Run: 2026-03-18-01KM07P6M9RBN8CYZMQ96AT70N

Run Details

Duration:
24.2s
Cost:
$0.006929
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The green neon sign above the Raven’s Nest kept buzzing like a fly that refused to die. Aurora Carter stopped under it anyway, because the noise forced her to look at the entrance properly. Old wood. Dark glass. A strip of light leaking out as if the bar breathed. She pushed the door open and the warmth hit her first—beer, citrus cleaner, and something smoky that clung to the walls. The room felt dim in a way the street never did. Maps covered the space, edges curled like they had lived through rain. Black-and-white photographs hung between them, faces half-turned, eyes caught mid-thought. She paused by the doorway, shoulders squared, hands still on the strap of her delivery bag. She hadn’t planned to come in. She had told herself she’d grab one thing from upstairs and leave. The delivery shift had ended hours ago, Yu-Fei’s kitchen still hot in her memory, Eva’s messages still glowing on her phone—thin, quiet reminders that she still had people in her corner. Aurora stepped further in and the bar’s counter caught her eye. It ran along the right wall, polished from years of palms and elbows and the nervous tapping of rings. A man stood behind it, grey-streaked auburn hair combed back like he still had a reason to care about precision. He looked up as if he felt her before he saw her. His hazel eyes tracked to her face, then to her hands, then settled on the crescent-shaped scar at her left wrist. The silver signet ring on his right hand caught what little light came from the ceiling fixtures and threw it back sharper. Aurora felt the old reflexes in her body—the part that listened for angles, for exits, for the way a room shifted when someone entered. She kept her face steady. Silas Blackwood didn’t smile. Not at first. His expression held a question he didn’t ask out loud, the kind he used to write in reports. “Rory,” he said. Aurora’s breath left her in one controlled slip. She had heard the name in her head for years without ever letting it out in public. “Silas,” she said, like the words could anchor her. Then she corrected herself, because her voice carried too much surprise. “Aurora. Not—” She glanced down at her delivery bag strap, at the way her fingers kept holding it like it might bolt. “Not Rory anymore.” Silas moved from behind the bar. His limp showed itself when he stepped, his left knee taking weight a beat later than it should. He walked slow, but he didn’t hesitate. He came around the counter with the ease of someone who had walked through trouble so often it had stopped being weather and started being routine. Aurora saw him close up: the neat beard, the grey through auburn, the faint lines at the corners of his eyes. Time had tightened him without thinning him. He looked older, but the set of his shoulders still held that old quiet authority. “You still keep your hands busy,” he said, looking at her strap. Aurora tightened her grip once, then let her fingers loosen. She set the delivery bag on a barstool like it belonged there. “You still watch people like they owe you answers,” she said. Silas’s mouth twitched, almost a smile. He stopped beside her stool and leaned in just enough that his signet ring hovered near her wrist, close to the scar but not touching. “You came in through that door like you wanted to be alone,” he said. “Then you walked straight to the centre of the room.” “I didn’t plan,” Aurora replied. She listened to her own voice. It sounded sharper than she meant it to. She wiped her palm on her jeans and felt the fabric catch on nothing. “I walked in because your neon sign is loud enough to find you from the street.” Silas straightened, the ring flashing as he turned. “You didn’t used to notice neon.” Aurora’s throat tightened at how quickly he grabbed the past. She stared past him at the maps. A road network traced itself across paper like veins. Somewhere, a line marked in ink looked thick enough to cut. “I lived in cities,” she said, “and cities taught me how to look without being seen.” Silas pulled out a stool opposite her, sat, and rested both hands on the bar top. The limp didn’t disappear when he sat. It lingered in the angle of his leg, a reminder he couldn’t talk away. “You left,” he said. Aurora blinked once. She didn’t move her face, not much. “You don’t get to say it like it’s one word.” Silas held her gaze. His eyes didn’t soften; they sharpened into something careful. “It came out as one word in my head. It never came out that way on paper.” Aurora stared at the dark line of the bar’s varnish where old scratches lived. Her fingers worried the edge of her wrist, circling the scar without pressing it. The injury felt like a memory she kept in the wrong drawer. “What are you doing here?” she asked. “I thought you… retired.” Silas’s head tilted. “I did.” “Then why is this place open?” Aurora asked. Silas