Run: 2026-03-18-01KM09ZCY8BRVWTCS897521SKC

Run Details

Duration:
37.8s
Cost:
$0.002426
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Thepeeling paint on Eva’s flat door glistened under the dim corridor bulb, flaking off in small curls beneath Aurora’s knuckles. She’d just kicked off her scuffed Docs after a ten-hour shift at Golden Empress, the weight of the insulated bag still pressing into her shoulder like a bruise. Ptolemy’s tail flicked from the armchair—silent judge, as ever—before he stretched and sauntered to the kitchen in that deliberate, offended way cats have when they’ve been left too long. Three sharp knocks fractured the quiet. Aurora froze, one boot still half-on, half-off. No one knocked like that. Not unless they wanted to be heard through three deadbolts. She set her bag down with a thud that made Ptolemy’s ears twitch. Straightened her cropped hoodie over the fresh bruise patterning her collarbone. The knock came again—heavier this time, impatient. Not an accident. Her pulse kicked against her ribs. No. Not after four years. Not without a call, not without a reason, not without— “It’s locked,” she said, loud enough to carry through the wood. “And it’s me you’re talking to.” The voice that answered wasn’t loud, wasn’t angry, wasn’t anything she’d forgotten. “Open it, Rory.” Lucien. Her fingers curled into her palm, the crescent scar on her left wrist tightening like a sutured wound. She exhaled through her nose, slow, deliberate. The scent of jasmine and gunmetal walked through that door before he did. Always had. Even when he spoke French at her, she could still pick the notes out of the language like a familiar perfume. “Door’s not for you,” she said. A pause. Not a hesitation—an appraisal. Then, the dry chuckle that once made her skin remember how to break out in gooseflesh. “Then who is it for? Eva’s in Berlin. Silas’ bar won’t let me upstairs. And you don’t strike me as the type to live in a cave.” Aurora leaned closer, until her forehead almost brushed the peephole. Through the filigreed metal, she saw the tip of a polished shoe on the landing. Then more—tailored wool trousers, a cane with an ivory grip that caught the light like a sliver of bone, the hand resting atop it gleaming with a faint citrine ring. “Move,” she said. The cane twitched. “You used to let me in when I moved without an invitation.” “Used to. Past tense.” She stepped back, fingers brushing the deadbolt. “Four years past tense, Lucien. You don’t get to—” “Four years, three months, and twenty-two days,” he cut in. “I counted. Reluctantly.” Her thumb stilled on the lock. The precision of it—like a ledger entry, not a man. She hated that she still remembered that tone, the one he used when reciting contracts or curses with equal detachment. “Knock it off,” she said. “Then open.” She turned the key. The deadbolts slid back with a metallic groan that sounded like surrender. The door swung inward before the last one disengaged, pushing against her palm as if the flat itself had inhaled. Lucien stood framed in the doorway, one shoulder against the jamb, cane planted like a sentinel. The charcoal suit clung to shoulders broader than she recalled, the platinum hair slicked back farther than she’d ever seen it, exposing the ruin of one ear—lobe notched from some old scuffle. The amber and black eyes found her immediately, pupils dilating just enough to betray interest. Or hunger. She couldn’t decide which unsettled her more. “Took you long enough,” he said. Aurora didn’t move aside. “I’d say come in, but you already did.” His lips quirked. One corner higher than the other, like the memory of a smile archived somewhere deep and dusty. “Clever. Always were.” Ptolemy leapt from the chair onto the coffee table, tail lashing through a scroll of sigils Eva had left open. He fixed Lucien with a hard stare, disapproval radiating in fur and whiskers. Lucien’s gaze flicked to the cat, then to the scroll, then finally to the dishtowel draped over the oven handle—still damp, clinging to the edge like a flag of domestic truce Aurora hadn’t intended to fly. “You’re living here now,” he observed. “Sometimes.” “Eva’s tolerant.” “Eva’s generous. And she owes me.” “For the Berlin trip?” “For the Berlin safe house.” A beat. His fingers tapped once against the cane. Aurora crossed her arms. The move lifted the hem of her hoodie enough to expose the bruise again—the one Evan had pressed there like a seal before she’d fled Cardiff with nothing but a rucksack and Eva’s number. She dropped her arms fast, but not fast enough. Lucien’s gaze lingered. Not with pity. With something far more dangerous. Recognition. “You look well,” he said. She scoffed, stepping aside at last. “Liar.” The flat swallowed him whole. The scent of sandalwood and burnt sugar curled around the room, mingling with the older smells of fried onions drifting up from the curry house below. Lucien inhaled deeply—deliberate, like he was cataloging the air for later use. His cane tip tapped the laminate floor twice, testing weight, as if he expected the boards to hide vermin or secrets. Aurora shut the door behind him with deliberate force. The locks snapped back into place. Lucien turned, cane hooked on his forearm like a gentleman’s umbrella. “You still don’t trust elevators.” “Or men who arrive without calls.” She tossed her keys onto the sideboard