Run: 2026-03-18-01KM08X5RNB6BNS3NK3T9M3FVZ

Run Details

Duration:
38.7s
Cost:
$0.003144
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Quinn kicked the emergencyexit door off its hinges with a single boot strike. The rusted metal screamed in protest, the sound ricocheting through the concrete tunnels like a gunshot. Her leather watch glinted under the dim station lights—06:17. The bastard thing had been frozen for eleven days straight; Morris’s death had scrambled something inside it. "Move." She didn’t wait for Patel to catch up. The abandoned Camden Tube station yawned ahead, its tiled walls slick with moisture that smelled of old blood and burnt electronics. Her Veil Compass trembled in her coat pocket, its brass casing cold against her thigh. The needle spun wildly before locking onto a point twenty yards ahead. Somewhere in that direction, someone screamed. Patel’s torch flickered to life, casting long shadows across the cracked platform. "Guv, this place is supposed to be boarded up till Friday. The skeleton shift confirmed—" "Move." Quinn’s sharp jaw cut the air. The bollocksed door behind her crashed against the platform wall as she broke into a jog. The stench hit next—not just decay, but something chemical, like a lab accident mixed with weeks-old fish guts. She drew her baton. The brass compass in her pocket grew hot enough to burn through fabric. Eva Kowalski stood in the centre of the aisle like a mannequin left out in the rain. Her curly red hair clung to her face in damp clumps, her round glasses slipped down her nose. In one hand she clutched a crumpled notepaper; in the other, a fistful of Aurora’s hair. The dead woman’s head lolled at an angle that made Quinn’s molars grind before her eyes could even parse the livid rope burn circling Aurora’s throat. Patel’s breath hitched. "Bloody hell." Quinn didn’t answer. She registered the missing stool first—the legs should’ve been braced against Aurora’s shoulders, the rope frayed where the knot had bitten in. But there was no weight redistribution pattern on the tiles, no dust plume where someone had dragged it away. The rope fibres themselves looked plucked rather than sawed through. And the lividity—the pooling of blood—spread across Aurora’s back and the sides of her arms as though she’d been laid out prone after death, not suspended. Eva’s voice cracked through the silence. "She was researching the artefacts here. Said something about a compass—one that points to rifts—but it’s gone." Her fingers twitched around the notepaper; a single drop of blood hit the ground between them both. Quinn crouched. Four signs of suicide performed successfully: clear intent via the research notes left in Eva’s pocket, no defensive wounds, the rope positioning. But zero signs of success. The height of the knot placed it beyond Aurora’s reach unless someone had stood on the stool and leaned in—except no stool, no stabilisation bruising on the cervical spine, no fibres caught in the tight weave of Aurora’s jumper. The lividity pattern alone screamed homicide re-staged for suicide. Patel shone her torch across the peeling stall behind them—the one marked with chalked sigils for haggling over “personal navigational instruments.” "Looks like she took her own life, guv. Final. Can’t argue with gravity." Quinn’s fingers brushed the brass case at Aurora’s hip. The Veil Compass had been the whole bloody point—every Market regular knew the tales of artefacts that blipped on ordinary sensors. She eased it out. The casing carried the same verdigris patina as her own, the protective sigils etched into the face long faded on most instruments. This one still glowed faintly green, the needle jumping like a spooked animal. Pointing directly at Aurora’s corpse. Patel snorted. "Parlor tricks. You know these occult types. Whack out the right sigils, claim any old tat’s humming." "Means nothing." Eva’s glasses slipped further. She tucked hair behind her left ear in a gesture so familiar it felt like a stab. "Aurora was into reverse sigil work. Thought she could shield herself by writing spells backwards. Got cocky after the last job—the one where they retrieved the—" Her mouth snapped shut. Quinn turned slowly. "The what." Patel’s torch beam wobbled. "C’mon, Evie, now isn’t the time for half-arsed confessions." Eva’s knuckles turned white around the notepaper. "The Veil Compass. The one that actually points to rifts, not market-stall knockoffs. Aurora swore she’d tracked the genuine article to this week’s stall rotation. Said it sang when you held it—proper copper frequency." She swallowed. "She was going to test it tonight. Against everyone’s advice." Quinn stood. The brass compass in her palm vibrated, the needle now circling Aurora’s body like a hawk. The genuine article would resonate with the death portal stitched into the Market’s fabric—sloppy wardings meant the residual energy had no problem bleeding through. If Aurora had been holding the real compass when she died, its resonance field would’ve locked onto her location. Permanently. Patel’s radio crackled. "Skipper, we’ve got uniform wanting ETA on body removal." Quinn didn’t blink. She pocketed her compass and plucked the notepaper from Eva’s stiff grip. The handwriting was shaky but legible: *Found it. Real one hums when I touch the sigils. Meet at 0700 at the station’s service end. Don’t follow.* Beneath the ink, smudged as though written during panic, three words: *It’s hungry.