Run: 2026-03-15-01KKS34NKZNFA6M9R3BXKZ6JSZ

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Duration:
30.2s
Cost:
$0.013736
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Z.AI

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The gin glass had a chip on the rim. I noticed because I'd been staring at it for the better part of twenty minutes, watching condensation slide down the sides while Silas wiped down bottles behind the counter with the focus of a man who'd spent decades pretending not to watch things. "I thought you gave up gin." The voice came from my left. Female. Welsh accent, softened by years in London but still there underneath, like old wallpaper beneath new paint. I turned. Eva Price stood three feet away, wearing a charcoal coat that cost more than three months of my rent, her blonde hair cut into a sharp bob that framed her face like something from a magazine spread. She looked polished. Removed. Like someone had taken the girl I'd grown up with and sanded down all her rough edges until she could pass as art. "Eva." "Rory." She slid onto the stool beside me. Her heels were burgundy leather, the kind that clicked against the floor with authority. "It's been what, three years?" "Four." Four years, two months, and eleven days. Not that I'd counted. "Four years." She signalled to Silas. "Vodka soda. Lime." Silas raised an eyebrow at me. I gave a small nod. He poured without comment, his hazel eyes taking in Eva's coat, her watch, the way she sat like she owned the space around her. Old habits. He'd been out of the game for years, but some things never left you. "So this is where you ended up." Eva's gaze swept across the bar, the old maps on the walls, the black-and-white photographs, the green neon sign visible through the window. "Living above a pub in Soho. Delivering Chinese food." "Among other things." "Right. Among other things." She took a sip of her drink. Her nails were painted a deep red, manicured to perfection. I remembered when we used to paint each other's nails in her bedroom, using whatever cheap bottles we'd nicked from Superdrug. Hers had always been messy. Mine too. "You look well." "You look tired." Fair enough. Silas moved down to the other end of the bar, suddenly very interested in restocking a shelf that didn't need restocking. Smart man. "Cardiff feels like a lifetime ago," Eva said. "Does it?" "Don't it for you?" I set down my glass. "Why are you here, Eva?" "What, a girl can't visit an old friend?" "An old friend you haven't spoken to in four years. An old friend whose texts you stopped answering. An old friend who apparently lives somewhere you could've visited any time, but didn't." She didn't flinch. That was new. Old Eva would've flinched. Old Eva cried during pub arguments about whose turn it was to buy shots. "I heard about Evan." My hand tightened around the glass. "What about him?" "That he's been asking around. Looking for you." She said it casually, like she was commenting on the weather. But her fingers tapped against the bar, a staccato rhythm that betrayed her. "He's been looking for me for four years." "More actively lately. Called my mum's house last month." Something cold settled in my stomach. "He called your mum's?" "Wanted to know if I'd heard from you. Said you'd stolen something from him. Money, I think." "I didn't steal anything from Evan." "I know that. Mum knows that. Evan's a lying bastard who couldn't find his own arse with both hands." She paused. "But he's persistent. And he's got new friends." "What kind of friends?" "The kind with neck tattoos and opinions about debt collection." I let that sit for a moment. The bar was quiet. A couple in the corner argued in hushed tones. Someone's phone buzzed insistently from a pocket. "Why tell me now?" I asked. "Because I should've told you sooner. Because I'm a shit friend who got scared when things got complicated and decided avoidance was easier than actually showing up." She turned to face me fully. Her eyes were the same green they'd always been. That hadn't changed. "And because I'm leaving." "Leaving London?" "Leaving England. Got a job offer. Berlin." "Berlin." I tasted the word. It felt foreign. "When?" "End of the month." "So this is a goodbye, then." "This is an apology. The goodbye's a bonus." Silas appeared with a fresh bottle of gin. Didn't ask if I wanted one, just poured. I didn't stop him. "What happened to you, Eva?" "What do you mean?" "Four years ago, you told me to run. You helped me pack my bags at two in the morning while Evan was passed out downstairs. You drove me to the train station and you told me not to look back." I kept my voice level. "Then you disappeared." "I didn't disappear. I got a job. I moved on." "To what? Corporate law? Expensive coats? Ignoring your friends?" "Yes." The word hung between us. "Yes, to all of it. I got a job at a firm in the City. I worked sixteen-hour days. I dated the wrong people and made money I don't have time to spend and I built a life that looks good from the outside but feels like a fucking cage from the inside." Her voice cracked on the last word. Just slightly. Just enough. "And somewhere in there, I convinced myself that keeping my distance from you was protecting both of us. That if Evan came looking, he wouldn't find a connection. A trail." "He found one anyway. Your mum." "I know. I know, and I'm sorry." The silence stretched. I drank. She drank. The couple in the corner had stopped arguing. The woman was crying now, her face buried in her hands. The man stared at his phone like it held answers. "I don't know how to be your friend anymore," I said. "I don't know who you are." "You know who I am." "I know who you were." "Same person. Just..." She gestured at herself, at the coat, the watch, the perfect manicure. "Better packaging." "Is it though? Better?" She didn't answer. The door to the bar opened. Two men walked in, broad shoulders, matching jackets. One of them had a tattoo crawling up his neck, disappearing beneath his collar. The other scanned the room with the practised efficiency of someone looking for something specific. Eva went rigid beside me. "That's them," she whispered. "Evan's friends. They followed me." I set my glass down carefully. Silas's hand had already moved beneath the counter. "Don't turn around," I said. "Slowly get up. Walk to the back. There's a bookshelf near the fire exit. Third book from the left on the second shelf opens it." "What-" "Eva. Trust me. Like I trusted you four years ago." The men approached the bar. The one with the neck tattoo smiled. It didn't reach his eyes. "Aurora Carter?" he said. "Evan sends his regards."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences67
