Run: 2026-03-15-01KKS2PGA705PEBM79E8GVXMCD

Run Details

Model:: Z.AI GLM 5 Turbo
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 27.2s
Cost:: $0.006717
Provider:: Z.AI

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
95.28%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
38.62%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
85.71%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
33.33%	Name drop frequency	(details)
5.77%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
100.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
100.00%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
100.00%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
51.85%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
96.62%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
39.71%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
11.28%	Technical jargon density	(details)
62.50%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
100.00%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
77.3558%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert fiction writer.

Always keep the following rules in mind:
- Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang.
- Write in active voice
- Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle.
- Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions.
- Convey events and story through dialogue.
- Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety.
- Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech
- Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself.
- Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action.
- Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe"

When writing text:
- NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely.
- NEVER end with foreshadowing.
- NEVER write further than what I prompt you with.
- AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions.
- STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.

User/Human

Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response:
<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Continue the story using the following instructions:
<instructions>
Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
</instructions>

Model response

The standing stones rose from the earth like broken teeth, their surfaces slick with moss that glowed a faint, unhealthy green. Rory paused at the threshold, her trainers squelching in mud that seemed darker than it should be. Behind her, Nyx rippled at the edge of the treeline, their form unstable in the dappled afternoon light.

"You're certain this is the place?"

"The stones remember." Nyx's voice slipped through the branches like smoke. "She waits beyond."

Rory pulled the Heartstone pendant from beneath her jacket. The crimson gem pulsed against her collarbone, warmth spreading through her fingers. Not the burning heat she'd expected—something gentler, almost inviting. The silver chain caught what little light filtered through the canopy overhead.

She stepped between the first two stones.

The air changed. Not colder, not warmer—thicker, somehow, like breathing honey. The sounds of Richmond Park fell away behind her: dogs barking in the distance, the shout of a jogger, the mechanical grind of a bicycle chain. Gone. Replaced by a silence so complete it rang in her ears.

"Nyx?"

A shadow slid between the stones and solidified beside her. Their violet eyes reflected nothing, yet seemed to take in everything at once.

"We are through."

Rory turned.

The grove opened before her like a wound in the world. Wildflowers carpeted the ground in impossible colours—sapphire blues that hurt to look at directly, crimsons so deep they bordered on black, whites that shimmered with iridescence. No grass grew here. Just flowers, hundreds of varieties, their petals unfurling toward a sky that couldn't decide what it wanted to be.

She looked up.

The sky above Richmond Park had been grey, typical London overcast. Here, it shifted between twilight purple and something close to amber, clouds moving in directions that made her stomach lurch. No sun. No moon. Just that strange, sourceless glow that painted everything in colours her eyes struggled to process.

"The time—"

"Moves differently here." Nyx drifted forward, their form more substantial in this place. "An hour could be minutes. Could be days. Do not trust your watch."

Rory glanced at her wrist anyway. The small crescent scar caught her attention first, pale against her skin. Her watch had stopped. The second hand hung frozen at seven minutes past three.

She pulled the Fae blade from her jacket. The moonsilver dagger came out cold, colder than it had any right to be in this strange warmth. It hummed faintly against her palm, and she noticed the luminescence along its edge strengthening.

"Is that necessary?"

"Isolde gave it to me for a reason."

Nyx made a sound that might have been laughter. The shadow of their form shifted, and for a moment Rory caught the impression of something else—someone else—beneath the darkness. A face, almost human, gone before she could focus on it.

They walked deeper.

The flowers gave way to a clearing dominated by a single tree. No—not a tree. A growth. Its trunk twisted in on itself like a corkscrew, bark the colour of bone, branches reaching in directions that defied gravity. Roots broke through the surface of the earth in great ridges, and between those roots, water pooled in reflections that showed wrong things.

Rory knelt beside one pool.

Her reflection stared back. But behind her reflected self stood figures that weren't there—tall shapes with antlers, small creatures with too many eyes, something vast and winged that made her breath catch.

She stood quickly.

"Do not look in the water." Isolde's voice came from everywhere and nowhere. "It shows what wishes to be seen, not what is."

Rory spun.

The Half-Fae stood at the base of the twisted tree, silver hair cascading to her waist, pale lavender eyes fixed on Rory with an intensity that felt like fingers pressing against her skull. Isolde's bare feet left no impression in the soft earth. The wildflowers near her bent away, as if repelled by her presence.

