Run: 2026-03-15-01KKS2SMVTFMATYNSFNEKDWAHN

Run Details

Model:: Z.AI GLM 5 Turbo
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 18.0s
Cost:: $0.006846
Provider:: Z.AI

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
85.71%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
52.38%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
95.24%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
83.33%	Name drop frequency	(details)
0.00%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
100.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
100.00%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
94.00%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
60.61%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
100.00%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
10.85%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
40.82%	Technical jargon density	(details)
53.57%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
100.00%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
79.2169%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert fiction writer.

Always keep the following rules in mind:
- Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang.
- Write in active voice
- Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle.
- Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions.
- Convey events and story through dialogue.
- Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety.
- Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech
- Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself.
- Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action.
- Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe"

When writing text:
- NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely.
- NEVER end with foreshadowing.
- NEVER write further than what I prompt you with.
- AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions.
- STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.

User/Human

Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response:
<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Continue the story using the following instructions:
<instructions>
Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
</instructions>

Model response

The oaks rose like sentinels, their bark silvered with age, branches interlocking overhead in a canopy so dense the London sky vanished entirely. Aurora stopped at the boundary where the grass shifted from ordinary green to something luminescent. Each blade held its own faint light, pale blue-white, like trapped moonlight.

"This is it?"

Nyx's silhouette rippled at her shoulder. Their form had no features to read, but their voice carried a note she'd learned to recognise as unease. "The Veil thins here. Can you not feel it?"

She could. A pressure against her skin, neither hot nor cold, like standing in a doorway between two rooms with vastly different temperatures. The Heartstone pendant beneath her shirt had grown warm half an hour ago, and now it pulsed against her sternum with steady rhythm.

Rory stepped forward. The grass bent under her trainers but made no sound. No crunch, no whisper of stalks giving way. She looked back. Her footprints weren't there.

"Nyx."

"I see it." They drifted ahead, incorporeal, passing through the first standing stone without pause. The stone was taller than her, rough-hewn, covered in symbols that seemed to shift when she looked at them directly. "The boundary markers are old. Older than London. Older than the Romans who camped here."

"How do you know that?"

"I was here before them."

She filed that away for later examination and pressed on. The grove opened gradually, the tight cluster of oaks giving way to a clearing that shouldn't have existed. The trees ringed it perfectly, too evenly spaced for nature, and beyond them—nothing. Not darkness, not more trees. Simply an absence, as though the world stopped at the edge of those silver trunks.

Wildflowers carpeted the clearing. Snowdrops and bluebells grew side by side. Roses bloomed in one corner, their petals the deep red of fresh blood, while primroses yellow as egg yolks spread near a moss-covered stone that might have been an altar. The flowers released a scent that wasn't quite perfume—more like the memory of every garden she'd ever known, distilled and layered until her nose couldn't separate the components.

"Time moves strangely here." Nyx solidified beside her, their violet eyes casting faint light across the strange flora. "An hour could be minutes. Could be days. The Fae don't measure it as we do."

"Helpful."

"It wasn't meant to be."

A sound reached her. Water, perhaps, but wrong. Not the rush of a stream or the drip of a tap. Something musical, each droplet striking a surface that rang like a crystal glass. She followed it toward the far edge of the clearing, where a spring emerged from between two roots that rose from the earth like the ribs of some buried giant.

The water was clear, but clear didn't describe it properly. It was transparent in a way that seemed aggressive, as though ordinary water only approximated clarity and this was the true form. The basin it collected in was stone, worn smooth, and when the water struck it, that chiming note rose again.

Rory crouched beside the spring. Her reflection looked back, but delayed—a half-second lag between her movement and the image's response. She raised her hand. The reflection waited, then followed.

"Don't touch it."

She was already pulling back, but the warning still irritated her. "I wasn't going to."

"You were thinking about it."

The Fae blade sat cold against her hip, a weight she'd grown accustomed to over the past weeks but never comfortable with. Isolde had given it to her without explanation, without instruction beyond "you will know when to use it." Rory wasn't fond of weapons that came with cryptic prerequisites.

