Run: 2026-03-18-01KM0A544JM435RZGGZZXXVYFZ

Run Details

Duration:
22.0s
Cost:
$0.005669
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The green neon sign above the entrance buzzed like a trapped insect every time someone pushed the door. Aurora felt it through her chest before she even stepped inside, the low hum of it sliding under the collar of her delivery jacket. Soho air clung to her hair—cold, wet, and sharp. She shook it off outside and kept moving. Her shoes scuffed the worn threshold. Inside, The Raven’s Nest held a different temperature: dim, warm, and familiar in a way she never admitted out loud. Maps and black-and-white photographs crowded the walls, their inked coastlines and faces fixed in time. A few patrons leaned over drinks like they had all the hours in the world. Someone played a record low enough that it filled the gaps instead of demanding attention. Aurora paused by the bar. A man behind it moved with practiced economy, silver ring catching the light when his hand turned a glass. Grey-streaked auburn hair. Neatly trimmed beard. A slight limp that didn’t slow him so much as announce itself at every step. A face Aurora hadn’t seen in years, but the angle of his mouth still landed the same way—measured, not unkind. Silas looked up. His hazel eyes found hers, fast and hard, then softened by fractions. He didn’t grin. He didn’t reach across the bar. He just stood there with his right hand resting on the counter and let the silence do the first work. Aurora felt her grip tighten on her phone. The screen stayed dark. She hadn’t even unlocked it after coming in. Her throat tightened anyway. She leaned on the edge of the bar like she needed the support. Silas’s silver signet ring flashed again as he lifted his left hand, palm slightly open. Not a wave. An invitation to stop moving. Aurora stopped moving. She stared at him long enough to feel ridiculous for staring, then broke the stare like it burned. Her eyes dropped to his knee, where his left foot hit the floor a beat later than her brain wanted to accept. She couldn’t help it. The injury had stayed. “Silas,” she said. The name came out too plain, like she hadn’t rehearsed it on the walk over. For a moment his expression held steady. Then he nodded once, slow. He kept his gaze on her and motioned to the space at the bar beside him with a small movement of his chin. Aurora slid onto the stool. The wood creaked under her weight and the sound felt too loud in her head. Silas set a short glass in front of her without asking what she wanted. The liquid inside looked like it carried its own amber weather. She didn’t drink yet. She watched the way his fingers moved, how he placed the glass with the exact distance from the counter he seemed to prefer. “You turned up,” he said. His voice matched the room—steady, low, and edged enough to cut through noise. It carried no surprise in it, only confirmation. Aurora’s mouth moved before she planned it. “You still own the place.” A flicker crossed his face, not amusement. Something like recognition of the trap she’d sprung for him. He turned his right hand so the signet ring faced up. “I bought it,” he said. “Years ago.” “I didn’t know.” She heard the defensive part in her own tone and hated it. She swallowed the rest. “I mean—I didn’t keep in touch.” Silas didn’t flinch. He didn’t offer a gentler version. “You never did,” he said, and the words landed with weight that didn’t need drama. Aurora picked up the glass and held it between her palms. The warmth bled through her fingers. A crescent-shaped scar sat on her left wrist, pale against the dark sleeve. She could feel it when she curled her hand around the glass. She used that as an anchor, something real. “Do you want me to apologise?” she asked. Silas’s eyes narrowed slightly. Not angry. Listening harder. “No,” he said. “I want you to sit still for a minute and look at me like I’m not someone you escaped.” Aurora’s breath caught. She stared at him again, properly this time. The grey-streaked hair made him look older, of course, but the change wasn’t only age. It lived in his shoulders. In the way his posture carried the calm of someone who had built a life on purpose, then built another life around it. The boyish sharpness she remembered—if she was honest, the part of him that had joked too quickly and judged too fast—had been replaced with a steadier kind of control. He still held himself like he knew exits. He just didn’t look for them anymore. “You look…” She stopped herself. She didn’t want to list the obvious. She didn’t want to offer compliments dressed as nostalgia. Silas lifted his glass slightly, mirroring her. “Go on.” Aurora held the amber inside her glass and watched it tremble when she shifted her fingers. “Different.” Silas gave a short nod. “So do you.” Aurora glanced at her own hands as if she didn’t recognise them. Her fingernails had tiny dents from delivery boxes and gym doors and the cheap kind of work that left marks. She wore her hair the same—straight, shoulder length black, familiar in her own mirrors. But her face carried the thinness of stress that refused to fully leave. “And