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Run: 2026-03-18-01KM08GXGCH9PTM9FZKX401X56
Run Details
Model:
GPT-5.4 Nano (Reasoning)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Romance: separated couple reunites
Duration:
22.0s
Cost:
$0.005140
Provider:
OpenAI
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
93.37%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
42.53%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
0.00%
Name drop frequency
(details)
82.43%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
95.23%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
43.19%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
87.15%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
12.29%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
32.68%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
65.64%
Technical jargon density
(details)
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
85.1500%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
Model response
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Rory Carter jammed the key
into the third deadbolt, and the moment she rotated it, the door handle jerked hard enough to rattle the chain. The lock didn’t give.
Whoever was on the other
side did not care. “Back off,” Rory said through the gap, hand already on the latch like she could intimidate iron.
The chain clanged again, louder
this time, and then a voice slid through the wood, calm and accented, as if he’d
been invited
. “Carter, you leave your courtesy in the wrong pocket. Let me in.” Rory’s
stomach
tightened.
She had not spoken to
Lucien Moreau in weeks. Not since that night in Soho when his
charm
turned sharp as glass, when he promised help and delivered a warning wrapped in insult. Not since she’d told him to stay away, and he had smiled like distance bored him. She didn’t unlock the door.
She leaned in, pressed her
bright blue eye to the peephole, and watched his heterochromatic gaze
flicker
over the frame from the other side. One amber, one black. No humour now. Just calculation.
Ptolemy, the tabby, padded across
the narrow floor behind her, tail held high like he’d decided this was entertainment. Rory kept her voice low. “How do you know I’m here?”
Lucien’s knuckles dragged once along
the door, gentle in motion, violent in consequence. “Because the underworld loves patterns. And because you made one mistake, the same way twice.” “I don’t make mistakes,” Rory said.
The chain rattled again, a
test. “Then open up, and we can correct the record.” Rory’s hand hovered. Her scarred left wrist ached, the small crescent from childhood catching when her
pulse
spiked.
She felt it now, not
pain exactly, a
reminder
that doors could lock and life could still find a way in.
She swallowed and unhooked the
chain.
The door opened on a
man dressed like he’d stepped out of a funeral catalogue. Tailored charcoal, platinum hair slicked back, ivory-handled cane resting
lightly
at his side.
He filled the doorway without
pushing, height and stillness doing the work for him.
The air he carried in
smelled faintly of expensive cologne and something older underneath, smoke that had never burned, metal that had never rusted.
Lucien looked past her into
the flat. Books covered every surface, scrolls folded like sleeping snakes, notes pinned with thick red string. The curry house downstairs had leaked spice into the plaster, but right now the dominant scent came from the paper, ink, and whatever wards she’d been testing with last night’s stubborn candles. “You’ve been busy,” Lucien said. Rory stepped back, shoulders squared. “You’ve been stalking.” He didn’t flinch. He didn’t even look offended.
Instead, his gaze landed on
her wrist, just once, like he’d read her scar the way other men read menus. “I came because someone is moving against you,” Lucien said. “And because you’re about to get someone else killed.” Rory’s throat tightened. “Who?” Lucien’s smile appeared for half a second, thin as a blade. “People who wear clean gloves while they break dirty rules.” Ptolemy decided to make himself useful by rubbing against Rory’s shin, then circling to sniff Lucien’s cane. The cat’s ears flattened at the sight of the ivory handle. Rory watched Lucien’s eyes track the tabby. “You didn’t come for my cat.” “No,” Lucien said. “I came for you.” That should have landed like a compliment. It landed like a threat, because Lucien never said things without meaning them, and he never offered softness without a hook hidden in it. Rory blocked his view with her body. “Get to the point.” “I will,” Lucien said, and his voice lowered by a notch. “But first, close your door properly.” Rory didn’t move. “You think I don’t know how to close a door?”
