Run: 2026-03-18-01KM09GCBGVZ5BEDMQ98838VG4

Run Details

Duration:
25.2s
Cost:
$0.006526
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Raven’s Nest took the rain out of the air the moment Rory pushed through the door. A green neon sign blinked above the entrance, steady as a heartbeat. The place smelled of citrus peel and old timber. Maps and black-and-white photographs leaned along the walls like witnesses who never got to testify. Somewhere behind the bar, bottles clicked as someone moved through the dim. Rory shook water from her coat anyway. It ran in thin sheets from the shoulder seams and splashed the worn floor. She kicked her trainers into a stop at the bar and glanced down at the scuffed wood, the place where strangers rubbed away the years with their elbows. Silas Blackwood stood behind the counter in a shirt dark enough to swallow light. His grey-streaked auburn hair showed at the sides, trimmed back in a way that made his face look carved rather than aged. A neat beard held the shape of his jaw. His left knee caught the light differently when he shifted his weight—still catching up, still taking its time. He wore his silver signet ring on his right hand. He used it like a punctuation mark, tapping the edge of a glass as he counted down to whatever he had planned for the night. Rory didn’t remember last time she’d seen him in person. She did remember his voice from years ago, from Cardiff days that felt both close and distant the way a childhood room did after you’d moved out. She remembered him teaching her how to read people without staring at their faces. She remembered the way he’d disappeared into intelligence work the moment she started to understand it. She hadn’t heard from him since she left Evan. Silas watched her settle at the bar with an expression that refused to chase her story. His eyes—hazel, sharp under the low lamps—tracked her hands first. Then her wrist. Rory’s left wrist carried a small crescent scar. She kept it hidden under her sleeves out of habit. Tonight, the coat sleeve rode up when she set her elbow down. Silas didn’t point at it. He didn’t need to. The ring lifted, stopped just short of the wood, and stayed there as if he’d decided against touching anything too quickly. Rory swallowed, then raised her gaze to his face. Silas leaned forward enough that she could hear the scrape of his ring as it brushed the counter. He didn’t smile. His mouth held a line, controlled by practice. “You came in through the wrong door,” he said. Rory stared at him. “There’s only one door.” Silas’s eyes flicked, the smallest glance toward the back of the bar. The bookshelf wall sat half-shadowed between two posters, its edges too straight to be accidental. A hidden room sat behind it, accessible in a way you had to learn. “People who come for trouble always choose the front,” Silas said. “People who come for answers find the latch.” Rory tightened her coat at the throat. Her delivery shifts had trained her to keep her body ready for quick exits, even when her brain wanted to stay put. She could feel her pulse trying to outrun her thoughts. “I’m not here for trouble,” she said. Silas’s ring tapped once, then halted. He took a breath that moved his chest like he weighed whether she deserved the truth. “Trouble always comes,” he said. “You just decide how close it gets.” Rory slid onto the stool beside the one he kept closest to him. The bar’s surface felt cool under her palm. She watched his fingers as he poured something into a tumbler—dark liquid, no garnish, no show. He pushed it toward her without asking. “Golden Empress sent you?” Silas asked. Rory blinked. “You’ve got good ears.” “I’ve got good habits,” he replied. “Cheung’s people work hard. They don’t usually walk in here smelling like fried garlic and cold streets.” Rory lifted her cup. The glass sweated against her skin. She didn’t drink yet. Her wrist scar turned the cold liquid into a sensation instead of a mark. “I didn’t think you’d still be here,” she said. Silas held her gaze. His hazel eyes didn’t move when he answered. “I retired from work,” he said. “I didn’t retire from being awake.” Rory’s laugh came out wrong, a short exhale that didn’t know where to land. She set the glass down again, fingers careful. “You always did talk like you were drafting reports,” she said. Silas’s eyebrows lifted the smallest amount. “You remembered.” “I remembered enough to avoid you,” she said, then regretted the bluntness as soon as it left her mouth. Silas didn’t pounce on her words. He moved a rag along the bar’s edge, slow and deliberate, as if he needed something ordinary to anchor him. “Avoided me,” he repeated, quiet. “Or avoided what you thought I’d say.” Rory stared at the maps mounted behind him. A set of coordinates sat circled in ink that had faded with time. She’d seen walls like this once before, the kind of walls that held secrets because the people inside them never believed they’d be caught carrying the weight. “I didn’t avoid you,” Rory said. “I left.” Silas’s rag stopped. The pause stretched long enough to expose the air between them. “You left London too,” he said. Rory’s throat tightened. “I left Cardiff. London happened after.” Silas picked up her glass and rotated it a fraction. The motion drew light across the rim, then back into shadow. “You left after Evan,” he said. Rory’s fingers twitched on the wood. Her coat sleeve slipped back, and she let it. She looked at him instead of at her wrist. “I didn’t tell anyone,” she said. Silas didn’t flinch at the word