you don’t,” she said, then regretted it as soon as it left her mouth. Silas’s expression tightened. He leaned a fraction closer, his limp visible only because his weight shifted with intention. “I retired,” he said. “That’s not the same as disappearing.” Aurora let out a breath that sounded like it came from somewhere deeper than her chest. The bar’s chatter brushed against her, turning the moment into a bubble with edges you could bump into. “You retired from what?” she asked. Silas didn’t answer straight away. He turned his head slightly toward the rest of the room, taking inventory of it like he used to take inventory of streets. Then he returned his gaze to her. “From the sort of work where people ask why you came back.” Aurora looked past him. A map hung on the wall behind the bottles—old ink, thick lines, a route marked with a red pen that had bled through the years. The name on the map had faded, but the shape of it stayed sharp enough to make her stomach twist. She remembered a night when she’d sat in a car with the heater broken, listening to someone else’s voice on the phone while her body counted every beat her fear demanded. She remembered a hand on her shoulder that had been steady. She remembered the way Silas had said her name once, quietly, like he’d decided not to let her disappear. Her grip on the glass tightened until the rim clicked her fingertips. “You were supposed to call me,” she said. Silas’s face didn’t change much, but something in his eyes pulled back and then returned, like a curtain dropping and rising. “I left,” he said. “That wasn’t the plan.” Aurora heard the ‘wasn’t’ and wanted to hate it. Time had turned everyone’s explanations into excuses in her head. Years had polished that bitterness until it shone. “You left me,” she said. The word landed with a bluntness she couldn’t take back. The bar’s noise didn’t react. No one looked over. The room stayed indifferent, as if grief worked on schedules and this moment didn’t count. Silas’s mouth pressed into a line. He ran his thumb along the edge of his signet ring once, a small motion that looked like habit. “I gave you the front door,” he said. “You didn’t ask for anything after that.” Aurora’s laugh came out wrong—too short, too sharp. “I didn’t ask because I thought you’d disappear like everyone else.” Silas held her gaze. “I didn’t disappear. I got hurt.” Aurora’s eyes dropped to his knee again. The limp sat there, present, undeniable. She could see it. She could deny it. Both felt useless. “You didn’t tell me,” she said. Silas’s head tilted. “You didn’t ask.” Aurora sucked in a breath and then let it out. Her delivery jacket had shifted on her shoulders and she felt the weight of the strap across her chest. A faint smell of restaurant grease lingered on her sleeve where she’d brushed against the wrong surface in a hurry. “You think I didn’t ask?” she said. Her voice carried no volume now, only tension. “I used to pull the phone out and stare at it. I’d type your name. Then I’d delete it. I told myself you had your life, and I had mine.” Silas didn’t interrupt. He watched her like he had all the time in the world, then used that time to study her without pity. Aurora pushed the glass aside a few inches. The amber left a warm smear on the bar’s surface under it where the condensation had gathered. “You knew about Evan,” she said. Silas’s eyes didn’t flicker toward the room, but his posture changed. He straightened by a fraction. Like her words had pressed a hidden button. “I knew enough,” he said. Aurora’s jaw tightened. “Enough to do what?” Silas’s fingers tapped once on the counter. He stopped tapping when she flinched. “That’s the thing,” he said, voice level. “I did what I could do. I couldn’t drag you out of your life without causing the kind of attention that would’ve killed you. You needed distance, Rory. You needed it fast.” Aurora’s fingers curled around nothing. She kept her hands still so she wouldn’t start shaking. Silence sat between them, thick as the bar’s woodgrain. “I wasn’t asking to be rescued,” she said. “I was asking you to stay.” Silas studied her face. The hazel eyes looked brighter under the dim lights, and she hated how much it looked like concern—how easily her brain translated his expressions into old patterns. “Look at me,” he said. Aurora did. He leaned slightly to the side, the limp making him shift like an old door hinge. His signet ring caught light again when he raised his right hand to point, not at her, not at the room, but at the wrist she kept close to herself. “Show me,” he said. Aurora’s pulse rose at once. Her left wrist sat tucked under her jacket sleeve. The crescent-shaped scar felt like a secret even when she carried it on skin. “What?” she asked, like she hadn’t heard. Silas’s mouth tightened. “The thing you keep covering.” Aurora’s thumb pressed against the edge of her sleeve. Her body resisted the idea of revealing anything to anyone, not because it embarrassed her, but because it made the past feel current again. She pulled the sleeve up. The scar sat there—small, crescent-shaped, pale and healed badly enough to show the accident