His gaze flicked to the
chain, the deadbolts, the way her hands had been shaking enough to make the key scrape. “You lock like a woman expecting a specific kind of danger,” Lucien said. “You don’t lock like a woman expecting your danger to arrive with manners.” Rory’s jaw ticked. “What are you, then? Manners with horns?” Lucien stepped inside without asking, like the flat belonged to him and she had simply delayed the paperwork.
He moved carefully around scattered
research notes, careful not to scuff the edge of a sigil she’d drawn in black ink on the floorboards.
He didn’t glance at the
sigil again.
He already knew what it
was for. “You’re wrong about one thing,” Lucien said, cane angled forward. He didn’t touch the ink. He only hovered near it,
as if listening
. “I do not have horns.” “That’s convenient,” Rory said. “Most demons do.” Lucien’s amber eye sharpened. “Your humour grows flimsier each time you use it.” Rory tightened her grip on the edge of the doorframe. “And your etiquette gets worse. Last time we spoke, you told me to trust you.” “I told you to trust the information,” Lucien corrected. “You gave me a choice between drowning and swallowing poison,” Rory snapped. “Don’t dress it up as guidance.” Ptolemy moved between them like he wanted to see the argument up close. The cat’s tail
flicked
, and then he backed away, wary. Lucien watched him, and then, finally, his gaze returned to Rory’s face. “Do you remember Evan?” Lucien asked. Rory’s
blood went cold
. The name sat on her tongue like a sour taste. Evan, her abusive ex, the man she’d fled, the man who’d followed her into
silence
.
She had left London for
Cardiff once, for safety, then come back because safety had become a lie. “You picked that name on purpose,” she said. Lucien’s expression didn’t change, but something behind his eyes did.
He looked less like a
fixer and more like a judge. “Your abuser’s network is still breathing,” Lucien said. “Not in London, not officially. In the places between. Someone dug his teeth out of old records and put them to work again.” Rory’s fingers curled. “You said someone is moving against me.” Lucien nodded once. “They want what you took.” Rory stared. “I didn’t take anything.” Lucien moved his cane, the ivory handle catching light, and a thin blade slid out as smooth as a breath. Not shown to threaten her, shown to remind the room it could cut. “You took the ledger fragment from that contact,” Lucien said. “The one with the names that don’t belong in daylight.” Rory’s mind flashed back, quick and unwelcome. A handoff in a side alley, ink-smudged paper, a
weight
in her bag that didn’t
feel
like paper.
She had burned it the
moment she got it home, but she’d kept a copy of the names in her head, and then, once the nightmare started again, she’d written them down in ink she’d sworn would never be read by anyone but her.
Her wards had been built
around secrecy. Lucien stepped closer. He smelled sharper now, like iron and winter coats. “You wrote them,” he said. Rory’s voice turned flat. “So you read my notes.” “I read what I must,” Lucien said. “You read what you fear. That is the difference between us.” Rory
hated that he
sounded right. “Tell me what you’re actually here for,” she said. “Not the poetic version.” Lucien lifted the cane blade
slightly
, angled it towards the floorboards, towards her black-ink sigil. The air around it tightened, like the room held its breath. “Your protection is failing,” he said. Rory’s
pulse
hammered. “It’s not.” “It is,” Lucien said. “The ink line you drew on the threshold, it’s cracked. You see it? You don’t. You’re too busy looking at the door.” Rory forced herself to follow his point. She looked down, heart skidding. The sigil’s ink had split in a thin, jagged way, as if something had already scraped at it from outside. “I drew that last night,” Rory said. Lucien’s mouth curved without
warmth
. “Last night isn’t the measure of time here.” Ptolemy let out a low growl. Rory straightened, pulling her delivery bag off the chair. It hadn’t
mattered that she
worked for Golden Empress by day, that she delivered hot food to hungry people. Tonight she needed tools that didn’t come from a restaurant. She zipped the bag open, grabbed a small bundle of salt packets and the cheap brass
charm
she kept for emergencies. Her fingers
trembled
once and then stopped. “You didn’t answer my question,” Rory said. “Why are you here unannounced?” Lucien’s gaze tracked the salt. “Because you won’t let me in if I ask.” “I won’t,” Rory agreed. Lucien moved with a grace that made the cane
feel