anyone. He didn’t ask who. He didn’t offer comfort. He offered the truth the way a locksmith offered a key: without romance, without hesitation. “You didn’t need to tell,” he said. “You ran in directions that didn’t match your plans. That’s the kind of story I’ve learned to read.” Rory leaned forward. The bar’s dim light made her blue eyes look brighter than usual. The contrast made her feel exposed. “I’m not your case file,” she said. Silas’s mouth twitched, not quite a smile, more like the memory of one. “Good,” he said. “Case files don’t bleed.” Rory went still. The room filled with small sounds—ice shifting in glasses somewhere behind her, the hum of the neon, the soft shuffle of feet from a couple at a table who pretended not to listen. “You look different,” Rory said. She hated how the words came out like an accusation. Silas leaned back, and the movement showed the slow negotiation of his left leg. He didn’t hide it, didn’t dramatise it either. “Everyone gets different,” he said. “It’s not a personal insult.” Rory’s gaze dragged over him, picky now, searching for proof of change. The grey streaks in his hair stood out. The beard looked trimmed too neatly. His posture held authority, but it also carried something heavier than he used to show. The way he handled the ring looked practiced, as if his hand had learned to keep control even when his knee couldn’t. “You carry yourself like you’re still on a clock,” she said. Silas’s eyes narrowed. “I always carried myself like that.” “No,” Rory said. “You used to look like you could waste time. Like you believed you’d have it.” Silas’s fingers tightened around the glass. He didn’t spill a drop. He didn’t swallow his reaction. He just let it sit there in the space between them. “I had plenty of time once,” he said. Rory watched his throat move as he spoke. She waited for the rest of the sentence. It never came. Silas set the glass back down and wiped the bar with one clean pass, straight to the edge. The sound carried authority through the room. “You kept your name,” he said. Rory’s brows pulled together. “My name?” Silas tapped the signet ring against the wood. “Carter. Still Carter.” Rory let out a breath. “I didn’t change it. People already called me Rory. It made the paperwork easier.” Silas’s gaze dropped to her hands again. The scar caught a thin stripe of light. “And you kept the scar,” he said. Rory’s fingers curled around the rim of her glass. “I kept the memory too.” Silas leaned forward again, and the scent of whisky and soap clung to his shirt collar. “You didn’t write,” he said. Rory’s grip tightened. The liquid quivered in the glass. “I didn’t know where to send it,” she said. Silas’s eyes stayed fixed. “You could’ve sent it to me. You knew where I lived.” Rory’s jaw locked. She tried to hold his words like stones in her hands without dropping them. She failed. Anger came first, then something else—grief dressed as anger, sharp and practical. “I knew where your bar was,” she snapped. “I didn’t know if you’d still answer.” Silas didn’t take the bait. He kept his voice even. “You always wanted proof,” he said. “You wanted a door that opened the way you expected. You hated surprises.” Rory stared at him, caught between old memories and new ones. She had hated surprises because surprises killed plans. Evan had used surprise like a weapon. “I still hate surprises,” she said. Silas nodded once. “Then why come in through the front?” Rory paused. She reached into her coat pocket and pulled out a small parcel wrapped in brown paper and string. The string hung loose, like it had been tied in a hurry. She set it on the bar between them. The string knocked gently against the wood. Silas watched it like it could detonate. “I brought this,” Rory said. “You didn’t give me instructions, so I didn’t ask for a meeting. I brought it. I left it where the bar folks would see it.” Silas’s gaze lifted to her face. “Who told you I’d take it tonight?” Rory’s throat worked. “No one. I just—” Silas raised a hand, palm down. The gesture cut her sentence without cruelty. “You just showed up,” he finished. Rory stared at him. The anger drained and left something bare behind it. “I thought you’d want it,” she said. Silas picked up the parcel. His fingers moved carefully over the string. The ring looked like it belonged on a hand doing negotiations, not tying knots. “What’s inside?” he asked. Rory hesitated. Not out of fear. Out of the weight of admitting she carried something she didn’t trust herself with. “A file,” she said. Silas’s eyes didn’t change, but his body did. His shoulders tightened. The bar light sharpened the lines around his mouth. “A file from where?” he asked. Rory’s tongue pressed against her teeth. She chose the least complicated truth first. “From Cardiff,” she said. Silas turned the parcel slightly, as if he could read the woodgrain for answers. He didn’t open it. He didn’t rush. The calm looked earned rather than performed. “You didn’t tell me you still had it,” he said. “I didn’t tell you anything,” Rory replied. She leaned closer, and the neon buzzed behind her ear. “I didn’t trust myself to talk without turning it into a fight.” Silas’s mouth tightened. His rag lay folded near his hand, forgotten. He looked like a man who had held his breath for years and finally found air. “You should’ve trusted me,” he said. Rory’s laugh cracked. “Trust you? You disappeared.” Silas’s eyes held hers. He didn’t look defensive. He looked tired in a way that made her stomach drop. “I didn’t vanish to hurt you,” he