where Eva’s collection of tarot cards lay fanned out like a broken fan. “Sit down. If you must.” He didn’t sit. Instead, he drifted toward the bookshelf—wall to wall, floor to ceiling, packed with hardcovers and scrolls in no discernible order. Eva’s particular brand of controlled chaos. He plucked a volume from the middle, spine cracked. The title was in Welsh: *Canu Aled*. He flipped it open to a random page, scanned, and closed it with a snap. “You still read in six languages,” she noted. “Should’ve known you’d find a way to make an entrance.” “You flatter me.” He replaced the book precisely where it had been, as if measuring gaps with his eyes. “I didn’t come to discuss literature.” “Then why?” He turned, meeting her stare. The room seemed to contract. “Evan’s back.” The name hit like a thrown stone. Aurora’s ribs locked. Evan’s face flashed across her vision—the weeknight smile, the knuckles turning white around a pint glass, the voice lowering just before the strike. Not the first time Lucien had said that name. But this time, there was more. “He’s asking for you,” Lucien continued. “Asking who? You?” She laughed, sharp and humorless. “Evan doesn’t know you exist.” “He knows of me. Word travels in certain circles. Ask Eva.” Her stomach dropped. Eva would’ve mentioned it. Unless Eva had been approached in Berlin and— “What did you promise him?” Aurora asked. Lucien’s smile didn’t waver. “Nothing he wouldn’t give freely. A name, a contact. In exchange for information.” “What information?” “That you’re alive. That you’re here. That you’ve moved on.” Her hands clenched into fists. “You told him where I work?” “Not the restaurant. The flat. Brick Lane’s distinctive.” He gestured vaguely. “He’s watching the corner. Always at dusk.” Aurora’s breath came shallow. She crossed the room in three strides, snatched a flashlight from the windowsill—Eva’s weather charm collection rattled like wind chimes—and yanked open the curtain. The street below pulsed with Friday night energy: drunks weaving out of Whitechapel pubs, the glow of halal carts, the flicker of pink neon from the fish market. No Evan. But then, Evan had always been patient. A predator with the patience of a pensioner waiting for a bus. She lowered the flashlight. Turned back. Lucien hadn’t moved. His gaze dropped to the crescent scar visible beneath her sleeve. Not a scar she’d ever explained. “You’re pale,” he said. “You’re observant.” “Not just now. Always.” He stepped closer. The cane’s tip clicked against the laminate. “You still wear the scarf every winter, even when it’s not cold. You chew the inside of your cheek when reciting legal briefs aloud. You hum Rihanna under your breath when you think no one listens.” Ice bloomed at the base of her throat. “You’ve been watching me.” “Professionally. With great discretion.” He tilted his head. “But haven’t we always watched each other?” She hated how the sound of his voice still vibrated in her chest like a tuning fork. Hated that after everything, her body still remembered the cadence of his lies. “Why now, Lucien?” she asked quietly. “Why not before? Why cross a city just to whisper that name in my ear?” He adjusted the cane under his arm. The ivory grip gleamed like ivory. “Because he’s not just asking,” he said. “He’s preparing. Something’s coming. Something that won’t wait for your permission.” Aurora exhaled through her teeth. “And you care because…?” For the first time, the mask flickered. Something raw surfaced in those mismatched eyes. Something almost like protectiveness. Almost. “Because you once saved my life,” he said. “And debts matter.” The words hung in the air, heavier than the scent of curry smoke drifting up through the floorboards. Aurora’s eyes burned. She turned away sharply, busying herself by snatching a glass from the cabinet—Eva’s merlot collection tilted like drunken soldiers—and pouring too quickly. Red splashed over the rim, staining the mat beneath. “Rory—” “Don’t.” She set the glass down without drinking. “Don’t use my name like that.” He didn’t push. Just stood there, cane leaning against the counter, eyes tracking the bruise again, the way her fingers tremblednot from fear, but from the old fury. Ptolemy chose that moment to weave between their legs, purring loud enough to drown a confession. Aurora bent, scooped him up, burying her face in his fur. The cat kneaded her shoulder, claws pricking through fabric. Lucien reached out, hesitated, then let his hand fall. “You still hate wool.” She lifted her head. “I hate men who interfere.” “I don’t interfere. I mitigate.” “That’s a lawyer’s word.” He almost smiled. Almost. “You’re still a solicitor’s daughter. Some things don’t change.” “I’m not. Not anymore.” She set Ptolemy down. The cat stalked off, tail high, offended by the emotional climate. “I deliver noodles. I read case files for Eva when she’s desperate. I’m not who I was when you knew me.” “You’re more,” he said quietly. Aurora’s breath stopped in her throat. Lucien seemed to realize what he’d said. His jaw tightened. “A metaphor. Forget it.” She turned toward the sink, gripping the edge until her knuckles whitened. “You can leave now. I’ve heard your warning. I’ll be careful.” “Careful won’t be enough. He’s not just looking for you. He’s looking for leverage. Something to make you come home.” The word *home* tasted like rust. Cardiff wasn’t