Run: 2026-03-18-01KM07WYNSZX3HYX9VVCAQGG3K

Run Details

Duration:
20.9s
Cost:
$0.001645
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The standing stones were cold beneath Aurora’s palms, their surfaces worn smooth by centuries notched with spiralling runes that pulsed faintly beneath her touch like a slow, dreaming breath. The air smelled of damp earth and something brighter—jasmine maybe, or magnolia—mixed with the iron tang of old blood. She glanced over her shoulder. Nyx had already passed through, their form rippling between solid and smoke, leaving no disturbance in the moss where they walked. Isolde waited behind her, her silver hair stirring though no wind touched the clearing. “You must cross quickly,” Isolde said, her voice like frost on glass. “Time shifts here. What feels like a moment may not be.” Aurora swallowed, nudged the pendant beneath her shirt for reassurance, and stepped forward. The moment her boot cleared the stones the world dissolved. She found herself standing atop a broad obsidian staircase that spiralled upward into a sky of liquid gold, rimmed with swirling crimson clouds that moved like slow, dreaming serpents. The air was thick with scent—roasting meats, spiced wines, the musk of a thousand bodies pressed close. Laughter echoed, not entirely human, layered with chiming bells and something deeper, resonant like a drum made of living sinew. Below, the trees were no trees: their trunks writhing like serpents coiled in ecstasy, their bark lacquered in jewel tones, their branches heavy with fruit that glowed like lanterns. “Dymas,” murmured Nyx, their voice drifting through her like a shadow caress. “Gluttony made manifest.” Aurora’s stomach growled. She hadn’t eaten since breakfast, but hunger here felt different—not bodily, but existential, as if absence itself could starve you in this realm of endless bounty. She clenched her fists. Focus. Treat it like a job. Assess. Report. Isolde stepped onto the stair beside her, her bare feet making no sound on the black stone. “The first rule of this place: desire answered may become desire devouring. They feed on want as we feed on food.” A pair of figures descended the stairs, naked and gleaming, their skin patterned with shifting tattoos of food—peaches blooming, loaves of bread unraveling, grapes spilling like blood. One turned a face with too many teeth and smiled directly at Aurora. “You're new,” the one on the right said, voice a purr. “Fresh. Unfed. Are you hungry, little mortal?” Aurora stepped back. “No thanks. Just passing through.” The other laughed, a sound like melting chocolate and breaking glass. “Passing through? Oh, but everything passes through Dymas, and Dymas passes through everything. You’ll eat eventually. All do.” Nyx moved between them, their shadow form swelling into something vast, swallowing the light. The figures shrank back, dissolving into shimmering motes. “Touch her and I’ll unmake you.” Silence fell. The golden sky flickered, like a flame hesitating. “Strong shadow,” Isolde said neutrally. “That won’t always be enough.” Aurora exhaled, unclenching her jaw. “We’re looking for a way south,” she said to Isolde, ignoring the fading echoes. “Toward the Fae grove, but through Hel’s domain first.” “South is always there,” Isolde said. “But south here bends. It loops. It hungers. And the Veil thins near rifts—particularly in places of excess.” The staircase began to melt. Not collapse, not crumble—it softened like wax, the stone running in rivulets of silver-black. The air grew humid, thick with the scent of syrup and rotting roses. Ahead, the ground had become a vast garden where vines pulsed like arteries and flowers gasped open only to scream silently, their petals eyes that blinked in unison. Aurora’s pendant warmed against her sternum, faint and throbbing. Nyx shifted form, solidifying into a tall silhouette with violet eyes like distant stars caught in smoke. “The Heartstone reacts,” they said. “A portal lies ahead. But not just any portal—this one bleeds into Hel.” Isolde nodded slowly. “Then we walk through the mouth of hunger.” They descended the dissolving stairs. The garden turned carnivorous. A rosebush reached for Aurora’s wrist, thorns unspooling like springs, but before it could pierce her, Isolde flicked her fingers. A spark of pale fire leapt from her fingertips, and the thorns curled back, hissing like steam on hot stone. “These are Belphegor’s pets,” Isolde said. “They sense vitality.” “So I should look less alive?” Aurora asked wryly. Isolde almost smiled. “Try less *wanting*.” Aurora clamped her jaw shut. It wasn’t her fault she’d skipped dinner. But in this place, even memory could be tasted—she recalled the stale smell of her flat, the clatter of dishes from the restaurant below, Eva’s voice on the phone: “You’re