* Patel swore under her breath. "You think this is supernatural bollocks?" Quinn flipped the paper. On the verso, a quick sketch of three concentric circles intersected by a diagonal slash—the universal warning for radioactive hazard translated into scrying terms. Eva’s round glasses fogged as she whispered, "Mark of containment breach. Means the compass doesn’t just point—it pulls." A stallholder materialised from the gloom: a gaunt man with eyes like smudged coal ink. In broken Queens English he croaked, "Artifact missing. Vanished at moon-change. You police?" When Quinn didn’t answer he dipped bony fingers into a pouch at his belt and withdrew a single bone token carved with unfamiliar glyphs. "For the door. My brother’s wrist. He’s cranky at ghosts." Quinn took the token. The moment her skin touched the bone, the Veil Compass in her pocket sang—an ultrasonic pulse that vibrated through fillings. Patel grabbed her arm. "Skipper, c’mon—" "When did it vanish?" Quinn asked the stallholder. "Three hours past. Moon-change window. Stalls bind to vein lines only during dark moon—real threshold opens wide then." The man’s grin split his face ear to ear. "Your friend took it early. Rude customer service." Quinn’s watch hand twitched. Morris had died during a dark moon—thirteen months ago exactly. The Bureau of Complaints had ruled misadventure after his body turned up with same-day lividity patterns that matched the Market’s arcane geometry. She turned to Eva. "You knew this stall existed." Eva’s nervous habit came again—hair tucked behind the ear. "Aurora dragged me here two nights ago. Introduced me to the stallholder. He called the compass a ‘living piece’ and claimed it ‘sang in four-part harmony.’" She bit her lip. "Aurora said it was worth more than the Bank of England’s gold reserves combined." Patel aimed her torch at the empty stall. "So some occult nutcase swans off with a magic whatsit and Aurora ends up a Jane Doe?" Quinn knelt where the real Veil Compass had presumably rested. No blood spatter on the tiles, no scuff marks from a struggle—just a faint copper tang clinging to the air. She touched the ground. The resonance field still echoed, a high-pitched vibration seeping through concrete like ultrasound. Then the compass in Eva’s pocket—a smaller, tourist-grade model—whined. Eva recoiled. The needle spun wildly before steadfastly pointing toward the service tunnels where the original emergency exit had been. And beyond that, the Market’s true heart—the abandoned lift shaft that hadn’t moved with the other platforms, its mouth ringed with sigils that matched Eva’s sketch exactly. Patel’s torch died. In the sudden black, someone exhaled against Quinn’s neck.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
46.15% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Her fingers twitched around [around]"
1"Eva’s glasses slipped further [further]"
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.462
leniency0.923
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.154
96.19% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1314
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Patel"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
50.53% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1314
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"trembled"
count1
1
word"flickered"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"etched"
count1
5
word"familiar"
count1
6
word"vibrated"
count2
7
word"resonance"
count2
8
word"gloom"
count1
9
word"pulse"
count1
10
word"echoed"
count1
highlights
0"trembled"
1"flickered"
2"weight"
3"silence"
4"etched"
5"familiar"
6"vibrated"
7"resonance"
8"gloom"
9"pulse"
10"echoed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"knuckles turned white"
count1
highlights
0"knuckles turned white"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences88
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences88
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences102
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords22
totalWords1291
ratio0.017
matches
0"Found it. Real one hums when I touch the sigils. Meet at 0700 at the station’s service end. Don’t follow."
1"It’s hungry."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions70
wordCount1002
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity1.6
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Morris2
Patel11
Camden1
Tube1
Veil4
Compass4
Kowalski1
Aurora10
Quinn16
Eva12
Market4
Queens1
English1
Bureau1
Complaints1
persons
0"Morris"
1"Patel"
2"Compass"
3"Kowalski"
4"Aurora"
5"Quinn"
6"Eva"
7"Market"
8"Complaints"
places(empty)
globalScore0.702
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences59
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like a stab"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.775
wordCount1291
matches
0"not just decay, but something chemical, like a lab accident mixed with weeks-old"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences102
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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mean33.97
std23.53
cv0.693
sampleLengths
055
157
26
327
458
577
65
780
840
977
1034
1169
125
1319
1453
155
1613
1753
1862
1912
2041
2113
2211
2346
2462
2524
266
278
2835
2936
309
3153
3225
3347
3429
3527
363
379
93.30% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences88
matches
0"been frozen"
1"been braced"
2"been laid"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs168
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount17
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences18
totalSentences102
ratio0.176
matches
0"Her leather watch glinted under the dim station lights—06:17."
1"The bastard thing had been frozen for eleven days straight; Morris’s death had scrambled something inside it."
2"The stench hit next—not just decay, but something chemical, like a lab accident mixed with weeks-old fish guts."
3"In one hand she clutched a crumpled notepaper; in the other, a fistful of Aurora’s hair."
4"She registered the missing stool first—the legs should’ve been braced against Aurora’s shoulders, the rope frayed where the knot had bitten in."
