Run: 2026-03-12-01KKFNNDMVEXMEGCGNGAT6AQRT

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The body lay across a stall counter like a discarded puppet. Detective Harlow Quinn crouched, her leather watch sliding down her wrist as she angled the beam of her torch. The light caught the victim’s neck. Not a rope mark. Not a blade. A series of perfectly spaced, circular burns, each the size of a shilling, arranged in a descending line towards the clavicle. “Standard puncture wound?” Davies asked from behind her. He was new. A good nose for blood, but a literal one. “Does that look standard to you, Sergeant?” Quinn didn’t look up. The scent hit her next: not rot, but a heavy, sweet odour, like burnt cinnamon mixed with something metallic. It clung to the back of her throat. The market stalls around them were draped in moth-eaten velvet and stacked with jars of dubious liquids. This place reeked of bad decisions. “Gang initiation, maybe? Ritualistic?” Davies suggested, his voice echoing slightly in the vast, tiled space. Quinn stood. Her knees popped. Forty-one years and eighteen on the force had worn the cartilage thin. She took in the broader scene. The abandoned Tube station stretched into gloom, its platforms still bearing faded posters for holidays that never came. But the stalls… they were a patchwork of the bizarre. Leather-bound books with titles in languages that made her eyes water, cages of iridescent feathers, shelves of glittering vials. And the customers, those who hadn’t fled at the first sign of blue lights, watched from the shadows with eyes that reflected the torchlight in odd, pupil-less ways. “This isn’t a gang,” Quinn said. She pulled on a nitrile glove, the snap loud in the hush. “Look at the stall.” Davies did. “Sells junk. Trinkets.” “Look closer.” Quinn pointed her torch at a collection of small, brass objects on a velvet cloth. Compasses. But the needles on every one of them spun in lazy, frantic circles, unmoored from north. “What do you see?” “Faulty merchandise?” “The needles are spinning counter-clockwise. All of them. In sync.” She swept her torch to the stallholder’s own stall. A ledger lay open. The entries weren’t for money. They were for ‘memories’, ‘dreams’, ‘years of slumber’. The last entry, written in a hurried scrawl, read: *One compass of seeking. For the Detective’s shadow. Paid in full.* “Paid in full,” Davies read over her shoulder. “A bribe?” “Or a transaction.” Quinn’s gaze returned to the body. A man, mid-thirties, pale, dressed in an expensive but rumpled suit. No wallet. No phone. His left hand was clenched. She knelt again, carefully prying the fingers apart. Not rigor. Something else holding them. A small, brass object, its casing a dull green with patina, its face etched with intricate, whirling patterns. The needle inside pointed directly at her. Davies let out a low whistle. “That’s not standard issue.” “It’s not from here.” Quinn’s voice was flat. She recognised the style. The same as the spinning ones on the cloth, but finer. Cared for. “This is the compass. *The* compass.” “What compass?” She held it up. The needle didn’t waver. It pointed from the corpse, through her, towards the dark, unlit tunnel mouth at the end of the platform. “The one that was paid for. With this.” She nodded to the burns on the neck. “This wasn’t a murder, Davies. It was a purchase. And the seller collected.” Davies stared at the tunnel, then back at her. “You’re saying someone bought a compass… with his life?” “I’m saying the payment was part of the product. Life energy. Transferable.” The words tasted like ash. She remembered Morris, three years ago. The case that went south in a warehouse by the docks. The symbols scrawled on the walls. The way he’d looked at her at the end, as if he was seeing something right behind her. He’d called it a ‘crack in the world’. She’d called it a psychotic break. Now, standing in a magical black market built in the guts of London, holding a compass that pointed at her personal darkness, she wasn’t sure what she believed. “This is getting into… weird stuff, guv,” Davies said, his professional demeanour fraying. “All crime is weird until you find the motive. The motive here is acquisition.” She turned the compass over. On the back, etched so fine she’d missed it, was a signature. *E.K.* Initials. Not the victim’s. She pulled out her phone, the screen’s harsh light a violation of the gloom, and snapped a photo of the ledger entry, the body, the burns, the compass. “We need to get out of here,” Davies said, a note of genuine unease in his voice. The other market-goers were beginning to mutter, their whispers like dry leaves skittering across tiles. A figure in a deep hood slipped away down a service tunnel. “Soon,” Quinn murmured. She wasn’t looking at the figures anymore. She was looking at the compass needle. It had shifted. It was no longer pointing at her. It had swung, with aching slowness, to point directly at Davies. “Davies,” she said, her voice dangerously calm. “What?” “Don’t move.” His eyes widened. “What is it? What do you see?” “I see a transaction. And I see its next target.” The needle trembled, aimed at his heart. The sweet, metallic smell intensified. From the dark recesses of the platform, something began to scrape against the concrete. A rhythmic, dragging sound. Getting closer. “Guv?” Davies whispered. Quinn raised her torch, shining it past Davies’ shoulder into the darkness. The beam caught a movement. A shape, low to the ground, unfolding itself from the shadows between two stalls. It wasn’t human. It was all angles and joints, and it moved with a sickening, flowing grace. At its centre, where a face should be, was a smooth, polished surface that reflected the torchlight back at her in a cold, white glare. It stopped. The scraping ceased. The compass needle in her hand vibrated, humming a single, clear note that seemed to resonate in the bones of her skull. The reflection in the creature’s face wasn’t of her anymore. It was of a narrow alley, rain-slicked, three years ago. And in the reflection, DS Morris turned, his mouth open in a scream she could suddenly, horribly, hear.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"The words tasted like [like]"
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.613
leniency1
rawRatio0.053
effectiveRatio0.053
80.73% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1038
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"carefully"
count1
3
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"slightly"
2"carefully"
3"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
32.56% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1038
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"standard"
count3
1
word"velvet"
count2
2
word"echoing"
count1
3
word"gloom"
count2
4
word"etched"
count2
5
word"intricate"
count1
6
word"trembled"
count1
7
word"rhythmic"
count1
8
word"vibrated"
count1
highlights
0"standard"
1"velvet"
2"echoing"
3"gloom"
4"etched"
5"intricate"
6"trembled"
7"rhythmic"
8"vibrated"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences101
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences101
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences114
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen28
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords13
totalWords1038
ratio0.013
matches
0"One compass of seeking. For the Detective’s shadow. Paid in full."
