Run: 2026-03-18-01KM09Z39623JC5J8Y1PBDK7EH

Run Details

Duration:
1m 25s
Cost:
$0.015729
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The oak standing stones rose out of the bracken like teeth pulled from the earth. Rory slowed at the first one and stared up at its fluted face. Weather had worn grooves into the wood until the grain looked like river maps. Silver moss clung to the base. Wildflowers crowded the roots in a ring so dense it looked planted by a careful hand rather than chance. Behind her, Nyx drew thinner than the air around them, a tall spill of darkness with faint violet light where eyes should have been. The shade paused at Rory’s shoulder and angled their head toward the stones. “This place tastes wrong,” their whisper brushed the back of her neck. “Old. Watched.” Rory slipped her hand into her jacket pocket and closed her fingers around the moon-cold leaf of the Fae blade. The metal bit her skin through the cloth, clean and sharp, no warmth in it at all. “Comforting,” she muttered. Isolde moved ahead of them without a sound. Her silver hair caught scraps of light between the trees, a pale river down her back. She did not leave a print in the damp earth. Rory watched the ground after each step and saw only bent grass springing up again behind her. “Do not step on the roots,” Isolde called over one shoulder. “They listen.” Rory gave the nearest oak a wary look. Its bark had split in long ridges that resembled knuckles and faces if she squinted. “I’ll keep that in mind.” “Keep more than that,” Nyx murmured. The grove waited beyond the stones, and the moment Rory crossed the threshold, the air changed. It dropped cool against her face. Not cold. Not quite. More like the breath before rain when the clouds had not opened yet. The smell hit next: wet stone, crushed leaves, something sweet and sharp under it, like green apples cut with a knife. The sounds of Richmond Park fell away at her back, the distant traffic and dog barks and voices thinning until they seemed to belong to another day. Ahead of her, the clearing stretched wide and still. Wildflowers grew in drifts across the ground, not in neat patches but in swathes of colour that looked poured there. Blue, gold, violet, white. Their heads turned as if tracking them, though no wind touched them. The grass between them shone with a pale sheen, each blade tipped with dew that caught the light from nowhere Rory could name. The clearing itself sat inside a ring of ancient oaks so thick and twisted they might have belonged to a story older than language. Rory took one step, then another. The ground did not crunch under her boots. It gave a little, soft as felt. “Does it always look like this?” she asked. Isolde glanced back, pale eyes catching what little light filtered through the canopy. “No.” Rory waited. Isolde only walked on, silver hair brushing the dark of her cloak. Nyx leaned close enough that Rory felt the edge of their presence like a draft through a crack. “That answer gave us nothing.” “It gave us less than nothing,” Rory said. A dry sound from Nyx. Not quite laughter, not quite breath. “You’re learning.” She shot them a look, then stopped dead. The flowers ahead had opened wider since she first saw them. She could swear they had shifted from blue to a colour with no name, something between pearl and smoke. A cluster of stems bent as she looked at them, then straightened. She crouched before one and reached out a careful finger. The blossom folded shut the instant her nail brushed it. Rory jerked her hand back. A line of laughter whispered through the grass. She froze. Nyx’s shape sharpened at her side, the edges of their shadow-body tightening. “You heard that.” “I heard that.” Isolde glanced over, her expression unreadable. “The grove noticed your curiosity.” “That’s not supposed to be unsettling,” Rory said. “It would be a poor grove if it did not know you were there.” Rory rose slowly and scanned the trees. The trunks stood close in places, then opened wide in others, creating lanes and alcoves and odd pockets of shade. In one shadowed bend, she caught sight of something that made her chest tighten: a shape like a stag made entirely of light, thin as smoke, standing between two roots. It lifted its head at her, antlers branching like frost, then broke apart into a flock of pale sparks that drifted upward and vanished into the leaves. She stared after it. Nyx followed her gaze. “You saw it too.” “I saw something.” Isolde’s mouth curved at one corner. “Not all things wish to be kept.” Rory rubbed her thumb against the scar on her wrist. The crescent mark tingled beneath her skin. She looked down and found the Heartstone pendant resting against her chest, its crimson surface pulsing once through her shirt, a dull beat like a hidden ember. Warmth spread from it in a quick throb, then faded. Her stomach tightened. Nyx noticed. Of course they did. “That trinket recognised something,” they whispered. “It did nothing of the sort,” Rory said, but her voice came out rougher than she meant. The pendant pulsed again, faint and stubborn. Isolde’s gaze flicked to Rory’s chest. “It remembers a door.” Rory let out a short breath through her nose. “Brilliant. I hate