Run: 2026-03-12-01KKHZHAHR7J5QR9NQG6WS0BQT

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Duration:
28.8s
Cost:
$0.033141
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Harlow Quinn descended the iron service stairs into the bowels of the abandoned Tube station, the clang of each step echoing like a warning. The air thickened as she dropped below street level, heavy with the mineral stink of old brick and the sweeter rot of things that had died down here and never been claimed. Her flashlight beam sliced through the dark, catching on rusted rails and the skeletal remains of a platform that hadn't seen a train in thirty years. Camden Market above them was just closing for the night, but down here the only commerce had always been of a different kind. She suspected as much even before forensics called her. The crime scene tape looked ridiculous stretched across a forgotten archway, its plastic brightness an insult to the shadows. Two constables stood guard, faces pale under their helmets. Harlow gave them a curt nod, her posture ramrod straight, military precision worn like armor after eighteen years on the force. The worn leather watch on her left wrist read just past eleven. Late enough that the city above was sliding into its nocturnal rhythm, but early enough that whatever happened here still felt fresh. DS Carter was waiting for her on the platform, hands in his pockets, the beam of his own torch dancing across the ground. "Quinn. Thought you'd want first look before the pathologist carts him off." She stepped past him without greeting, brown eyes already cataloging. The body lay half-propped against a crumbling tile wall, legs splayed at an unnatural angle. Male, middle-aged, dressed in a long coat that had seen better decades. No visible wounds on the exposed skin, no blood spatter, yet the man's face was frozen in a rictus of pure terror. His eyes were open, milky now, staring at something only he had seen. "What do we know?" Harlow asked, crouching beside the corpse. The concrete bit cold through the knees of her trousers. Carter shrugged, his different interpretation already forming on his face. "Junkie gone wrong, most likely. Look at the gear scattered around him. Weird bottles, dried herbs, that brass thing over there. Probably some new designer drug from the market above. He trips out, heart gives up, and he dies screaming at his own hallucinations. Robbery gone messy, maybe. His pockets are empty." Harlow's sharp jaw tightened. She had heard this tone from Carter before, the comfortable certainty of a man who only believed in what he could charge in court. Three years ago she might have agreed with him. Three years ago, before Morris disappeared into a case that still haunted her dreams with things that had no business existing in a rational world. She reached for a pair of nitrile gloves and snapped them on. Something was wrong here. The evidence didn't add up, and the dissonance set her teeth on edge. First, the dust. A fine layer covered every surface except in a perfect three-foot radius around the body, as though someone had swept the area clean before placing him here. Or as if something had pushed the dust away with force. Second, the temperature. The rest of the station felt like a meat locker, yet the area around the dead man was almost warm, like the last breath of summer trapped in concrete. "Pathologist puts time of death at least six hours ago," Carter continued, "but that doesn't track either. No rigor yet, and the body's too fresh. Probably the cold down here slowed it down." Harlow didn't answer. She had spotted the first anomaly that truly mattered: a small brass compass lying half-buried in the dust near the man's left hand. Its casing carried a patina of verdigris, the green of old copper, and protective sigils were etched around its face in lines too precise to be decorative. She lifted it carefully. The needle spun lazily, not pointing north, but drifting as though tracking something that moved. "This wasn't made in a factory," she said quietly. Carter snorted. "Tourist junk. Camden's full of it upstairs. Gothic crap for the kids." She ignored him and turned the compass in her palm. The needle steadied, pointing not toward the surface but deeper into the station, toward a collapsed tunnel that had been sealed off for decades. The pull felt wrong, almost alive. When she shifted it left, the needle fought her, swinging back like a compass in the presence of true north. Only this north wasn't magnetic. Her mind turned to Eva Kowalski for the first time that night. The curly-haired occult researcher had been picked up half an hour earlier, loitering near the service entrance with that worn leather satchel of hers bulging with books. The constables had brought her down for questioning on suspicion of trespass. Harlow had read the name on the report and felt the old suspicion flare. Eva was connected to the clique she had been watching for months, the group of young academics and artists who always seemed to be present when strange things happened in London. Childhood friend of the woman at the center of it all. Too many coincidences. She rose, still holding the compass, and scanned the platform again with new eyes. There, half-hidden behind a fallen girder, was the satchel. Brown leather, edges frayed, exactly as described in the report. Harlow crossed to it in three long strides and opened the flap. Books. Old ones. A grimoire with a broken spine. Another volume in what looked