less like a weapon and more like an extension of his will. He crossed the room towards the doorway, stopping just short of the threshold sigil, and then he held the cane blade over the cracked line. “Because I tried to keep you out,” he said. “And because someone else refuses to.” Rory watched him, breath shallow. “Someone else. Evan’s people?” Lucien didn’t look at her as he answered. “Evan’s people work for the kind of hunger that doesn’t care who you used to hate.” Rory’s chest tightened. “What kind of hunger?” Lucien finally met her eyes. Amber caught her bright blue like a pin catching skin. “A collector,” he said. “A returner. The sort that takes debts personally.” Rory’s mouth went dry. “Debts I never agreed to.” Lucien’s jaw flexed. “You agreed the moment you touched that ledger.” Rory’s anger flared, hot enough to replace fear. “And you agreed when you offered help.” Lucien’s lips parted, as if he might argue, as if he might justify. He didn’t. He only shifted his
weight
, and the cane blade
traced
a slow line in the air. The ink sigil shivered. Rory felt it more than she saw it. The wards hummed low, like a held note, and then a sharp vibration ran through the floorboards. The crack widened with a sound like dry paper tearing. Ptolemy bolted under a side table, yowling. Lucien moved fast, blade angled down, and he pressed the ivory handle against the threshold. The cane concealed blade sank through the cracked ink, and the air hissed. Rory
flicked
salt over the break in quick handfuls. Granules danced through the humming
tension
and settled on the board like a thin white snowfall. For a heartbeat, everything held. Then the hallway outside screamed. Not a human scream. Too ragged. Too wet. The sound dragged itself under the door, and Rory’s skin crawled with it. Lucien jerked his chin towards the front. “Someone’s already through.” Rory’s eyes snapped to the door. The deadbolt she’d just turned, the chain she’d just hooked, the metal she’d trusted. All of it shuddered at once, as if a fist had slammed against the other side of the universe. The wood
vibrated
. Nails complained. The hinge gave a sick, slow groan. Lucien didn’t back away. He moved closer to Rory instead, not protective in the way a friend stands in front of you, protective in the way a
predator
positions itself so it can strike. “Rory,” he said, and he used her name like it belonged to him. “Do not open that door again.” Rory’s throat tightened. “I didn’t open it to them.” Lucien’s gaze lowered to her left wrist. The crescent scar flared dull against her skin, as if it remembered pain and wanted to be helpful. “They know you do not open doors,” Lucien said. “They know you build cages.” A hard impact hit the wood. Another. The chain snapped with a metallic crack. Rory’s hand shot to the
charm
at her throat, but before she could pull it free, the door
lurched
inward. Not kicked, not barged. It gave like the frame had decided it couldn’t hold the
weight
any longer. A shadow spilled over the threshold. It didn’t look like a person at first.
Too tall, too stretched, the
outline ragged at the edges like it had been cut out with shaking hands. The smell hit next, copper and rot, and
something like wet wool
. Rory tasted bile behind her teeth. Lucien drew his blade fully. The ivory cane slid into a ready angle, and he stood between Rory and the spreading shadow with the calm of a man stepping into a
familiar
fight. The thing on the threshold spoke, voice layered like multiple mouths trying to share one throat. “Carter.” Rory didn’t move. She couldn’t. Her legs felt cemented. She
hated that her
body reacted before her mind did. Lucien’s amber eye narrowed, black eye widening like a pupil swallowing light. “Wrong name,” he said. “Wrong door.” The shadow surged forward, fast,
not walking but collapsing distance
. Rory threw salt at it, and the granules sparked where they landed, sizzling into faint blue steam. The thing recoiled for half a second, then corrected, pushing with
something like hunger rather than force
. A second sound joined the first, a scrape from the stairwell behind them. Footsteps. More than one. Not human steps, not the heavy stagger of someone drunk, not the light shuffle of someone sneaking. These footfalls sounded deliberate, heavy with purpose, as if a pack had decided which scent to follow. Lucien’s blade
flicked
, catching the air, cutting nothing, yet the shadow hissed like it felt the threat anyway. Rory tightened her grip on the
charm
and lifted her chin. “How many?” Lucien’s voice stayed controlled, but his eyes burned. “Enough,” he said. The front door frame splintered along a different seam, and the hallway beyond filled with the stink of old incense and blood that hadn’t dried.