"You came." Isolde tilted her head. "The pendant led you true."

"The pendant got warm."

"The same thing, in the end."

Nyx moved to Rory's side. The two beings regarded each other—shade and half-Fae—and something passed between them that Rory couldn't read.

"The Shadow walks where shadows should not." Isolde's lips curved. "Still bound to the in-between, Aldric?"

Nyx's form flickered. "You know my name."

"I know all names that pass through my grove. Yours was spoken here long before you took this shape."

Rory stepped between them. "I didn't come here for a history lesson."

"No." Isolde's gaze shifted to the Heartstone pendant. "You came because someone wanted you to find this place. Someone who knows what you carry."

The gem pulsed again, warmth flaring against Rory's chest. She thought of the package that had arrived at her flat three weeks ago—no return address, no note, just the pendant in a plain box. She thought of how it had led her to Nyx, to Isolde's name whispered in shadows, to this grove that shouldn't exist in the middle of a London park.

"Who sent it?"

"A question with many answers." Isolde turned and walked toward the twisted tree. Her movement was wrong somehow—too smooth, too fluid, like watching a video played at the wrong speed. "Come. There is something you need to see."

"I don't like riddles."

"And yet here you stand, in a place where riddles are the only truth."

Nyx touched Rory's arm. Where their fingers made contact, cold seeped through her jacket sleeve.

"The Seer cannot lie. But she can mislead. Stay sharp."

Isolde paused at the tree's base. One pale hand pressed against the bone-white bark, and the trunk split open like a wound, revealing a passage that descended into darkness.

"What's down there?"

"What you came for." Isolde's lavender eyes gleamed. "What you've always come for, Aurora Carter, though you did not know it until now."

The air from the passage smelled of iron and something sweet, something rotting. Rory tightened her grip on the Fae blade. The cold of it grounded her, reminded her that she was still flesh and blood even if this place tried to make her forget.

She stepped forward.

The moment she crossed the threshold of the passage, the Heartstone blazed hot against her skin, and somewhere far below—miles below, it felt like—something answered.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags	8
adverbTagCount	0
adverbTags	(empty)
dialogueSentences	32
tagDensity	0.25
leniency	0.5
rawRatio	0
effectiveRatio	0

95.28%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1059

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"quickly"
count	1

highlights

"quickly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

38.62%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1059

totalAiIsms

found

word	"pulsed"
count	2

word	"warmth"
count	3

word	"mechanical"
count	1

word	"silence"
count	1

word	"shimmered"
count	1

word	"stomach"
count	1

word	"lurch"
count	1

word	"cascading"
count	1

word	"intensity"
count	1

word	"flickered"
count	1

highlights

0	"pulsed"
1	"warmth"
2	"mechanical"
3	"silence"
4	"shimmered"
5	"stomach"
6	"lurch"
7	"cascading"
8	"intensity"
9	"flickered"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	75
matches	(empty)

85.71%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

"watch"

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"
1	"tried to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	99
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	34
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1047
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	3
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

33.33%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

842

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.66

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

worstWindowName

"Isolde"

discoveredNames

Nyx	8
Rory	14
Heartstone	3
Richmond	2
Park	2
London	2
Fae	4
Half-Fae	1
Isolde	9

persons

0	"Nyx"
1	"Rory"
2	"Fae"
3	"Half-Fae"
4	"Isolde"

places

0	"Richmond"
1	"Park"
2	"London"

globalScore

0.669

windowScore

0.333

5.77%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"something close to amber, clouds moving in direc"
1	"felt like fingers pressing against her"
2	"felt like—something answered"

100.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches	0
per1kWords	0
wordCount	1047
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	99
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

20.94

std

18.82

0.899

sampleLengths

0	56
1	6
2	14
3	42
4	7
5	49
6	1
7	23
8	3
9	2
10	60
11	3
12	50
13	2
14	26
15	32
16	41
17	3
18	8
19	40
20	3
21	61
22	5
23	32
24	3
25	23
26	2
27	55
28	11
29	4
30	6
31	21
32	16
33	7
34	19
35	12
36	24
37	63
38	3
39	38
40	4
41	14
42	15
43	10
44	29
45	3
46	23
47	45
48	3
49	25

