Run: 2026-03-11-01KKFKCGM0WK86RY032NGS86BP

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Duration:
48.0s
Cost:
$0.000000
Provider:
Nvidia

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The veil gave way with a sigh and Aurora stepped onto loam that smelled of honeyed figs and crushed grapes. The sky above hung warm amber, a low glow that made the air feel thick and sweet. Vines coiled around stone pillars heavy with bunches of purple fruit, their leaves glossy as polished jade. In the distance a river of molten chocolate sluggishly wound between orchards where trees bore apples the size of melons, their skins blushing crimson. Nyx slipped from shadow to solid beside her, a ripple of darkness that clung to the ground before rising into a humanoid shape. Their eyes, faint violets, scanned the horizon. Isolde followed, her silver hair catching the light, each step silent on the earth as if she brushed only mist. Aurora lifted the Heartstone Pendant from her neck. It throbbed faintly, a warm pulse against her palm. She glanced at Nyx. “The portal’s still open,” she said, voice low. Nyx inclined their head, a whisper of wind moving through their form. Isolde’s lips twitched, a smile that held no mirth. “The feast never ends here,” she murmured, words winding like a vine. They moved forward, boots sinking into loam that gave underfoot like fresh dough. The scent intensified—ripe peaches, burnt sugar, a hint of spice that made Aurora’s throat tighten. Ahead, a clearing opened where long tables stretched under pergolas draped with flowering vines. Platters bowed under the weight of roasted fowl glazed in gold, bowls of steaming broth that sent spirals of fragrance skyward, platters of pastries dripping with honey and nuts. A group of figures in chef’s whites laughed, their voices booming as they tossed ingredients into cauldrons that hissed and sang. One turned, a scarred man with a flour-dusted apron, and caught sight of them. He lifted a ladle, a grin splitting his face. “Fresh souls! Come, taste the banquet!” His words rang, bright and eager. Aurora felt a prickle at the base of her skull. She gripped the Fae‑Forged Blade at her hip, its moonsilver edge cold even through the leather sheath. The blade sang a quiet note, a vibration that seemed to push back the cloying perfume. “We’re not here for the feast,” she said, stepping forward. Nyx drifted to her left, their form shifting between solid and wisp, eyes never leaving the laughing cook. Isolde lifted a hand, fingers trailing faint sparkles that dissolved before they could settle. “Truth wears many masks,” she said, voice a soft ripple. “Gluttony feeds on want, not on need.” She turned her gaze to the sprawling orchards beyond the tables, where trees bore fruit that pulsed faintly, as if each held a beating heart. A childlike giggle bubbled from behind a hedge of rosemary. Aurora spun, blade half drawn. A small figure darted out—half‑human, half‑vine, eyes wide and luminous. It held a bunch of grapes that glowed like lanterns. “You look hungry,” it chirped, voice like wind through chimes. Without waiting for answer it flung a grape at Aurora’s boot. The fruit burst on impact, spraying juice that smelled of sunshine and rain. Nyx laughed, a sound like leaves skittering over stone. “Even the shadows crave sweetness,” they said, their voice a whisper that seemed to come from all directions at once. They reached out, a tendril of shadow brushing the hovering grape, and the fruit dissolved into a mist that curled around Nyx’s wrist before vanishing. Isolde stepped closer to the child‑like being, her lavender eyes softening. “What do you guard here?” she asked, her tone curious, not demanding. The creature tilted its head, vines twisting around its ankles. “The first bite,” it replied, “the one that reminds you why you came.” Aurora felt the pendant throb stronger, its warmth spreading up her arm like a slow tide. She pressed it to her chest, feeling a faint rhythm match her own heartbeat. Beyond the tables, the orchard opened into a cavernous hall where arches of sugar‑spun glass supported a ceiling that resembled a midnight sky studded with candy‑bright constellations. The air there hummed, low and resonant, as if the very stone sang. A procession of robed figures entered the hall, each carrying a massive silver platter. On it lay a heart the size of a watermelon, beating slowly, its surface glossy with a glaze that caught the amber light and threw it back in shards of ruby. The robed figures chanted in a language that sounded like the crackle of fire and the sigh of wind through dry leaves. Nyx moved ahead, their form slipping between the legs of the chanting figures, shadow pooling at their feet before springing back into shape. They stopped before the platter, hand outstretched, not to touch but to sense. A shiver ran through them, and they whispered, “The beat is wrong.” Their words were barely audible, yet the chanting faltered for a heartbeat before resuming, louder. Isolde placed a palm on the cold marble beside the platter. The stone vibrated under her touch, a low thrum that matched the pulse of the heart. She closed her eyes, and when she opened them, her lavender gaze seemed to look through the flesh of the heart to something deeper. “It is not a heart,” she said, voice steady. “It is a promise, bound in sugar and desire.” She drew the Fae‑Forged Blade, its edge catching the light and throwing thin shards of moon across the hall. “Promises can be broken.” Aurora stepped forward, the pendant now burning against her skin like a small sun. She lifted her free hand, fingertips hovering just above the beating organ. Heat rose, not