that.” Isolde continued into the grove as if the conversation had finished. Rory exchanged a look with Nyx and followed. The deeper they went, the stranger the place became. The oaks thickened into a hall of trunks, their branches interlacing overhead until they formed a living roof stitched with leaves. Pale shafts of light slipped through in slanted ribbons, but the colours of the grove did not come from the sun. Moss glowed along the roots in faint green lines, and tiny white things—moths, maybe, or stars given wings—floated among the branches with no sound of movement at all. Rory brushed past a fern and nearly pulled back when its fronds shivered as if touched by a passing hand. She looked over her shoulder. No one stood there. Nyx drifted a step behind, their form dark against the luminous greens, and even they seemed quieter here, as if the grove pressed its own hush over them. A narrow stream cut through the clearing ahead. Rory heard it before she saw it, a low chiming sound like water running over glass. She stepped closer and looked down. The water ran clear enough to show a bed of smooth black pebbles, but the surface held reflections that did not match the sky. She saw clouds, then a spill of gold light, then the outline of a city she did not know, towers and bridges mirrored upside down in the current. The reflection shifted as she stared, and for one sharp second she saw her own face looking back from somewhere under the water, eyes bright blue and wide with surprise. She stepped back so fast her boot skidded in the moss. “Did you see that?” she asked. Nyx knelt at the bank without touching the water. Their shadowed fingers hovered a breath above it. “A place that remembers other places.” Isolde crouched beside a fallen log, plucked a white flower from the moss, and held it between two fingers. “The brook keeps what it is given. A sound. A face. A year. If you linger, it may take more.” Rory glanced at the stream again. The water looked harmless now. That made it worse. “Take more?” she echoed. Isolde tucked the flower behind her ear. “An hour inside can steal a day outside. A day can pass like a blink. Time bends where roots run deep.” Rory stared at her. “You could have led with that.” “And spoil the surprise?” Nyx’s whisper slid in from Rory’s left. “I hate that I understand her.” Rory gave a bark of laughter before she could stop herself, and the sound seemed to lift the hush of the grove for a heartbeat. The flowers at her feet trembled. Somewhere above them, a bird called once, but the note came out in three tones at once, layered and thin, like someone playing the same voice through glass. Rory looked up. The canopy overhead had opened into a round space where the branches did not touch. In the gap, the sky showed through—not the grey sprawl she expected over London, but a wash of late evening violet shot through with a pale gold seam. Stars hung there, though the sun had not gone down outside yet, not if the light at the edge of the clearing still held any truth. Her skin prickled. “That’s not right.” Isolde’s eyes moved to the sky, then back to Rory. “What is right for one road is ruin for another.” “That’s not a real answer.” “It was not meant as one.” They walked on. The path narrowed between roots the size of walls. Rory ran her fingertips across one as she passed. The bark felt smooth in places, warm in others, and beneath it she sensed a slow pulse, low and steady, as if the tree carried a buried heart. Tiny pale flowers bloomed from cracks in the wood at shoulder height, each one shaped like a spiral shell. Nyx stopped beneath one branch and tilted their head. “There’s a mark here.” Rory looked where they pointed. A ribbon of silver had been tied around the limb years ago, maybe centuries, its ends frayed to threads. Symbols scratched into the bark ringed the branch in a circle. Some had softened with age. Others looked fresh enough to bleed sap. Rory leaned closer and traced one shape with her eyes: a clawed spiral, a crescent, a line that forked like antlers. “What does it mean?” she asked. Isolde stood beside her, the hem of her cloak brushing the moss without leaving a trace. “A promise. A warning. A door left shut.” Nyx angled closer, the dim violet of their eyes brightening. “From whom?” Isolde turned her gaze toward the deeper trees. “From those who knew enough to fear what answered.” Rory frowned at the sigils. They pulled at something in her head, not a memory exactly, more a feeling of standing on the edge of a thought she could not seize. The Heartstone pendant warmed again against her sternum, not enough to burn, just enough to notice. The air around the branch stirred. Rory glanced up sharply. Between one heartbeat and the next, the shadow under the branch detached from the tree. It rose in a slender shape, human for the span of a breath, then stretched longer and thinner than any body should have been able to hold. A face seemed to form in it, vague as smoke, and two pale points gleamed where eyes might live. The thing drifted toward the far side of the path, pausing as if to study them. Nyx moved first. Their own form sharpened, dark and tall, shoulders squared. The two shadows faced each other