Run: 2026-03-18-01KM0891MWMH34P6HJQNQ9AN8B

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Duration:
18.3s
Cost:
$0.001803
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Mistral

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door to the Raven's Nest swung wide. Cold November air rushed in, carrying the stench of wet pavement and exhaust. A gust rattled the green neon sign above, casting erratic shadows across the brass footrail. Most punters barely glanced up from their pints. The bartender—flat cap squinted against the dim—didn’t miss a beat; half-pull of Guinness, perfect creamy head, onto the waiting tray. Then he saw her. Aurora Carter stood frozen just inside the threshold, cheeks flushed from the sudden chill, black hair catching the low light like ink spilled across shoulders. She wasn’t there for a quiet drink. The insulated delivery bag still slung over her arm told me what I needed to know—late shift from Golden Empress, tucked away. Now, standing in my bar like the past had a standing order. The bag slipped from her fingers. A red thermal cup tumbled out, rolled across the sticky floor. Coffee pooled dark against the grout. She didn’t move. Didn’t speak. I dried my hands on a rag and stepped around the bar. “Laila.” She flinched at the name. Of course she would. No one called her that anymore. “Didn’t expect to see you here.” My voice steady. No tremors. Good. “Sit down.” “Don’t know if I should.” “Sit. Or stand. Either way, you’re blocking the door.” A beat. Then the stubborn tilt of her chin defied me before it defied herself. “Fine. One drink.” Her boots clicked against the parquet as she crossed the room. I watched the way her hips balanced—still light on her feet, but there was something new in the reserve of her shoulders, a weight she carried like a guard dog ready to snap at a shadow. She chose the stool farthest from the door, farthest from me. As good as a sign: *Keep the space. Keep the past.* I poured her a gin and tonic without asking. Lime wedge already squeezed. Tradition. Three fingers, always. She stared at the glass like it might bite. “You knew.” “Always.” A dry chuckle escaped her. Not joy. Not sarcasm. Relief, maybe. Or resignation. “Of course you did.” I wiped the bar top in slow, deliberate circles. The rag picked up crumbs, dust, echoes of spilled crisps from earlier. “Three years, Three missed birthdays. Two Christmases. One funeral.” “You’re counting.” “Someone has to. You stopped writing. Stopped calling. Even your flatmate didn’t know where you’d gone—just that you’d fled Cardiff like it was on fire.” “It felt like it.” I let the silence sit. Letting her find the shape of it. We’d mastered silence in Prague. Five days in a safe house above a butcher’s, waiting for exfil. Not the same kind of waiting, but waiting nonetheless. She’d fill it eventually. Or she wouldn’t. Either way, I’d be here. She took a slow sip. The gin’s burn hit her first, then the citrus cut sharp like broken glass. “Evan?” “Last I heard, he was selling timeshares in Torquay.” I leaned on the bar. My signet caught the light. Like a reminder. “Not proud of it, but the check cleared.” A flicker of something crossed her face—shame? Gratitude? “He would’ve done it anyway.” “People usually do. Still. If he crosses your path again—” “He won’t.” She set the drink down hard enough to slosh. “That’s not why I’m here.” “I know.” Her finger traced the rim. Once. Twice. Then she looked up—bright blue eyes locking onto mine, paler than I remembered, like the colour had leached out through exposure. “They found a body in the Thames. Upstream near Chelsea Embankment. Young woman. ID’s being processed.” She lowered her voice. “It’s not confirmed. But there was a card in her pocket. Yours.” My chest tightened. Not fear. Recognition. The Raven’s Nest hummed around us—the clink of glasses, the murmur of a bet settled, a laugh too loud from the dartboard corner. Normal sounds. Sounds I’d been used to filtering out for twenty years. “When?” “Yesterday morning. River police pulled her out. Girl’s about twenty-five. Dark hair. Blue eyes.” She exhaled. “Description fits.” “Give me the name.” “Not released yet. But...” She paused. “Silas, she had the same crescent scar on her wrist.” I lifted my own wrist reflexively—the faint mark, childhood kitchen accident. Same shape. Same curl. Her drink trembled in her grip. “You think it’s connected?” I didn’t pretend not to understand. “I think someone wants you to think it is.” She met my eyes. “And someone wants me to know it too.” I turned toward the shelves. Rows of bottles bathed in sickly green under the bar lights. I