Run: 2026-03-15-01KKS2N7TWD4GQ5MVYSFS4A3GG

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Duration:
36.8s
Cost:
$0.011011
Provider:
Z.AI

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The girl at the bar had Eva's jawline but not Eva's posture. Eva used to slouch, perpetually trying to shrink herself out of existence. This woman sat with her spine a ruler, shoulders back, chin tilted at an angle that said she'd paid someone to teach her how to occupy space. Rory's hand stopped halfway to her glass. Eva hadn't answered her texts in two years. The last message sat buried in Rory's phone like a bone in a garden, something best left undisturbed. *Don't contact me again. I meant what I said.* The woman turned, caught Rory's stare, and her expression cycled through recognition, shock, and something harder. Something locked. "Rory Carter." "Eva Walsh." Rory kept her voice level. "You look different." "I look expensive." "That too." Eva's hair had been dyed platinum. Her nails were long and painted a deep burgundy, the kind of colour that cost more than Rory's weekly rent. The leather jacket she wore had the supple drape of Italian craftsmanship. Everything about her screamed money acquired rather than inherited. "I heard you'd come to London." Eva lifted her drink, something clear with olives. "Didn't expect to find you in a place like this." "Live upstairs, actually." Eva's eyebrow lifted a fraction. "Of course you do. Always did land on your feet, didn't you?" The words could have been playful. They weren't. Rory gestured to the empty stool beside her. Eva hesitated, then slid off her own seat and crossed the gap between them. The movement was economical, graceful. Eva had been clumsy once, all elbows and apologies. Now she moved like someone who'd rehearsed being watched. "Two years," Rory said. "Twenty-three months, give or take." "Who's counting?" "Me. Apparently." Eva signalled to Silas behind the bar, held up two fingers. "Whiskey. The good stuff." Silas's gaze flicked between them. He'd been polishing the same glass for five minutes, his way of saying he was listening without listening. The hazel eyes assessed Eva the way they assessed everyone who walked through the green neon glow of The Raven's Nest: filing away details for later use. "You running from something, or toward something?" Rory asked. "Does it matter?" "It does if it follows you here." Eva laughed, a sound with no warmth in it. "Still the same Rory. Always three steps ahead, always waiting for the other shoe to drop." "Not a shoe I'm worried about." The whiskey arrived. Eva threw it back without savouring it, which told Rory everything she needed to know about the kind of drinking Eva had been doing lately. "I'm not here to cause trouble." Eva set the empty glass down with a click. "I need your help." "There it is." "Listen, I know I said some things. I know I cut you off. But you're the only person I trust to actually be competent." "Flattering." "True." Eva's fingers drummed against the bartop, those expensive nails clicking a nervous rhythm. "I got mixed up with some people. Back in Cardiff, after you left. They said they could help me get out from under my mother's debt, and for a while, they did. But nothing's free, is it?" "What kind of people?" "The kind who don't appreciate you asking questions." Eva's hand moved to her collar, tugging it slightly. The gesture was unconscious, defensive. Rory's eyes tracked the movement, catalogued it. "I've been in London for six months. Thought I'd lost them. Then last week, someone broke into my flat. Didn't take anything. Just left a photograph on my pillow." "Of what?" "Of you. Working at that restaurant. Golden Empress, isn't it?" The air between them shifted. Rory felt it in her chest, a tightening that had nothing to do with the whiskey she'd been nursing. "They know where I am." "They knew before I did, probably." Eva's voice dropped. "I'm sorry. I'm so sorry, Rory. I didn't think they'd, I thought if I just disappeared, if I came here and found you, maybe you could help me figure out what to do. You were always the one with the plans." "You ghosted me for two years because I was the one with the plans?" "I ghosted you because watching you walk away from him made me realise what a coward I was. You actually left. You packed a bag and got on that train and you didn't look back." Eva's composure cracked, just slightly, a hairline fracture in the porcelain. "I stayed. I told myself it was because of Mum, because of the money, because someone had to. But really I was just terrified of being alone somewhere new." "You weren't alone in Cardiff." "Wasn't I?" Eva's smile was a wound. "You were already gone. In your head, you'd left months before. I could see it. The way you stopped talking about the future. The way you flinched when your phone rang." Rory didn't deny it. Evan had hollowed her out slowly, methodically, the way water erodes stone. By the time Eva had pushed her to leave, there'd been barely anything left to save. "And now?" Rory asked. "What do you want from me?" "A place to stay. One night. Just until I figure out my next move." "Your next move involving the people who are photographing me at work?" "I'll handle it." "Like you handled Cardiff?" The words landed. Eva flinched. "You think I don't know?" Eva's voice hardened. "You think I don't lie awake every night running through every decision that led me here? I made mistakes, Rory. Spectacular ones. But I'm still standing, same as you." "Are you?" "Fuck you." But there was no venom in it. Just exhaustion. "I forgot how you do this. How you make someone feel two inches tall with three words." "Four words." "What?" "Are you still standing. Four words." Eva stared at her. Then, despite everything, she laughed. A real laugh this time, ragged and reluctant. "God, I missed you." "You have a funny way of showing it." Silas appeared at Rory's elbow, refilling her glass without being asked. His hand lingered near hers for a moment, a silent question. She gave a slight shake of her head. Not yet. "I can't give you money," Rory said. "And I can't promise I'll fix whatever mess you've made. But there's a couch in my flat that's marginally more comfortable than a park bench." "One night." "We'll see." Eva exhaled, something in her shoulders loosening. "Thank you." "Don't thank me yet." The door to The Raven's Nest swung open. Two men entered, neither of them regulars. They wore the same kind of expensive anonymity as Eva's jacket, but their posture was different. Controlled. Purposeful. One of them scanned the room with the practiced sweep of someone used to finding targets in crowds. His gaze landed on Eva. His gaze landed on Rory. He smiled. "Ah," Eva breathed. "That's not good." "Understatement of the century." Rory was already reaching for the phone in her pocket. "When I say run, you run upstairs. Second door on the left. Don't stop until you're inside." "Rory, those are, they'll kill us both if I-" "Then you'd better start running."