Run: 2026-03-12-01KKHZSX8ZQX2DJ5VK697RGSZK

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Duration:
31.4s
Cost:
$0.037215
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn descended the crumbling concrete steps into the abandoned Tube station beneath Camden, her boots scraping against loose gravel that hadn't been disturbed in decades. The air down here carried a metallic tang, like blood left too long on steel, undercut by something sharper that made her nostrils flare. She had followed the anonymous tip through three dead-end warehouses and a boarded-up pub before finding the bone token wedged behind a loose brick in an alley off the high street. Now that same token rested in her coat pocket, its surface unnaturally warm against her ribs. At forty-one, with eighteen years on the force, Quinn had learned to trust her instincts even when they led her into places that defied every procedure manual she'd ever read. The tunnel opened into a wider space that shouldn't exist. Makeshift stalls lined the curved brick walls, their frames cobbled together from scavenged scaffolding and blackened wood. Lanterns hung from iron hooks, emitting a sourceless bluish light that didn't flicker with any visible flame. Merchandise spilled across tabletops: vials of shimmering liquid, bundles of dried herbs that moved on their own, odd contraptions whose purpose Quinn couldn't begin to guess. The entire setup should have been impossible this far underground, yet here it was, silent now except for the distant drip of water and the low hum that seemed to vibrate in her teeth. A body lay at the center of the makeshift aisle, sprawled beside an overturned stall. Male, middle-aged, dressed in a long coat that had seen better decades. No visible wounds at first glance, but the angle of his neck suggested something violent. Quinn's sharp jaw tightened as she crouched beside him, the worn leather watch on her left wrist catching on her sleeve. She noted the time: 12:47 a.m. The skin was already cold, too cold for the forty minutes since the tip had come in. "Evidence doesn't add up," she muttered, gloved fingers hovering above the man's collar without touching. "Detective Quinn." The voice came from the shadows near a stall selling glass orbs. Eva Kowalski stepped into the bluish light, her curly red hair escaping its hasty braid, round glasses slightly askew on her freckled face. She clutched her worn leather satchel to her chest like a shield, the bag bulging with books as always. At twenty-six, she looked even younger down here, out of place among the impossible stalls. Her nervous habit betrayed her; she tucked a strand of hair behind her left ear three times in quick succession. "What the hell are you doing here, Kowalski?" Quinn asked, rising to her full five-foot-nine with military precision. She kept her brown eyes fixed on the younger woman, reading the tension in her shoulders, the way her green eyes darted toward the body and away again. "I could ask you the same," Eva said, but her voice lacked conviction. "This place... it moves every full moon. I didn't expect to find anyone official down here. Especially not you." Quinn filed that away. Eva Kowalski. Research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. Master's in Ancient History from Oxford. Childhood friend of several persons of interest Quinn had been watching for months. The clique, as she thought of them. People who traded in things that shouldn't exist, who left trails of unexplained deaths in their wake. Like Morris. Her partner three years ago, gone in a warehouse fire that had no natural origin. The memory still burned behind her eyes at odd moments. "This is a crime scene," Quinn said, gesturing to the body. "I'd like to know why an academic who should be cataloging dusty manuscripts is standing in an illegal market beside a dead man." Eva's fingers tightened on her satchel strap. "I came for research. The Veil Market isn't exactly advertised, but certain circles know when it's here. I have... contacts. When I arrived, he was already like this." She nodded toward the body. "His name was Silas Crowe. Minor alchemist. Sold information mostly. Whatever happened here, it wasn't a simple mugging." Quinn circled the body slowly, her bearing ramrod straight despite the oppressive weight of the tunnel pressing down. The evidence was wrong in a dozen subtle ways. No blood on the ground, yet the man's lips were blue as if he'd suffocated. Footprints crisscrossed the dust around him, but they stopped three feet away, as though the people making them had simply vanished. And then there was the object clutched in Silas Crowe's rigid fingers: a small brass compass, its casing covered in a patina of verdigris, the face etched with symbols that made Quinn's eyes water if she stared too long. She pried it gently from the dead man's grip. The needle spun lazily, not pointing north but toward the far wall of the station where shadows gathered thicker than they should. "Some kind of prop," Quinn said, though doubt gnawed at her. "Part of the scam these people run." Eva moved closer, her round glasses reflecting the blue lantern light. "It's a Veil Compass. Crafted by a Shade artisan. The needle points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal. If it's spinning like that, it means something tore a hole nearby. Recently." Quinn's laugh was short and sharp. "Supernatural rift. Of course. Because that's the explanation that makes sense to a Metropolitan Police detective." But even as she said it, the compass needle slowed and fixed on a spot midway up the curved brick wall. A spot where, Quinn now noticed, the mortar between bricks glowed faintly with the same bluish light as the lanterns. She stepped closer, her military-trained eyes picking out details others would