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Run: 2026-03-12-01KKHYV2KWBQKFHWRGESK5KADC
Run Details
Model:
Grok 4.20 (Beta)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Mystery: examining a crime scene
Duration:
21.0s
Cost:
$0.017799
Provider:
xAI
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
87.83%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
80.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
46.45%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
97.98%
Name drop frequency
(details)
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
94.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
59.06%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
51.28%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
44.62%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
76.92%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Technical jargon density
(details)
75.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
90.4377%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
The abandoned Tube platform reeked
of damp concrete and something sharper, like burnt copper.
Detective Harlow Quinn stepped off
the last rung of the service ladder, her boots crunching on loose gravel.
The beam from her torch
sliced through the darkness, catching on rusted rails and faded warning signs that read CAMDEN TOWN in peeling paint. No trains had run here for decades. Yet a body lay sprawled across the tracks like an offering.
She adjusted the worn leather
watch
on her left wrist, noting the time. 2:17 a.m.
The call had come in
twenty-three minutes earlier from an anonymous tip. Unusual location for an unusual death.
Sergeant Patel waited near the
corpse, his own torch sweeping slow arcs across the ground.
The younger officer's face looked
pale under the harsh light, shadows pooling in the hollows of his cheeks.
He straightened when he saw
her, military precision meeting her own. "Detective Quinn," he said. "Victim's male, mid-thirties. No ID. Throat's slashed clean, but there's something off about the blood pattern." Harlow approached, her steps
measured
.
The body lay face-up, arms
flung wide.
Blood had pooled beneath the
head and shoulders, but the splatter on the nearby wall formed odd shapes. Not the expected arterial spray. More like deliberate marks.
She crouched, brown eyes narrowing
as she studied the scene. The man's clothes were expensive. Tailored wool coat, Italian leather shoes now scuffed with Tunnel grime.
His neck wound gaped, too
precise for a frenzied attack. Almost surgical. "Any witnesses?"
she asked, voice low
. "None that've come forward. The tip came from a burner phone. Signal pinged from somewhere above ground, near the market stalls." Harlow's jaw tightened.
Camden Market above them buzzed
even at this hour, but down here was another world.
She swept her torch across
the platform. Abandoned for years, yet the air hummed with wrongness. Her skin prickled.
She pulled on gloves with
practiced snaps. The victim's hands showed no defensive wounds. No struggle.
Either he'd known his killer
or never saw it coming.
Patel
shifted his
weight
. "Looks like a gang hit to me. These tunnels attract all sorts. Drugs, turf wars. The cut is professional. Maybe a warning." "Different interpretation,"
Harlow murmured, more to herself than him
.
She leaned closer to the
wound. The edges were clean, yes, but the blood around it had an odd sheen.
Almost iridescent under her torch
beam.
She touched a finger to
the edge of a droplet on the rail.
It didn't smear like normal
blood. It clung, viscous.
She straightened, scanning the walls
again. Those marks weren't random. They curved in deliberate spirals, intersecting at points that formed... symbols?
Her mind flashed to three
years ago. The night DS Morris had vanished in a case that still haunted her reports. Unexplained. Supernatural origins, her gut had whispered then. She'd
buried that thought
deep. "This isn't a gang hit," she said. "Look at the blood. It's not just on the ground. It's arranged."
Patel
frowned, his torch joining hers. "Arranged? You mean like ritual shit?" "Watch your language, Sergeant." But she didn't disagree.
Her sharp jaw set as
she moved along the platform, boots scraping. Something glinted near a collapsed bench. She approached
carefully
. A small object lay half-hidden in the dust. Brass, tarnished with verdigris.
She picked it up between
gloved fingers. A compass. The casing felt unnaturally cold. Protective sigils
etched
into its face caught the light, strange runes she didn't recognize. The needle spun wildly, then snapped toward a section of wall twenty feet away. Her
pulse
quickened
. This wasn't
standard
evidence. The compass hummed against her palm, a vibration she felt in her bones. "Find anything?"
Patel
called. "Possible personal effect," she replied, slipping the device into an evidence bag. She wouldn't mention how it moved. Not yet. "Bag the blood samples separately. I want lab analysis on the composition ASAP."
Patel
nodded but his expression said he thought she was reaching. He squatted by the body again. "No wallet, no phone. Killer took everything. Classic robbery gone wrong, or message sent. These tunnels connect to old service routes. Smugglers use them." Harlow said nothing. She walked to the wall where the compass had pointed. The concrete looked solid, but when she ran her fingers across it, faint lines
appeared under her touch
. Hairline cracks formed a rectangle. A door? She pressed harder. Nothing. Her mind
raced
. The victim's coat had snagged on something near the rails. She returned to the body, examining the fabric. Threads caught on invisible barbs. She shone her light directly on the area. There. A tiny fragment of bone, polished smooth and
etched
with the same sigils as the compass. She bagged it. Bone token. The phrase surfaced unbidden from some half-forgotten report she'd dismissed years ago. "Quinn, the ME's team is five minutes out,"
Patel
said. "We should secure the perimeter. This place gives me the creeps anyway. Feels like it's watching us." She ignored the comment.
