Run: 2026-03-15-01KKS2YQ5W127V6R99MKWCWDFD

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Duration:
31.1s
Cost:
$0.006250
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Z.AI

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The pendant burned against Rory's collarbone. She stopped walking. Her hand rose to the silver chain, fingers brushing the crimson gemstone. Warm. Too warm. The same heat she'd felt twice before, both times near things that shouldn't exist in London's tidy geography. The Grove stretched ahead, a perfect circle of wildflowers that had no business blooming in November. Bluebells. Snowdrops. Foxgloves with their poisonous throats turned toward her like hungry mouths. The ancient oaks formed a ring around the clearing, their trunks twisted into shapes that resembled standing stones more than trees. Rory checked her phone. No signal. The screen showed 11:47 PM, but she'd stopped trusting digital clocks three weeks ago when one had kept running backward during a delivery to Bloomsbury. "Right then." Her voice sounded wrong here. Muffled. Swallowed by the air itself. She'd come because of the missing girl. Sixteen-year-old Hannah Marsh, last seen entering Richmond Park after midnight four days ago. The police had searched the grounds twice. Rory had found Hannah's scarf snagged on a bramble not fifty metres from this spot, which meant either the girl had wandered into the Grove or something had dragged her here. The wildflowers crunched under her boots. Dry. Papery. The sound was wrong for fresh blooms, wrong for November, wrong for anything that should be alive. A branch snapped somewhere to her left. Rory turned. Nothing. Just the oaks with their bark like old skin, their branches reaching across the sky in patterns that hurt to follow. She counted them. Twelve. Then thirteen. Then twelve again. The pendant's warmth spread up her neck. "You're not afraid of the dark." She said it to herself, the way she'd said it while packing a torch, a knife, and a bag of salt into her rucksack two hours ago. Precautions her father would have called irrational. Precautions that had kept her alive through three encounters with things that defied his tidy legal logic. Something moved behind the third oak on the right. Rory's hand went to the knife in her jacket pocket. She didn't pull it out. Not yet. Pulling it out meant admitting she needed it, and admitting she needed it meant admitting what she was dealing with wasn't human. The wildflowers swayed. No wind. No breeze. Just a slow, deliberate ripple that spread from the centre of the clearing outward, like something breathing beneath the soil. Her phone buzzed. Signal restored for exactly three seconds. A text from Eva: *Where are you? It's been six hours.* Six hours. Rory had left her flat above Silas's bar at half ten. The walk to Richmond Park took forty minutes. She'd entered the Grove maybe ten minutes ago. The math didn't work. She stepped forward, testing the ground. Solid. Real. The wildflowers continued their impossible bloom, petals in colours that didn't have names, shades that seemed to shift when she looked directly at them. A bluebell turned from violet to something closer to bruise-purple to a colour that existed only in the space between seeing and understanding. The temperature dropped. Not gradually. All at once, like walking through an invisible curtain. Her breath didn't fog, though. The cold wasn't physical. It was the kind of cold that lived in empty rooms and unanswered phones and the silence after a scream. The pendant flared hot enough to hurt. Rory finally pulled the knife. "Who's there?" The Grove answered with silence. Not the absence of sound, but a presence. A weight. Like the silence between heartbeats stretched to fill the entire clearing. The oaks moved. She didn't see them move. But when she looked again, they were closer. The branches that had been metres away now reached toward her like fingers, like ribs, like the bars of a cage assembling itself one piece at a time. Rory backed toward the gap between two trees. The gap that had been wide enough to walk through thirty seconds ago. Now it barely accommodated her shoulders. "Don't." The voice came from everywhere. From the earth. From the flowers. From the space behind her eyes. Rory spun. Nothing. The same wrong wildflowers, the same shifting oaks, the same oppressive silence that pressed against her eardrums like deep water. But there was a shape now. At the edge of her vision, just beyond the treeline. Tall. Thin. Wrong in the way that a reflection is wrong when you catch it moving a half-second too late. She kept her eyes forward. Stared at the oak directly ahead. Counted the knots in its bark like sheep, like prayers, like anything that would keep her from looking at the thing in her peripheral vision. The shape moved closer. "You shouldn't have come, Laila." The name hit her like a slap. No one called her Laila. No one had ever called her Laila. It wasn't her name, wasn't a nickname, wasn't anything she recognised from any part of her life in Cardiff or London or anywhere else. The pendant's heat became pain. She looked down. The crimson gemstone glowed like an ember pulled from a fire, bright enough to cast shadows on her hand. Shadows that moved wrong. "There you are." The voice again, closer now, close enough that she felt breath on the back of her neck that carried the scent of rot and honey. "I've been waiting so long. Dymas said you'd come. He always knows." Dymas. The name meant nothing to her. But the pendant meant something. The pendant that had appeared on her pillow six months ago with no note, no explanation, no return address. The pendant that had led her to the first Hel portal, that had burned when the shadows in Whitechapel had tried to pull her under, that had saved her life twice without her understanding how or why. The shape in her peripheral vision was beside her now. She could feel it. The displacement of air, the wrongness of its presence, the way reality seemed to bend around it like light around a black hole. Rory's knife hand trembled. She steadied it. Forced her breathing to slow. Thought of her father's courtroom voice, the one he used when the evidence was bad and the jury was hostile and the only option was to project certainty until certainty became truth. "I don't know you." She kept her eyes forward. "I don't know that name. And I'm leaving." "Soon." The voice was softer now. Almost gentle. "But not yet. The door isn't finished opening." The ground beneath her feet trembled. The wildflowers parted, stems bending away from a point directly in front of her, revealing dark soil that seemed to go down forever. No. Not soil. Darkness. A hole in the world that had no bottom, no sides, no end. The pendant burned white-hot, and the darkness began to rise.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences11