glanced around. The bar’s lights didn’t flicker like they had a budget to spare. Glasses waited on shelves. A bottle label caught the neon and turned it green. “I run it,” he said. “You know that.” Aurora didn’t. Not really. She had lived above him like a reluctant neighbour, heard the bar’s noises travel up through the floorboards, caught glimpses through the stairwell window when she took deliveries late. She hadn’t asked him questions. She hadn’t wanted answers that came with strings. She shifted, the stool creaking. “I know you’re the guy who owns the bar.” Silas looked at her like he wanted to correct her and decided to let it sit. “What do you call it in your head, Aurora?” She didn’t answer at once. The air between them filled with the scratch of a distant chair leg settling somewhere outside her sight. A bottle clink echoed under the maps. “Home,” she said at last, and hated how easily it came out. “For the last few years, it has been home.” Silas’s gaze dropped to her wrist again. “Does it still hurt when the weather changes?” Aurora’s jaw tightened. “How would you know?” Silas’s ring rested near his thumb as he tapped once. A small sound. Controlled. “I’ve watched you walk in and out,” he said. “Not tonight. Not this week. I’ve watched you for longer than you think.” Aurora felt heat rise under her skin. She kept her voice level anyway. “Don’t do that.” Silas didn’t flinch. “I didn’t say it to make you angry.” “Then don’t make me feel watched,” Aurora snapped. Silas leaned back slightly, the bar top supporting him like a desk. He studied her face, the way her eyes moved when she tried to hold her anger and the way her fingers kept returning to the scar as if it offered a script. “You think I stayed away because I stopped caring,” he said. Aurora stared straight ahead at the photographs. A man with a moustache grinned beside a woman with a cigarette. Another image showed a group lined up outside a building Aurora didn’t recognise. She focused on the edges of the pictures instead of letting Silas pull her into a conversation with teeth. “You didn’t show up,” she said. Silas’s expression went still. “After Prague?” Aurora’s breath caught. The word landed between them with a weight she refused to pick up. “You don’t get to bring that up like it’s a story you can close.” Silas’s eyes held hers harder. “It wasn’t a story.” Aurora laughed once, short and without humour. “You tell yourself it wasn’t? You stood in front of people and you—” She cut herself off. She didn’t need the rest of the sentence. She had replayed enough of those moments in her head to know what they sounded like. Silas didn’t rush in with excuses. He didn’t lift his hands. He sat with patience that didn’t look kind. It looked like training. “I carried the regret,” he said. “I carried it until it started to feel like another injury.” Aurora turned her wrist slightly, letting the scar face upward. The crescent marked her like a signature she had never asked for. “You carried it,” she said. “So did I.” Silas’s eyes tracked the scar, then moved to her face. “You stopped talking to me.” “I stopped talking because every time I opened my mouth, someone tried to steer it,” Aurora replied. “You remember what it felt like? Not the big operations. The small decisions. The way you’d look at a person and act like you owned their next move.” Silas nodded once, like he accepted the charge. “I looked at you like that because I believed I had the right to.” Aurora leaned forward. The stool legs scraped faintly against the floor. “And you still believed it when it went wrong.” Silas’s jaw flexed. His limp shifted when he adjusted his stance. “Yes.” Aurora stared at him so hard it hurt. Her anger had a direction now, not just a heat. It aimed at one point. One choice. “I ran,” she said. “Not because I didn’t trust you. Because you weren’t the only person in my life who could make choices for me.” Silas’s gaze sharpened. “Evan.” Aurora’s fingers curled into her palm. The name carried a cold that didn’t need elaboration. “He kept showing up in places I thought he couldn’t reach,” she said. “He didn’t care what he broke. He just liked the sound.” Silas’s voice stayed low. “Eva told you to leave.” Aurora nodded once, slow. “She told me to go. I did. London caught me like a net that didn’t ask if I wanted it. But I didn’t go back to you.” Silas exhaled through his nose. “I never asked you to.” “You didn’t have to,” Aurora said. “Your silence did the asking.” Silas looked down at his signet ring. He rubbed his thumb over the edge as if it had teeth. “You think I stayed quiet because I didn’t want you,” he said. Aurora leaned back, her shoulders dropping a fraction. “I thought you disappeared.” Silas lifted his eyes. “I was hurt. I had paperwork that didn’t know how to admit failure. I had men who needed someone to blame. I had a list of names that got thinner every week.” Aurora watched his mouth as he spoke. She didn’t interrupt. The room