Run: 2026-03-15-01KKS2VB3FSPK3ZKJ8ZJKKPHBS

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Duration:
26.7s
Cost:
$0.008602
Provider:
Z.AI

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The standing stones loomed ahead, black against blacker sky. Rory ducked beneath a low-hanging branch that shouldn't exist in November. Wildflowers dotted the clearing floor, blues and purples and sickly whites that had no business blooming this time of year. She'd read about places like this. Pocket realities. Thin spots where the world folded in on itself. The Heartstone pendant pulsed against her collarbone. Warm. Getting warmer. She hadn't planned on coming here tonight. The note had been slipped under her flat door while she'd been out on deliveries, handwritten on cream cardstock in ink that shimmered when you tilted it. Three words: *The Grove. Midnight.* No signature. No explanation. Just an address in Richmond that mapped to nothing on any normal street grid, but everything in the battered notebook Eva had left behind before she'd disappeared. Rory stepped between the first pair of standing stones. The air changed. Thicker, somehow, like breathing through damp velvet. The sounds of Richmond Park, the distant A205 traffic, the dogs in the residential streets, all of it cut off as though someone had thrown a switch. Silence. Not peaceful silence. The held-breath kind. The kind that preceded something terrible. The flowers released a scent she couldn't place. Sweet, but wrong. Like honey left too long in the sun, beginning to ferment. She pulled out her phone. No signal. The screen showed 12:03 AM, but the digits flickered, jumping between numbers as if the phone couldn't decide what time it should be. The Heartstone grew warmer still. Not unpleasant. Like pressing a palm against a radiator in winter. Rory moved deeper into the Grove, scanning the clearing for any sign of who had sent the note. The wildflowers grew denser toward the centre, forming patterns that looked almost deliberate. Spirals. Interlocking circles. Shapes that hurt to follow with her eyes. Something rustled to her left. She stopped. A bird, probably. Or a fox. Richmond Park had foxes. The rustling came again. Closer. Too rhythmic for an animal. Too deliberate. Rory turned her head slowly, catching peripheral motion. A shape, low to the ground, sliding between the flowers perhaps twenty metres away. Dark. Compact. Gone before she could focus on it. Her pulse kicked up a notch. She forced her breathing steady. Pre-Law had taught her at least one useful skill: never let them see you sweat. "Who's there?" The words hung flat in the air. No echo. No response. Just that oppressive silence swallowing her voice whole. She reached for the pendant without thinking, fingers closing around the crimson stone. It pulsed faster now, a heartbeat separate from her own, and the warmth spread up her wrist to her elbow. The ground beneath her feet felt soft. Spongy. She looked down. The flowers had changed. The spirals she'd noticed from a distance now surrounded her feet, and they were moving. Not swaying in a breeze, because there was no breeze here. Growing. Reaching toward her ankles with impossible slowness, stems thickening as she watched. Rory stepped back. The stems followed. Or rather, new stems pushed up from the soil in her path, always reaching, always curling slightly at the tips like fingers. That wasn't a flower. That wasn't a flower at all. She moved toward what she hoped was the edge of the clearing, but the Grove seemed larger than before. The standing stones that had marked the boundary now stood further away, their shapes blurred by a mist that hadn't been there moments ago. The mist rolled in from nowhere, curling around the base of the stones, swallowing the wildflowers inch by inch. It carried the fermented honey scent stronger now, mixed with something else underneath. Copper. Old copper. Blood that had dried days ago and was just beginning to rust. Rory's hand shook. She clenched it into a fist. Think. The notebook had mentioned time acting strangely here. An hour inside could be minutes outside. Or days. If she couldn't find the boundary before the mist closed in completely, she might wander in here until she starved. Or until something else found her. The shape moved again. This time to her right. Closer. Ten metres, maybe less. She caught a glimpse of it as it passed between two stones: low, pale, roughly the size of a large dog but moving wrong. The legs bent at angles that shouldn't work, joints reversed, and it didn't so much walk as flow across the ground like spilled liquid finding its level. A sound reached her. Soft. Rhythmic. Like fingernails dragging across soil in a pattern. Digging. Searching. The pendant burned against her palm. She dropped it, gasping, and the crimson glow illuminated the mist around her in flickering red waves. In that light, she saw things she wished she hadn't. The flowers weren't flowers. They were fingers. Pale, slender, terminated with nails that matched the wildflower petals in colour. Hundreds of them, thousands, pushing up from the soil in a frozen garden of reaching hands. And they were all pointed in one direction. Toward her. The mist parted behind her. She spun. The shape stood there. Not low to the ground anymore. Standing. It had been crouching before, folding itself into that liquid movement, but now it rose to a height that put it a full head above her. Pale skin stretched over a frame too thin, too angular, like a person carved from driftwood. The face was smooth. No eyes. No nose. Just a mouth that stretched too wide, filled with teeth that looked like they'd been filed to points. It tilted its head. Listening. "Rory." The mouth moved, but the voice came from everywhere and nowhere, echoing from the stones, the soil, the grasping fingers around her feet. "You came." The pendant flared between her breasts, burning hot, and she understood now. It wasn't warning her. It was answering. Calling out to whatever this thing was like a beacon in the dark. The mouth split wider in what might have been a smile. "Little Laila. They said you'd come. They said you'd wear the stone." The hands at her feet closed around her ankles. Cold. So cold.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences4
tagDensity0.25
leniency0.5
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