"Is she here?" She straightened, scanning the clearing for any sign of the Seer. "Isolde brought me to the edge last week, pointed at these stones, and vanished. Not exactly a proper invitation."

"The Half-Fae do nothing proper. It's not in their nature."

"Whose side are you on?"

Nyx turned toward her, and for a moment their form solidified further—enough that she could make out the suggestion of a face, features half-formed from shadow. "I am on no one's side. I am bound to you by circumstance, not choice. Remember that."

The warmth from the pendant flared. Rory pulled it out, the crimson gemstone catching light that had no apparent source. The glow intensified, pulsing in response to something she couldn't see or hear.

"It's reacting to the grove."

"It's reacting to something in the grove." Nyx drifted toward the altar stone, their form thinning again. "That pendant comes from Dymas. This place is Fae-touched. Opposing forces. The pendant warns you."

"Of what?"

"Of being very far from home in a place that doesn't want you."

The wildflowers continued their impossible bloom. A butterfly passed overhead—ordinary, brown-winged, utterly out of place among the luminescent grass and chiming water. It landed on a rose, and for a moment the grove seemed to hold its breath.

Then Isolde stepped from behind the altar stone as though she'd been standing there the entire time.

Her silver hair caught that sourceless light and broke it into fragments. Her lavender eyes found Rory immediately, and her bare feet left no impression on the moss despite her apparent weight.

"You came." Not a question. Her voice carried harmonics that didn't match human speech, undertones that suggested meanings beyond the words themselves. "The blade suits you."

Rory's hand moved to the dagger's hilt without conscious thought. "You could have just told me what this place was. Instead of the mysterious pointing and vanishing act."

"Would you have believed me?"

"Probably not."

"Then the mystery served its purpose." Isolde's gaze shifted to Nyx, and something passed between them that Rory couldn't read. "You brought a shadow into a place of light."

"I brought the only being I trust to watch my back."

"And yet you trust the blade I gave you more than either of us."

The chiming water filled the silence that followed. Rory's fingers tightened on the moonsilver hilt, its cold seeping through her skin, grounding her in something solid and real.

"You said I would know when to use it." She met Isolde's lavender eyes without flinching. "Is this that moment?"

The Seer smiled, and the expression held too many teeth.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags	7
adverbTagCount	0
adverbTags	(empty)
dialogueSentences	36
tagDensity	0.194
leniency	0.389
rawRatio	0
effectiveRatio	0

85.71%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1050

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"perfectly"
count	1

adverb	"very"
count	1

adverb	"utterly"
count	1

highlights

0	"perfectly"
1	"very"
2	"utterly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

52.38%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1050

totalAiIsms

found

word	"sentinels"
count	1

word	"pulsed"
count	1

word	"whisper"
count	1

word	"crystal"
count	1

word	"weight"
count	2

word	"comfortable"
count	1

word	"scanning"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	1

word	"silence"
count	1

highlights

0	"sentinels"
1	"pulsed"
2	"whisper"
3	"crystal"
4	"weight"
5	"comfortable"
6	"scanning"
7	"warmth"
8	"silence"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	60
matches	(empty)

95.24%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	88
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	31
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1045
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	4
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

83.33%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

779

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.03

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

2.5

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

London	1
Heartstone	1
Fae	1
Rory	8
Seer	2
Nyx	5
Isolde	4

persons

0	"Rory"
1	"Seer"
2	"Nyx"
3	"Isolde"

places

"London"

globalScore

0.987

windowScore

0.833

0.00%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"symbols that seemed to shift when she looked at them directly"
1	"quite perfume—more like the memory of every garden she'd ever known, distilled and layered until her nose couldn't separate the components"
2	"seemed aggressive as though ordinary water only approximated clarity and this was the true form"

100.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

0.957

wordCount

1045

matches

0	"neither hot nor"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	88
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