said. Rory kept her voice steady, the way she did when she needed her mind to stay in control. “You didn’t ask what happened to me,” she said. Silas’s gaze dropped for a beat, then rose again. “I asked.” Rory waited. She didn’t blink. Her delivery job demanded she watch people’s hands and feet; her survival demanded she read pauses. Silas’s voice thinned, the first crack in his controlled tone. “I got answers I didn’t like,” he said. Rory’s fingers went numb around the glass. The dark liquid sat between them like a question neither of them wanted to answer out loud. “You always did that,” she said. “You asked, and then you carried it quietly.” Silas’s ring clicked against the parcel. He didn’t open it. He let the contact be enough to anchor him. “I couldn’t do anything about Evan,” he said. Rory’s eyes flashed. “You could’ve tried.” Silas stared at the parcel like it carried a map he’d walked before. The left leg shifted again, a small adjustment that looked like habit. “I did try,” he said, and now the words held the weight of a memory that still scraped. “There was a Prague operation. A botched moment. It burned through channels I couldn’t replace.” Rory flinched at the name of the operation like it hit a bruise she’d never touched. “You were in Prague,” she said. Silas’s jaw tightened. “I was in Prague.” Rory’s voice turned colder. “And you didn’t think to tell me that it wasn’t your silence?” Silas held her gaze, and for a moment he looked younger, like the man who’d sat across from her in a Cardiff café and insisted she memorise patterns. “I didn’t think you could handle it,” he said. Rory shook her head. “I handled Evan.” Silas’s eyes softened in a way that didn’t ask for forgiveness. It just acknowledged reality. “You handled it,” he repeated. “And you didn’t ask for help. That’s why I didn’t push. You hated being pulled.” Rory’s chest rose with a sharp inhale, then released slowly. She wanted to accuse him of assuming too much. She wanted to accuse herself for not pushing back harder sooner. “What I hated,” Rory said, “was waking up and realising no one had noticed I’d stopped speaking.” Silas’s face tightened. His eyes went briefly to the scar on her wrist again, and the movement carried regret like a scent. “I noticed,” he said. Rory’s voice dropped. “Then why did you let me run alone?” Silas’s ring lifted and hovered above the parcel. His fingers didn’t open it. They just held it ready, like he refused to decide without her consent. “Because if I pulled you in,” he said, “you’d have blamed yourself when it went wrong.” Rory stared at him. “It already went wrong.” Silas’s shoulders sagged, just a fraction. The bar light caught the grey in his hair like salt in a wound. “I know,” he said. Silence filled the space between them. It carried the years they didn’t speak. It carried Cardiff winter, London streets, his retirement that felt like an ending, her flight that felt like a beginning she didn’t ask for. Rory picked up the glass and finally drank. The whisky hit her tongue, burn and warmth, then settled into a steady heat behind her ribs. It didn’t fix anything. It just made her honest for a moment. “You look like you kept the worst of it,” she said. Silas’s gaze stayed on her mouth for a second, then moved back to her eyes. “You think I kept it?” “I think you wore it,” Rory replied. Silas’s thumb dragged along the parcel’s string knot. “I wore a lot. I didn’t always choose what fitted.” Rory watched his hand. She thought about her own wrist, about the crescent scar that still pulled at skin when she forgot it existed. “Did you keep the file too?” she asked. Silas looked up, and his hazel eyes held a flare of something like anger—not at her, not at the situation. At himself. “No,” he said. “I didn’t get to keep much after Prague.” Rory pushed her glass away. The bar creaked slightly as her elbow shifted. “Then why are you the one receiving it?” she asked. Silas’s jaw tightened again. He lifted the parcel closer to his body, then stopped. The signet ring flashed green light from the neon. He didn’t let the motion become a reveal. He held back. “Because you brought it,” he said. “That answer doesn’t mean anything,” Rory replied. Silas’s gaze didn’t waver. “It means you decided you wanted control.” Rory clenched her fingers. “Control gets you killed.” Silas’s mouth went hard at the edges. “Control gets you through the door. Survival happens because people keep choosing it.” Rory looked at the bookshelf behind him. The secret room sat hidden, accessible through the right kind of attention. She wondered how many times she’d passed that door without thinking of it as a mechanism. “You want to open it here?” she asked. Silas shook his head once. “Not with the whole bar breathing over us.” Rory’s eyes slid across the room. Two men at a table chuckled at something on a phone. A woman drank slowly, eyes wandering, face turned toward the stage that never held anything. No one looked directly at them, but the silence around the edges felt staged. Silas leaned slightly toward her. His voice dropped, tight enough to land between them without spilling. “Come upstairs,” he said. Rory froze. “Upstairs?” He nodded toward the stairs leading behind the bar. “Your flat’s above me. You walk through my life and I don’t know what you carry. That’s not how our arrangement used to work.” Rory swallowed. “You remembered an arrangement.” Silas’s eyes sharpened. “I remembered you.” The words hit her like a hand on the back of her neck—firm, familiar, and unwelcome