Run: 2026-03-12-01KKHZ10PJGC3EH4HYF5HTEZ54

Run Details

Duration:
15.0s
Cost:
$0.018297
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The abandoned Tube station beneath Camden reeked of damp concrete, ozone, and something sharper—burnt copper and wet fur. Detective Harlow Quinn descended the rusted emergency stairs with the measured tread of someone who had walked into too many places where people died. Her leather-soled boots rang softly against the metal, each step precise, controlled. The worn leather watch on her left wrist caught the beam of her Maglite as she checked the time: 02:17 a.m. She had seen her share of bizarre crime scenes in eighteen years, but this one felt wrong in her marrow. Yellow police tape had been strung across the old platform like caution tape on a carnival ghost train. The station itself had been sealed since the 1980s; the only light now came from portable halogen lamps the forensic team had set up, casting long, theatrical shadows across the curved tile walls. Moss grew in the grout. Water dripped steadily from a crack in the ceiling, each drop echoing like a metronome for the dead. The body lay halfway between the platform edge and the tunnel mouth, sprawled on its back. Male. Late thirties. Expensive coat now ruined by blood and filth. His chest had been opened with what looked like a single, impossibly clean vertical incision from throat to sternum. No hesitation marks. No defensive wounds visible on his hands. The heart was simply... gone. Detective Inspector Malcolm Reeves was already there, crouched beside the corpse with his notebook balanced on one knee. He glanced up as Quinn approached, his face pale under the harsh lights. Reeves had been her partner’s replacement three years ago—competent enough, but he still looked at every scene like a man waiting for the world to make sense again. “Quinn,” he said, voice low. “You didn’t have to come out. I’ve got it.” “I was in the area.” A lie. She had been in bed, staring at the ceiling, when the call came through about a body in a disused station accessible only through a maintenance door that should have been welded shut. She had dressed in three minutes flat. She crouched opposite him, knees cracking faintly. The smell was worse up close—iron, yes, but also something like ozone and wet dog. The victim’s eyes were open, brown irises already clouding. Quinn studied the wound again. The edges were cauterised in places, as if the blade had been heated to several hundred degrees, yet the surrounding skin showed no signs of struggle or heat damage to the clothing. “Cause of death seems obvious,” Reeves said, gesturing. “Single stab wound, heart removed. Ritualistic, maybe. Look at the placement—perfectly centred. And this—” He pointed to a small, charred symbol burned into the tile beside the body. A circle containing three interlocking crescents. “Some kind of occult shit. We’ve had a tip about an underground market operating down here. The Veil Market, they call it. Moves every full moon. This station’s not even on the official maps anymore.” Quinn’s jaw tightened. She had heard the name before, whispered in interrogations that went nowhere. A black market for things that shouldn’t exist. She didn’t believe in things that shouldn’t exist. Not anymore. Not since Morris had died screaming in an alley that smelled exactly like this one. She pulled on nitrile gloves with a snap. “Who found him?” “Anonymous tip to the non-emergency line. Voice disguised. Gave exact coordinates. Called it in at 01:40. Uniforms found the maintenance door unlocked with fresh scratches around the lock. No signs of forced entry on the outer gates.” Quinn shone her torch across the platform. The beam caught something metallic glinting near the tunnel wall, half-hidden by a fallen chunk of masonry. She rose and walked over, careful not to disturb the faint footprints in the dust—footprints that seemed to stop abruptly ten feet from the body, as though the owner had simply vanished. She knelt and used a pen to lift the object. A small brass compass, its casing mottled with verdigris. The face was etched with symbols she didn’t recognise—sigils, Reeves would have called them. The needle spun lazily, not pointing north. Instead, it quivered toward the tunnel mouth, as if something in the darkness was calling to it. She slipped the compass into an evidence bag, but not before noticing the faint residue on the casing. Ash. The same ash that dusted the victim’s coat collar. “Find something?” Reeves called. “Compass. Not standard issue.” She kept her voice level. “Needle’s fucked.” Reeves joined her, peering at the bag. “Probably belongs to the victim. Eccentric type. Look at his shoes—hand-stitched Italian leather. Watch is a Breguet. This bloke had money.” Quinn said nothing. She had already catalogued the victim’s possessions in her mind: no wallet, no phone, no keys. Only the coat, the clothes, and a single bone token on a leather cord around his neck. The token was carved from what looked like a human finger bone, polished smooth, with a rune burned into its surface. She had seen similar tokens once before, in a case file that had been quietly closed after Morris died. She turned the evidence bag over in her hands. Something about the compass bothered her. The patina was old, decades old, yet the glass face was pristine. No scratches. No fingerprints visible under the halogens. And the needle kept moving even inside the sealed bag, still trying to point deeper into the tunnel. “Reeves,” she said