from the pendant but from somewhere deeper—a yearning she had not felt since leaving Cardiff. She swallowed, the taste of iron on her tongue, and said, “We need to know why it’s here.” The child‑vine giggled again, this time a sound like cracked bells. “Because the gluttony never sleeps,” it said, eyes glittering. “It feeds on the longing you bring.” A sudden crack split the air as one of the sugar arches shattered, shards raining down like glittering ice. The chanting stopped, the robed figures turning as one toward the source. Their faces, previously seruine, now showed a flicker of alarm—eyes wide, mouths open in silent surprise. Nyx lunged, a blur of shadow, and swept a shard away from Aurora’s head with a tendril of darkness that coiled like smoke. The shard dissolved before it could touch the ground, leaving a faint scent of ozone. Isolde raised her blade, the moonsilver singing as it cut through the air, and struck the base of the broken arch. The sugar cracked cleanly, a line of light spreading outward like frost on a window. The heart on the platter shuddered, its beat accelerating, then slowing as if listening. Amber light from the sky filtered through the newly opened gap, painting the hall in stripes of gold and shadow. The robed figures lowered their platters, hands trembling. Aurora felt the pendant’s pulse sync with the hall’s new rhythm. She stepped closer to the heart, the Fae‑Forged Blade resting at her side, its coldness a counterpoint to the warmth radiating from her palm. “What do you want from us?” she asked, voice firm, no hint of pleading. The heart gave a soft throb, and a voice emerged—not from the flesh but from the space around it, a chorus of sighs and laughter intertwined. “We want to be remembered,” it whispered. “We want the taste of longing to linger on mortal tongues.” Isolde smiled, a thin line that held both sorrow and resolve. “Then we will give you a memory worth savoring.” She lifted her blade, not to strike, but to point toward the opening in the arch where the amber light poured in. “Walk through this light, and carry the story of what you saw.” The child‑vine bowed, its vines retracting into the earth as if retreating into slumber. Nyx slipped forward, their shadow elongating, merging with the shaft of light until they became a silhouette of darkness framed by gold. Aurora followed, the pendant blazing against her chest, the blade steady in her grip. As they crossed the threshold, the hall faded behind them, replaced by the endless expanse of the orchard, the trees now whispering in a language of rustling leaves and distant laughter. The sky above remained amber, but the light felt softer, less oppressive. Somewhere far off, a feast continued, but the group walked on, hearts attuned to a rhythm that was neither pure hunger nor pure hope, but something newly forged between them.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.818
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.01% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1431
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
26.62% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1431
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"scanned"
count1
1
word"throbbed"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count3
3
word"whisper"
count2
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"pulsed"
count1
6
word"throb"
count2
7
word"warmth"
count2
8
word"marble"
count1
9
word"vibrated"
count1
10
word"desire"
count1
11
word"yearning"
count1
12
word"shattered"
count1
13
word"flicker"
count1
14
word"resolve"
count1
15
word"oppressive"
count1
highlights
0"scanned"
1"throbbed"
2"pulse"
3"whisper"
4"weight"
5"pulsed"
6"throb"
7"warmth"
8"marble"
9"vibrated"
10"desire"
11"yearning"
12"shattered"
13"flicker"
14"resolve"
15"oppressive"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences88
matches
0"felt a prickle"
77.92% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences88
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences92
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1427
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions33
wordCount1287
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity0.85
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora11
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Nyx9
Blade3
Cardiff1
Isolde7
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Nyx"
2"Blade"
3"Isolde"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences80
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"vibration that seemed to push back the cloying perfume"
1"whisper that seemed to come from all directions at once"
2"sounded like the crackle of fire and the s"
3"as if listening"
4"as if retreating into slumber"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches5
per1kWords3.504
wordCount1427
matches
0"not to touch but to sense"
1"not from the pendant but from somewhere deeper"
2"not from the flesh but from the space around it, a chorus of sighs"
3"not to strike, but to point toward the opening in the arch"
4"neither pure hunger nor"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences92
matches(empty)
24.06% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs24
mean59.46
std13.93
cv0.234
sampleLengths
078
150
262
371
456
571
656
769
854
946
1070
1167
1263
1392
1462
1527
1647
1774
1842
1949
2044
2154
2250
2373
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences88
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs234
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences92
ratio0.054
matches
0"The scent intensified—ripe peaches, burnt sugar, a hint of spice that made Aurora’s throat tighten."