because it meant he’d been holding her in his mind while she’d tried to live without his shadow. Rory stood, slow this time, not because she hesitated but because she needed her body to keep up with her thoughts. She touched her wrist, the scar under her sleeve. Her fingers lingered there like a promise she didn’t know how to keep. “Don’t act like you can fix time,” she said. Silas grabbed a small key from a hook under the counter. The metal flashed as he held it up, then slipped it into his pocket. “I won’t fix it,” he said. “I’ll tell you what I did. I’ll tell you what I didn’t. You decide what you do next.” Rory let out a breath that sounded like she’d swallowed glass. “You still talk like you’re writing a report,” she said. Silas’s eyes held hers. “Only now I write it for someone who reads.” Rory picked up the edge of her coat and adjusted it over her wrist again, hiding the crescent scar from his gaze. She hated that she did it. She hated that the instinct still followed him. She turned toward the stairs. Halfway there, she glanced back, and the bar light struck his signet ring, catching the green neon in its curve. He stood with his weight balanced too carefully, as if his knee would punish him for being still. “You said you retired,” Rory called. Silas didn’t move. He just looked at her, hazel eyes steady. “I retired from hunting,” he said. Rory stared at him. Her mouth opened, then shut again. She didn’t know what to ask that didn’t turn into blame. “Then what are you doing?” she asked. Silas held up the parcel in one hand. The string sagged slightly. His ring rested against the paper like a seal. “I’m receiving what you carried,” he said. “I’m making sure you don’t carry it alone anymore.” Rory took the next step toward the stairs, the wood creaking under her weight. She felt every year in that sound—each one adding its own note to the same stair. Behind her, Silas moved closer to the shelf wall, his boots careful around his left leg. He didn’t call after her again. Rory climbed, heart loud in her ears, and reached for the door to her flat as Silas’s steps followed her up into the dim.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags69
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences121
tagDensity0.57
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
84.96% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3324
totalAiIsmAdverbs10
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"gently"
count1
2
adverb"carefully"
count2
3
adverb"slightly"
count4
4
adverb"slowly"
count2
highlights
0"quickly"
1"gently"
2"carefully"
3"slightly"
4"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
75.93% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3324
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"weight"
count6
1
word"flicked"
count1
2
word"could feel"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count1
4
word"quivered"
count1
5
word"stomach"
count1
6
word"silence"
count3
7
word"warmth"
count1
8
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"flicked"
2"could feel"
3"pulse"
4"quivered"
5"stomach"
6"silence"
7"warmth"
8"familiar"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"let out a breath"
count2
1
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"let out a breath"
1"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences317
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences317
filterMatches
0"look"
1"feel"
2"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"started to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences369
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3315
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions86
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
26.47% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions131
wordCount2550
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity2.47
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Rory63
Blackwood1
Cardiff3
Evan2
Silas58
Silence1
London1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Rory"
3"Blackwood"
4"Evan"
5"Silas"
6"Silence"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"London"
globalScore0.265
windowScore0.333
52.23% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences179
glossingSentenceCount7
matches
0"not quite a smile, more like the memory of one"
1"looked like it belonged on a hand doing n"
2"looked like a man who had held his breath"
3"looked like habit"
4"felt like an ending, her flight that fe"
5"felt like a beginning she didn’t ask fo"
6"something like anger—not at her, not at the"
7"sounded like she’d swallowed glass"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount3315
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount3
totalSentences369
matches
0"passed that door"
1"hated that she"
2"hated that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs189
mean17.54
std11.8
cv0.673
sampleLengths
017
148
249
363
435
510
657
79
829
930
1030
119
1229
139
148
1541
1619
1739
187
1922
2012
2144
226
236
2423
2528
269
2712
2812
2922
3011
318
3219
3326
3412
3548
368
3714
386
399
4021
416
4224
436
4430
4525
4621
477
4813
497
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences317
matches
0"been tied"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs526
matches(empty)
73.17% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount9
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences369
ratio0.024
matches
0"His left knee caught the light differently when he shifted his weight—still catching up, still taking its time."