had once owned her whole childhood. She hadn’t thought about it in weeks. Not until Silas looked at it like he remembered. Silas let his gaze linger just long enough for her to feel measured, not exposed. “I tried,” he said. Aurora’s stomach turned. She waited for him to explain, for him to build a bridge from that single sentence. He didn’t. He let the words sit and do what he’d once done in worse rooms: make the truth heavy enough to swallow. Aurora lowered her sleeve again. The motion felt controlled, but her hands shook once anyway, only once. “You changed,” she said, and it came out smaller than she meant. Silas’s expression sharpened as if the word had cut him and he didn’t enjoy the sensation. “So did you.” “No,” she said. “You mean… you got to become the version of yourself that lives with consequences. I didn’t. I lived under them.” Silas’s eyes stayed on hers. “Who lives under them forever?” Aurora stared at the map behind his shoulder. She saw the route again. Cardiff’s coastline, London’s grid, the way she’d moved without looking back because looking back gave the memories a chance to grab her throat. “I tried to live,” she said. Silas’s mouth moved like he wanted to argue, then he didn’t. He set his palm flat on the counter for a moment, grounding himself. “You work for that restaurant,” he said. Aurora blinked. “Golden Empress.” His nod looked deliberate. “Yu-Fei Cheung. Delivery drops. You show up early when you can’t sleep.” Aurora’s throat tightened again. “How do you—” Silas lifted his left hand slightly, cutting her off without cruelty. “I hear what’s nearby.” Aurora wanted to call it nosiness. Wanted to call it threat. The older version of her would’ve done that automatically. Instead she asked, “Do you still talk to her?” Silas didn’t smile. “I talk to people who keep their heads on.” Aurora swallowed. “That’s not an answer.” “It is,” Silas said. “It means you shouldn’t go looking for a reason to hate me tonight.” Aurora’s breath left her in a rush. “I don’t hate you.” Silas’s eyebrows rose a touch. He didn’t look convinced. Aurora leaned forward anyway, enough to make her knee knock the underside of the bar with a dull sound. “I hated you for leaving, then I hated myself for needing you. Then I got busy. Work. Flat above the bar. Food wrappers in my bag. Any kind of normal I could stack up and pretend I picked.” Silas watched her. His hands stayed still this time. “And now?” he asked. Aurora’s voice dropped. “Now I see you and I can’t tell which parts of the regret belong to you and which parts belong to me.” Silas’s face softened at the edges. He looked, for a second, like the man Aurora remembered before time started shaving the sharpness off him. “You want to know what regret does?” he asked. Aurora’s mouth parted. She didn’t answer. She didn’t want to give him the satisfaction of shaping her words. Silas continued. “It makes you rehearse conversations you never had.” Aurora froze. Her scalp prickled. Silas shifted his weight, his limp obvious as his knee carried him slightly sideways. He pointed his signet ring toward the back wall. “You don’t want to talk here,” he said. Aurora followed his point with her eyes. A bookshelf sat along the wall like furniture the bar had inherited from a previous tenant. The books didn’t line up like they belonged there. She’d walked past it a dozen times since she’d moved into the flat above the bar, always pretending she hadn’t noticed the slight gap at the edge where wood met wall. “You’ve been watching me,” she said. Silas shook his head once. “No. I’ve been waiting for you to decide whether you’re still afraid of the parts of me that hurt.” Aurora’s heartbeat hammered behind her ribs. She stood so fast her stool slid back with a scrape. She didn’t reach for her drink. Silas rose too, slow, using the counter as a reference point while his limp adjusted him to full movement. He didn’t step away. He faced her and held the distance between them like it mattered. “Rory,” he said, and the way he said it felt like he’d earned the right after years of not saying it. Aurora’s eyes burned. She refused to blink. “What did you want tonight?” she asked. She forced the words through teeth that felt too tight. Silas didn’t look away. “I wanted to see if you still carry the same stubborn brain.” Aurora let out a breath through her nose. “I always did.” Silas nodded. “Good. Then listen. We’re going back.” Aurora stared at the bookshelf again. The air near it felt colder, like the room held a different temperature on purpose. “Back where?” she asked, even though she already knew what she’d always avoided. Silas didn’t answer the question directly. He moved toward the bookshelf with careful, quiet steps. The signet ring flashed under the dim light as he ran his fingers along the spine of a volume near the middle. A soft click sounded when he pressed the right edge. The shelf shifted. A hidden space yawned open behind it—dark and narrow, lit by a small lamp that made the walls look damp with age. Aurora stayed where she stood, her arms locked to her sides. Her delivery bag sat heavy on her shoulder. She felt suddenly aware