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native_tokens_cached
3840
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num_input_audio_prompt
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num_media_completion
0
num_search_results
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
29
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
77
tagDensity
0.377
leniency
0.753
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
93.37%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
2262
totalAiIsmAdverbs
3
found
0
adverb
"lightly"
count
1
1
adverb
"carefully"
count
1
2
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
highlights
0
"lightly"
1
"carefully"
2
"slightly"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
42.53%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
2262
totalAiIsms
26
found
0
word
"stomach"
count
1
1
word
"charm"
count
4
2
word
"flicker"
count
1
3
word
"pulse"
count
2
4
word
"reminder"
count
1
5
word
"flicked"
count
4
6
word
"silence"
count
1
7
word
"weight"
count
3
8
word
"warmth"
count
1
9
word
"trembled"
count
1
10
word
"traced"
count
1
11
word
"tension"
count
1
12
word
"vibrated"
count
1
13
word
"predator"
count
1
14
word
"lurched"
count
1
15
word
"familiar"
count
1
16
word
"footsteps"
count
1
highlights
0
"stomach"
1
"charm"
2
"flicker"
3
"pulse"
4
"reminder"
5
"flicked"
6
"silence"
7
"weight"
8
"warmth"
9
"trembled"
10
"traced"
11
"tension"
12
"vibrated"
13
"predator"
14
"lurched"
15
"familiar"
16
"footsteps"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"blood ran cold"
count
1
highlights
0
"blood went cold"
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
187
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
187
filterMatches
0
"feel"
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
235
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
44
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
2262
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
39
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
0.00%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
100
wordCount
1779
uniqueNames
10
maxNameDensity
2.53
worstName
"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity
5
worstWindowName
"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Carter
1
Lucien
43
Moreau
1
Soho
1
Rory
45
Ptolemy
5
London
1
Cardiff
1
Golden
1
Empress
1
persons
0
"Carter"
1
"Lucien"
2
"Moreau"
3
"Rory"
4
"Ptolemy"
places
0
"Soho"
1
"London"
2
"Cardiff"
globalScore
0.235
windowScore
0
82.43%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
111
glossingSentenceCount
3
matches
0
"as if listening"
1
"something like wet wool"
2
"something like hunger rather than force"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
1
per1kWords
0.442
wordCount
2262
matches
0
"not walking but collapsing distance"
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
3
totalSentences
235
matches
0
"hated that he"
1
"mattered that she"
2
"hated that her"
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
122
mean
18.54
std
13.19
cv
0.711
sampleLengths
0
38
1
17
2
23
3
12
4
52
5
29
6
9
7
19
8
11
9
28
10
6
11
15
12
39
13
6
14
66
15
7
16
47
17
5
18
8
19
28
20
19
21
4
22
21
23
28
24
13
25
7
26
31
27
11
28
17
29
13
30
21
31
26
32
10
33
42
34
14
35
28
36
7
37
13
38
25
39
9
40
18
41
23
42
12
43
6
44
47
45
8
46
21
47
31
48
10
49
8
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
2
totalSentences
187
matches
0
"been invited"
1
"been built"
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
349
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
0
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
0
totalSentences
235
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
95.23%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1782
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
81
adverbRatio
0.045454545454545456
lyAdverbCount
11
lyAdverbRatio
0.006172839506172839
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
235
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
235
mean
9.63
std
6.78
cv
0.705
sampleLengths
0
25
1
4
2
9
3
17
4
23
5
12
6
3
7
9
8
24
9
16
10
5
11
24
12
4
13
3
14
2
15
19
16
5
17
6
18
13
19
15
20
6
21
6
22
9
23
3
24
15
25
21
26
6
27
15
28
13
29
14
30
24
31
7
32
15
33
32
34
5
35
5
36
3
37
3
38
5
39
20
40
10
41
9
42
3
43
1
44
11
45
10
46
17
47
11
48
7
49
6
43.19%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
16
diversityRatio
0.2425531914893617
totalSentences
235
uniqueOpeners
57
87.15%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
4
totalSentences
153
matches
0
"Instead, his gaze landed on"
1
"Then the hallway outside screamed."