like Latin, its pages marked with scraps of paper covered in precise handwriting. The faint scent of rosemary and ink rose from the bag. "Eva Kowalski's property," she said, more to herself than Carter. The researcher herself appeared then, escorted between two uniforms. Even under the harsh portable lights, Eva's freckled complexion looked unnaturally pale. Her curly red hair had escaped its clip and she kept tucking a strand behind her left ear, that nervous habit giving her away. Round glasses slipped down her nose. At five-four she looked barely old enough to drink, but Harlow knew from the file that she was twenty-six, with a master's from Oxford and unrestricted access to the British Museum's most sensitive archives. "Detective Quinn," Eva said, voice steadier than her hands. "I didn't kill him. I found him like this." Carter laughed without humor. "That's what they all say. You want to explain why your bag was ten feet from a dead man in a sealed station that requires special keys to enter?" Harlow lifted a hand, silencing him. She studied Eva the way she studied every puzzle, looking for the seam where the story didn't quite meet the facts. The younger woman's green eyes met hers without flinching, but the pulse jumping in her throat told a different tale. "Start from the beginning," Harlow said. "And don't leave anything out this time." Eva glanced at the compass still in Harlow's gloved hand. Her expression changed, a flicker of recognition that she tried to hide and failed. The needle on the device gave a sudden lurch, swinging hard toward the sealed tunnel. "That belongs to the Market," Eva whispered, almost reverent. "The Veil Market. It shouldn't be here. It moves every full moon. This location was only active for three nights." Carter groaned. "Here we go. More occult bollocks. Quinn, you can't seriously be entertaining this." But Harlow was. The evidence wasn't just wrong, it was impossible. The compass wasn't pointing at the wall. It was pointing through it. She walked toward the bricks, compass held before her like a divining rod. The needle spun faster the closer she got. When she pressed her palm to the cold tile, she felt it, a faint vibration, like a train coming but with no sound. Her fingers traced a pattern she hadn't noticed before, faint grooves worn into the mortar forming the same sigils that decorated the compass face. "Detective," Eva said urgently behind her, "you shouldn't. The rifts are unstable this close to the change. The Market's already moving on." Harlow ignored the warning and dug her fingers into the seam. A section of wall no wider than a door gave way with a grinding sound, revealing a narrow passage that definitely hadn't been on any official Tube map. The air that wafted out smelled of incense, ozone, and something metallic that reminded her of blood. Beyond the opening, she caught glimpses of stalls folded against the walls, empty now but clearly used recently. Charms hanging from chains. Vials of liquid that caught the light like captured stars. A black market hidden in plain sight, or rather, beneath it. Carter was swearing under his breath. "This is above our pay grade. We need to call this in, get a full team down here. Whatever this is, it's not our murder." Harlow's thoughts raced, snapping connections like dominoes. The body had been placed deliberately near the hidden entrance. The swept dust suggested something had been dragged, or had dragged itself, from that passage. The warmth around the corpse, the missing rigor, the expression of absolute horror, none of it fit any drug overdose she had ever seen. And the compass, still trembling in her hand, seemed to be reacting to whatever lay beyond the wall. She turned back to Eva. "You were researching this Market, weren't you? That's why your satchel was here. You came for information and found him instead." Eva tucked the red curl behind her ear again, a defensive gesture. "I came because someone sent me a bone token. An invitation. The Market sells things you can't get anywhere else. Knowledge. Objects that remember what they were meant for. I thought I might find answers about... about certain disappearances in the city. Cases like your old partner." The words hit Harlow like a slap. She kept her face impassive, but inside something cold uncurled in her chest. Morris had gone into an abandoned warehouse in Whitechapel three years ago following a lead on an artifact smuggling ring. What came back had looked like him but moved wrong, until it didn't move at all. The official report said heart attack. Harlow had never believed it. "This man," she said, gesturing to the body, "was he part of it? The clique you run with?" "He's no one I know," Eva answered. "But that compass is a Shade-made instrument. It points toward the nearest active rift. The fact that it's still spinning means the portal hasn't fully closed yet. Something came through. Or went back." Carter threw his hands up. "I'm calling this in. You two can play supernatural detectives on your own time." Harlow barely heard him. She stepped through the hidden door, the compass pulling her forward. The passage opened into what had clearly been a thriving market only hours earlier. Empty stalls bore the marks of hasty departure, scattered tokens of bone and silver, a single forgotten lantern still burning with a flame that gave off no heat. On the far wall, a shimmering fracture hung in the air, no wider than her hand, like a tear in reality itself. Through it