burning yourself out, Rory. Eat something.” She pushed the thought away. Hunger wasn’t an excuse here. It was a liability. Ahead, the garden opened into a vast arena where figures in elaborate court dress lounged on cushions the colour of clotted cream, eating from golden platters laden with dishes Aurora couldn’t name—meats that twitched on the bone, fruits with rinds like polished obsidian, sauces that dripped neon blue and green. At the centre of the arena stood a colossal fountain. It wasn’t water that rose from it, but tendrils of smoke that spiralled upward before dissolving into the golden sky. At its base, a man knelt, skeletal and emaciated, his ribs visible beneath sallow skin. His hands were submerged in the smoke, feeding it. As they watched, a new tendril emerged—shaped like a loaf of bread—and the man wept as he consumed it. “Souls,” Nyx breathed. “Hel-bound contractors. They serve by feeding, and are fed upon in turn.” Aurora turned away. “Then we don’t linger.” Isolde placed a hand on her arm. Her fingers were ice. “We do not flee either. To flee is to admit hunger. To stop is to tempt consumption.” So they walked on, skirting the arena, the stench of opulence and decay thick in their throats. The ground trembled slightly, like a heartbeat. The fountain pulsed. Then Aurora saw the second staircase. This one descended, not ascended—cut into the living rock, etched with the same runes as the standing stones, but here the runes glowed faintly crimson, like embers in wet ash. The steps were wide and deep, worn smooth by countless descending feet, and at the bottom, a shimmering veil pulsed—thin, translucent, like a curtain of mercury disturbed by breath. The Heartstone flared against her chest, warm as a living coal. Nyx drifted closer. “That is the rift. The Veil. It bleeds between realms.” Isolde’s gaze sharpened. “The winter solstice approaches. The Veil weakens. Rifts grow.” Aurora stepped forward, hand going to the pendant beneath her shirt. She could feel heat, almost like blood flow, radiating from it. The crimson gem throbbed in time with her pulsenot with desire, but with proximity. This was no coincidence. “Someone led me here,” she said quietly. “They knew where I’d go. They gave me this.” She pulled the pendant free. In the golden light of Dymas, it pulsed deep crimson, as if filled with slow-moving embers. The gem cast erratic reflections on the stone. Nyx’s violet eyes darkened. “A beacon. Someone wants the rift found.” Isolde frowned. “Or wants you to find it. And stumble through.” Aurora turned the pendant over. No inscription, no maker’s mark. Just warmth. And certainty. She made a decision. “Okay,” she said. “But we go prepared.” From her belt sheath, she drew the Fae-Forged Blade. It was cold in her grip, numbing her fingertips almost instantly. The metal gave off a faint luminescence, like moonlight viewed through snow. Isolde had given it to her three nights ago in a dim alley behind Silas’ bar. “For cutting through illusions,” she’d said. “And hunger.” Nyx watched as Aurora tested the edge against her thumb—no cut, no mark, just cold. “Even demons fear this steel,” they said. “And demons crawl through rifts.” She slid it back into its sheath. Then she took a deep breath and stepped onto the crimson-rune staircase. The air grew thick with static. Her skin prickled. The pendant blazed against her sternum, illuminating the runes beneath her feet in a flickering crimson glow. The golden sky of Dymas dulled, drained of colour. Shadows lengthened, coiled, became something else. She descended. With every step, the world blurred. The arena, the garden, the figures on the stairs—all began to dissolve into streaks of light and dark, like a dream speeding up. The pendant burned brighter. The blade at her hip grew colder. She was crossing. Not just through space, but through something else. Then— A sound. Not a voice. Not an impact. But a tearing, like wet paper being rent in two. The world snapped back into focus. She was standing in deep twilight, under a sky pulsing with auroras of violet and emerald. The ground beneath her feet was slick with frost, the air sharp with the scent of pine and something older—ozone, decay, and the faint metallic tang of blood. And ahead of her, rising from the permafrost like the spine of a dead leviathan, was a wall of black ice veined with pulsating veins of crimson light. It hummed. A rift. Not just a tear. A door. Nyx stepped beside her, solid again, their silhouette trembling like heat off pavement. “We’re in Hel now,” they said. “But not where we aimed. Rifts bend desire. They lead where you fear, or where you wish.” Aurora’s breath fogged in the cold. “Where are we?” Isolde joined them, her breath no more visible than her footprints had been in the grove. She gazed at the rift with ancient eyes. “Closer to the heart of Gluttony. And closer to your hunger.” Aurora touched the pendant. It was still warm. No—not warm. Enkindled. Like it had been waiting. She realized, with dawning dread, that she wasn’t surprised. She had been fed a trail. And whatever had set it was waiting on the other side.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