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Eva's composure cracked just [just]"
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.206
leniency0.412
rawRatio0.071
effectiveRatio0.029
83.21% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1191
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"really"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
74.81% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1191
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"eyebrow"
count1
1
word"flicked"
count1
2
word"warmth"
count1
3
word"porcelain"
count1
4
word"comfortable"
count1
5
word"scanned"
count1
highlights
0"eyebrow"
1"flicked"
2"warmth"
3"porcelain"
4"comfortable"
5"scanned"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences72
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences72
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences123
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen46
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords9
totalWords1191
ratio0.008
matches
0"Don't contact me again. I meant what I said."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Then, despite everything, she laughed."
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions53
wordCount601
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity4.66
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity7
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Eva28
Rory17
Italian1
Silas3
Raven2
Nest2
persons
0"Eva"
1"Rory"
2"Silas"
3"Raven"
4"Nest"
places(empty)
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences41
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1191
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences123
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs70
mean17.01
std17.4
cv1.023
sampleLengths
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235
318
42
510
63
72
847
924
103
1117
128
1345
144
155
162
1717
1850
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203
217
2225
236
2428
2519
263
2724
281
2951
304
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322
3310
3424
355
3650
3714
3875
395
4038
4132
4210
4314
4412
453
464
475
4837
492
95.52% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences72
matches
0"been dyed"
1"being asked"
87.01% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs118
matches
0"was listening"
1"was already reaching"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences123
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount601
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount17
adverbRatio0.028286189683860232
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.013311148086522463
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences123
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences123
mean9.68
std8.66
cv0.894
sampleLengths
012
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227
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48
518
64
75
816
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102
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123
133
142
156
1620
1712
189
1914
2010
213
225
2312
246
252
268
2714
285
299
309
314
325
332
3413
354
365
3718
3827
399
403
417
429
4316
446
453
4625
4715
484
493
68.83% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.44715447154471544
totalSentences123
uniqueOpeners55
56.50% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences59
matches
0"Then, despite everything, she laughed."
ratio0.017
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount8
totalSentences59
matches
0"I meant what I said.*"
1"Her nails were long and"
2"He'd been polishing the same"
3"His hand lingered near hers"
4"She gave a slight shake"
5"They wore the same kind"
6"His gaze landed on Eva."
7"His gaze landed on Rory."
ratio0.136
19.32% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount52
totalSentences59
matches
0"The girl at the bar"
1"Eva used to slouch, perpetually"
2"This woman sat with her"
3"Rory's hand stopped halfway to"
4"Eva hadn't answered her texts"
5"The last message sat buried"
6"I meant what I said.*"
7"The woman turned, caught Rory's"
8"Rory kept her voice level"
9"Eva's hair had been dyed"
10"Her nails were long and"
11"The leather jacket she wore"
12"Everything about her screamed money"
13"Eva lifted her drink, something"
14"Eva's eyebrow lifted a fraction."
15"The words could have been"
16"Rory gestured to the empty"
17"Eva hesitated, then slid off"
18"The movement was economical, graceful."
19"Eva had been clumsy once,"
ratio0.881
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences59
matches
0"Now she moved like someone"
1"By the time Eva had"
ratio0.034
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences18
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Eva threw it back without savouring it, which told Rory everything she needed to know about the kind of drinking Eva had been doing lately."
89.29% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Eva's fingers drummed, those expensive nails clicking a nervous rhythm"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Eva breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.074
leniency0.147
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.029
89.1493%