tagDensity0.284
leniency0.567
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
78.20% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1147
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
3
adverb"carefully"
count1
4
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"very"
2"slightly"
3"carefully"
4"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
78.20% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1147
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"eyebrow"
count1
1
word"stomach"
count1
2
word"silence"
count1
3
word"perfect"
count1
4
word"scanned"
count1
highlights
0"eyebrow"
1"stomach"
2"silence"
3"perfect"
4"scanned"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences80
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences80
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences127
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen61
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1147
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount624
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity1.12
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Silas6
Female1
London1
Price1
Eva7
Superdrug1
Old3
persons
0"Silas"
1"Price"
2"Eva"
places
0"London"
1"Superdrug"
globalScore0.939
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences41
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1147
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences127
matches
0"let that sit"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs68
mean16.87
std18.3
cv1.085
sampleLengths
052
130
22
364
41
527
612
79
851
939
103
1149
123
133
142
1523
168
172
184
1910
208
2132
2224
234
249
2532
268
279
2810
2917
306
3129
324
3310
3427
356
3649
372
387
399
404
416
428
4320
445
454
4648
4710
489
49100
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences80
matches
0"were painted"
86.04% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs117
matches
0"was commenting"
1"was crying"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences127
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount626
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.03035143769968051
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.009584664536741214
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences127
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences127
mean9.03
std9.51
cv1.053
sampleLengths
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143
212
31
417
52
637
73
81
923
101
118
1214
135
148
154
166
173
186
195
2024
212
2214
2330
249
253
2611
2710
2821
295
302
313
323
332
3421
352
368
372
384
395
405
418
4232
433
443
454
4614
474
486
493
69.29% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.47244094488188976
totalSentences127
uniqueOpeners60
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences62
matches(empty)
ratio0
39.35% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount28
totalSentences62
matches
0"I noticed because I'd been"
1"She looked polished."
2"She slid onto the stool"
3"Her heels were burgundy leather,"
4"She signalled to Silas"
5"I gave a small nod."
6"He poured without comment, his"
7"He'd been out of the"
8"She took a sip of"
9"Her nails were painted a"
10"I remembered when we used"
11"Hers had always been messy."
12"I set down my glass."
13"She didn't flinch."
14"My hand tightened around the"
15"She said it casually, like"
16"I let that sit for"
17"She turned to face me"
18"Her eyes were the same"
19"I tasted the word"
ratio0.452
32.58% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount53
totalSentences62
matches
0"The gin glass had a"
1"I noticed because I'd been"
2"The voice came from my"
3"Welsh accent, softened by years"
4"Eva Price stood three feet"
5"She looked polished."
6"She slid onto the stool"
7"Her heels were burgundy leather,"
8"She signalled to Silas"
9"Silas raised an eyebrow at"
10"I gave a small nod."
11"He poured without comment, his"
12"He'd been out of the"
13"Eva's gaze swept across the"
14"She took a sip of"
15"Her nails were painted a"
16"I remembered when we used"
17"Hers had always been messy."
18"Silas moved down to the"
19"I set down my glass."
ratio0.855
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences62
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences16
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"I noticed because I'd been staring at it for the better part of twenty minutes, watching condensation slide down the sides while Silas wiped down bottles behind…"
1"Eva Price stood three feet away, wearing a charcoal coat that cost more than three months of my rent, her blonde hair cut into a sharp bob that framed her face …"
2"Her heels were burgundy leather, the kind that clicked against the floor with authority."
3"Silas moved down to the other end of the bar, suddenly very interested in restocking a shelf that didn't need restocking."
4"But her fingers tapped against the bar, a staccato rhythm that betrayed her."
5"One of them had a tattoo crawling up his neck, disappearing beneath his collar."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences67
tagDensity0.104
leniency0.209
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.03
82.2336%