63.64% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Isolde said neutrally [neutrally]"
1"Aurora asked wryly [wryly]"
2"she said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.409
leniency0.818
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.136
90.88% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1645
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"slowly"
2"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
27.05% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1645
totalAiIsms24
found
0
word"pulsed"
count5
1
word"echoed"
count1
2
word"stomach"
count1
3
word"desire"
count4
4
word"gleaming"
count1
5
word"unraveling"
count1
6
word"silence"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count1
8
word"echoes"
count1
9
word"flicked"
count1
10
word"trembled"
count1
11
word"etched"
count1
12
word"could feel"
count1
13
word"throbbed"
count1
14
word"pulse"
count1
15
word"beacon"
count1
16
word"warmth"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"echoed"
2"stomach"
3"desire"
4"gleaming"
5"unraveling"
6"silence"
7"flickered"
8"echoes"
9"flicked"
10"trembled"
11"etched"
12"could feel"
13"throbbed"
14"pulse"
15"beacon"
16"warmth"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
1
label"air was thick with"
count1
highlights
0"clenched her fists"
1"The air was thick with"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences136
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences136
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences163
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen51
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords1626
ratio0.001
matches
0"wanting"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions48
wordCount1317
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.37
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Isolde"
discoveredNames
Aurora18
Nyx9
Isolde15
Eva1
Heartstone1
Dymas2
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Nyx"
2"Isolde"
3"Eva"
4"Heartstone"
5"Dymas"
places(empty)
globalScore0.817
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences76
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
15.50% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.845
wordCount1626
matches
0"not bodily, but existential, as if absence itself could starve you in this r"
1"not with desire, but with proximity"
2"Not just through space, but through something else"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences163
matches
0"runes that pulsed"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs64
mean25.41
std24.86
cv0.978
sampleLengths
0111
113
210
395
415
541
638
740
818
98
1029
1128
1210
1310
1428
1524
1660
179
1835
1911
205
2153
229
236
2462
25123
2615
277
2828
2927
306
3159
3211
3313
3412
3540
3645
3711
3811
3914
404
417
4256
4327
4419
4541
462
4740
4811
491
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences136
matches
0"were submerged"
1"been fed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs242
matches
0"was crossing"
1"was standing"
2"was waiting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount18
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences16
totalSentences163
ratio0.098
matches
0"The air smelled of damp earth and something brighter—jasmine maybe, or magnolia—mixed with the iron tang of old blood."
1"The air was thick with scent—roasting meats, spiced wines, the musk of a thousand bodies pressed close."
2"She hadn’t eaten since breakfast, but hunger here felt different—not bodily, but existential, as if absence itself could starve you in this realm of endless bounty."
3"A pair of figures descended the stairs, naked and gleaming, their skin patterned with shifting tattoos of food—peaches blooming, loaves of bread unraveling, grapes spilling like blood."
4"Not collapse, not crumble—it softened like wax, the stone running in rivulets of silver-black."
5"But in this place, even memory could be tasted—she recalled the stale smell of her flat, the clatter of dishes from the restaurant below, Eva’s voice on the phone: “You’re burning yourself out, Rory. Eat something.” She pushed the thought away."
6"Ahead, the garden opened into a vast arena where figures in elaborate court dress lounged on cushions the colour of clotted cream, eating from golden platters laden with dishes Aurora couldn’t name—meats that twitched on the bone, fruits with rinds like polished obsidian, sauces that dripped neon blue and green."