of every pocket on it, every object that could clatter, every sound that could give her away. Silas looked back at her. His eyes didn’t plead. They didn’t demand. They waited. “Come on,” he said. Aurora’s voice came out thin. “If I go in there, you’ll tell me what you left out.” Silas’s gaze held. “If you stay out there, you’ll keep living in your own version of my silence.” Aurora swallowed. She tasted coffee she hadn’t ordered and something metallic beneath it, like old coins. She stepped closer to the open shelf. The smell of paper and dust rolled out, dry and old, and it hit her like a memory she hadn’t touched in years. Aurora looked at Silas one more time from over the threshold of that hidden room. “Why now?” she asked. Silas’s mouth tightened. “Because you’re here.” “That’s not a reason,” Aurora said. “It was for me,” he replied. He held the doorway with one hand, leaving the other at his side. His limp slowed his movement, but it didn’t stop him. He waited like he’d learned how to wait without breaking. Aurora took one step into the darkness behind the bookshelf. The lamp light caught the edge of her scar when she shifted her wrist, quick and pale, then vanished again as the sleeve fell back into place. Silas stayed just behind her shoulder, close enough for her to hear the fabric of his coat move. She turned her head slightly, looking at him in profile. “You owe me,” she said. Silas’s voice didn’t rise to match her tension. “You owed me too.” Aurora’s breath stalled. The room behind the shelf felt narrower, the walls nearer, the air thick with the space between old choices and new survival. “Don’t say that,” she said. Silas didn’t flinch. He didn’t move away from the doorway. He stayed anchored there, like the past could push him and he could still stand. “Say it then,” Aurora demanded. “Say what you won’t put in a message. Say what you left on the table.” Silas’s eyes held hers in the dim light. He opened his mouth, and the first word sat there on his tongue long enough for Aurora’s chest to tighten around it.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags46
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences87
tagDensity0.529
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
83.95% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3115
totalAiIsmAdverbs10
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count8
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"quickly"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
66.29% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3115
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"familiar"
count2
1
word"measured"
count2
2
word"silence"
count3
3
word"weight"
count5
4
word"flicker"
count2
5
word"warmth"
count1
6
word"could feel"
count1
7
word"stomach"
count2
8
word"tension"
count2
9
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"measured"
2"silence"
3"weight"
4"flicker"
5"warmth"
6"could feel"
7"stomach"
8"tension"
9"pulse"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"let out a breath"
count2
1
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"let out a breath"
1"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences281
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences281
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences323
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3103
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions65
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions99
wordCount2548
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity1.96
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity5.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Aurora50
Silas45
Time1
London1
persons
0"Nest"
1"Aurora"
2"Silas"
3"Time"
places
0"Raven"
1"London"
globalScore0.519
windowScore0
42.64% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences163
glossingSentenceCount7
matches
0"looked like it carried its own amber weat"
1"Something like recognition of the trap she’d"
2"sounded like it came from somewhere deeper"
3"looked like habit"
4"looked like concern—how easily her brain"
5"felt like a secret even when she carrie"
6"felt like he’d earned the right after y"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.645
wordCount3103
matches
0"not at her, not at the room, but at the wrist she kept close to herself"
1"not at the room, but at the wrist she kept close to herself"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences323
matches
0"polished that bitterness"
1"used that time"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs160
mean19.39
std14.1
cv0.727
sampleLengths
042
143
245
324
441
53
641
720
84
913
1023
113
1248
1318
1435
155
1615
1752
185
1921
2012
2128
227
2325
249
2515
2650
278
288
2922
303
3151
3244
3321
349
3517
368
3759
3815
3918
4010
4134
426
4328
4419
4549
4661
4712
488
4921
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences281
matches
0"been replaced"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs499
matches(empty)
54.40% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences323
ratio0.031
matches
0"Soho air clung to her hair—cold, wet, and sharp."