tagDensity0.364
leniency0.727
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1134
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
51.50% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1134
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"perfect"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count1
2
word"silence"
count4
3
word"weight"
count1
4
word"oppressive"
count1
5
word"could feel"
count1
6
word"trembled"
count2
highlights
0"perfect"
1"warmth"
2"silence"
3"weight"
4"oppressive"
5"could feel"
6"trembled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences126
matches(empty)
86.17% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences126
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
2"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences132
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords7
totalWords1134
ratio0.006
matches
0"Where are you? It's been six hours."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions38
wordCount1082
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity0.92
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory10
London2
Grove4
November2
Bloomsbury1
Muffled1
Hannah2
Marsh1
Richmond2
Park2
Precautions2
Eva1
Six1
Silas1
Laila2
Cardiff1
Dymas1
Hel1
Whitechapel1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Grove"
2"Hannah"
3"Eva"
4"Silas"
5"Laila"
places
0"London"
1"Bloomsbury"
2"Marsh"
3"Richmond"
4"Park"
5"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
70.63% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences63
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"shades that seemed to shift when she looked directly at them"
1"soil that seemed to go down forever"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.882
wordCount1134
matches
0"Not the absence of sound, but a presence"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences132
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs44
mean25.77
std17.92
cv0.695
sampleLengths
06
136
250
331
413
558
625
77
833
97
1057
119
1239
1327
1420
1529
164
1755
1843
197
205
212
2226
233
2441
2527
261
2717
2823
2936
3036
314
325
3343
3427
354
3640
3768
3837
3944
4017
4116
4246
4310
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences126
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs173
matches
0"was dealing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences132
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1087
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount42
adverbRatio0.03863845446182153
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.00827966881324747
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences132
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences132
mean8.59
std8.16
cv0.95
sampleLengths
06
13
212
31
42
518
616
71
81
911
1021
114
122
1325
147
151
165
177
1813
197
2031
216
221
231
2417
257
262
271
2821
293
301
312
323
337
3433
357
3617
379
3810
395
402
4122
423
432
442
4520
463
476
487
494
58.59% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.4015151515151515
totalSentences132
uniqueOpeners53
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences97
matches
0"Just the oaks with their"
1"Then twelve again."
2"Just a slow, deliberate ripple"
ratio0.031
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount20
totalSentences97
matches
0"She stopped walking."
1"Her hand rose to the"
2"Her voice sounded wrong here"
3"She'd come because of the"
4"She counted them."
5"She said it to herself,"
6"She didn't pull it out."
7"Her phone buzzed."
8"It's been six hours.*"
9"She'd entered the Grove maybe"
10"She stepped forward, testing the"
11"Her breath didn't fog, though."
12"It was the kind of"
13"She didn't see them move."
14"She kept her eyes forward."
15"It wasn't her name, wasn't"
16"She looked down."
17"She could feel it."
18"She steadied it."
19"She kept her eyes forward"
ratio0.206
88.87% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount72
totalSentences97
matches
0"The pendant burned against Rory's"
1"She stopped walking."
2"Her hand rose to the"
3"The same heat she'd felt"
4"The Grove stretched ahead, a"
5"Foxgloves with their poisonous throats"
6"The ancient oaks formed a"
7"Rory checked her phone."
8"The screen showed 11:47 PM,"
9"Her voice sounded wrong here"
10"She'd come because of the"
11"The police had searched the"
12"Rory had found Hannah's scarf"
13"The wildflowers crunched under her"
14"The sound was wrong for"
15"A branch snapped somewhere to"
16"She counted them."
17"The pendant's warmth spread up"
18"She said it to herself,"
19"Precautions her father would have"
ratio0.742
51.55% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences97
matches
0"Now it barely accommodated her"
ratio0.01
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The same heat she'd felt twice before, both times near things that shouldn't exist in London's tidy geography."
1"The Grove stretched ahead, a perfect circle of wildflowers that had no business blooming in November."
2"Precautions that had kept her alive through three encounters with things that defied his tidy legal logic."
3"The wildflowers continued their impossible bloom, petals in colours that didn't have names, shades that seemed to shift when she looked directly at them."
4"A bluebell turned from violet to something closer to bruise-purple to a colour that existed only in the space between seeing and understanding."
5"The pendant that had appeared on her pillow six months ago with no note, no explanation, no return address."
6"The wildflowers parted, stems bending away from a point directly in front of her, revealing dark soil that seemed to go down forever."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences11
tagDensity0.091
leniency0.182
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.2433%