miss. The bricks weren't merely glowing. They were wrong. Their edges blurred slightly, as if reality had gone soft there. "Look," Eva said, her voice dropping to that careful tone she used when explaining obscure historical texts. "The evidence doesn't add up because you're looking at it through the wrong lens. No blood because whatever killed him didn't need to break the skin. The footprints end because the people who were here didn't walk away. They stepped through." Quinn felt the familiar anger rising, the same anger that had kept her going after Morris's death. She had buried her partner with full honors, accepted the official explanation of an electrical fire, but she had seen the symbols burned into the warehouse floor. Symbols like the ones on this compass. "You're suggesting murder by... what? Magic?" Quinn turned the compass over in her hands. The metal felt colder than it should, as if it had been sitting in snow rather than a dead man's fist. "This market is a front for something bigger. Smuggling. Extortion. Maybe even the same crew that got Morris killed. The evidence I'm seeing points to a professional hit. Body positioned to look like natural causes. No defensive wounds because they took him by surprise." Eva tucked her hair behind her ear again. "Detective, with respect, you've been circling this for months. The clique, as you call us in your reports. But we're not criminals. Not the way you think." She hesitated, then reached into her satchel and pulled out a small leather-bound book. "Silas was selling information about a rift that opened last week. A rift that shouldn't have been possible without a key. Someone didn't want that information getting out." Quinn studied the younger woman. Eva's freckled complexion had gone pale, but her green eyes held steady. There was fear there, but also conviction. The kind of conviction that came from knowing things Quinn herself was only beginning to glimpse. She turned back to the body. Crouching again, she examined the man's hands more carefully. Trace amounts of the same verdigris patina as the compass stained his fingertips, but only on the left hand. His right hand was clean. Odd. She checked his coat pockets. Nothing. No wallet, no merchandise. But there, caught in the lining near the hem, was a tiny bone fragment. Another token, identical to the one in her own pocket. "The market requires these to enter," Quinn said, holding up the fragment. "So he was a regular. Not a victim of random violence." Eva nodded. "Exactly. And the stall he was at when he died..." She gestured to the overturned table. Shattered glass littered the ground, but some pieces caught the light in unnatural ways, refracting it into colors that didn't exist in any spectrum Quinn recognized. "He was showing something. Something valuable enough to kill for." Quinn's mind worked through the details methodically, the way she had been trained. The time of death didn't match the temperature of the body. The absence of footprints beyond a certain radius. The way the compass needle kept tugging toward that section of wall as if begging her to look closer. And most damning of all, the way the air itself felt wrong here, thicker, like breathing through wet silk. She approached the glowing bricks. Up close, the mortar between them wasn't mortar at all but some kind of resin that had melted and refrozen. She pressed her gloved hand against one brick and felt a vibration travel up her arm, straight to the center of her chest. For a moment, she saw something. A flicker of movement on the other side, like watching television with bad reception. A figure. Tall. Wearing something that caught the light like oil on water. Morris. The image was gone as quickly as it came, but Quinn's heart hammered against her ribs. She stepped back, nearly losing her balance on the uneven floor. "Detective?" Eva's voice was closer now, concern evident. Quinn straightened, forcing her breathing to steady. She couldn't tell Eva what she'd seen. Not yet. But the pieces were sliding together in her mind, forming a picture far more complex than simple murder. The evidence didn't add up because it wasn't meant to be understood by someone operating in the world of fingerprints and ballistics. This was something else entirely. "The needle on this compass," she said slowly, "it's pointing at a door that shouldn't be there." Eva's eyes widened slightly. "You see it too. The rift." "I see a hole in my crime scene," Quinn corrected, but her voice lacked its usual bite. She turned the compass in her hands again, watching the needle's persistent tug toward the wall. "Silas was holding this when he died. The patina on his fingers suggests he was using it right before. Maybe trying to find something. Or someone." "Or maybe he was trying to close the rift," Eva offered. She had moved to Quinn's side now, close enough that Quinn could smell the faint scent of old paper and ink that always clung to her. "The market moves every full moon precisely because rifts like this can destabilize the area. If someone forced one open here, deliberately, it would explain the cold body. Time doesn't work the same near an active portal." Quinn considered this. She had spent three years telling herself that Morris's death had a rational explanation. That the symbols on the floor had been some gang tag. That the way his body had been found, untouched by flame despite the inferno around him, was simply a quirk of the fire's progression. But standing here, feeling the pull of the compass in her hand, she felt the foundation of that belief cracking. "Let's say, for the sake of argument, that you're right," she said. The words felt dangerous in her mouth. "Someone opens a rift in the middle of this market. Silas sees it, maybe even knows who's responsible. He grabs the