1"His eyes—hazel, sharp under the low lamps—tracked her hands first."
2"She watched his fingers as he poured something into a tumbler—dark liquid, no garnish, no show."
3"The room filled with small sounds—ice shifting in glasses somewhere behind her, the hum of the neon, the soft shuffle of feet from a couple at a table who pretended not to listen."
4"Anger came first, then something else—grief dressed as anger, sharp and practical."
5"Her delivery job demanded she watch people’s hands and feet; her survival demanded she read pauses."
6"Silas looked up, and his hazel eyes held a flare of something like anger—not at her, not at the situation."
7"The words hit her like a hand on the back of her neck—firm, familiar, and unwelcome because it meant he’d been holding her in his mind while she’d tried to live without his shadow."
8"She felt every year in that sound—each one adding its own note to the same stair."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2563
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount90
adverbRatio0.035115099492781895
lyAdverbCount16
lyAdverbRatio0.006242684354272337
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences369
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences369
mean8.98
std5.65
cv0.629
sampleLengths
017
112
29
315
412
57
614
728
814
922
109
1118
1210
1325
1410
1527
1614
1716
189
1916
2010
213
228
2310
2412
255
264
2721
289
2918
303
318
329
334
344
3512
3615
3714
3811
398
407
4122
4210
437
446
4516
465
477
4813
498
42.14% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats29
diversityRatio0.14092140921409213
totalSentences369
uniqueOpeners52
27.43% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences243
matches
0"Somewhere behind the bar, bottles"
1"Then her wrist."
ratio0.008
71.85% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount90
totalSentences243
matches
0"It ran in thin sheets"
1"She kicked her trainers into"
2"His grey-streaked auburn hair showed"
3"His left knee caught the"
4"He wore his silver signet"
5"He used it like a"
6"She did remember his voice"
7"She remembered him teaching her"
8"She remembered the way he’d"
9"She hadn’t heard from him"
10"His eyes—hazel, sharp under the"
11"She kept it hidden under"
12"He didn’t need to."
13"He didn’t smile."
14"His mouth held a line,"
15"Her delivery shifts had trained"
16"She could feel her pulse"
17"He took a breath that"
18"She watched his fingers as"
19"He pushed it toward her"
ratio0.37
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount235
totalSentences243
matches
0"The Raven’s Nest took the"
1"A green neon sign blinked"
2"The place smelled of citrus"
3"Maps and black-and-white photographs leaned"
4"Rory shook water from her"
5"It ran in thin sheets"
6"She kicked her trainers into"
7"Silas Blackwood stood behind the"
8"His grey-streaked auburn hair showed"
9"A neat beard held the"
10"His left knee caught the"
11"He wore his silver signet"
12"He used it like a"
13"Rory didn’t remember last time"
14"She did remember his voice"
15"She remembered him teaching her"
16"She remembered the way he’d"
17"She hadn’t heard from him"
18"Silas watched her settle at"
19"His eyes—hazel, sharp under the"
ratio0.967
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences243
matches(empty)
ratio0
78.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences100
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"His grey-streaked auburn hair showed at the sides, trimmed back in a way that made his face look carved rather than aged."
1"Silas watched her settle at the bar with an expression that refused to chase her story."
2"He took a breath that moved his chest like he weighed whether she deserved the truth."
3"He moved a rag along the bar’s edge, slow and deliberate, as if he needed something ordinary to anchor him."
4"The room filled with small sounds—ice shifting in glasses somewhere behind her, the hum of the neon, the soft shuffle of feet from a couple at a table who prete…"
5"He looked tired in a way that made her stomach drop."
6"Silas held her gaze, and for a moment he looked younger, like the man who’d sat across from her in a Cardiff café and insisted she memorise patterns."
7"It carried Cardiff winter, London streets, his retirement that felt like an ending, her flight that felt like a beginning she didn’t ask for."
8"He stood with his weight balanced too carefully, as if his knee would punish him for being still."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags69
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"he repeated, quiet"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags68
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"he repeated (repeat)"
1"she snapped (snap)"
2"he repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences121
tagDensity0.562
leniency1
rawRatio0.044
effectiveRatio0.044
79.9811%