she glimpsed colors that had no name and movement that hurt to watch directly. The needle on the compass went dead still, pointing directly at the rift. Behind her, Eva had followed despite Carter's protests. The younger woman stared at the anomaly with academic hunger rather than fear. "It's beautiful, isn't it?" she breathed. "And terrible." Harlow felt the weight of her watch on her wrist, ticking away ordinary seconds in an increasingly unordinary world. The evidence didn't add up because it wasn't meant to add up in the world she thought she understood. The body hadn't been murdered in any conventional sense. It had been a warning, or a casualty of something crossing over that shouldn't have been able to. She crouched again, this time examining the dust at the edge of the rift. Tiny footprints, not human, led from the shimmering tear to where the body now lay. They stopped abruptly, as though whatever made them had simply ceased to exist on this side of the veil. "You see it now," Eva said softly, almost kindly. "The things that don't belong." Harlow straightened, the salt-and-pepper hair at her temples damp with the strange humidity of the place. Her brown eyes reflected the impossible colors of the rift as she finally allowed herself to acknowledge what she had suspected since Morris died. Something was hunting in her city. And it was using doorways that had no right to exist. She slipped the brass compass into an evidence bag, but not before noting how the needle gave one final, almost regretful twitch toward Eva before going still. The researcher noticed it too. Their eyes met across the impossible space, and for the first time Harlow saw real fear in the younger woman's gaze. "Whatever this is," Harlow said, voice low and precise, "it's not over. And you're going to tell me everything you know about the clique, the Market, and that rift. Starting now." Carter's voice called from the other side of the wall, demanding they come back, but Harlow didn't move. The military precision that had defined her career felt suddenly inadequate against the scale of what she was seeing. Yet beneath the fear, something else stirred. The same instinct that had kept her alive for eighteen years was already turning over the new facts, arranging them into a pattern that might, if she was careful and very lucky, lead her to the truth about Morris. And to whatever had killed the man whose terrified eyes still stared at a world that had betrayed him. Eva tucked another curl behind her ear, the nervous gesture betraying what her steady voice tried to hide. "Detective, some doors are better left closed." Harlow's sharp jaw set in determination as she stared into the shimmering fracture. "Not anymore," she said. "Not for me." She would follow this trail wherever it led, even if it took her through doors that should not exist. The compass in its evidence bag seemed almost to hum in agreement, its sigils catching what little light remained. The Veil Market had moved on, but it had left its shadow behind. And shadows, Harlow knew, always pointed toward their source.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
6.45% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"she said quietly [quietly]"
1"Eva said urgently [urgently]"
2"Eva said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.452
leniency0.903
rawRatio0.214
effectiveRatio0.194
85.31% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2383
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"truly"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
2
adverb"lazily"
count1
3
adverb"deliberately"
count1
4
adverb"softly"
count1
5
adverb"suddenly"
count1
6
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"truly"
1"carefully"
2"lazily"
3"deliberately"
4"softly"
5"suddenly"
6"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
68.53% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2383
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"echoing"
count1
1
word"dancing"
count1
2
word"comfortable"
count1
3
word"perfect"
count1
4
word"etched"
count1
5
word"almost alive"
count1
6
word"magnetic"
count1
7
word"scanned"
count1
8
word"pulse"
count1
9
word"flicker"
count1
10
word"lurch"
count1
11
word"traced"
count1
12
word"raced"
count1
13
word"warmth"
count1
14
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"echoing"
1"dancing"
2"comfortable"
3"perfect"
4"etched"
5"almost alive"
6"magnetic"
7"scanned"
8"pulse"
9"flicker"
10"lurch"
11"traced"
12"raced"
13"warmth"
14"weight"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
1
label"flicker of emotion"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
1"a flicker of recognition"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences148
matches
0"t in determination"
84.94% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences148
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences165
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen52
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2383
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions23
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions68
wordCount1948
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity1.23
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Quinn1
Tube2
Market2
Carter12
Morris4
Harlow24
Eva15
Kowalski1
London1
Latin1
Oxford1
British1
Museum1
Whitechapel1
Veil1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Market"
2"Carter"
3"Morris"
4"Harlow"
5"Eva"
6"Kowalski"
7"Museum"
places
0"London"