Instead, she studied the blood
patterns again. The spirals weren't just decorative. They matched the etchings on the compass. Protective. Or summoning. Her partner's face flashed in her memory. Morris, smiling in their last photo, gone after investigating similar symbols in an old warehouse. The official report cited "gas leak." She'd known better. "What if it's not what it looks like?" she asked aloud. "Suppose this wasn't done here. The blood's too contained for the location. No drag marks. No footprints leading in or out except ours."
Patel
rubbed his neck. "Could've been dumped. But that wound was done while he was alive. Heart was still
pumping
." "Exactly." Harlow's voice gained
intensity
. "So how does a man get his throat cut in a sealed tunnel with no entry points? These platforms have been walled off since the '80s." She paced, torch beam
dancing
. The air grew thicker,
charged
. Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair felt staticky. Something was wrong with the evidence because the evidence wasn't from this world. The compass in her pocket
vibrated
again. She pulled it out, careful to keep it from
Patel
's view. The needle now pointed directly at the cracked section of wall. She approached once more, bone token in her other hand. When she held them together, the air
shimmered
. A faint outline glowed. A doorway. Not solid concrete. An illusion. "Detective?"
Patel
's
footsteps
approached. "What've you got there?" Harlow slipped the items away
quickly
. "Nothing conclusive. Let's get the photos done before the team arrives." But her mind had already connected dots others couldn't
see
. The victim hadn't
been killed
in the tunnel. He'd
been killed
somewhere else, somewhere that required a bone token for entry. The Veil Market. The name drifted into her thoughts like smoke from a forbidden fire. Underground supernatural black market beneath Camden, moving every full moon. She'd dismissed rumors before.
Now the evidence stared her
in the face. The victim had carried the compass to find rifts. The bone token granted access. Someone had followed him out, or waited for him here. But why stage it like this?
Patel
crouched again, examining the symbols. "These look Celtic. Or maybe older. My wife does that mystic stuff sometimes. Tarot, crystals. This seems way beyond that." "Older," Harlow confirmed. "And dangerous." She shone her light on the victim's forearm, revealed when his sleeve had ridden up. A faint tattoo. A spiral matching the blood marks. Membership? Or warning? Her
watch
ticked loudly in the
silence
between their words. The platform stretched into darkness on both ends. Side tunnels branched off, some collapsed, others suspiciously clear of debris. "Help me with this," she said, moving toward a pile of fallen tiles. She lifted one, revealing more symbols underneath, fresh. Not covered in grime like everything else.
Patel
joined her, his skepticism fading into curiosity. "This wasn't here yesterday. I patrolled the upper levels last week. No reports of anyone accessing these
depths
." "Precisely." Harlow's brown eyes gleamed with deduction. "The killer wanted this found. But not by just anyone. The tip was too convenient. They knew we'd come." The compass hummed louder in her pocket. The needle spun toward the body now. She risked another glance when
Patel
turned away. The needle pointed at the victim's chest. Not the wound. Beneath it. She knelt again, parting the coat
carefully
. A small puncture mark sat above the heart, almost invisible. Injection site. Whatever had been in his system had reacted with the blood, changing its properties. "Poison?"
Patel
asked over her shoulder. "Or something more exotic." Harlow stood, wiping her hands. "Get forensics on that blood immediately. Tell them to look for anomalies. Heavy metals, unknown compounds." The younger officer nodded, but his expression suggested he still leaned toward the simple explanation. Gang execution in the tunnels. Clean. Safe. Harlow knew better. The pieces didn't fit the mundane. The compass, the token, the symbols, the impossible blood. Her lost partner had died chasing shadows like these.