5"And the lividity—the pooling of blood—spread across Aurora’s back and the sides of her arms as though she’d been laid out prone after death, not suspended."
6"\"She was researching the artefacts here. Said something about a compass—one that points to rifts—but it’s gone.\" Her fingers twitched around the notepaper; a single drop of blood hit the ground between them both."
7"The height of the knot placed it beyond Aurora’s reach unless someone had stood on the stool and leaned in—except no stool, no stabilisation bruising on the cervical spine, no fibres caught in the tight weave of Aurora’s jumper."
8"Patel shone her torch across the peeling stall behind them—the one marked with chalked sigils for haggling over “personal navigational instruments.” \"Looks like she took her own life, guv. Final. Can’t argue with gravity.\""
9"The Veil Compass had been the whole bloody point—every Market regular knew the tales of artefacts that blipped on ordinary sensors."
10"The genuine article would resonate with the death portal stitched into the Market’s fabric—sloppy wardings meant the residual energy had no problem bleeding through."
11"On the verso, a quick sketch of three concentric circles intersected by a diagonal slash—the universal warning for radioactive hazard translated into scrying terms."
12"The moment her skin touched the bone, the Veil Compass in her pocket sang—an ultrasonic pulse that vibrated through fillings."
13"Morris had died during a dark moon—thirteen months ago exactly."
14"Eva’s nervous habit came again—hair tucked behind the ear."
15"No blood spatter on the tiles, no scuff marks from a struggle—just a faint copper tang clinging to the air."
16"Then the compass in Eva’s pocket—a smaller, tourist-grade model—whined."
17"And beyond that, the Market’s true heart—the abandoned lift shaft that hadn’t moved with the other platforms, its mouth ringed with sigils that matched Eva’s sketch exactly."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1023
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount26
adverbRatio0.02541544477028348
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.011730205278592375
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences102
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences102
mean12.66
std9.05
cv0.715
sampleLengths
013
116
29
317
49
521
615
712
86
912
1015
117
1216
1318
144
1513
1617
1718
1816
1926
203
212
223
2322
2419
2510
2626
276
2834
292
3022
315
3239
339
3434
359
3621
374
3822
3913
405
412
4217
436
4417
4530
463
472
484
499
58.17% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.37254901960784315
totalSentences102
uniqueOpeners38
82.30% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences81
matches
0"Somewhere in that direction, someone"
1"Then the compass in Eva’s"
ratio0.025
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount14
totalSentences81
matches
0"Her leather watch glinted under"
1"She didn’t wait for Patel"
2"Her Veil Compass trembled in"
3"She drew her baton."
4"Her curly red hair clung"
5"She registered the missing stool"
6"Her fingers twitched around the"
7"She eased it out."
8"She tucked hair behind her"
9"Her mouth snapped shut"
10"She pocketed her compass and"
11"She turned to Eva."
12"She bit her lip"
13"She touched the ground."
ratio0.173
64.94% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount64
totalSentences81
matches
0"Quinn kicked the emergencyexit door"
1"The rusted metal screamed in"
2"Her leather watch glinted under"
3"The bastard thing had been"
4"She didn’t wait for Patel"
5"The abandoned Camden Tube station"
6"Her Veil Compass trembled in"
7"The needle spun wildly before"
8"Patel’s torch flickered to life,"
9"Quinn’s sharp jaw cut the"
10"The bollocksed door behind her"
11"The stench hit next—not just"
12"She drew her baton."
13"The brass compass in her"
14"Eva Kowalski stood in the"
15"Her curly red hair clung"
16"The dead woman’s head lolled"
17"Patel’s breath hitched."
18"Quinn didn’t answer."
19"She registered the missing stool"
ratio0.79
61.73% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences81
matches
0"If Aurora had been holding"
ratio0.012
23.81% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences42
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The abandoned Camden Tube station yawned ahead, its tiled walls slick with moisture that smelled of old blood and burnt electronics."
1"The dead woman’s head lolled at an angle that made Quinn’s molars grind before her eyes could even parse the livid rope burn circling Aurora’s throat."
2"And the lividity—the pooling of blood—spread across Aurora’s back and the sides of her arms as though she’d been laid out prone after death, not suspended."
3"The Veil Compass had been the whole bloody point—every Market regular knew the tales of artefacts that blipped on ordinary sensors."
4"The moment her skin touched the bone, the Veil Compass in her pocket sang—an ultrasonic pulse that vibrated through fillings."
5"The Bureau of Complaints had ruled misadventure after his body turned up with same-day lividity patterns that matched the Market’s arcane geometry."
6"And beyond that, the Market’s true heart—the abandoned lift shaft that hadn’t moved with the other platforms, its mouth ringed with sigils that matched Eva’s sk…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
34.62% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Her mouth snapped (snap)"
1"round glasses fogged (fog)"
2"broken Queens English he croaked (croak)"
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.154
leniency0.308
rawRatio0.75
effectiveRatio0.231
81.9472%