compass to either track them or close the door. They kill him without leaving a mark. Then they leave through the same rift, which is why the footprints end." Eva's nervous habit kicked in again, her fingers brushing the same curl behind her ear. "That's... actually a very good deduction, Detective." Quinn allowed herself a small, tight smile. "I'm not agreeing with your supernatural theory. I'm following where the evidence leads. And right now, the evidence is telling me that my murder victim was killed by someone who didn't need to use the stairs to get out of here." She scanned the area again, noting details she had missed on her first pass. A stall three tables down had been knocked askew, but only on one side, as if something had pushed through it from an impossible angle. Small shards of glass from Silas's broken merchandise had melted rather than shattered, their edges fused into smooth curves. And the bluish lanterns overhead had begun to dim, their light pulsing in time with the compass needle's occasional twitches. "Whatever happened here," Quinn said, slipping the Veil Compass into an evidence bag, "it's connected to the other cases. The ones with no bodies. The ones with bodies but no cause of death. Morris." She said her partner's name quietly, almost reverently. "I think he died because he got too close to whatever this is." Eva watched her with something like respect mixed with fear. "The clique isn't what you think. We're trying to contain this, not profit from it. But there are others. People who see the rifts as opportunities. For power. For money. For things worse than either." Quinn sealed the evidence bag and straightened her coat. The military precision of her movements helped steady her thoughts. This case had just become something much larger than a murder in an underground market. The Veil Market, Eva had called it. A black market for things that broke every law of nature. She had entered with a bone token and found herself holding a compass that pointed to holes in reality. "The rift is closing," Eva said suddenly, glancing at the wall. The bluish glow had begun to fade from the bricks. "We have minutes before it's gone. If we want to see where it leads..." Quinn looked at the younger woman, seeing her properly for the first time. Not as a potential suspect, not as a member of the clique she was investigating, but as someone who understood this impossible world far better than she did. Someone who might be able to help her find answers about Morris. "I'm not stepping through any magic door tonight," Quinn said firmly. "But I'm not closing this investigation either. Silas Crowe was murdered. The method might be... unusual, but murder it remains." She checked her watch again. The second hand seemed to be moving slower than it should. "You're coming with me to the station, Kowalski. I have questions. Lots of them. And you're going to help me understand what I'm looking at here." Eva hesitated, her satchel shifting on her shoulder. "If I do this, if I help you, the others will see it as a betrayal. The market has rules." "And the Metropolitan Police has laws," Quinn countered. "Right now, those laws are being broken in ways I don't fully understand. But I will understand them. Starting with whatever Silas was selling before he died." The compass in the evidence bag gave one final twitch, the needle pointing straight at Quinn's chest before going still. She felt its pull like a hook behind her sternum, a connection to something vast and dangerous. For the first time in three years, the weight of Morris's unsolved death felt less like a burden and more like a path forward. As the last of the rift's glow faded from the bricks, leaving only ordinary mortar once again, Quinn allowed herself to acknowledge what she had been avoiding. The evidence didn't add up because she had been missing half the equation. The supernatural wasn't a fairy tale or a delusion. It was simply another form of criminal activity, more sophisticated than most. And she had just found her first solid lead. "Let's get out of here," she told Eva, her voice carrying the same military authority that had defined her career. "Before this place decides to move again. You can explain the rest of it on the way to the surface. Starting with who knew Silas was going to be here tonight." Eva fell into step beside her as they made their way back toward the rusted stairs, the satchel bumping against her hip with each step. Quinn kept one hand on the evidence bag containing the compass, feeling its unnatural chill even through the plastic. The abandoned station felt different now, less like a crime scene and more like the opening chapter of a much larger mystery. One that might finally explain the three-year shadow that had haunted her since Morris's death. She glanced back once, her brown eyes narrowing at the spot where the rift had been. For just a moment, she thought she saw the bricks shift again, a subtle movement like breathing. Then it was gone. Whatever had killed Silas Crowe had left through that wall. Quinn intended to follow it, one way or another. Even if it meant accepting help from the very people she had been investigating. Even if it meant admitting that the world she thought she understood was only a thin veil over something far more dangerous. The stairs felt longer going up than they had coming down. Quinn's watch ticked steadily on her wrist, marking time in the ordinary world once more. But in her other hand, the bagged compass remained cold as the grave, its needle pointing now toward the streets above them, toward the heart of London where rifts and secrets waited to be uncovered. By the time they reached the surface, Quinn had already begun formulating her next moves. Interviews. Research. A deeper dive into Eva Kowalski's