in the undergrowth, one living, one borrowed. Rory’s hand went to the Fae blade. The moonsilver felt colder than the air. “Rory,” Nyx whispered, “don’t—” “I’m looking,” she snapped softly. The thing in the tree-shadow bent like a bowing figure, then slipped sideways into the bark and was gone. The woods held still again. Rory lowered the dagger a fraction and drew in a slow breath. “Tell me that happens all the time,” she muttered. Nyx’s shape eased, though their voice stayed thin. “Not in front of me.” Isolde watched the place where the shadow had vanished. “The grove has begun to know your names.” Rory held that look for a second, then shook her head. “That is not reassuring.” “No,” Isolde agreed, already walking. “It was not meant to be.” They followed her deeper until the trees thinned around a wide circle of standing stones half-swallowed by roots and ivy. Each stone rose higher than Rory, its surface carved with channels that held moon-bright water or sap or something she could not name. The marks on them formed spirals, ladders, and long elegant lines that looked almost like script. At the centre of the ring stood a bowl of black stone filled with rainwater so still it reflected the sky from the wrong angle. Rory stopped at the edge of the circle. The air here felt thicker, charged. The pendant under her shirt thudded once against her chest, warm and insistent. Nyx drifted to her side and looked at the stones. “This place keeps its bones in the open.” Rory took one step toward the circle and felt every tiny hair on her arms lift. The Fae blade cooled in her grip. The stream behind them chimed. Somewhere far off, deep in the trees, something answered with a note so low she felt it in her teeth. Isolde reached the centre of the ring and turned back to face them. “Come,” she said, and the water in the black bowl shivered, though no breeze touched it.
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tokens_completion3639
native_tokens_prompt1706
native_tokens_completion3403
native_tokens_completion_images0
native_tokens_reasoning653
native_tokens_cached1280
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num_input_audio_prompt(null)
num_media_completion0
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she snapped softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0.059
effectiveRatio0.039
93.14% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2188
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"sharply"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"sharply"
2"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
63.44% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2188
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"whisper"
count2
1
word"warmth"
count2
2
word"comforting"
count1
3
word"unreadable"
count1
4
word"scanned"
count1
5
word"throb"
count1
6
word"stomach"
count1
7
word"pulsed"
count1
8
word"flicked"
count1
9
word"echoed"
count1
10
word"trembled"
count1
11
word"pulse"
count1
12
word"traced"
count1
13
word"charged"
count1
highlights
0"whisper"
1"warmth"
2"comforting"
3"unreadable"
4"scanned"
5"throb"
6"stomach"
7"pulsed"
8"flicked"
9"echoed"
10"trembled"
11"pulse"
12"traced"
13"charged"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences165
matches
0"e with surprise"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences165
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences199
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2185
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions79
wordCount1914
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.99
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Nyx17
Rory38
Fae3
Isolde16
Richmond1
Park1
Heartstone2
London1
persons
0"Nyx"
1"Rory"
2"Isolde"
places
0"Fae"
1"Richmond"
2"Park"
3"London"
globalScore0.507
windowScore0.5
49.19% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences124
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"looked like river maps"
1"as if tracking them, though no wind touched them"
2"Not quite laughter, not quite breath"
3"not quite breath"
4"something between pearl and smoke"
5"seemed quieter here, as if the grove pressed its own hush over them"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.915
wordCount2185
matches
0"not in neat patches but in swathes of colour"
1"not the grey sprawl she expected over London, but a wash of late evening violet shot through with a pale gold"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences199
matches
0"held that look"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs102
mean21.42
std21.7
cv1.013
sampleLengths
015
152
237
314
437
53
651
713
828
96
1016
1171
129
1383
146
1515
168
1714
1814
1923
208
2113
228
2352
2410
255
268
272
2815
293
3011
318
3214
3384
344
358
363
3713
3854
393
406
416
4217
437
4410
4513
4619
479
4870
4957
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences165
matches
0"been tied"
1"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs320
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences199
ratio0.01
matches
0"Moss glowed along the roots in faint green lines, and tiny white things—moths, maybe, or stars given wings—floated among the branches with no sound of movement at all."