quietly. “Walk me through your theory.” He straightened, pleased to be asked. “Right. Occult black market down here. Victim was either buying or selling something that went wrong. The missing heart suggests a ritual component—plenty of grimoires talk about using hearts for binding spells or power transference. The symbol is a known marker for a group called the Hollow Circle. They deal in banned alchemical substances. I’ve been building a file on them for months. This fits their pattern.” Quinn let him talk. She had read his file. It was thin, speculative, built mostly on hearsay from snitches who disappeared shortly after speaking to him. But she kept her face neutral. She moved back to the body and studied the wound more closely. The incision was too perfect. No serration marks. No tearing. It looked like the heart had been removed by something that didn’t need to cut through bone or muscle in the usual way. She had seen surgical extractions in her time, but this was different. This looked surgical and savage at once. Her gaze drifted to the victim’s left hand. The fingers were curled inward, but not in the typical cadaveric spasm. Two of them were broken, snapped cleanly. She lifted the hand gently. Embedded beneath the broken nails was a single red hair—curly, vibrant, the kind that didn’t come from most Londoners. She bagged it without comment. Reeves was still talking. “—and the anonymous tip suggests someone wanted us to find this. Maybe a rival faction. Or a warning.” “Or a misdirection,” Quinn muttered. She stood and swept her torch slowly across the platform again. The dust was disturbed in odd patterns—not footprints exactly, more like something heavy had been dragged, then the marks smoothed over. But the smoothing lines were too regular, too deliberate. Almost like wings brushing the ground. She walked to the edge of the platform and peered down onto the tracks. The third rail had been dead for decades, yet faint blue light flickered along its length for a moment before vanishing. Her skin prickled. The compass in her pocket grew warm. She pulled it out again, still in its bag. The needle now pointed directly at the tunnel mouth, trembling violently. “Reeves,” she said, voice tight. “Have forensics swept the tunnel yet?” “Not yet. It’s unstable. Collapsed section thirty metres in. Health and Safety nightmare.” She stared into the blackness. The dripping water had stopped. The station had gone eerily quiet, as though the walls themselves were listening. “I think the evidence doesn’t add up because it’s not supposed to,” she said slowly. “The wound is surgical but the heart was taken with intent. No blood spatter beyond the immediate area, which means the victim was dead before the cut—yet there are no ligature marks, no blunt force trauma to the head. He was paralysed somehow. The broken fingers suggest he tried to fight at the end. And that hair…” She held up the second evidence bag. “Red. Curly. The victim’s hair is straight and black.” Reeves frowned. “So he scratched his attacker. We’ll run it for DNA.” “Run it,” she agreed. “But I want you to look at something else first.” She led him back to the symbol burned into the tile. Up close, she could see the lines weren’t consistent with any blowtorch or chemical she knew. The edges of the tile had vitrified—melted and re-hardened in a perfect ring. “This wasn’t burned with heat as we understand it. The glass in the grout has reformed at temperatures that would have set the whole station alight. Yet only this spot is affected.” Reeves shifted uncomfortably. “You’re saying it’s… what? Magic?” “I’m saying the evidence has been staged. The compass, the token, the symbol—they’re all pointing us toward your Hollow Circle theory. Conveniently.” She crouched again, studying the victim’s face. There was something in his expression—not fear. Recognition. As though he had known his killer. Her mind turned to the red hair. She knew one person in London with hair like that. Eva Kowalski. Aurora’s friend. The occult researcher who worked in the British Museum’s restricted archives. The woman who had been avoiding Quinn’s calls for six weeks. The compass in her pocket thrummed again, almost angrily. She stood abruptly. “I want the tunnel swept tonight. Get the cave rescue team down here if you have to. And I want every inch of this platform photographed under UV and infrared.” Reeves stared at her. “Quinn… you think this is connected to Morris, don’t you?” She didn’t answer. The name still hurt like a fresh wound. Three years ago, DS Morris had died in an alley that smelled of ozone and wet fur. His heart had been missing too. The case had been closed as gang-related. Quinn had never believed it. She looked down at the body again. The victim’s coat had fallen open, revealing a small tattoo on his inner wrist—a tiny compass rose identical to the one on the brass device. Same verdigris patina on the ink, as if it had been there for years. Her pulse quickened. This man had owned the compass long before tonight. Which meant he had come here deliberately. Which meant the anonymous tip had come from someone who knew exactly what they would find. She turned toward the tunnel mouth. The blue light flickered again, deeper this time. For a fraction of a second she thought she saw a shape—small, hunched, with too many joints—before it vanished. The compass needle spun wildly, then locked forward. Quinn took one step toward the darkness, then another. The air grew colder, heavier. Her breath misted in front of her