background and connections. The clique she'd been watching for months had just become her most valuable resource. And somewhere in the tangled web of occult dealings and supernatural black markets, she would find the truth about Morris. The night air of Camden felt almost painfully normal after the market's oppressive atmosphere. Quinn took a deep breath, steadying herself. The game had changed. The evidence still didn't add up, but now she knew why. And she had a compass that could point her toward the answers, whether she fully believed in its power or not. She looked at Eva, who stood beside her looking small and uncertain in the streetlight. "This isn't over," Quinn said. "Not by a long shot." "No," Eva agreed quietly, adjusting her round glasses. "I don't think it is." Together they walked toward Quinn's unmarked car, the weight of the unseen world settling differently on both their shoulders. For the first time in years, Detective Harlow Quinn felt the stirrings of something dangerously close to hope. The kind of hope that came from finally seeing the pattern others had missed. The kind that might lead her straight into the darkness that had claimed her partner. But she was ready. Her sharp jaw set with determination, her bearing as precise as ever, Quinn slid into the driver's seat and started the engine. The hunt was on. And this time, she wouldn't stop until every last piece of impossible evidence finally made sense.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
3.92% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags24
adverbTagCount5
adverbTags
0"She hesitated then [then]"
1"she said slowly [slowly]"
2"Eva said suddenly [suddenly]"
3"Quinn said firmly [firmly]"
4"Eva agreed quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.471
leniency0.941
rawRatio0.208
effectiveRatio0.196
78.10% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3197
totalAiIsmAdverbs14
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count3
1
adverb"slowly"
count2
2
adverb"gently"
count1
3
adverb"lazily"
count1
4
adverb"carefully"
count1
5
adverb"quickly"
count1
6
adverb"precisely"
count1
7
adverb"deliberately"
count1
8
adverb"very"
count2
9
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"slowly"
2"gently"
3"lazily"
4"carefully"
5"quickly"
6"precisely"
7"deliberately"
8"very"
9"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
70.28% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3197
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"flicker"
count2
1
word"tension"
count1
2
word"oppressive"
count2
3
word"weight"
count3
4
word"etched"
count1
5
word"familiar"
count1
6
word"shattered"
count2
7
word"silk"
count1
8
word"complex"
count1
9
word"scanned"
count1
10
word"potential"
count1
11
word"firmly"
count1
12
word"chill"
count1
13
word"grave"
count1
highlights
0"flicker"
1"tension"
2"oppressive"
3"weight"
4"etched"
5"familiar"
6"shattered"
7"silk"
8"complex"
9"scanned"
10"potential"
11"firmly"
12"chill"
13"grave"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences185
matches
0"d with fear"
1"t with determination"
88.80% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences185
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"begin to"
1"seemed to"
2"tended to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences211
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen50
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3197
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions30
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
59.85% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions101
wordCount2385
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity1.8
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow2
Quinn43
Tube1
Camden2
Eva23
Kowalski3
British1
Museum1
Ancient1
History1
Oxford1
Morris8
Silas3
Crowe2
Shattered1
Veil2
Compass1
Market1
London1
Together1
Detective2
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Camden"
3"Eva"
4"Kowalski"
5"Museum"
6"Morris"
7"Silas"
8"Crowe"
9"Compass"
places
0"British"
1"Ancient"
2"Oxford"
3"London"
globalScore0.599
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences151
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"hum that seemed to vibrate in her teeth"
1"as if begging her to look closer"
2"something like respect mixed with fear"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords0.938
wordCount3197
matches
0"not pointing north but toward the far wall of the station"
1"Not as a potential suspect, not as a member of the clique she was investigating, but as someone who understood this impossible world far better t"
2"not as a member of the clique she was investigating, but as someone who understood this impossible world far better t"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences211
matches
0"admitting that the"
97.22% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs60
mean53.28
std26.12
cv0.49
sampleLengths
0128
1104
286
315
491
546
632
784
834
958
10102
1131
1218
1343
1422
1572
1658
1751
1879
1977
2040
2174
2223
2354
2470
2581
261
2727
288
2961
3017
3110
3259
3374
3472
3569
3622
3748
3878
3955
4045
4171
4235
4353
4473
4528
4635
4761
4870
4951
93.88% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount6
totalSentences185
matches
0"been disturbed"
1"been trained"
2"was gone"
3"been found"
4"been knocked"
5"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs392
matches
0"weren't merely glowing"
1"was only beginning"
2"were sliding"
3"was investigating"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences211
ratio0.005
matches
0"Her nervous habit betrayed her; she tucked a strand of hair behind her left ear three times in quick succession."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2395
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small leather-bound book."