filled with the quiet hum of the neon and the distant shuffle of the city beyond the street. “You had me on that list,” she said. Silas didn’t deny it. “I did.” Aurora’s voice went flat. “And you didn’t add my name to the ‘found’ column.” Silas leaned forward now, closing the gap between them with posture alone. The signet ring hovered over the bar top like a cursor. “I tried,” he said. “I asked questions. I sent messages that couldn’t reach you because you had already cut the line. You moved like you’d learned to run through dark hallways.” Aurora’s lips parted, but no argument came out at once. She stared at him and felt her memories rearrange themselves in her chest—London nights, staircase landings, the way she held her breath when she heard footsteps above the bar and decided they weren’t his. “I didn’t want to be found,” she said. Silas nodded as if she had delivered a fact he already carried. “I know.” Aurora swallowed. “You don’t get to say you know.” Silas’s expression shifted, the first real movement in it tonight. It held something like sorrow, but he didn’t dress it up. “I did,” he said. “I watched you build a life out of small jobs and locked doors. You delivered food. You worked nights. You lived above this bar like you could keep a distance from the man who might still look through you.” Aurora’s eyes flicked to the ceiling above the bar, to the flat where her life sat, quiet and practical. The thought of being seen from below made her skin crawl. “I don’t live above you to keep distance,” she said. “I live above you because you rent to people who don’t ask questions.” Silas’s mouth tightened. “You don’t ask because you don’t trust answers.” Aurora opened her delivery bag and pulled out a wrapped container like it had weight beyond food. The smell of hot spices drifted out and cut through the bar’s stale air. Silas watched the container like he expected it to explode. “Yu-Fei’s.” Aurora nodded. “I brought you something.” Silas didn’t reach for it. “You don’t have to—” “I do,” Aurora replied. She set the container between them with a soft thud. “You used to tell me I had a habit of doing the right thing in the wrong time.” Silas’s eyes narrowed at her, as if he could catch that younger habit in her face. “And you kept it.” Aurora sat back, hands folded. “I kept parts. I lost parts too.” Silas glanced at her hands again. “The scar didn’t make you careful.” Aurora’s fingers moved to the scar again. She traced the crescent edge with her thumb. “It taught me one thing,” she said. “It taught me that pain can look finished and still come back.” Silas studied her, then shifted his right hand. The signet ring flashed as he slid it slightly away from the edge of the bar. A small gesture, but Aurora noticed it. “What did you come for tonight?” Silas asked. Aurora paused. Her instinct wanted to dodge. It wanted to turn the conversation into surface things—weather, deliveries, her hours at Golden Empress. But Silas leaned into direct questions the way he used to lean into doors. “I came to pick up a file,” she said. Silas stilled. “You didn’t tell me.” “I didn’t tell anyone,” Aurora replied. Her voice stayed steady, but her eyes didn’t. “I walked past your door three times before I came in. I told myself I’d forget it. I didn’t.” Silas looked over her shoulder toward the back of the bar. The maps there grew darker, the photographs older. A bookshelf sat flush against the wall, its arrangement too neat to be accidental. Aurora followed his glance. The bookshelf waited like it had always waited. “You knew it was there,” Silas said. Aurora’s throat tightened. “I lived above your bar. I’ve seen the cover shift when you move it. I’ve heard the quiet click when you close it.” Silas didn’t reach for the bookshelf. He didn’t stand. He simply watched her reaction like he wanted to understand how she had lived with the knowledge. “Why now?” he asked. Aurora looked back at him. “Because I can’t keep pretending I don’t need it.” Silas’s gaze held hers. “Need what?” Aurora hesitated just long enough for her anger to flare, then she pushed through it. “Proof,” she said. “I wanted it years ago. I wanted it when you stopped answering. I wanted it when Eva looked at me like she knew I’d been bricked up inside my own life.” Silas’s eyes flickered. “Eva still checks on you.” “She sends messages,” Aurora said. “She doesn’t push. She knows me.” Silas nodded. “Good.” Aurora stared at him, waiting for a comment that would slip into judgement. It didn’t come. He sat with the word good like he had decided not to turn it into something sharper. “What did you expect from me?” Aurora asked. Silas’s hands stayed on the bar top. His signet ring looked too bright for a room this dim. “I expected you to survive,” he said. Aurora felt the tension in her shoulders ease and then tighten again, because survival didn’t fix regret. It never did. “You didn’t just expect it,” she said. “You planned it.” Silas’s jaw moved. “Yes.” Aurora leaned forward until her forearms touched the bar. The container between them steamed gently. “And you didn’t tell me,” she said. “You didn’t sit down and say, ‘Here’s what I can do, here’s what went wrong, here’s what you need.’ You left me to stitch my life together with what I could steal from the dark.” Silas’s eyes didn’t drop. “I couldn’t risk it. Not then.” Aurora shook her head. “That’s your answer every time.” Silas’s gaze held hers. “It was the only one I had.” Aurora looked toward the bookshelf again. Her mouth tasted like old metal. “So you kept the door.” Silas nodded once. “I kept it.” Aurora’s fingers tightened around the edge of her container. “Open it,” she said. Silas didn’t move immediately. He drew in a breath and let it out slowly. The bar’s map-covered walls seemed to press closer, old paper and old ink taking up space. “You want it because you still think it will change what happened,” he said. Aurora didn’t look away. “I want it because I’m tired of carrying guesses.” Silas finally stood. His limp returned in full when he shifted his weight. He walked toward the bookshelf, the neon light bending around him. Aurora stayed seated, spine straight, eyes tracking the way his hand reached for the spines and didn’t grab any single book like he searched for a secret by force. He slid one volume aside with a practised touch. The shelf shifted, and a hidden panel breathed open just enough to show darkness behind it. Aurora’s heart kicked hard, then slowed. She watched him hold the opening steady as if he guarded the space with his body. “You don’t have to—” he started. “I do,” Aurora said again, the same words but with different gravity. She stood up. Her delivery bag strap tugged at her shoulder as she stepped closer. Silas looked back at her, his eyes hazel and old. He lowered the signet ring hand, palm open in a small, surrendering gesture. Aurora reached for the gap in the bookshelf. Her scar sat in plain view, a crescent like a brand in the neon’s green spill. Silas held the shelf open and waited for her to move first.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags47
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Aurora said again [again]"
dialogueSentences117
tagDensity0.402
leniency0.803
rawRatio0.021
effectiveRatio0.017
88.49% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3040
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count3
3
adverb"gently"
count1
4
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"really"
2"slightly"
3"gently"
4"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
75.33% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3040
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"warmth"
count1
1
word"weight"
count4
2
word"traced"
count2
3
word"reminder"
count1
4
word"flicker"
count1
5
word"echoed"
count1
6
word"silence"
count1
7
word"footsteps"
count1
8
word"flicked"
count1
9
word"flickered"
count1
10
word"tension"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"weight"
2"traced"
3"reminder"
4"flicker"
5"echoed"
6"silence"
7"footsteps"
8"flicked"
9"flickered"
10"tension"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences251
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences251
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences321
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3035
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions64
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions119
wordCount2108
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity2.7
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity5.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Carter1
Yu-Fei1
Eva1
Blackwood1
Aurora57
Silas53
London1
Golden1
Empress1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Carter"
3"Yu-Fei"
4"Eva"
5"Blackwood"
6"Aurora"
7"Silas"
places
0"London"
1"Golden"
globalScore0.148
windowScore0
81.97% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences147
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"felt like a memory she kept in the wron"
1"sounded like"
2"something like sorrow, but he didn’t dress i"
3"tasted like old metal"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount3035
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences321
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs141
mean21.52
std13.91
cv0.646
sampleLengths
049
154
265
350
412
543
629
725
83
925
1045
1157
1243
1312
1422
1511
1631
1724
1849
1914
2037
2116
2237
234
2420
2530
2640
2711
285
298
3029
318
3246
3314
3425
3530
3621
3715
387
3914
4022
4116
4211
438
4444
4511
4651
476
486
4930
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences251
matches
0"being seen"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs432
matches(empty)
89.45% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences321
ratio0.019
matches
0"She pushed the door open and the warmth hit her first—beer, citrus cleaner, and something smoky that clung to the walls."