Now the shadows reached for
her. She
scanned
the platform one final time. High above, the sounds of Camden Market filtered down through ventilation shafts. Normal life continuing unaware. Tourists haggling over trinkets while beneath them, something ancient stirred. The ME team arrived with clattering equipment and bright lights that banished some of the mystery. Harlow stepped back, watching them work. She kept the compass and bone token secured in separate evidence bags, labeled with mundane descriptions. "Detective,"
Patel
said quietly as they observed. "You think this connects to your old case? The one with Morris?" Her sharp
jaw clenched
. "Focus on the evidence in front of us, Sergeant." But inside, the connections multiplied. The victim had visited the Veil Market. He'd bought or stolen the compass there. Someone had killed him for it, or for what he'd learned. The staging here served a purpose. A message to others who knew how to read it. She touched the leather
watch
on her wrist, remembering Morris's last words to her. *Some doors shouldn't be opened, Quinn. But once you
see
, you can't unsee.* The body bag zipped shut with finality. The team prepared to extract the corpse up the ladder. Harlow lingered near the wall with the hidden door. When no one watched, she pressed the bone token against the concrete. The outline flared briefly. A
whisper
of voices drifted through. Haggling. Strange smells. Incense and something metallic. The Market. She pulled back immediately, heart hammering. Not now. Not with
Patel
and the team present. "Everything alright?"
Patel
asked, appearing at her elbow. "Just thinking," she said. "The evidence doesn't add up because we're asking the wrong questions." "What questions should we be asking then?" Harlow met his gaze. "Who needed this man silenced badly enough to drag his body through barriers normal people can't
see
? And what was he carrying that made him a target?" The compass in her pocket grew warm. Its needle now pointed upward, toward the market streets above. Toward answers. She turned to the ladder. "Let's get back to the surface. I need to make some calls." As they climbed, Harlow's mind worked through the deductions. The wound was post-mortem staging. The real cause of death was whatever had
been injected
. The blood marked the scene as a warning to others with similar tattoos. The compass and token belonged to the victim, taken from the Market. Someone had followed him out through that hidden door. The killer knew about the supernatural underbelly of London. And now, so did she. The night air hit her as they emerged from a maintenance shed disguised as an electrical box. Camden buzzed around them. Neon lights, street food vendors, oblivious crowds. Harlow
scanned
faces, looking for anyone who didn't belong. A woman with curly red hair and round glasses caught her eye briefly, clutching a worn leather satchel. The woman turned away
quickly
, tucking hair behind her left ear. Eva Kowalski. Harlow recognized her from old files. Occult researcher. Connected to several cases that had grazed the edges of what she'd dismissed before. The pieces shifted again. The Market wasn't just a location. It was a network. And this murder had just pulled her into its web. She gripped the evidence bags tighter. The game had changed. The evidence didn't lie. It simply spoke a language she'd refused to learn. Until now.
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"2026-03-12T21:22:01.478Z"
3/12/2026, 9:22:01 PM
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315
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generation_time
20721
tokens_prompt
1149
tokens_completion
3283
native_tokens_prompt
1100
native_tokens_completion
2619
native_tokens_completion_images
0
native_tokens_reasoning
0
native_tokens_cached
64
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num_input_audio_prompt
(null)
num_media_completion
0
num_search_results
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285
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"xAI"
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
20
adverbTagCount
2
adverbTags
0
"she asked aloud [aloud]"
1
"Patel said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences
44
tagDensity
0.455
leniency
0.909
rawRatio
0.1
effectiveRatio
0.091
87.83%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
2054
totalAiIsmAdverbs
5
found
0
adverb
"carefully"
count
2
1
adverb
"quickly"
count
2
2
adverb
"precisely"
count
1
highlights
0
"carefully"
1
"quickly"
2
"precisely"
80.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
0
"Patel"
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
46.45%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
2054
totalAiIsms
22
found
0
word
"measured"
count
1
1
word
"weight"
count
1
2
word
"scanning"
count
1
3
word
"etched"
count
2
4
word
"pulse"
count
1
5
word
"quickened"
count
1
6
word
"standard"
count
1
7
word
"raced"
count
1
8
word
"pumping"
count
1
9
word
"intensity"
count
1
10
word
"dancing"
count
1
11
word
"charged"
count
1
12
word
"vibrated"
count
1
13
word
"shimmered"
count
1
14
word
"footsteps"
count
1
15
word
"silence"
count
1
16
word
"depths"
count
1
17
word
"scanned"
count
2
18
word
"jaw clenched"
count
1
19
word
"whisper"
count
1
highlights
0
"measured"
1
"weight"
2
"scanning"
3
"etched"
4
"pulse"
5
"quickened"
6
"standard"
7
"raced"
8
"pumping"
9
"intensity"
10
"dancing"
11
"charged"
12
"vibrated"
13
"shimmered"
14
"footsteps"
15
"silence"
16
"depths"
17
"scanned"
18
"jaw clenched"
19
"whisper"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"jaw/fists clenched"
count
1
highlights
0
"jaw clenched"
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
230
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
4
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
230
filterMatches
0
"watch"
1
"see"
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
254
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
27
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
1
markdownWords
13
totalWords
2054
ratio
0.006
matches
0
"Some doors shouldn't be opened, Quinn. But once you see, you can't unsee."
