Run: 2026-03-12-01KKHZTKQ2EY9BTDS1FMZJ3MMG

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Duration:
18.4s
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$0.020673
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xAI

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora shoved aside the last tangle of bramble and stepped fully into the clearing. The pendant seared against her skin like a brand. She gripped it through her thin shirt, teeth clenched, and scanned the ring of ancient oaks that should have marked safety. She had come because the thing refused to lie still any longer. All week it had tugged her through London streets, warmer each time she passed Richmond Park, until tonight it had practically dragged her from her bike after the last delivery. Answers, she had told herself. Or at least an end to the dreams of black water and reaching hands. Now the stone circle felt smaller than memory allowed. The wildflowers, which should have nodded in gentle waves, held perfectly still. Not one petal stirred. She took one measured step forward. Her trainers sank into soil that gave too easily, like flesh. A faint pulse answered from the pendant, steady against her ribs. Good. Keep it clinical. Map the boundary, note the position of each stone, get out. A soft click sounded behind her, exactly like a tongue against the roof of a mouth. Aurora spun. Nothing but the same crooked oak, its bark grooved in patterns that almost resembled fingers. She stared until her eyes ached. The click repeated, closer this time, off to her left. She refused to whirl again. Instead she backed toward the largest standing stone, using its bulk as cover. Her scar itched along her left wrist. Childhood accident, her father had always said. She never believed him anymore. The pendant flared hotter. She risked a glance downward. The deep crimson gem now throbbed with its own light, casting bloody shadows across her knuckles. Hel portal, the unknown note had called it when the thing first arrived at her door. She had laughed at the time. Laughed less when the dreams began. Another sound reached her, this one wetter, like bare feet on mud. Then silence. The kind of silence that pressed against eardrums. She crouched, fingers tracing the base of the stone. Moss came away in damp clumps, revealing carvings she had never noticed before. Spirals that twisted the wrong direction, pulling the eye inward until her stomach rolled. She jerked her hand back. The wildflowers nearest her feet turned. Every bloom swivelled on its stem to face her directly. Aurora straightened slowly, refusing to let her breath quicken. Cool head. Out-of-the-box. She had escaped Evan by noticing the pattern in his rages before he did. She could escape this. She took three careful paces toward the narrow gap between two oaks, the same gap she had entered through minutes earlier. The path beyond had vanished. Brambles knitted together in a wall too dense to have grown naturally. Thorns glistened. The clicking returned, now directly behind the stone she had just abandoned. Three distinct taps. Pause. Two more. She spoke to the clearing, voice low and steady. "I see you." No answer came. The flowers watched her still. Aurora reached into her jacket pocket and withdrew the small torch she carried for night deliveries. The beam cut a clean path across the clearing. Where it touched the flowers they recoiled, petals closing tight. Where it missed them they leaned closer together, whispering. Whispering. She swung the light toward the sound. Empty air. Yet the noise continued, now forming syllables she almost recognised. Her name, stretched and folded, spoken by many throats at once. "Aurora." The torch beam trembled. She forced her grip steady. She moved again, circling the central oak with her back to its trunk. The pendant burned so fiercely she smelled singed cotton. Good. Pain meant real. Real meant solvable. A shape flickered at the edge of her vision, tall and thin, gone before her head could turn. She kept moving. Another flicker, this time low to the ground, scuttling between flower stems. She swept the torch after it. The beam caught only a pale hand withdrawing into the earth. Her scar burned in time with the pendant. She pressed her wrist against her thigh, willing the sensation away. The clicking circled her now. Four distinct sources. Five. They kept perfect distance, always in the blind spot. She reached the far side of the clearing. The standing stones had moved. They formed a tighter ring, blocking every exit. She remembered distinctly that the tallest had stood ten paces from the central oak. Now it loomed directly beside her, close enough that its shadow swallowed her whole. The whispering stopped. In the new silence Aurora heard her own heartbeat, too loud, too fast. She hated that. Hated the way fear made her ordinary. She shone the torch straight up the nearest stone. The carvings had changed again. They now showed a woman with shoulder-length black hair and a crescent scar, kneeling exactly as she knelt now. The image shifted as she watched, the carved figure lifting a pendant that glowed like fresh blood. Aurora killed the torch. Darkness rushed in, thicker than before. The pendant provided the only light, a sullen red pulse that painted the flowers in slaughterhouse hues. She considered her options with the cold precision that had once let her survive three years with Evan undetected. Run straight at the brambles, accept the cuts. Climb the central oak, wait for dawn. Scream until someone in the park heard her, though she knew no sound would travel beyond these stones. None of the choices satisfied. The flowers parted. Something walked through them without disturbing a single stem. Aurora pressed her back against unyielding stone. The footsteps stopped just beyond the reach of the pendant's glow. She could see the impression of weight upon the earth, the flowers bending away from an unseen form. A smell reached her, sweet rot and iron. The pendant flared so brightly it hurt. For one impossible second the light pushed back the darkness and she saw them. Dozens of figures stood in a perfect circle around her. They wore her face. Each had her straight black hair, her bright blue eyes, her small scar. They stared at her with expressions that cycled through every emotion she had ever hidden: the careful blankness she showed customers, the raw terror she had felt the night she fled Cardiff, the cold rage she never let anyone witness. Their mouths opened in perfect unison. "Rory," they said, using the nickname only her London friends knew. "You brought the key." The real Aurora felt the pendant wrench forward on its silver chain as though something on the other side had seized it. She gripped it with both hands. The chain cut into her neck. The duplicates stepped closer. Their movements carried no sound at all. She planted her feet and pulled back with all her strength. The chain dug deeper. Blood trickled warm down her collarbone. The figures smiled with her own mouth. The central oak behind her cracked open like a door. Aurora stumbled backward into sudden emptiness. The pendant tore free from her grasp and flew into the dark ahead of her, dragging her by the chain still looped around her neck. She fell through the tree, through the boundary, through everything she thought she understood. The last thing she heard before the grove vanished was her own voice, multiplied and delighted, whispering directly against her ear. "Welcome home, Malphora."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences5