needed a second to recalibrate. Time to think. Seconds aren’t always enough. Behind me, she went on. “I got a letter two weeks ago. No return address. Just... a newspaper clipping. Old. From the South Wales Echo. Picture of a group of us outside the law school in Cardiff. Me. Eva. You.” Pause. “Evan wasn’t in it. But he was watching.” “Where’s the clipping?” “Burnt.” I kept my back to her. “And the letter?” “Gone.” My fingers closed around a bottle of eighteen-year-old single malt I kept behind the optics for bad nights or good friends. No ice. Straight. “Someone’s playing a game,” I said. “And we’ve both been invited to watch.” She exhaled through her nose. “I didn’t come here to play.” “Then why did you?” “Because if this is the arrangement, I want in.” She finally looked at me fully. Blunt. No poetry. “I want your networks. Your old contacts. Your safe houses. Everything.” I poured the whisky into a chipped crystal tumbler. The amber burned as it hit the glass. “You walked out of my life.” “Not by choice.” Her voice dropped. “Not really.” I turned. The glass glinted between us. “You disappeared.” “Because Evan was watching me. Always.” Her knuckles whitened around the gin glass. “He kept a file. My movements. My call logs. Even the shifts I worked at the library. He knew I couldn’t hide forever. So I did the only thing I could—I ran. Not just from him. From the whole pattern. From every mistake I’d ever made.” I set the whisky down. Slid it toward her. “Drink. Then talk. All of it. Not the edited version this time.” She hesitated. Then lifted the glass. Sipped. Coughed. “God, that’s worse than the first time.” “You were never much of a drinker.” “People change.” “Some do.” I pulled a stool closer. The wood groaned under my weight—old bar stool, repaired too many times, just like everything else in this place. She told me about the bedsits in Bristol. The night shifts at the hospital canteen. The man named Graham who paid in cash and asked too many questions. The woman at the post office who recognised her from the news and then never spoke again. “Five years in one room. Five years of listening to my own thoughts.” She ran a thumb along her scar. “Then Eva tracked me down. Said you’d—” She stopped. “Said what?” I kept my voice even. “That you never stopped looking.” A car alarm wailed outside. The sound split the night like a knife. We both flinched. She looked at the door. Then back at me. “I’m not asking for friendship. Or closure. Or any of that shit.” She met my gaze. “I’m asking for your help. Because someone’s copying your past. My past. And if I don’t stop them, I’ll end up like her.” “Dead?” “Or worse.” I thought of the girl in the Thames. Pale skin. Blue lips. A crescent scar on her wrist, maybe faded, maybe fresh. I thought of Rory Carter—not Aurora—25 years old, brilliant and reckless, skipping stones across the law school pond, thinking she already knew every answer. I thought of the man who used to move through shadows like smoke. Who used to tell recruits: *You’re not the hero. You’re the pattern.* And now, here we were. The pattern repeating itself. The mistake coming full circle. I slid the whisky glass toward her again. “Drink up. We start tonight.” She didn’t question it. Just knocked the rest back. Coughed. Set the glass down. “What’s the plan?” I reached under the bar. Pulled out a set of keys. Silver. Heavy. Each one tagged. “Then I’ll tell you.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Her knuckles whitened around [around]"
dialogueSentences66
tagDensity0.197
leniency0.394
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.03
96.40% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1389
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
49.60% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1389
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"perfect"
count1
1
word"chill"
count1
2
word"weight"
count2
3
word"echoes"
count1
4
word"silence"
count2
5
word"reminder"
count1
6
word"flicker"
count1
7
word"traced"
count1
8
word"processed"
count1
9
word"trembled"
count1
10
word"echo"
count1
11
word"crystal"
count1
highlights
0"perfect"
1"chill"
2"weight"
3"echoes"
4"silence"
5"reminder"
6"flicker"
7"traced"
8"processed"
9"trembled"
10"echo"
11"crystal"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences140
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences140
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences190
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen47
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords13
totalWords1376
ratio0.009
matches
0"Keep the space. Keep the past."