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
20
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
97.98%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
56
wordCount
1634
uniqueNames
12
maxNameDensity
1.04
worstName
"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity
2
worstWindowName
"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Tube
1
Harlow
17
Quinn
2
Patel
16
Italian
1
Tunnel
1
Market
7
Morris
3
Veil
2
Camden
4
London
1
Kowalski
1
persons
0
"Harlow"
1
"Quinn"
2
"Patel"
3
"Morris"
4
"Camden"
5
"Kowalski"
places
0
"Tunnel"
1
"Market"
2
"London"
globalScore
0.98
windowScore
1
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
139
glossingSentenceCount
1
matches
0
"appeared under her touch"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
2054
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
254
matches
0
"buried that thought"
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
73
mean
28.14
std
14.5
cv
0.515
sampleLengths
0
74
1
33
2
44
3
20
4
49
5
28
6
6
7
21
8
37
9
26
10
26
11
57
12
55
13
19
14
12
15
29
16
54
17
20
18
4
19
33
20
41
21
42
22
34
23
34
24
27
25
57
26
34
27
20
28
31
29
30
30
39
31
19
32
8
33
17
34
56
35
12
36
30
37
26
38
5
39
27
40
29
41
28
42
26
43
26
44
34
45
33
46
6
47
25
48
22
49
33
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
3
totalSentences
230
matches
0
"been killed"
1
"been killed"
2
"been injected"
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
309
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
0
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
0
totalSentences
254
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
94.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1641
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"Underground supernatural black market"
adverbCount
58
adverbRatio
0.03534430225472273
lyAdverbCount
18
lyAdverbRatio
0.010968921389396709
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
254
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
254
mean
8.09
std
5.08
cv
0.628
sampleLengths
0
14
1
18
2
24
3
7
4
11
5
13
6
2
7
12
8
6
9
15
10
18
11
11
12
4
13
16
14
5
15
7
16
18
17
5
18
4
19
10
20
5
21
11
22
10
23
2
24
6
25
21
26
3
27
15
28
7
29
9
30
3
31
7
32
7
33
2
34
10
35
4
36
22
37
9
38
6
39
14
40
6
41
13
42
6
43
3
44
6
45
4
46
10
47
1
48
7
49
14
59.06%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
15
diversityRatio
0.38976377952755903
totalSentences
254
uniqueOpeners
99
51.28%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
3
totalSentences
195
matches
0
"More like deliberate marks."
1
"Almost iridescent under her torch"
2
"Instead, she studied the blood"
ratio
0.015
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
57
totalSentences
195
matches
0
"She adjusted the worn leather"
1
"He straightened when he saw"
2
"She crouched, brown eyes narrowing"
3
"His neck wound gaped, too"
4
"she asked, voice low"
5
"She swept her torch across"
6
"Her skin prickled."
7
"She pulled on gloves with"
8
"She leaned closer to the"
9
"She touched a finger to"
10
"It didn't smear like normal"
11
"It clung, viscous."
12
"She straightened, scanning the walls"
13
"They curved in deliberate spirals,"
14
"Her mind flashed to three"
15
"She'd buried that thought deep."
16
"Her sharp jaw set as"
17
"She approached carefully."
18
"She picked it up between"
19
"Her pulse quickened."
ratio
0.292
44.62%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
162
totalSentences
195
matches
0
"The abandoned Tube platform reeked"
1
"Detective Harlow Quinn stepped off"
2
"The beam from her torch"
3
"She adjusted the worn leather"
4
"The call had come in"
5
"Sergeant Patel waited near the"
6
"The younger officer's face looked"
7
"He straightened when he saw"
8
"Harlow approached, her steps measured."
9
"The body lay face-up, arms"
10
"Blood had pooled beneath the"
11
"She crouched, brown eyes narrowing"
12
"The man's clothes were expensive."
13
"His neck wound gaped, too"
14
"she asked, voice low"
15
"Harlow's jaw tightened."
16
"Camden Market above them buzzed"
17
"She swept her torch across"
18
"Her skin prickled."
19
"She pulled on gloves with"
ratio
0.831
76.92%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
3
totalSentences
195
matches
0
"Either he'd known his killer"
1
"Now the evidence stared her"
2
"Now the shadows reached for"
ratio
0.015
100.00%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
63
technicalSentenceCount
0
matches
(empty)
75.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
20
uselessAdditionCount
2
matches
0
"she asked, voice low"
1
"Harlow murmured, more to herself than him"
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
14
fancyCount
2
fancyTags
0
"Harlow murmured (murmur)"
1
"Harlow confirmed (confirm)"
dialogueSentences
44
tagDensity
0.318
leniency
0.636
rawRatio
0.143
effectiveRatio
0.091
90.4377%