tagDensity0.2
leniency0.4
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.84% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1226
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
18.43% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1226
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"scanned"
count1
1
word"measured"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count2
3
word"throbbed"
count1
4
word"silence"
count3
5
word"tracing"
count1
6
word"stomach"
count1
7
word"trembled"
count1
8
word"flickered"
count1
9
word"flicker"
count1
10
word"perfect"
count3
11
word"loomed"
count1
12
word"footsteps"
count1
13
word"weight"
count1
14
word"the last thing"
count1
highlights
0"scanned"
1"measured"
2"pulse"
3"throbbed"
4"silence"
5"tracing"
6"stomach"
7"trembled"
8"flickered"
9"flicker"
10"perfect"
11"loomed"
12"footsteps"
13"weight"
14"the last thing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences133
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences133
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences137
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1226
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions1
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions16
wordCount1214
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.74
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
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Richmond1
Park1
Evan2
Aurora9
Cardiff1
persons
0"Evan"
1"Aurora"
places
0"London"
1"Richmond"
2"Park"
3"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences91
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1226
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences137
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs43
mean28.51
std19.23
cv0.674
sampleLengths
044
161
225
343
416
551
619
753
822
941
1016
1130
1240
1318
1412
158
1644
171
1830
191
209
2129
2250
2337
2449
253
2623
2750
2827
2952
305
3112
3244
3388
346
3515
3634
3711
3828
3910
4045
4121
423
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences133
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs222
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences137
ratio0
matches(empty)
95.49% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1218
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount55
adverbRatio0.0451559934318555
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.014778325123152709
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences137
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences137
mean8.95
std6.15
cv0.687
sampleLengths
014
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221
312
430
55
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79
812
94
106
1111
1211
131
143
1511
1616
172
1815
196
2010
215
2213
237
247
255
264
275
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2916
306
316
3212
332
348
359
3613
3714
385
396
4010
419
422
431
4414
454
4621
475
4812
492
64.23% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.41605839416058393
totalSentences137
uniqueOpeners57
27.55% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences121
matches
0"Instead she backed toward the"
ratio0.008
84.46% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount41
totalSentences121
matches
0"She gripped it through her"
1"She had come because the"
2"She took one measured step"
3"Her trainers sank into soil"
4"She stared until her eyes"
5"She refused to whirl again."
6"Her scar itched along her"
7"She never believed him anymore."
8"She risked a glance downward."
9"She had laughed at the"
10"She crouched, fingers tracing the"
11"She jerked her hand back."
12"She had escaped Evan by"
13"She could escape this."
14"She took three careful paces"
15"She spoke to the clearing,"
16"She swung the light toward"
17"Her name, stretched and folded,"
18"She forced her grip steady."
19"She moved again, circling the"
ratio0.339
55.04% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount98
totalSentences121
matches
0"Aurora shoved aside the last"
1"The pendant seared against her"
2"She gripped it through her"
3"She had come because the"
4"The wildflowers, which should have"
5"She took one measured step"
6"Her trainers sank into soil"
7"A faint pulse answered from"
8"A soft click sounded behind"
9"Nothing but the same crooked"
10"She stared until her eyes"
11"The click repeated, closer this"
12"She refused to whirl again."
13"Her scar itched along her"
14"Childhood accident, her father had"
15"She never believed him anymore."
16"The pendant flared hotter."
17"She risked a glance downward."
18"The deep crimson gem now"
19"Hel portal, the unknown note"
ratio0.81
82.64% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences121
matches
0"Now the stone circle felt"
1"Now it loomed directly beside"
ratio0.017
60.44% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences52
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"The wildflowers, which should have nodded in gentle waves, held perfectly still."
1"Spirals that twisted the wrong direction, pulling the eye inward until her stomach rolled."
2"The pendant provided the only light, a sullen red pulse that painted the flowers in slaughterhouse hues."
3"She considered her options with the cold precision that had once let her survive three years with Evan undetected."
4"They stared at her with expressions that cycled through every emotion she had ever hidden: the careful blankness she showed customers, the raw terror she had fe…"
5"The real Aurora felt the pendant wrench forward on its silver chain as though something on the other side had seized it."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences5
tagDensity0.2
leniency0.4
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
89.3379%