1"The"
2"E.K."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
92.13% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions28
wordCount864
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.16
worstName"Davies"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn9
Tube1
Compasses1
Detective2
Davies10
Morris2
London1
Initials1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Detective"
3"Davies"
4"Morris"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.921
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences58
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"note that seemed to resonate in the bones of her skull"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.963
wordCount1038
matches
0"not rot, but a heavy, sweet odour, like burnt cinnamon mixed with somethi"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences114
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean32.44
std28.27
cv0.871
sampleLengths
064
120
261
315
498
522
65
738
82
956
1010
1168
1210
1331
142
1556
1618
17100
1813
1964
2044
2138
227
231
242
2510
2642
273
2873
295
3022
3138
98.32% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences101
matches
0"were draped"
1"was clenched"
14.81% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs144
matches
0"was seeing"
1"were beginning"
2"wasn’t looking"
3"was looking"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences114
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount395
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount4
adverbRatio0.010126582278481013
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.005063291139240506
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences114
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences114
mean9.11
std6.59
cv0.723
sampleLengths
011
119
26
34
43
521
68
73
89
911
1019
118
1217
136
1415
152
163
1712
186
1918
203
217
2219
2328
246
2512
264
272
283
2917
301
3116
324
332
3419
354
365
378
3813
394
403
418
422
439
4411
452
462
475
488
492
56.14% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.39473684210526316
totalSentences114
uniqueOpeners45
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences88
matches(empty)
ratio0
88.18% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences88
matches
0"He was new."
1"It clung to the back"
2"Her knees popped."
3"She took in the broader"
4"they were a patchwork of"
5"She pulled on a nitrile"
6"She swept her torch to"
7"They were for"
8"His left hand was clenched."
9"She knelt again, carefully prying"
10"She recognised the style."
11"She held it up."
12"It pointed from the corpse,"
13"She nodded to the burns"
14"She remembered Morris, three years"
15"He’d called it a"
16"She’d called it a psychotic"
17"She turned the compass over"
18"She pulled out her phone,"
19"She wasn’t looking at the"
ratio0.33
45.23% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount73
totalSentences88
matches
0"The body lay across a"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn crouched, her"
2"The light caught the victim’s"
3"A series of perfectly spaced,"
4"Davies asked from behind her"
5"He was new."
6"A good nose for blood,"
7"Quinn didn’t look up"
8"The scent hit her next:"
9"It clung to the back"
10"The market stalls around them"
11"This place reeked of bad"
12"Davies suggested, his voice echoing"
13"Her knees popped."
14"She took in the broader"
15"The abandoned Tube station stretched"
16"they were a patchwork of"
17"She pulled on a nitrile"
18"Quinn pointed her torch at"
19"She swept her torch to"
ratio0.83
56.82% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences88
matches
0"Now, standing in a magical"
ratio0.011
31.25% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Leather-bound books with titles in languages that made her eyes water, cages of iridescent feathers, shelves of glittering vials."
1"And the customers, those who hadn’t fled at the first sign of blue lights, watched from the shadows with eyes that reflected the torchlight in odd, pupil-less w…"
2"The way he’d looked at her at the end, as if he was seeing something right behind her."
3"Now, standing in a magical black market built in the guts of London, holding a compass that pointed at her personal darkness, she wasn’t sure what she believed."
4"At its centre, where a face should be, was a smooth, polished surface that reflected the torchlight back at her in a cold, white glare."
19.74% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Davies suggested, his voice echoing slightly in the vast, tiled space"
1"Davies said, his professional demeanour fraying"
2"Davies said, a note of genuine unease in his voice"
3"she said, her voice dangerously calm"
53.23% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Davies suggested (suggest)"
1"Quinn murmured (murmur)"
2"Davies whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.258
leniency0.516
rawRatio0.375
effectiveRatio0.194
78.9712%