repay what I owe for bringing you here. For the warning about Evan. For the flat. For the job." Rory’s mouth went dry. Yu-Fei Cheung’s Golden Empress. The delivery job. Silas’ bar. Had Eva arranged all of it? The timing—her sudden reappearance in Rory’s life just weeks after the breakup, the offers of help that felt too good, too neat. "You used me." "Used is such a transactional word. I invested. Now, the returns." The voice hardened, losing Eva’s cadence entirely. It was deeper, layered, as if multiple throats spoke in unison. "The words. Speak them. Open the way. That is the payment." Rory looked at the crack in the altar. It was widening, not from pressure, but as if something beneath was pushing up. A faint red light pulsed from within, matching the rhythm of her pendant. The air grew cold, a deep, cellar chill that had nothing to do with the October night. She thought of Evan’s hands, the careful way he’d isolated her, the promises that were really chains. She thought of running, always running. She was done running. "No." The single word echoed in the grove. The hum escalated to a shriek. The standing stones vibrated, dust cascading from their tops. The dragging footsteps rushed toward her, the breathing a gale-force wind in her ears. But Rory was already moving. Not toward the altar, not toward the circling presence. She lunged for the nearest standing stone, the one whose spirals had seemed to unfurl. Her fingers found the deepest groove, the one that felt like a keyhole. The pendant’s heat was searing now, the crimson light blinding. She didn’t speak Eva’s words. She spoke her own. "Close." The stone cracked under her hand. Not outward, but inward, the spiral carving collapsing into itself with a sound like a vacuum seal. The hum cut off. The red light in the altar’s fissure died. The dragging footsteps stumbled, fell silent. For a heartbeat, there was true silence. Then, from the darkness beyond the stones, a new sound. A low, patient growl, like something vast shifting in its sleep. Rory pulled her hand back. Her fingers were blistered, the crescent scar on her wrist aching fiercely. The pendant had gone dark, its warmth fading. In the ruined grove, something had woken up. And it knew her name.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences15
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.10% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1449
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1449
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"pulse"
count2
1
word"perfect"
count2
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"calculated"
count1
4
word"pulsed"
count3
5
word"traced"
count1
6
word"footsteps"
count6
7
word"rhythmic"
count1
8
word"whisper"
count1
9
word"warmth"
count2
10
word"silence"
count2
11
word"lilt"
count1
12
word"chilled"
count1
13
word"raced"
count1
14
word"chill"
count1
15
word"echoed"
count1
16
word"vibrated"
count1
17
word"cascading"
count1
18
word"searing"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"perfect"
2"weight"
3"calculated"
4"pulsed"
5"traced"
6"footsteps"
7"rhythmic"
8"whisper"
9"warmth"
10"silence"
11"lilt"
12"chilled"
13"raced"
14"chill"
15"echoed"
16"vibrated"
17"cascading"
18"searing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences157
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences157
filterMatches
0"know"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences168
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1438
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions36
wordCount1331
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.05
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Eva9
Heartstone1
October2
Evan3
Rory14
Good1
Welsh1
Cheung1
Golden1
Empress1
persons
0"Eva"
1"Evan"
2"Rory"
3"Cheung"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
globalScore0.974
windowScore0.833
44.74% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences95
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"sounded like that"
1"felt like granite under her fingers, bu"
2"spirals that seemed to shift in her peripheral vision, unfurling like ferns"
3"felt like a keyhole"
60.92% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.391
wordCount1438
matches
0"not from pressure, but as if something beneath was pushing up"
1"Not outward, but inward, the spiral carving collapsing into itself with a sou"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences168
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs45
mean31.96
std21.86
cv0.684
sampleLengths
042
146
242
361
485
57
664
775
825
98
1060
117
1271
137
1439
1549
1635
178
1843
1934
2028
2138
2210
232
2456
251
2631
2728
282
2938
3027
3141
323
3340
3452
3527
361
3736
3852
399
401
4141
4228
4325
4413
98.56% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences157
matches
0"was carved"
1"was rusted"
2"were blistered"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount7
totalVerbs208
matches
0"was threading"
1"was screaming"
2"was spreading"
3"was widening"
4"was pushing"
5"was already moving"
6"was searing"
6.80% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences168
ratio0.048
matches
0"She’d counted her paces—forty-three from the last blackberry bramble, same as Eva had said."