24.3

std

19.12

0.787

sampleLengths

0	50
1	3
2	34
3	46
4	28
5	1
6	50
7	5
8	5
9	61
10	69
11	34
12	1
13	5
14	63
15	52
16	29
17	3
18	15
19	5
20	50
21	33
22	10
23	5
24	43
25	33
26	5
27	32
28	2
29	13
30	38
31	17
32	32
33	26
34	28
35	5
36	2
37	29
38	11
39	14
40	28
41	20
42	10

100.00%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount	0
totalSentences	60
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

128

matches

0	"was already pulling"

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.057

matches

0	"The trees ringed it perfectly, too evenly spaced for nature, and beyond them—nothing."
1	"The flowers released a scent that wasn't quite perfume—more like the memory of every garden she'd ever known, distilled and layered until her nose couldn't separate the components."
2	"Her reflection looked back, but delayed—a half-second lag between her movement and the image's response."
3	"Nyx turned toward her, and for a moment their form solidified further—enough that she could make out the suggestion of a face, features half-formed from shadow."
4	"A butterfly passed overhead—ordinary, brown-winged, utterly out of place among the luminescent grass and chiming water."

94.00%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount

790

adjectiveStacks

stackExamples

0	"pale blue-white, like"

adverbCount

adverbRatio

0.0379746835443038

lyAdverbCount

lyAdverbRatio

0.015189873417721518

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	88
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

11.88

std

7.36

0.62

sampleLengths

0	23
1	15
2	12
3	3
4	6
5	19
6	9
7	2
8	21
9	23
10	3
11	10
12	8
13	3
14	4
15	1
16	15
17	20
18	15
19	5
20	5
21	10
22	18
23	13
24	5
25	15
26	4
27	7
28	30
29	28
30	18
31	16
32	1
33	5
34	4
35	4
36	12
37	13
38	30
39	10
40	22
41	20
42	5
43	15
44	4
45	5
46	3
47	11
48	4
49	5

60.61%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	5
diversityRatio	0.3977272727272727
totalSentences	88
uniqueOpeners	35

100.00%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Simply an absence, as though"
1	"Then Isolde stepped from behind"

ratio

0.034

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Their form had no features"
1	"She looked back."
2	"Her footprints weren't there."
3	"They drifted ahead, incorporeal, passing"
4	"She filed that away for"
5	"She followed it toward the"
6	"It was transparent in a"
7	"Her reflection looked back, but"
8	"She raised her hand."
9	"She was already pulling back,"
10	"She straightened, scanning the clearing"
11	"It landed on a rose,"
12	"Her silver hair caught that"
13	"Her lavender eyes found Rory"
14	"Her voice carried harmonics that"
15	"She met Isolde's lavender eyes"

ratio

0.271

10.85%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The oaks rose like sentinels,"
1	"Aurora stopped at the boundary"
2	"Each blade held its own"
3	"Nyx's silhouette rippled at her"
4	"Their form had no features"
5	"A pressure against her skin,"
6	"The Heartstone pendant beneath her"
7	"Rory stepped forward."
8	"The grass bent under her"
9	"She looked back."
10	"Her footprints weren't there."
11	"They drifted ahead, incorporeal, passing"
12	"The stone was taller than"
13	"She filed that away for"
14	"The grove opened gradually, the"
15	"The trees ringed it perfectly,"
16	"Wildflowers carpeted the clearing."
17	"Snowdrops and bluebells grew side"
18	"Roses bloomed in one corner,"
19	"The flowers released a scent"

ratio

0.898

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	59
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

40.82%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"The stone was taller than her, rough-hewn, covered in symbols that seemed to shift when she looked at them directly."
1	"Roses bloomed in one corner, their petals the deep red of fresh blood, while primroses yellow as egg yolks spread near a moss-covered stone that might have been…"
2	"It was transparent in a way that seemed aggressive, as though ordinary water only approximated clarity and this was the true form."
3	"Rory pulled it out, the crimson gemstone catching light that had no apparent source."
4	"Her voice carried harmonics that didn't match human speech, undertones that suggested meanings beyond the words themselves."

53.57%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"Nyx drifted, their form thinning again"

100.00%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

79.2169%