adverbCount94
adverbRatio0.03924843423799582
lyAdverbCount38
lyAdverbRatio0.015866388308977037
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences211
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences211
mean15.15
std9.29
cv0.613
sampleLengths
027
124
231
316
430
510
617
717
826
934
1015
1112
1215
1321
146
1517
1615
1714
1823
1919
2015
2120
2218
2328
2413
2519
264
272
288
296
3013
317
3217
332
3415
3510
3611
3723
387
3933
4018
4118
429
4315
4421
4539
469
4722
4811
497
51.03% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.33175355450236965
totalSentences211
uniqueOpeners70
19.61% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences170
matches
0"Then it was gone."
ratio0.006
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount35
totalSentences170
matches
0"She had followed the anonymous"
1"She noted the time: 12:47"
2"she muttered, gloved fingers hovering"
3"She clutched her worn leather"
4"Her nervous habit betrayed her;"
5"She kept her brown eyes"
6"Her partner three years ago,"
7"She nodded toward the body"
8"She pried it gently from"
9"She stepped closer, her military-trained"
10"They were wrong."
11"Their edges blurred slightly, as"
12"She had buried her partner"
13"She hesitated, then reached into"
14"She turned back to the"
15"His right hand was clean."
16"She checked his coat pockets."
17"She gestured to the overturned"
18"She approached the glowing bricks."
19"She pressed her gloved hand"
ratio0.206
77.65% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount130
totalSentences170
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn descended the"
1"The air down here carried"
2"She had followed the anonymous"
3"The tunnel opened into a"
4"Lanterns hung from iron hooks,"
5"Merchandise spilled across tabletops: vials"
6"The entire setup should have"
7"A body lay at the"
8"Quinn's sharp jaw tightened as"
9"She noted the time: 12:47"
10"The skin was already cold,"
11"she muttered, gloved fingers hovering"
12"The voice came from the"
13"Eva Kowalski stepped into the"
14"She clutched her worn leather"
15"Her nervous habit betrayed her;"
16"Quinn asked, rising to her"
17"She kept her brown eyes"
18"Eva said, but her voice"
19"Quinn filed that away."
ratio0.765
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount4
totalSentences170
matches
0"Now that same token rested"
1"Even if it meant accepting"
2"Even if it meant admitting"
3"By the time they reached"
ratio0.024
82.78% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences107
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn descended the crumbling concrete steps into the abandoned Tube station beneath Camden, her boots scraping against loose gravel that hadn'…"
1"Lanterns hung from iron hooks, emitting a sourceless bluish light that didn't flicker with any visible flame."
2"The entire setup should have been impossible this far underground, yet here it was, silent now except for the distant drip of water and the low hum that seemed …"
3"Male, middle-aged, dressed in a long coat that had seen better decades."
4"And then there was the object clutched in Silas Crowe's rigid fingers: a small brass compass, its casing covered in a patina of verdigris, the face etched with …"
5"The kind of conviction that came from knowing things Quinn herself was only beginning to glimpse."
6"But the pieces were sliding together in her mind, forming a picture far more complex than simple murder."
7"Not as a potential suspect, not as a member of the clique she was investigating, but as someone who understood this impossible world far better than she did."
8"She looked at Eva, who stood beside her looking small and uncertain in the streetlight."
83.33% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags24
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Eva said, but her voice lacked conviction"
1"Quinn corrected, but her voice lacked its usual bite"
91.18% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags16
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"Quinn corrected (correct)"
2"Eva agreed quietly (agree)"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.314
leniency0.627
rawRatio0.188
effectiveRatio0.118
86.3881%