1"A face Aurora hadn’t seen in years, but the angle of his mouth still landed the same way—measured, not unkind."
2"His voice matched the room—steady, low, and edged enough to cut through noise."
3"The boyish sharpness she remembered—if she was honest, the part of him that had joked too quickly and judged too fast—had been replaced with a steadier kind of control."
4"She wore her hair the same—straight, shoulder length black, familiar in her own mirrors."
5"A map hung on the wall behind the bottles—old ink, thick lines, a route marked with a red pen that had bled through the years."
6"Aurora’s laugh came out wrong—too short, too sharp."
7"The hazel eyes looked brighter under the dim lights, and she hated how much it looked like concern—how easily her brain translated his expressions into old patterns."
8"The scar sat there—small, crescent-shaped, pale and healed badly enough to show the accident had once owned her whole childhood."
9"A hidden space yawned open behind it—dark and narrow, lit by a small lamp that made the walls look damp with age."
98.82% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1427
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount59
adverbRatio0.04134548002803083
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.009110021023125438
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences323
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences323
mean9.61
std6.85
cv0.713
sampleLengths
018
124
29
38
46
520
615
715
815
95
1019
113
123
1315
1420
153
1612
173
186
1920
208
214
228
234
2413
2515
263
275
283
2918
3022
314
324
333
3415
357
365
3723
385
3915
4014
4111
424
4323
445
4513
468
477
485
497
43.50% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats21
diversityRatio0.18575851393188855
totalSentences323
uniqueOpeners60
56.74% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences235
matches
0"Neatly trimmed beard."
1"Then he nodded once, slow."
2"Then he returned his gaze"
3"Instead she asked,"
ratio0.017
61.70% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount93
totalSentences235
matches
0"She shook it off outside"
1"Her shoes scuffed the worn"
2"His hazel eyes found hers,"
3"He didn’t grin."
4"He didn’t reach across the"
5"He just stood there with"
6"She hadn’t even unlocked it"
7"Her throat tightened anyway."
8"She leaned on the edge"
9"She stared at him long"
10"Her eyes dropped to his"
11"She couldn’t help it."
12"He kept his gaze on"
13"She didn’t drink yet."
14"She watched the way his"
15"His voice matched the room—steady,"
16"It carried no surprise in"
17"He turned his right hand"
18"She heard the defensive part"
19"She swallowed the rest."
ratio0.396
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount220
totalSentences235
matches
0"The green neon sign above"
1"Aurora felt it through her"
2"Soho air clung to her"
3"She shook it off outside"
4"Her shoes scuffed the worn"
5"Maps and black-and-white photographs crowded"
6"Someone played a record low"
7"Aurora paused by the bar."
8"A man behind it moved"
9"A slight limp that didn’t"
10"A face Aurora hadn’t seen"
11"Silas looked up."
12"His hazel eyes found hers,"
13"He didn’t grin."
14"He didn’t reach across the"
15"He just stood there with"
16"Aurora felt her grip tighten"
17"The screen stayed dark."
18"She hadn’t even unlocked it"
19"Her throat tightened anyway."
ratio0.936
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences235
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences102
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"The boyish sharpness she remembered—if she was honest, the part of him that had joked too quickly and judged too fast—had been replaced with a steadier kind of …"
1"A map hung on the wall behind the bottles—old ink, thick lines, a route marked with a red pen that had bled through the years."
2"He ran his thumb along the edge of his signet ring once, a small motion that looked like habit."
3"Silas’s expression sharpened as if the word had cut him and he didn’t enjoy the sensation."
4"A hidden space yawned open behind it—dark and narrow, lit by a small lamp that made the walls look damp with age."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags46
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"he said, and the words landed with weight that didn’t need drama"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags43
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Aurora demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences87
tagDensity0.494
leniency0.989
rawRatio0.023
effectiveRatio0.023
79.1569%