7"As they watched, a new tendril emerged—shaped like a loaf of bread—and the man wept as he consumed it."
8"This one descended, not ascended—cut into the living rock, etched with the same runes as the standing stones, but here the runes glowed faintly crimson, like embers in wet ash."
9"The steps were wide and deep, worn smooth by countless descending feet, and at the bottom, a shimmering veil pulsed—thin, translucent, like a curtain of mercury disturbed by breath."
10"The crimson gem throbbed in time with her pulse—not with desire, but with proximity."
11"Nyx watched as Aurora tested the edge against her thumb—no cut, no mark, just cold."
12"The arena, the garden, the figures on the stairs—all began to dissolve into streaks of light and dark, like a dream speeding up."
13"Then—"
14"The ground beneath her feet was slick with frost, the air sharp with the scent of pine and something older—ozone, decay, and the faint metallic tang of blood."
15"No—not warm."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1042
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.03838771593090211
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.012476007677543186
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences163
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences163
mean9.98
std8.17
cv0.819
sampleLengths
029
119
25
321
414
512
611
713
810
929
1017
1120
1229
1312
143
153
1626
174
181
195
201
211
2217
2321
2427
2513
2611
277
283
295
3011
3118
3214
338
346
352
368
375
385
395
4014
419
426
4318
445
4514
4613
4728
489
4917
54.19% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.3619631901840491
totalSentences163
uniqueOpeners59
59.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences113
matches
0"Then Aurora saw the second"
1"Then she took a deep"
ratio0.018
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences113
matches
0"She glanced over her shoulder."
1"She found herself standing atop"
2"She hadn’t eaten since breakfast,"
3"She clenched her fists."
4"she said to Isolde, ignoring"
5"They descended the dissolving stairs."
6"It wasn’t her fault she’d"
7"It was a liability."
8"It wasn’t water that rose"
9"His hands were submerged in"
10"Her fingers were ice."
11"She could feel heat, almost"
12"she said quietly"
13"She pulled the pendant free"
14"She made a decision."
15"It was cold in her"
16"She slid it back into"
17"Her skin prickled."
18"She was crossing."
19"She was standing in deep"
ratio0.212
75.04% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount87
totalSentences113
matches
0"The standing stones were cold"
1"The air smelled of damp"
2"She glanced over her shoulder."
3"Nyx had already passed through,"
4"Isolde waited behind her, her"
5"Isolde said, her voice like"
6"Aurora swallowed, nudged the pendant"
7"The moment her boot cleared"
8"She found herself standing atop"
9"The air was thick with"
10"Laughter echoed, not entirely human,"
11"Aurora’s stomach growled."
12"She hadn’t eaten since breakfast,"
13"She clenched her fists."
14"Isolde stepped onto the stair"
15"A pair of figures descended"
16"the one on the right"
17"Aurora stepped back."
18"The other laughed, a sound"
19"Nyx moved between them, their"
ratio0.77
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences113
matches(empty)
ratio0
40.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences49
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Nyx had already passed through, their form rippling between solid and smoke, leaving no disturbance in the moss where they walked."
1"She found herself standing atop a broad obsidian staircase that spiralled upward into a sky of liquid gold, rimmed with swirling crimson clouds that moved like …"
2"Below, the trees were no trees: their trunks writhing like serpents coiled in ecstasy, their bark lacquered in jewel tones, their branches heavy with fruit that…"
3"She hadn’t eaten since breakfast, but hunger here felt different—not bodily, but existential, as if absence itself could starve you in this realm of endless bou…"
4"Ahead, the garden opened into a vast arena where figures in elaborate court dress lounged on cushions the colour of clotted cream, eating from golden platters l…"
5"It wasn’t water that rose from it, but tendrils of smoke that spiralled upward before dissolving into the golden sky."
6"In the golden light of Dymas, it pulsed deep crimson, as if filled with slow-moving embers."
97.22% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"murmured Nyx, their voice drifting through her like a shadow caress"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags14
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"murmured Nyx (murmur)"
1"Nyx breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.318
leniency0.636
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.091
78.0002%