face despite the mild autumn night above ground. “Harlow,” Reeves said behind her, using her first name for the first time in months. “Whatever this is… it’s not our kind of case. Let the Super hand it to the weird squad.” “There is no weird squad,” she said quietly. “There’s just us. And whatever’s been hunting in the dark since Morris died.” She reached into her pocket and closed her fingers around the compass through the plastic. It was almost hot now. The sigils on its face seemed to shift when she wasn’t looking directly at them. Behind her, Reeves exhaled sharply. “You’re really going in there.” “I’m going to find what others have missed.” She glanced back at him, her sharp jaw set in the harsh light. “And when I do, I’m going to make sure it doesn’t take anyone else.” The tunnel swallowed her flashlight beam after only fifteen feet. Water dripped again, but now the drops fell upward, defying gravity for a moment before splashing against the ceiling. Quinn didn’t flinch. Somewhere ahead, something with red hair and a nervous habit of tucking it behind its left ear was waiting. She was almost certain of it now. Eva Kowalski had been here. Eva Kowalski had left the compass and the hair and the burned symbol. Eva Kowalski, best friend of the woman Quinn had been investigating for months. The mystery was no longer just about a dead man in an impossible place. It was about why the evidence was trying so hard to tell two different stories at once. Quinn adjusted her grip on the torch and stepped deeper into the tunnel, the brass compass burning like a brand against her palm. The station waited behind her, silent except for the steady drip of water that now fell in the wrong direction. And in the darkness ahead, the needle of the Veil Compass pointed unerringly toward the next rift in a world Detective Harlow Quinn had spent three years pretending was ordinary. It was time to stop pretending.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount5
adverbTags
0"she said quietly [quietly]"
1"she said slowly [slowly]"
2"She crouched again [again]"
3"she said quietly [quietly]"
4"She glanced back [back]"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.421
leniency0.842
rawRatio0.313
effectiveRatio0.263
77.37% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2209
totalAiIsmAdverbs10
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"perfectly"
count1
2
adverb"lazily"
count1
3
adverb"gently"
count1
4
adverb"slowly"
count2
5
adverb"angrily"
count1
6
adverb"deliberately"
count1
7
adverb"sharply"
count1
8
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"perfectly"
2"lazily"
3"gently"
4"slowly"
5"angrily"
6"deliberately"
7"sharply"
8"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
70.57% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2209
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"measured"
count1
1
word"echoing"
count1
2
word"glinting"
count1
3
word"etched"
count1
4
word"quivered"
count1
5
word"standard"
count1
6
word"pristine"
count1
7
word"perfect"
count2
8
word"flickered"
count2
9
word"pulse"
count1
10
word"quickened"
count1
highlights
0"measured"
1"echoing"
2"glinting"
3"etched"
4"quivered"
5"standard"
6"pristine"
7"perfect"
8"flickered"
9"pulse"
10"quickened"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences162
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences162
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences183
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen68
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2191
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions54
wordCount1676
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity0.89
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Tube1
Camden1
Harlow2
Quinn15
Maglite1
Inspector1
Malcolm1
Reeves12
Morris3
Londoners1
London1
Kowalski4
British1
Museum1
Veil1
Compass1
Detective3
Eva4
persons
0"Camden"
1"Harlow"
2"Quinn"
3"Inspector"
4"Malcolm"
5"Reeves"
6"Morris"
7"Kowalski"
8"Museum"
9"Compass"
10"Eva"
places
0"London"
1"British"
globalScore1
windowScore1
39.38% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences113
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"looked like a single, impossibly clean ve"
1"something like ozone and wet dog"
2"footprints that seemed to stop abruptly ten feet from the body, as though the owner had simply vanished"
3"looked like a human finger bone, polished"
4"looked like the heart had been removed by"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2191
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences183
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs65
mean33.71
std23.03
cv0.683
sampleLengths
075
120
274
361
459
514
647
768
877
948
1011
1137
1256
1357
1428
154
1611
1728
1876
1953
209
2173
2232
2364
2451
255
2622
275
2847
2938
307
3120
3211
3313
3423
3588
3612
3786
388
3944
4043
419
4233
4314
4446
4546
463
4732
4833
498
83.60% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount10
totalSentences162
matches
0"been sealed"
1"been opened"
2"been welded"
3"were cauterised"
4"been heated"
5"was etched"
6"was carved"
7"been removed"
8"were curled"
9"was disturbed"
10"been dragged"
11"been closed"
77.45% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs272
matches
0"was calling"
1"was still talking"
2"were listening"
3"wasn’t looking"
4"was waiting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences183
ratio0.066
matches
0"The abandoned Tube station beneath Camden reeked of damp concrete, ozone, and something sharper—burnt copper and wet fur."
