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Run: 2026-03-12-01KKHZ1WN0KN811F48WZF677RS
Run Details
Model:
Qwen 3.5 9B
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Horror: alone in an eerie place at night
Duration:
3m 2s
Cost:
$0.001083
Provider:
Together
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
49.37%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
62.40%
Name drop frequency
(details)
8.49%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
96.97%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
33.21%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
0.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
45.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Technical jargon density
(details)
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
97.37%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
79.7604%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
The pendant burned against Aurora's
throat.
She didn't look at the
stone.
She knew the moment it
warmed from cold metal to living heat that the threshold had
been crossed
.
She cemented her feet into
the dirt.
The silver chain held tight
to her neck, keeping the unknown
weight
pressed against her skin.
The air smelled of wet
earth and something sweet, like rotting fruit held in a paper bag. It stung her nostrils. Aurora didn't flinch.
She had walked this wrong
way before to escape one thing running, but tonight the wrongness festered.
She stepped past the boundary
stones.
Pymelines of holly and bramble
marked the earth where an old park had
been made
into a forest
sanctuary
. They were slick with rain.
Wildflowers pushed through the mud
in summer robes, though the cold bites the back of Aurora's neck. No snow had lingered this year yet, but the breath she drew was thin as a young man's.
Aurora closed her eyes to
orient herself.
The compact held only the
time she needed, not the year. Two minutes. She checked her phone. The screen went dark. "Efficient," she said. "Low signal,"
the voice replied
. It came from nowhere. Aurora opened her eyes. No one stood there. No wind stirred the leaves. A moth flapped against the lantern light hanging above the path.
She swatted at the air
but nothing moved. She waited. The rustle grew faint in the brush.
It sounded like someone chewing
on dry grass. Alexandre tape recorded this for a different job. The sound here wasn't just biological. It was vibrations.
She counted the blows against
the leather case. One. Two. Aurora touched her left wrist. The crescent scar burned under her palm.
She couldn't remember her mother's
accent. "Something wants me." "Something got to you." "Stop it."
She pulled the pendant closer
. It burned hotter. The term Heartstone was too nice for what it did. The stone glowed crimson. The stone knew the way to the door. Aurora turned to face the path back. She wanted to go home. The Golden Empress delivery bag lay in the trunk of the van. She wanted the yak. The lights
flickered
.
They were streetlamps above the
woods. A vanishing line. The green light shone through the trees.
It was the glow of
the tree behind her. Aurora spun. Her boot dragged through the mud. She reached her hands out to the tree. The bark felt wet under her palms. Smooth as skin. She pulled. The wood didn't creak. It didn't bend. It held her in place, polite and still. The pendant sang louder. She blinked. Her vision fuzzed. The moon faded out. The stars faded. "Hello?" she asked. The air
vibrated
in response. A shockwave rippled through her chest like rain. She hit the wall of the tree without making contact. "Hello?" The voice was faint, like it came from the next convoy. "Turn around. Look at me." Aurora looked back. The darkness coiled around the truth. The air
looked like water swirling in a bottle
. A shadow detached. It
was shaped
like a dog. A large dog with eyes that glowed blue. She didn't breathe. The shadow advanced. It moved against the flow of air. The wind pushed it left. It came right. Aurora drew the pendant down to pull to her hand. The chain felt long. It
was like pulling
rope through water. "It's okay," she said. The shadow halted inches from her knee. It smelled like ozone. It smelled like coffee. It
smelled like a man she would have trusted
. "What do you want?" "Come with me." The voice came from the dog's chest. It wasn't a growl. It was a voice like glass breaking. Aurora shifted her
weight
. She thought of the delivery. The order for tea. She didn't drink tea. "Take me somewhere." "You're already somewhere." "I'm leaving," she gritted out. The shadow moved. It was faster than anything that belonged to this side. Aurora dodged, hoping to slip past it. Her foot kicked the dirt. The dirt felt soft as clay. She ran. She didn't cry out. She didn't call for anyone. She ran. The trail beneath her changed from wood chips to grey ash. Someone shouted in the distance. A car horn. A siren. Aurora stopped. She turned back. The Ash covered her shoes. There was a stain on the hem of her jumper. It was red. "Wait," she told the shadow. It didn't stop. The pendant
vibrated
. The stone cracked. It
shattered
into nothing. "The door closes," she whispered. The ground heaved. The air turned into glass. She watched the world bend into a maze of mirrors and doors. "Please." "Time moves. We stay." "Let me out." The shadow lunged.