2
"Too tall, too stretched, the"
3
"More than one."
ratio
0.026
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
33
totalSentences
153
matches
0
"She had not spoken to"
1
"She didn’t unlock the door."
2
"She leaned in, pressed her"
3
"Her scarred left wrist ached,"
4
"She felt it now, not"
5
"She swallowed and unhooked the"
6
"He filled the doorway without"
7
"He didn’t flinch."
8
"He didn’t even look offended."
9
"It landed like a threat,"
10
"His gaze flicked to the"
11
"He moved carefully around scattered"
12
"He didn’t glance at the"
13
"He already knew what it"
14
"He didn’t touch the ink."
15
"He only hovered near it,"
16
"She had left London for"
17
"He looked less like a"
18
"She had burned it the"
19
"Her wards had been built"
ratio
0.216
12.29%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
137
totalSentences
153
matches
0
"Rory Carter jammed the key"
1
"The lock didn’t give."
2
"Rory said through the gap,"
3
"The chain clanged again, louder"
4
"Rory’s stomach tightened."
5
"She had not spoken to"
6
"She didn’t unlock the door."
7
"She leaned in, pressed her"
8
"Ptolemy, the tabby, padded across"
9
"Rory kept her voice low."
10
"Lucien’s knuckles dragged once along"
11
"The chain rattled again, a"
12
"Rory’s hand hovered."
13
"Her scarred left wrist ached,"
14
"She felt it now, not"
15
"She swallowed and unhooked the"
16
"The door opened on a"
17
"He filled the doorway without"
18
"The air he carried in"
19
"Lucien looked past her into"
ratio
0.895
32.68%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
1
totalSentences
153
matches
0
"Whoever was on the other"
ratio
0.007
65.64%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
74
technicalSentenceCount
8
matches
0
"The air he carried in smelled faintly of expensive cologne and something older underneath, smoke that had never burned, metal that had never rusted."
1
"Evan, her abusive ex, the man she’d fled, the man who’d followed her into silence."
2
"A handoff in a side alley, ink-smudged paper, a weight in her bag that didn’t feel like paper."
3
"The sigil’s ink had split in a thin, jagged way, as if something had already scraped at it from outside."
4
"All of it shuddered at once, as if a fist had slammed against the other side of the universe."
5
"The crescent scar flared dull against her skin, as if it remembered pain and wanted to be helpful."
6
"These footfalls sounded deliberate, heavy with purpose, as if a pack had decided which scent to follow."
7
"The front door frame splintered along a different seam, and the hallway beyond filled with the stink of old incense and blood that hadn’t dried."
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
29
uselessAdditionCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
29
fancyCount
3
fancyTags
0
"Lucien corrected (correct)"
1
"Rory snapped (snap)"
2
"Rory agreed (agree)"
dialogueSentences
77
tagDensity
0.377
leniency
0.753
rawRatio
0.103
effectiveRatio
0.078
85.1500%