1"The station itself had been sealed since the 1980s; the only light now came from portable halogen lamps the forensic team had set up, casting long, theatrical shadows across the curved tile walls."
2"Reeves had been her partner’s replacement three years ago—competent enough, but he still looked at every scene like a man waiting for the world to make sense again."
3"The smell was worse up close—iron, yes, but also something like ozone and wet dog."
4"She rose and walked over, careful not to disturb the faint footprints in the dust—footprints that seemed to stop abruptly ten feet from the body, as though the owner had simply vanished."
5"The face was etched with symbols she didn’t recognise—sigils, Reeves would have called them."
6"Embedded beneath the broken nails was a single red hair—curly, vibrant, the kind that didn’t come from most Londoners."
7"The dust was disturbed in odd patterns—not footprints exactly, more like something heavy had been dragged, then the marks smoothed over."
8"The edges of the tile had vitrified—melted and re-hardened in a perfect ring."
9"There was something in his expression—not fear."
10"The victim’s coat had fallen open, revealing a small tattoo on his inner wrist—a tiny compass rose identical to the one on the brass device."
11"For a fraction of a second she thought she saw a shape—small, hunched, with too many joints—before it vanished."
86.86% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1691
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount90
adverbRatio0.05322294500295683
lyAdverbCount37
lyAdverbRatio0.02188054405677114
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences183
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences183
mean11.97
std9.69
cv0.809
sampleLengths
018
124
212
321
420
518
633
75
818
916
101
112
128
1319
143
157
164
171
1818
1913
2028
215
229
237
2433
257
267
2715
289
295
3032
318
3228
336
3435
353
3612
378
388
392
4015
418
423
4337
447
4517
4632
4710
489
4914
46.27% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats17
diversityRatio0.3333333333333333
totalSentences183
uniqueOpeners61
90.70% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences147
matches
0"Instead, it quivered toward the"
1"Only the coat, the clothes,"
2"Almost like wings brushing the"
3"Somewhere ahead, something with red"
ratio0.027
70.34% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount55
totalSentences147
matches
0"Her leather-soled boots rang softly"
1"She had seen her share"
2"His chest had been opened"
3"He glanced up as Quinn"
4"he said, voice low"
5"She had been in bed,"
6"She had dressed in three"
7"She crouched opposite him, knees"
8"He pointed to a small,"
9"She had heard the name"
10"She didn’t believe in things"
11"She pulled on nitrile gloves"
12"She rose and walked over,"
13"She knelt and used a"
14"She slipped the compass into"
15"She kept her voice level"
16"She had already catalogued the"
17"She had seen similar tokens"
18"She turned the evidence bag"
19"she said quietly"
ratio0.374
48.44% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount121
totalSentences147
matches
0"The abandoned Tube station beneath"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn descended the"
2"Her leather-soled boots rang softly"
3"The worn leather watch on"
4"She had seen her share"
5"The station itself had been"
6"Moss grew in the grout."
7"Water dripped steadily from a"
8"The body lay halfway between"
9"His chest had been opened"
10"The heart was simply..."
11"Detective Inspector Malcolm Reeves was"
12"He glanced up as Quinn"
13"Reeves had been her partner’s"
14"he said, voice low"
15"She had been in bed,"
16"She had dressed in three"
17"She crouched opposite him, knees"
18"The smell was worse up"
19"The victim’s eyes were open,"
ratio0.823
34.01% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences147
matches
0"As though he had known"
ratio0.007
65.93% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences65
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn descended the rusted emergency stairs with the measured tread of someone who had walked into too many places where people died."
1"She had been in bed, staring at the ceiling, when the call came through about a body in a disused station accessible only through a maintenance door that should…"
2"She rose and walked over, careful not to disturb the faint footprints in the dust—footprints that seemed to stop abruptly ten feet from the body, as though the …"
3"Embedded beneath the broken nails was a single red hair—curly, vibrant, the kind that didn’t come from most Londoners."
4"The station had gone eerily quiet, as though the walls themselves were listening."
5"The occult researcher who worked in the British Museum’s restricted archives."
6"Same verdigris patina on the ink, as if it had been there for years."
62.50% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"he said, voice low"
1"she said, voice tight"
97.37% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Quinn muttered (mutter)"
1"she agreed (agree)"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.263
leniency0.526
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.105
78.3600%