1"A small figure darted out—half‑human, half‑vine, eyes wide and luminous."
2"Heat rose, not from the pendant but from somewhere deeper—a yearning she had not felt since leaving Cardiff."
3"Their faces, previously seruine, now showed a flicker of alarm—eyes wide, mouths open in silent surprise."
4"The heart gave a soft throb, and a voice emerged—not from the flesh but from the space around it, a chorus of sighs and laughter intertwined."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1292
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.01934984520123839
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.007739938080495356
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences92
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences92
mean15.51
std6.76
cv0.436
sampleLengths
020
117
217
324
423
57
620
78
89
94
108
1112
129
1312
1413
1515
1614
1729
1821
1914
209
2112
2210
2317
2416
2510
2618
2714
2810
2932
3010
315
3210
3310
3410
3511
3613
379
3820
3925
4011
4112
4210
4313
4416
4514
4627
4713
4814
4931
54.35% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.358695652173913
totalSentences92
uniqueOpeners33
38.76% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences86
matches
0"Somewhere far off, a feast"
ratio0.012
85.12% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences86
matches
0"Their eyes, faint violets, scanned"
1"It throbbed faintly, a warm"
2"She glanced at Nyx."
3"she said, voice low"
4"she murmured, words winding like"
5"They moved forward, boots sinking"
6"He lifted a ladle, a"
7"His words rang, bright and"
8"She gripped the Fae‑Forged Blade"
9"she said, stepping forward"
10"she said, voice a soft"
11"She turned her gaze to"
12"It held a bunch of"
13"it chirped, voice like wind"
14"they said, their voice a"
15"They reached out, a tendril"
16"she asked, her tone curious,"
17"She pressed it to her"
18"They stopped before the platter,"
19"She closed her eyes, and"
ratio0.337
6.51% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount78
totalSentences86
matches
0"The veil gave way with"
1"The sky above hung warm"
2"Vines coiled around stone pillars"
3"Nyx slipped from shadow to"
4"Their eyes, faint violets, scanned"
5"Isolde followed, her silver hair"
6"Aurora lifted the Heartstone Pendant"
7"It throbbed faintly, a warm"
8"She glanced at Nyx."
9"she said, voice low"
10"Nyx inclined their head, a"
11"Isolde’s lips twitched, a smile"
12"she murmured, words winding like"
13"They moved forward, boots sinking"
14"The scent intensified—ripe peaches, burnt"
15"Platters bowed under the weight"
16"A group of figures in"
17"He lifted a ladle, a"
18"His words rang, bright and"
19"Aurora felt a prickle at"
ratio0.907
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences86
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences61
technicalSentenceCount14
matches
0"The sky above hung warm amber, a low glow that made the air feel thick and sweet."
1"They moved forward, boots sinking into loam that gave underfoot like fresh dough."
2"The scent intensified—ripe peaches, burnt sugar, a hint of spice that made Aurora’s throat tighten."
3"Platters bowed under the weight of roasted fowl glazed in gold, bowls of steaming broth that sent spirals of fragrance skyward, platters of pastries dripping wi…"
4"A group of figures in chef’s whites laughed, their voices booming as they tossed ingredients into cauldrons that hissed and sang."
5"Nyx drifted to her left, their form shifting between solid and wisp, eyes never leaving the laughing cook."
6"They reached out, a tendril of shadow brushing the hovering grape, and the fruit dissolved into a mist that curled around Nyx’s wrist before vanishing."
7"Beyond the tables, the orchard opened into a cavernous hall where arches of sugar‑spun glass supported a ceiling that resembled a midnight sky studded with cand…"
8"Nyx moved ahead, their form slipping between the legs of the chanting figures, shadow pooling at their feet before springing back into shape."
9"Nyx lunged, a blur of shadow, and swept a shard away from Aurora’s head with a tendril of darkness that coiled like smoke."
10"The heart on the platter shuddered, its beat accelerating, then slowing as if listening."
11"The child‑vine bowed, its vines retracting into the earth as if retreating into slumber."
12"Nyx slipped forward, their shadow elongating, merging with the shaft of light until they became a silhouette of darkness framed by gold."
13"Somewhere far off, a feast continued, but the group walked on, hearts attuned to a rhythm that was neither pure hunger nor pure hope, but something newly forged…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount7
matches
0"she said, voice low"
1"she murmured, words winding like a vine"
2"she asked, her tone curious, not demanding"
3"she said, voice steady"
4"She swallowed, the taste of iron on her tongue, and said,"
5"it said, eyes glittering"
6"she asked, voice firm, no hint of pleading"
25.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she murmured (murmur)"
1"it chirped (chirp)"
2"it whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.545
leniency1
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.25
64.3784%