Run: 2026-03-18-01KM07ZAM8551VQ29B194EH4WR

Run Details

Duration:
12.0s
Cost:
$0.001376
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The oak door groaned as I pushed it open, the hinges fighting me every inch. No matter how much WD-40 I sprayed on them, they never stopped screaming. The golden Empress sign above the door flickered, a sickly pulse like a dying heartbeat. "Keep telling yourself this is just another delivery run," I muttered, tightening the strap of my insulated bag. The Heartstone pendant at my collarbone pulsed faintly against the damp fabric of my shirt, a warm thrum that shouldn't comfort me but did. It was the middle of November, the kind of wet London cold that sneaks into your bones and stays there. Richmond Park was a different beast at night. The lamplights only reached so far, cutting claw-like shadows across the path. The natural order of things said I shouldn't be here. The sign by the park entrance had sloppily painted "CLOSED" across it, but some pedestrian had pried the padlock free. Yellow caution tape fluttered like the ghost of a bad decision. The standing stones ahead weren't visible from the main path. You had to know where you were going, which is exactly why Yu-Fei sent me. "Special late-night order," he'd said, rubbing his temples like the words physically pained him. "Take this to the people in the Grove. And Aurora? Don't go inside. It's not safe." I fished a scrap of paper from my pocket—the order chit. "Heartbreak pie. Toffee apple tart. Earl Grey tea." All heartbreak. Appropriate. My boots sank into the damp earth, the rich scent of wet moss and something sweeter—wildflowers gone over in winter—filling my nose. The air tasted metallic somehow, like licking a coin. My torch beam sliced through the black, overgrown ferns, and there they were: the standing stones. Five massive oaks, arranged like a pentagram. At their centre, a perfect black circle where no winter frost rested. The pendant grew warmer against my skin. "Hello?" My voice sounded too loud, echoing weirdly. The stones drank the sound, absorbed it into the dark. No answer came. I checked my watch—11.47pm. According to the order, delivery should take "no more than fifteen minutes." I glanced at my phone. No signal. Of course. A branch snapped somewhere behind me. I spun, torch swinging wildly. Nothing. Just the wind through skeletal branches. But the wind wasn't blowing a second ago. The torch flickered. I shook it—cheap battery from Poundland—but the beam steadied. For now. I stepped between the stones. The moment my left foot crossed the threshold, something shifted. The air didn't just grow colder; it grew *heavier*, pressing against my skin like wet wool. My breath came out as a shivering cloud. The pendant now glowed a deep crimson pulse, steady as a heartbeat. "Okay," I whispered, swallowing the metallic tang at the back of my throat. "Time's ticking." A bird—too large for this season—screeched somewhere high above. Its wings beat like a drumroll. The tea set was already laid out on a moss-covered stone table in the centre of the Grove. Three delicate china cups. A steaming teapot. The scent of bergamot cut through the floral decay. Someone had anticipated my arrival perfectly. I set the bakery boxes down carefully. The toffee apple tart was still warm. Steam rose from the tea. I touched the pot—scalding. Too hot to pour. "Hello?" My voice sounded thin, swallowed by the standing stones. A giggle, high and childlike, echoed from somewhere inside the circle. Not from ahead. Behind me. I whirled again, torch arcing through the dark. "Delivery!" I called, trying to inject authority into my voice. "Heartbreak bakery delivery. Who ordered?" Silence. Then—whispering. Too many voices, overlapping, too quick for words. They slithered around the stones like fog searching for a crack to crawl through. My hands shook. I forced them still, unclipped the insulated bag's flap. The pendant's glow intensified, painting the inside of the Grove in bloody light. A shadow moved. Not at the edge of my vision this time. Right there, between the stones. A figure—tall, too thin, wrapped in what looked like moth-eaten velvet. Its face was obscured by curling hair the colour of rust, swaying though no wind touched it. It took a step forward. The pendant pulsed like a strobe, rapid fire now. My heart hammered in double time. "Who the hell are you?" I demanded, forcing steel into my voice. The figure tilted its head. Hair shifted. Beneath it, a mouth stretched too wide, lips peeling back from teeth too white. Too numerous. A giggle, louder now, bounced off the stones. Not one child. Dozens. Hundreds. The tea set rattled violently. The teapot lid flipped open, spilling scalding liquid across the moss. The liquid hissed, steaming black. The figure stepped closer. I fumbled for the pendant, tearing it free of my collar. The crimson light flared blindingly. The figure recoiled, arms flying up to shield its face. The giggling stopped. Silence. Thick, suffocating. The world held its breath. Then—a whisper, from every direction at once: "Laila..." My blood turned to ice. No one called me that. No one except... The pendant burned in my palm. The garden gnome by the stone table *giggled*. Its painted smile stretched wider, cracks spiderwebbing across the ceramic face. The giggle rose in pitch, building to a shriek. The rust-haired figure lunged.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"the park entrance had sloppily [sloppily]"
1"My voice sounded too [too]"
dialogueSentences14
tagDensity0.643
leniency1
rawRatio0.222
effectiveRatio0.222
88.81% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount894
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
21.70% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount894