100.00%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount	0
totalSentences	75
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount	0
totalVerbs	142
matches	(empty)

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.101

matches

0	"Not the burning heat she'd expected—something gentler, almost inviting."
1	"Not colder, not warmer—thicker, somehow, like breathing honey."
2	"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in impossible colours—sapphire blues that hurt to look at directly, crimsons so deep they bordered on black, whites that shimmered with iridescence."
3	"The shadow of their form shifted, and for a moment Rory caught the impression of something else—someone else—beneath the darkness."
4	"No—not a tree."
5	"But behind her reflected self stood figures that weren't there—tall shapes with antlers, small creatures with too many eyes, something vast and winged that made her breath catch."
6	"The two beings regarded each other—shade and half-Fae—and something passed between them that Rory couldn't read."
7	"She thought of the package that had arrived at her flat three weeks ago—no return address, no note, just the pendant in a plain box."
8	"Her movement was wrong somehow—too smooth, too fluid, like watching a video played at the wrong speed."
9	"The moment she crossed the threshold of the passage, the Heartstone blazed hot against her skin, and somewhere far below—miles below, it felt like—something answered."

100.00%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount	858
adjectiveStacks	0
stackExamples	(empty)
adverbCount	29
adverbRatio	0.0337995337995338
lyAdverbCount	3
lyAdverbRatio	0.0034965034965034965

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	99
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

10.58

std

7.38

0.698

sampleLengths

0	21
1	17
2	18
3	6
4	11
5	3
6	9
7	12
8	9
9	12
10	7
11	3
12	8
13	26
14	1
15	11
16	1
17	10
18	13
19	3
20	2
21	11
22	26
23	4
24	19
25	3
26	11
27	20
28	2
29	2
30	15
31	2
32	13
33	13
34	6
35	12
36	4
37	10
38	8
39	18
40	15
41	3
42	8
43	9
44	20
45	11
46	3
47	12
48	3
49	2

51.85%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	7
diversityRatio	0.35353535353535354
totalSentences	99
uniqueOpeners	35

96.62%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Just flowers, hundreds of varieties,"
1	"Just that strange, sourceless glow"

ratio

0.029

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"She stepped between the first"
1	"Their violet eyes reflected nothing,"
2	"She looked up."
3	"Her watch had stopped."
4	"She pulled the Fae blade"
5	"It hummed faintly against her"
6	"They walked deeper."
7	"Its trunk twisted in on"
8	"Her reflection stared back."
9	"She stood quickly."
10	"She thought of the package"
11	"She thought of how it"
12	"Her movement was wrong somehow—too"
13	"She stepped forward."

ratio

0.203

39.71%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The standing stones rose from"
1	"Rory paused at the threshold,"
2	"Nyx's voice slipped through the"
3	"Rory pulled the Heartstone pendant"
4	"The crimson gem pulsed against"
5	"The silver chain caught what"
6	"She stepped between the first"
7	"The air changed."
8	"The sounds of Richmond Park"
9	"A shadow slid between the"
10	"Their violet eyes reflected nothing,"
11	"The grove opened before her"
12	"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in"
13	"She looked up."
14	"The sky above Richmond Park"
15	"Here, it shifted between twilight"
16	"Nyx drifted forward, their form"
17	"Rory glanced at her wrist"
18	"The small crescent scar caught"
19	"Her watch had stopped."

ratio

0.841

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	69
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

11.28%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"The standing stones rose from the earth like broken teeth, their surfaces slick with moss that glowed a faint, unhealthy green."
1	"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in impossible colours—sapphire blues that hurt to look at directly, crimsons so deep they bordered on black, whites that shimmer…"
2	"Here, it shifted between twilight purple and something close to amber, clouds moving in directions that made her stomach lurch."
3	"Its trunk twisted in on itself like a corkscrew, bark the colour of bone, branches reaching in directions that defied gravity."
4	"But behind her reflected self stood figures that weren't there—tall shapes with antlers, small creatures with too many eyes, something vast and winged that made…"
5	"The Half-Fae stood at the base of the twisted tree, silver hair cascading to her waist, pale lavender eyes fixed on Rory with an intensity that felt like finger…"
6	"One pale hand pressed against the bone-white bark, and the trunk split open like a wound, revealing a passage that descended into darkness."

62.50%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"Nyx drifted, their form more substantial in this place"

100.00%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

77.3558%