1"Oxford"
2"British"
3"Whitechapel"
globalScore0.884
windowScore0.833
44.07% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences118
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"felt like a meat locker, yet the area a"
1"as though tracking something that moved"
2"looked like Latin, its pages marked with"
3"quite meet the facts"
4"looked like him but moved wrong, until it"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.839
wordCount2383
matches
0"not pointing north, but drifting as though tracking something"
1"not toward the surface but deeper into the station, toward a collapsed tunnel"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences165
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs52
mean45.83
std30.62
cv0.668
sampleLengths
0114
183
235
372
420
562
662
7102
833
972
109
1114
1265
13110
1483
1510
1685
1718
1833
1947
2013
2139
2229
2315
2491
2522
2699
2731
2874
2926
3059
3167
3218
3340
3419
3595
3613
3721
388
3965
4048
4114
4240
4317
4453
4531
4683
4719
4825
4913
83.93% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount9
totalSentences148
matches
0"been claimed"
1"was frozen"
2"were etched"
3"been sealed"
4"been picked"
5"was connected"
6"been placed"
7"been dragged"
8"been murdered"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount10
totalVerbs314
matches
0"was just closing"
1"was sliding"
2"was waiting"
3"wasn't pointing"
4"was pointing"
5"was swearing"
6"was hunting"
7"was using"
8"was seeing"
9"was already turning"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences165
ratio0
matches(empty)
98.36% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1958
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount82
adverbRatio0.04187946884576098
lyAdverbCount33
lyAdverbRatio0.016853932584269662
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences165
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences165
mean14.44
std8.99
cv0.623
sampleLengths
024
132
226
323
49
519
69
721
812
922
1023
1112
1210
1315
1412
1522
1613
1710
1810
1910
2052
214
2224
239
2425
2512
264
2713
283
2927
3011
313
3229
3333
343
3523
3627
374
3815
399
402
4112
4210
4324
446
4520
465
4712
4827
4912
57.17% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.37575757575757573
totalSentences165
uniqueOpeners62
47.96% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences139
matches
0"Only this north wasn't magnetic."
1"Too many coincidences."
ratio0.014
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences139
matches
0"Her flashlight beam sliced through"
1"She suspected as much even"
2"She stepped past him without"
3"His eyes were open, milky"
4"She had heard this tone"
5"She reached for a pair"
6"She had spotted the first"
7"Its casing carried a patina"
8"She lifted it carefully."
9"she said quietly"
10"She ignored him and turned"
11"Her mind turned to Eva"
12"She rose, still holding the"
13"she said, more to herself"
14"Her curly red hair had"
15"She studied Eva the way"
16"Her expression changed, a flicker"
17"It was pointing through it."
18"She walked toward the bricks,"
19"Her fingers traced a pattern"
ratio0.223
64.32% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount110
totalSentences139
matches
0"Harlow Quinn descended the iron"
1"The air thickened as she"
2"Her flashlight beam sliced through"
3"Camden Market above them was"
4"She suspected as much even"
5"The crime scene tape looked"
6"Harlow gave them a curt"
7"The worn leather watch on"
8"DS Carter was waiting for"
9"She stepped past him without"
10"The body lay half-propped against"
11"His eyes were open, milky"
12"Harlow asked, crouching beside the"
13"The concrete bit cold through"
14"Carter shrugged, his different interpretation"
15"Harlow's sharp jaw tightened."
16"She had heard this tone"
17"She reached for a pair"
18"Something was wrong here."
19"The evidence didn't add up,"
ratio0.791
35.97% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences139
matches
0"Even under the harsh portable"
ratio0.007
89.09% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences93
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The air thickened as she dropped below street level, heavy with the mineral stink of old brick and the sweeter rot of things that had died down here and never b…"
1"Male, middle-aged, dressed in a long coat that had seen better decades."
2"A fine layer covered every surface except in a perfect three-foot radius around the body, as though someone had swept the area clean before placing him here."
3"The needle spun lazily, not pointing north, but drifting as though tracking something that moved."
4"Her fingers traced a pattern she hadn't noticed before, faint grooves worn into the mortar forming the same sigils that decorated the compass face."
5"The military precision that had defined her career felt suddenly inadequate against the scale of what she was seeing."
6"The same instinct that had kept her alive for eighteen years was already turning over the new facts, arranging them into a pattern that might, if she was carefu…"
17.86% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she said, more to herself than Carter"
1"Eva said, voice steadier than her hands"
2"Harlow said, voice low and precise,"
53.23% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags14
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Carter continued (continue)"
1"Eva whispered (whisper)"
2"she breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.452
leniency0.903
rawRatio0.214
effectiveRatio0.194
76.2393%