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"flickered"
count2
1
word"pulse"
count2
2
word"pulsed"
count2
3
word"fluttered"
count1
4
word"perfect"
count1
5
word"echoing"
count1
6
word"echoed"
count1
7
word"silence"
count2
8
word"velvet"
count1
9
word"whisper"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"pulse"
2"pulsed"
3"fluttered"
4"perfect"
5"echoing"
6"echoed"
7"silence"
8"velvet"
9"whisper"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences106
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences106
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences109
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen24
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords2
totalWords882
ratio0.002
matches
0"heavier"
1"giggled"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions12
wordCount823
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity0.24
worstName"Grove"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Grove"
discoveredNames
Empress1
Heartstone1
November1
London1
Park1
Yu-Fei1
Appropriate1
Poundland1
Grove2
Silence2
persons
0"Yu-Fei"
places
0"London"
1"Park"
2"Poundland"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences64
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like moth-eaten velvet"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount882
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences109
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs40
mean22.05
std17.43
cv0.791
sampleLengths
043
162
261
355
422
566
67
721
825
96
1020
1114
1251
1315
1415
1540
1627
1710
1824
1915
201
2123
2225
233
2442
255
2615
2712
2823
2913
3021
314
3226
333
348
358
3613
376
3828
394
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences106
matches
0"was obscured"
99.75% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs133
matches
0"were going"
1"wasn't blowing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences109
ratio0.092
matches
0"I fished a scrap of paper from my pocket—the order chit."
1"My boots sank into the damp earth, the rich scent of wet moss and something sweeter—wildflowers gone over in winter—filling my nose."
2"I checked my watch—11.47pm."
3"I shook it—cheap battery from Poundland—but the beam steadied."
4"The air didn't just grow colder; it grew *heavier*, pressing against my skin like wet wool."
5"A bird—too large for this season—screeched somewhere high above."
6"I touched the pot—scalding."
7"Then—whispering."
8"A figure—tall, too thin, wrapped in what looked like moth-eaten velvet."
9"Then—a whisper, from every direction at once: \"Laila...\""
82.13% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount840
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"*heavier*, pressing against my"
adverbCount45
adverbRatio0.05357142857142857
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.014285714285714285
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences109
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences109
mean8.09
std5.15
cv0.636
sampleLengths
015
113
215
318
424
520
68
712
810
920
1011
1110
1215
1314
1416
1511
1610
171
1822
199
2016
217
2212
237
248
2510
263
274
2817
292
302
316
325
331
346
358
363
379
382
395
4010
4116
428
4312
4413
452
469
476
4818
494
55.66% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.3944954128440367
totalSentences109
uniqueOpeners43
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences91
matches
0"Just the wind through skeletal"
1"Too hot to pour."
2"Too many voices, overlapping, too"
3"Then—a whisper, from every direction"
ratio0.044
88.13% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences91
matches
0"I muttered, tightening the strap"
1"It was the middle of"
2"You had to know where"
3"he'd said, rubbing his temples"
4"I fished a scrap of"
5"My boots sank into the"
6"My torch beam sliced through"
7"My voice sounded too loud,"
8"I checked my watch—11.47pm."
9"I spun, torch swinging wildly."
10"I shook it—cheap battery from"
11"I stepped between the stones."
12"My breath came out as"
13"I whispered, swallowing the metallic"
14"Its wings beat like a"
15"I set the bakery boxes"
16"I touched the pot—scalding."
17"My voice sounded thin, swallowed"
18"I whirled again, torch arcing"
19"I called, trying to inject"
ratio0.33
64.40% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount72
totalSentences91
matches
0"The oak door groaned as"
1"The golden Empress sign above"
2"I muttered, tightening the strap"
3"The Heartstone pendant at my"
4"It was the middle of"
5"Richmond Park was a different"
6"The lamplights only reached so"
7"The natural order of things"
8"The sign by the park"
9"The standing stones ahead weren't"
10"You had to know where"
11"he'd said, rubbing his temples"
12"I fished a scrap of"
13"My boots sank into the"
14"The air tasted metallic somehow,"
15"My torch beam sliced through"
16"The pendant grew warmer against"
17"My voice sounded too loud,"
18"The stones drank the sound,"
19"I checked my watch—11.47pm."
ratio0.791
54.95% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences91
matches
0"No matter how much WD-40" 1/1/2040, 12:00:00 AM
ratio0.011
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences31
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"The Heartstone pendant at my collarbone pulsed faintly against the damp fabric of my shirt, a warm thrum that shouldn't comfort me but did."
69.44% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"I called, trying to inject authority into my voice"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"I muttered (mutter)"
1"he'd (would)"
2"I whispered (whisper)"
3"I demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences14
tagDensity0.357
leniency0.714
rawRatio0.8
effectiveRatio0.571
80.8321%