1"You’re not the hero. You’re the pattern."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions18
wordCount913
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity0.22
worstName"Raven"
maxWindowNameDensity0.5
worstWindowName"Raven"
discoveredNames
Raven2
Nest2
November1
Guinness1
Carter2
Golden1
Empress1
Prague1
Blunt1
Bristol1
Graham1
Thames1
Rory1
Aurora2
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Carter"
3"Empress"
4"Graham"
5"Rory"
6"Aurora"
places
0"Golden"
1"Prague"
2"Bristol"
3"Thames"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences57
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
54.65% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.453
wordCount1376
matches
0"Not the same kind of waiting, but waiting nonetheless"
1"Not proud of it, but the check cleared"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences190
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs82
mean16.78
std15.99
cv0.953
sampleLengths
064
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266
36
422
513
615
714
85
99
1018
1169
1217
1311
141
1517
1630
172
1825
194
2050
2119
221
2330
2413
2510
2616
272
2828
2932
306
3135
321
3318
344
3516
3615
376
3810
3921
4029
4149
423
431
449
451
4624
4713
4811
494
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences140
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs165
matches(empty)
7.52% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences190
ratio0.047
matches
0"The bartender—flat cap squinted against the dim—didn’t miss a beat; half-pull of Guinness, perfect creamy head, onto the waiting tray."
1"The insulated delivery bag still slung over her arm told me what I needed to know—late shift from Golden Empress, tucked away."
2"I watched the way her hips balanced—still light on her feet, but there was something new in the reserve of her shoulders, a weight she carried like a guard dog ready to snap at a shadow."
3"A flicker of something crossed her face—shame?"
4"Then she looked up—bright blue eyes locking onto mine, paler than I remembered, like the colour had leached out through exposure."
5"The Raven’s Nest hummed around us—the clink of glasses, the murmur of a bet settled, a laugh too loud from the dartboard corner."
6"I lifted my own wrist reflexively—the faint mark, childhood kitchen accident."
7"The wood groaned under my weight—old bar stool, repaired too many times, just like everything else in this place."
8"I thought of Rory Carter—not Aurora—25 years old, brilliant and reckless, skipping stones across the law school pond, thinking she already knew every answer."
94.41% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount927
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount43
adverbRatio0.04638619201725998
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.006472491909385114
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences190
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences190
mean7.24
std6.83
cv0.943
sampleLengths
08
113
215
38
420
54
625
77
822
912
106
1111
126
133
142
1512
161
175
184
196
209
212
221
232
245
259
262
2713
283
2911
3036
3111
328
333
349
354
361
373
389
392
401
415
422
432
442
452
464
479
4812
499
68.95% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.4421052631578947
totalSentences190
uniqueOpeners84
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount7
totalSentences105
matches
0"Then he saw her."
1"Of course she would."
2"Then the stubborn tilt of"
3"Then she looked up—bright blue"
4"Then lifted the glass."
5"Then back at me."
6"Just knocked the rest back."
ratio0.067
33.33% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount49
totalSentences105
matches
0"She wasn’t there for a"
1"She didn’t move."
2"I dried my hands on"
3"She flinched at the name."
4"My voice steady"
5"Her boots clicked against the"
6"I watched the way her"
7"She chose the stool farthest"
8"I poured her a gin"
9"She stared at the glass"
10"I wiped the bar top"
11"I let the silence sit."
12"We’d mastered silence in Prague."
13"She’d fill it eventually."
14"She took a slow sip."
15"I leaned on the bar"
16"My signet caught the light."
17"She set the drink down"
18"Her finger traced the rim."
19"She lowered her voice"
ratio0.467
93.33% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount77
totalSentences105
matches
0"The door to the Raven's"
1"A gust rattled the green"
2"The bartender—flat cap squinted against"
3"Aurora Carter stood frozen just"
4"She wasn’t there for a"
5"The insulated delivery bag still"
6"The bag slipped from her"
7"A red thermal cup tumbled"
8"Coffee pooled dark against the"
9"She didn’t move."
10"I dried my hands on"
11"She flinched at the name."
12"My voice steady"
13"Her boots clicked against the"
14"I watched the way her"
15"She chose the stool farthest"
16"I poured her a gin"
17"Lime wedge already squeezed."
18"She stared at the glass"
19"A dry chuckle escaped her."
ratio0.733
95.24% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences105
matches
0"Now, standing in my bar"
1"Either way, I’d be here."
ratio0.019
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences27
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences66
tagDensity0.015
leniency0.03
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
89.7813%