1"Not a heartbeat—slower, heavier, like a deep drum heard through walls."
2"Or the way the wildflowers—white foxgloves, purple loosestrife—bloomed in perfect circles despite it being late October."
3"That’s what the cool-headed, intelligent part of her—the part that had calculated the quickest escape route from Evan’s flat, that had mapped every CCTV blind spot between there and the train station—said."
4"The hum changed pitch, dropping lower, and the pendant flared—a brief pulse of crimson light that cast her shadow long and sharp across the grass."
5"The pendant pulsed in quick succession—three fast beats, then a pause, then two."
6"It was spreading, seeping across the stone like living ink, forming shapes—letters, runes, a face that dissolved before she could focus on it."
7"The timing—her sudden reappearance in Rory’s life just weeks after the breakup, the offers of help that felt too good, too neat."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount475
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount16
adverbRatio0.03368421052631579
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.008421052631578947
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences168
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences168
mean8.56
std6.16
cv0.719
sampleLengths
014
112
210
36
47
58
614
717
811
92
1012
114
122
136
145
153
168
1714
1811
1914
2011
215
223
233
244
2521
266
2714
2816
2913
307
313
3210
335
3416
352
364
378
3816
394
4032
412
425
437
4425
4511
4614
475
483
495
43.71% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats17
diversityRatio0.32335329341317365
totalSentences167
uniqueOpeners54
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences138
matches
0"Just that hum, and the"
1"Light, quick, circling the clearing"
2"Too rhythmic, too deliberate."
3"Even the wind through the"
4"Too smooth, the Welsh lilt"
5"Then, from the darkness beyond"
ratio0.043
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences138
matches
0"She hadn't stepped on moss"
1"She’d counted her paces—forty—three from"
2"Her phone screen cast a"
3"She tapped the screen."
4"She hadn’t brought a charger."
5"She thumbed the screen off"
6"Their pale bark glowed faintly,"
7"She should go back."
8"Her phone screen lit up."
9"She approached the nearest standing"
10"It felt like granite under"
11"She traced one with her"
12"She opened her mouth to"
13"It moved with her, matching"
14"She took a step to"
15"They mirrored her."
16"Her heart hammered against her"
17"Her voice came out steady"
18"She faced the altar."
19"She could hear breathing now,"
ratio0.261
83.19% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount104
totalSentences138
matches
0"The moss gave way under"
1"Rory froze, one foot half-lifted,"
2"She hadn't stepped on moss"
3"The standing stones should have"
4"The ancient oaks that marked"
5"She’d counted her paces—forty—three from"
6"Her phone screen cast a"
7"The time hadn’t changed since"
8"She tapped the screen."
9"The battery indicator showed full"
10"She hadn’t brought a charger."
11"The word hung in the"
12"She thumbed the screen off"
13"The silver chain around her"
14"The Heartstone pendant, a deep"
15"Eva’s instructions had been specific."
16"A low hum, felt more"
17"A branch snapped somewhere to"
18"Rory turned slowly."
19"The movement felt syrupy, as"
ratio0.754
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences138
matches(empty)
ratio0
32.02% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences58
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"Simple enough, even for a part-time delivery driver who’d fled an abusive ex and a pre-law degree in the same month."
1"That’s what the cool-headed, intelligent part of her—the part that had calculated the quickest escape route from Evan’s flat, that had mapped every CCTV blind s…"
2"In their centre, a flat stone altar, waist-high, stained dark with something that wasn’t moss."
3"The surface was carved with spirals that seemed to shift in her peripheral vision, unfurling like ferns."
4"The hum changed pitch, dropping lower, and the pendant flared—a brief pulse of crimson light that cast her shadow long and sharp across the grass."
5"She could hear breathing now, wet and ragged, as if through damaged lungs."
6"It was spreading, seeping across the stone like living ink, forming shapes—letters, runes, a face that dissolved before she could focus on it."
7"The timing—her sudden reappearance in Rory’s life just weeks after the breakup, the offers of help that felt too good, too neat."
8"It was widening, not from pressure, but as if something beneath was pushing up."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
16.67% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she breathed (breathe)"
1"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences15
tagDensity0.133
leniency0.267
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.267
75.4345%