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"2026-03-12T21:25:44.744Z"
3/12/2026, 9:25:44 PM
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4560
tokens_completion
4371
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4403
native_tokens_completion
4286
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native_tokens_reasoning
3166
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num_input_audio_prompt
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
9
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
19
tagDensity
0.474
leniency
0.947
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
100.00%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
790
totalAiIsmAdverbs
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
49.37%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
790
totalAiIsms
8
found
0
word
"weight"
count
2
1
word
"sanctuary"
count
1
2
word
"efficient"
count
1
3
word
"flickered"
count
1
4
word
"vibrated"
count
2
5
word
"shattered"
count
1
highlights
0
"weight"
1
"sanctuary"
2
"efficient"
3
"flickered"
4
"vibrated"
5
"shattered"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
127
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
127
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
137
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
19
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
790
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
8
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
62.40%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
17
wordCount
742
uniqueNames
5
maxNameDensity
1.75
worstName
"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity
2.5
worstWindowName
"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora
13
Heartstone
1
Golden
1
Empress
1
Ash
1
persons
0
"Aurora"
1
"Ash"
places
(empty)
globalScore
0.624
windowScore
0.833
8.49%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
53
glossingSentenceCount
3
matches
0
"sounded like someone chewing on dry grass"
1
"looked like water swirling in a bottle"
2
"smelled like a man she would have trusted"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
790
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
137
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
52
mean
15.19
std
14.2
cv
0.935
sampleLengths
0
6
1
47
2
41
3
6
4
59
5
28
6
3
7
9
8
32
9
2
10
42
11
18
12
3
13
4
14
32
15
28
16
28
17
2
18
41
19
4
20
12
21
3
22
23
23
17
24
35
25
3
26
18
27
21
28
4
29
24
30
4
31
3
32
18
33
17
34
3
35
3
36
5
37
31
38
2
39
22
40
10
41
5
42
18
43
5
44
3
45
10
46
5
47
20
48
1
49
4
96.97%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
3
totalSentences
127
matches
0
"been crossed"
1
"been made"
2
"was shaped"
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
151
matches
0
"was like pulling"
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
0
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
0
totalSentences
137
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
742
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
13
adverbRatio
0.01752021563342318
lyAdverbCount
2
lyAdverbRatio
0.0026954177897574125
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
137
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
137
mean
5.77
std
3.68
cv
0.638
sampleLengths
0
6
1
6
2
18
3
7
4
16
5
17
6
4
7
3
8
17
9
6
10
19
11
5
12
17
13
18
14
7
15
11
16
2
17
4
18
4
19
3
20
5
21
4
22
4
23
4
24
5
25
11
26
8
27
2
28
7
29
8
30
8
31
6
32
3
33
8
34
1
35
1
36
5
37
7
38
6
39
3
40
4
41
7
42
3
43
10
44
4
45
8
46
7
47
5
48
12
49
4
33.21%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
23
diversityRatio
0.22627737226277372
totalSentences
137
uniqueOpeners
31
0.00%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
0
totalSentences
112
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
45.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
49
totalSentences
112
matches
0
"She didn't look at the"
1
"She knew the moment it"
2
"She cemented her feet into"
3
"It stung her nostrils."
4
"She had walked this wrong"
5
"She stepped past the boundary"
6
"They were slick with rain."
7
"She checked her phone."
8
"It came from nowhere."
9
"She swatted at the air"
10
"It sounded like someone chewing"
11
"It was vibrations."
12
"She counted the blows against"
13
"She couldn't remember her mother's"
14
"She pulled the pendant closer"
15
"It burned hotter."
16
"She wanted to go home."
17
"She wanted the yak."
18
"They were streetlamps above the"
19
"It was the glow of"
ratio
0.438
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
107
totalSentences
112
matches
0
"The pendant burned against Aurora's"
1
"She didn't look at the"
2
"She knew the moment it"
3
"She cemented her feet into"
4
"The silver chain held tight"
5
"The air smelled of wet"
6
"It stung her nostrils."
7
"Aurora didn't flinch."
8
"She had walked this wrong"
9
"She stepped past the boundary"
10
"Pymelines of holly and bramble"
11
"They were slick with rain."
12
"Wildflowers pushed through the mud"
13
"Aurora closed her eyes to"
14
"The compact held only the"
15
"She checked her phone."
16
"The screen went dark."
17
"the voice replied"
18
"It came from nowhere."
19
"Aurora opened her eyes."
ratio
0.955
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
0
totalSentences
112
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
100.00%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
17
technicalSentenceCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
9
uselessAdditionCount
0
matches
(empty)
97.37%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
6
fancyCount
1
fancyTags
0
"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences
19
tagDensity
0.316
leniency
0.632
rawRatio
0.167
effectiveRatio
0.105
79.7604%