home. It hadn’t been for years. Aurora didn’t answer. She ran water into the glass, drank deeply, felt the alcohol bite her throat. Lucien’s reflection appeared beside hers in the grimy windowpane. No one moved. No breath was shared. Then, slowly, his hand settled on the small of her back—just above the scar, just over the muscle still rigid from old tension. His touch was warmth. A brand. A reminder. “You don’t have to face him alone,” he said. She didn’t shrug him off. Didn’t turn. But she didn’t lean in either. Outside, a siren wailed, cutting through the night like a blade through silk. Ptolemy chose that moment to yowl from the bedroom doorway, tail puffed, eyes wide. Something had spooked him. Lucien’s hand tensed against her spine. Aurora broke the moment. She stepped forward, snapped off the tap. “Fine,” she said. “Stay. But on the couch. Not the armchair. Ptolemy’s claimed it.” Lucien exhaled—almost a laugh, almost a surrender. And for the first time in years, she let herself wonder if this was how recklessness began.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
93.33% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags27
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"She stepped back [back]"
1"He gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
2"she asked quietly [quietly]"
3"he said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences75
tagDensity0.36
leniency0.72
rawRatio0.148
effectiveRatio0.107
87.34% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1975
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"reluctantly"
count1
1
adverb"precisely"
count1
2
adverb"sharply"
count1
3
adverb"quickly"
count1
4
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"reluctantly"
1"precisely"
2"sharply"
3"quickly"
4"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
39.24% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1975
totalAiIsms24
found
0
word"weight"
count2
1
word"flicked"
count2
2
word"fractured"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count1
4
word"familiar"
count1
5
word"gleaming"
count1
6
word"sentinel"
count1
7
word"unsettled"
count1
8
word"scanned"
count1
9
word"stomach"
count1
10
word"charm"
count1
11
word"pulsed"
count1
12
word"flicker"
count1
13
word"predator"
count1
14
word"vibrated"
count1
15
word"whisper"
count1
16
word"flickered"
count1
17
word"trembled"
count1
18
word"tension"
count1
19
word"warmth"
count1
20
word"reminder"
count1
21
word"silk"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"flicked"
2"fractured"
3"pulse"
4"familiar"
5"gleaming"
6"sentinel"
7"unsettled"
8"scanned"
9"stomach"
10"charm"
11"pulsed"
12"flicker"
13"predator"
14"vibrated"
15"whisper"
16"flickered"
17"trembled"
18"tension"
19"warmth"
20"reminder"
21"silk"
33.33% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow3
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
1
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
2
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
1"clenched into fists"
2"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences171
matches
0"t with pity"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences171
filterMatches
0"wonder"
hedgeMatches
0"tended to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences219
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords3
totalWords1957
ratio0.002
matches
0"Canu Aled"
1"home"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions29
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
96.38% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions61
wordCount1492
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.07
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Eva9
Aurora16
Docs1
Golden1
Empress1
Ptolemy6
French1
Lucien16
Evan4
Cardiff2
Welsh1
Berlin1
Friday1
Whitechapel1
persons
0"Eva"
1"Aurora"
2"Ptolemy"
3"Lucien"
4"Evan"
places
0"Golden"
1"Cardiff"
2"Welsh"
3"Berlin"
globalScore0.964
windowScore1
44.74% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences95
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"sounded like surrender"
1"as if measuring gaps with his eyes"
2"tasted like rust"
3"appeared beside hers in the grimy windowpane"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.511
wordCount1957
matches
0"not from fear, but from the old fury"
90.56% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount5
totalSentences219
matches
0"hated that she remembered that tone"
1"said that name"
2"chose that moment"
3"chose that moment"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs105
mean18.64
std16.62
cv0.892
sampleLengths
077
16
222
324
410
521
617
712
83
91
1061
116
1249
1355
143
1515
1620
1713
1836
195
202
2116
2220
2372
246
2512
2623
2733
2836
296
301
312
326
334
345
359
3647
3712
385
397
4064
4115
4216
4331
4460
4518
4625
472
4812
4948
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences171
matches
0"been approached"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs275
matches
0"was cataloging"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount21
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences18
totalSentences219
ratio0.082
matches
0"Ptolemy’s tail flicked from the armchair—silent judge, as ever—before he stretched and sauntered to the kitchen in that deliberate, offended way cats have when they’ve been left too long."
1"The knock came again—heavier this time, impatient."