1"In the gap, the sky showed through—not the grey sprawl she expected over London, but a wash of late evening violet shot through with a pale gold seam."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1922
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount75
adverbRatio0.03902185223725286
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.004162330905306972
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences199
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences199
mean10.98
std7.39
cv0.673
sampleLengths
015
113
214
36
419
524
613
712
82
920
1017
113
128
1316
1410
1517
1611
172
188
1915
205
216
2216
236
242
252
2613
2721
2827
299
3020
314
3212
3323
3424
356
368
377
388
3913
401
412
4212
4318
445
458
465
476
482
498
45.98% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.2663316582914573
totalSentences199
uniqueOpeners53
89.49% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences149
matches
0"More like the breath before"
1"Of course they did."
2"Somewhere above them, a bird"
3"Somewhere far off, deep in"
ratio0.027
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences149
matches
0"their whisper brushed the back"
1"Her silver hair caught scraps"
2"She did not leave a"
3"Its bark had split in"
4"It dropped cool against her"
5"Their heads turned as if"
6"It gave a little, soft"
7"She shot them a look,"
8"She could swear they had"
9"She crouched before one and"
10"It lifted its head at"
11"She stared after it."
12"She looked down and found"
13"Her stomach tightened."
14"She looked over her shoulder."
15"She stepped closer and looked"
16"She saw clouds, then a"
17"She stepped back so fast"
18"Their shadowed fingers hovered a"
19"Her skin prickled."
ratio0.181
13.69% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount133
totalSentences149
matches
0"The oak standing stones rose"
1"Rory slowed at the first"
2"Weather had worn grooves into"
3"Wildflowers crowded the roots in"
4"The shade paused at Rory’s"
5"their whisper brushed the back"
6"Rory slipped her hand into"
7"The metal bit her skin"
8"Isolde moved ahead of them"
9"Her silver hair caught scraps"
10"She did not leave a"
11"Rory watched the ground after"
12"Isolde called over one shoulder"
13"Rory gave the nearest oak"
14"Its bark had split in"
15"The grove waited beyond the"
16"It dropped cool against her"
17"The smell hit next: wet"
18"The sounds of Richmond Park"
19"Wildflowers grew in drifts across"
ratio0.893
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences149
matches(empty)
ratio0
97.65% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences79
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Nyx drifted a step behind, their form dark against the luminous greens, and even they seemed quieter here, as if the grove pressed its own hush over them."
1"The water ran clear enough to show a bed of smooth black pebbles, but the surface held reflections that did not match the sky."
2"The bark felt smooth in places, warm in others, and beneath it she sensed a slow pulse, low and steady, as if the tree carried a buried heart."
3"Isolde stood beside her, the hem of her cloak brushing the moss without leaving a trace."
4"Each stone rose higher than Rory, its surface carved with channels that held moon-bright water or sap or something she could not name."
95.59% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Rory said, but her voice came out rougher than she meant"
12.75% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount7
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
2"they whispered (whisper)"
3"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
4"she snapped softly (snap)"
5"she muttered (mutter)"
6"Isolde agreed (agree)"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.294
leniency0.588
rawRatio0.467
effectiveRatio0.275
83.6971%