85.35% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1024
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"completely"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"slightly"
2"completely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
12.11% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1024
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"loomed"
count1
1
word"pulsed"
count2
2
word"shimmered"
count1
3
word"velvet"
count1
4
word"silence"
count3
5
word"flickered"
count1
6
word"scanning"
count1
7
word"rhythmic"
count2
8
word"pulse"
count1
9
word"echo"
count1
10
word"oppressive"
count1
11
word"warmth"
count1
12
word"echoing"
count1
13
word"beacon"
count1
highlights
0"loomed"
1"pulsed"
2"shimmered"
3"velvet"
4"silence"
5"flickered"
6"scanning"
7"rhythmic"
8"pulse"
9"echo"
10"oppressive"
11"warmth"
12"echoing"
13"beacon"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences132
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences132
filterMatches
0"see"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences135
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen27
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords3
totalWords1024
ratio0.003
matches
0"The Grove. Midnight."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions2
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions21
wordCount1007
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.6
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
November1
Heartstone2
Grove3
Richmond3
Eva1
Park2
Rory6
Like3
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Grove"
2"Eva"
3"Rory"
4"Like"
places
0"November"
1"Richmond"
2"Park"
globalScore1
windowScore1
70.63% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences63
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"seemed larger than before"
1"looked like they'd been filed to points"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1024
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences135
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs43
mean23.81
std17.95
cv0.754
sampleLengths
09
148
210
339
431
546
61
712
822
930
1016
1142
125
132
1410
1512
1631
1726
182
1919
2033
2154
2228
234
246
2543
2647
279
2844
2914
3051
3116
3233
3343
342
357
3679
375
3826
3932
4011
4112
4212
99.95% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences132
matches
0"been slipped"
1"been filed"
90.71% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs183
matches
0"was just beginning"
1"wasn't warning"
2"was answering"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences135
ratio0
matches(empty)
90.88% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1010
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"ahead, black against blacker sky."
adverbCount44
adverbRatio0.04356435643564356
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.006930693069306931
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences135
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences135
mean7.59
std7.01
cv0.924
sampleLengths
09
111
220
36
42
59
67
71
82
97
1027
114
121
132
142
1527
169
173
187
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201
213
223
236
248
253
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275
282
2923
305
312
329
3318
3413
351
362
378
385
392
403
413
424
434
441
455
462
478
4814
491
68.40% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.45925925925925926
totalSentences135
uniqueOpeners62
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences95
matches
0"Just an address in Richmond"
1"Too rhythmic for an animal."
2"Just that oppressive silence swallowing"
3"Pale, slender, terminated with nails"
4"Just a mouth that stretched"
ratio0.053
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences95
matches
0"She'd read about places like"
1"She hadn't planned on coming"
2"She pulled out her phone."
3"Her pulse kicked up a"
4"She forced her breathing steady."
5"She reached for the pendant"
6"It pulsed faster now, a"
7"She looked down."
8"She moved toward what she"
9"It carried the fermented honey"
10"She clenched it into a"
11"She caught a glimpse of"
12"She dropped it, gasping, and"
13"They were fingers."
14"It had been crouching before,"
15"It tilted its head."
16"It wasn't warning her."
17"It was answering."
ratio0.189
96.84% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount69
totalSentences95
matches
0"The standing stones loomed ahead,"
1"Rory ducked beneath a low-hanging"
2"Wildflowers dotted the clearing floor,"
3"She'd read about places like"
4"The Heartstone pendant pulsed against"
5"She hadn't planned on coming"
6"The note had been slipped"
7"Rory stepped between the first"
8"The air changed."
9"The sounds of Richmond Park,"
10"The held-breath kind."
11"The kind that preceded something"
12"The flowers released a scent"
13"She pulled out her phone."
14"The screen showed 12:03 AM,"
15"The Heartstone grew warmer still."
16"Rory moved deeper into the"
17"The wildflowers grew denser toward"
18"Shapes that hurt to follow"
19"Something rustled to her left."
ratio0.726
52.63% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences95
matches
0"If she couldn't find the"
ratio0.011
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Rory ducked beneath a low-hanging branch that shouldn't exist in November."
1"Wildflowers dotted the clearing floor, blues and purples and sickly whites that had no business blooming this time of year."
2"The note had been slipped under her flat door while she'd been out on deliveries, handwritten on cream cardstock in ink that shimmered when you tilted it."
3"Just an address in Richmond that mapped to nothing on any normal street grid, but everything in the battered notebook Eva had left behind before she'd disappear…"
4"The sounds of Richmond Park, the distant A205 traffic, the dogs in the residential streets, all of it cut off as though someone had thrown a switch."
5"The wildflowers grew denser toward the centre, forming patterns that looked almost deliberate."
6"It had been crouching before, folding itself into that liquid movement, but now it rose to a height that put it a full head above her."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"The mouth moved, but the voice came from everywhere and nowhere, echoing from the stones, the soil, the grasping fingers around her feet"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
85.5834%