2"Not without a call, not without a reason, not without—"
3"Not a hesitation—an appraisal."
4"Then more—tailored wool trousers, a cane with an ivory grip that caught the light like a sliver of bone, the hand resting atop it gleaming with a faint citrine ring."
5"The precision of it—like a ledger entry, not a man."
6"The charcoal suit clung to shoulders broader than she recalled, the platinum hair slicked back farther than she’d ever seen it, exposing the ruin of one ear—lobe notched from some old scuffle."
7"Lucien’s gaze flicked to the cat, then to the scroll, then finally to the dishtowel draped over the oven handle—still damp, clinging to the edge like a flag of domestic truce Aurora hadn’t intended to fly."
8"The move lifted the hem of her hoodie enough to expose the bruise again—the one Evan had pressed there like a seal before she’d fled Cardiff with nothing but a rucksack and Eva’s number."
9"Lucien inhaled deeply—deliberate, like he was cataloging the air for later use."
10"Instead, he drifted toward the bookshelf—wall to wall, floor to ceiling, packed with hardcovers and scrolls in no discernible order."
11"Evan’s face flashed across her vision—the weeknight smile, the knuckles turning white around a pint glass, the voice lowering just before the strike."
12"Unless Eva had been approached in Berlin and—"
13"She crossed the room in three strides, snatched a flashlight from the windowsill—Eva’s weather charm collection rattled like wind chimes—and yanked open the curtain."
14"She turned away sharply, busying herself by snatching a glass from the cabinet—Eva’s merlot collection tilted like drunken soldiers—and pouring too quickly."
15"Just stood there, cane leaning against the counter, eyes tracking the bruise again, the way her fingers trembled—not from fear, but from the old fury."
16"Then, slowly, his hand settled on the small of her back—just above the scar, just over the muscle still rigid from old tension."
17"Lucien exhaled—almost a laugh, almost a surrender."
89.31% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1513
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount79
adverbRatio0.05221414408460013
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.007931262392597489
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences219
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences219
mean8.94
std7.23
cv0.809
sampleLengths
020
128
229
36
47
55
610
713
811
97
103
116
121
134
1410
1511
166
1712
183
191
2018
217
2213
232
2421
256
262
274
2816
2927
3010
3115
3230
333
343
3512
3611
379
3810
393
406
4110
4220
435
442
454
4612
4720
4816
4932
43.38% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.3013698630136986
totalSentences219
uniqueOpeners66
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences143
matches
0"Then, the dry chuckle that"
1"Then more—tailored wool trousers, a"
2"Instead, he drifted toward the"
3"Just stood there, cane leaning"
4"Then, slowly, his hand settled"
ratio0.035
80.14% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount50
totalSentences143
matches
0"She’d just kicked off her"
1"She set her bag down"
2"Her pulse kicked against her"
3"she said, loud enough to"
4"Her fingers curled into her"
5"She exhaled through her nose,"
6"She stepped back, fingers brushing"
7"he cut in"
8"Her thumb stilled on the"
9"She hated that she still"
10"She turned the key."
11"She couldn’t decide which unsettled"
12"His lips quirked."
13"He fixed Lucien with a"
14"His fingers tapped once against"
15"She dropped her arms fast,"
16"She scoffed, stepping aside at"
17"His cane tip tapped the"
18"She tossed her keys onto"
19"He didn’t sit."
ratio0.35
71.89% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount111
totalSentences143
matches
0"She’d just kicked off her"
1"Ptolemy’s tail flicked from the"
2"Aurora froze, one boot still"
3"She set her bag down"
4"The knock came again—heavier this"
5"Her pulse kicked against her"
6"she said, loud enough to"
7"The voice that answered wasn’t"
8"Her fingers curled into her"
9"She exhaled through her nose,"
10"The scent of jasmine and"
11"Aurora leaned closer, until her"
12"The cane twitched."
13"She stepped back, fingers brushing"
14"he cut in"
15"Her thumb stilled on the"
16"The precision of it—like a"
17"She hated that she still"
18"She turned the key."
19"The deadbolts slid back with"
ratio0.776
34.97% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences143
matches
0"Even when he spoke French"
ratio0.007
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences52
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"She set her bag down with a thud that made Ptolemy’s ears twitch."
1"The door swung inward before the last one disengaged, pushing against her palm as if the flat itself had inhaled."
2"His cane tip tapped the laminate floor twice, testing weight, as if he expected the boards to hide vermin or secrets."
87.96% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags27
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"She stepped back, fingers brushing the deadbolt"
1"He replaced, as if measuring gaps with his eyes"
96.67% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags18
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"he observed (observe)"
1"she noted (note)"
2"Lucien continued (continue)"
3"She laughed (laugh)"
dialogueSentences75
tagDensity0.24
leniency0.48
rawRatio0.222
effectiveRatio0.107
82.9748%