1"The delivery shift had ended hours ago, Yu-Fei’s kitchen still hot in her memory, Eva’s messages still glowing on her phone—thin, quiet reminders that she still had people in her corner."
2"Aurora felt the old reflexes in her body—the part that listened for angles, for exits, for the way a room shifted when someone entered."
3"His eyes didn’t soften; they sharpened into something careful."
4"She stared at him and felt her memories rearrange themselves in her chest—London nights, staircase landings, the way she held her breath when she heard footsteps above the bar and decided they weren’t his."
5"It wanted to turn the conversation into surface things—weather, deliveries, her hours at Golden Empress."
99.52% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2121
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount86
adverbRatio0.04054691183404055
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.006600660066006601
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences321
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences321
mean9.45
std6.72
cv0.71
sampleLengths
017
117
22
32
411
521
611
712
810
916
106
1112
1231
1311
1419
1520
1612
1721
1822
1924
205
214
223
2318
243
258
2617
279
2811
2922
303
316
3218
337
3426
3521
367
3715
3812
3910
4012
4111
426
4325
4414
4510
465
476
488
4914
44.70% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats17
diversityRatio0.14330218068535824
totalSentences321
uniqueOpeners46
33.50% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences199
matches
0"Then she corrected herself, because"
1"Somewhere, a line marked in"
ratio0.01
79.30% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount70
totalSentences199
matches
0"She pushed the door open"
1"She paused by the doorway,"
2"She hadn’t planned to come"
3"She had told herself she’d"
4"It ran along the right"
5"He looked up as if"
6"His hazel eyes tracked to"
7"She kept her face steady."
8"His expression held a question"
9"She had heard the name"
10"she said, like the words"
11"She glanced down at her"
12"His limp showed itself when"
13"He walked slow, but he"
14"He came around the counter"
15"He looked older, but the"
16"he said, looking at her"
17"She set the delivery bag"
18"He stopped beside her stool"
19"She listened to her own"
ratio0.352
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount194
totalSentences199
matches
0"The green neon sign above"
1"Aurora Carter stopped under it"
2"A strip of light leaking"
3"She pushed the door open"
4"The room felt dim in"
5"Maps covered the space, edges"
6"She paused by the doorway,"
7"She hadn’t planned to come"
8"She had told herself she’d"
9"The delivery shift had ended"
10"Aurora stepped further in and"
11"It ran along the right"
12"A man stood behind it,"
13"He looked up as if"
14"His hazel eyes tracked to"
15"The silver signet ring on"
16"Aurora felt the old reflexes"
17"She kept her face steady."
18"Silas Blackwood didn’t smile."
19"His expression held a question"
ratio0.975
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences199
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences91
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Her fingers worried the edge of her wrist, circling the scar without pressing it."
1"He studied her face, the way her eyes moved when she tried to hold her anger and the way her fingers kept returning to the scar as if it offered a script."
2"He rubbed his thumb over the edge as if it had teeth."
3"Silas’s eyes narrowed at her, as if he could catch that younger habit in her face."
4"She watched him hold the opening steady as if he guarded the space with his body."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags47
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags44
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Aurora snapped (snap)"
dialogueSentences117
tagDensity0.376
leniency0.752
rawRatio0.023
effectiveRatio0.017
83.0755%