Run: 2026-03-18-01KM0AKG35TEESSYJDXYT3Z00Q

Run Details

Duration:
18.7s
Cost:
$0.005342
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rain came down in hard sheets that smacked against the pavement and turned the streetlights into blurred coins. Harlow Quinn ran anyway. Her boots slapped through shallow puddles, then found deeper ones where the gutter had backed up. The smell of wet stone and car exhaust sat in her throat, metallic, familiar. She cut across a taxi lane, shoulder angled, eyes locked on the man ahead. Tomás Herrera had vanished hours earlier—vanished in a way that didn’t match his usual routine. That was what kept the idea sharp. Quinn had followed leads all night, and the last one had come wrapped in a witness statement that tried to sound casual and failed. A man. Olive skin. Dark curls. A medallion catching flashes of green neon light. A left-forearm scar that looked like a map with all the roads cut off. He ran with a kind of restraint, like he refused to waste motion. That detail had nagged at her. Hunters wasted energy. He didn’t. He moved like he understood the surface of the city and its rules. Quinn’s radio hissed with static. She didn’t answer. The street swallowed the sound. The suspect—Herrera—darted around a closed shopfront with a bent sign and disappeared for two seconds between parked cars. Quinn hit the same gap and saw him again at the next bend, slipping past a dark alley where the rain couldn’t decide whether to fall straight down or drift sideways. He looked back once. Not a panicked glance. A calculated check. Quinn tightened her grip on her notebook, the thing she’d written on mid-chase. She didn’t carry it for paperwork. She carried it to remind herself that she had a trail. That was all she needed: a trail. He turned down a set of steps that led toward an underpass. The street-level light faded as the concrete swallowed the brightness. Quinn followed without hesitation. Rain thundered above. The underpass smelled like damp plaster and old tyres. Herrera’s medallion flashed at the corner of her vision—Saint Christopher, tarnished metal turning rain into streaks of silver. He caught the edge of the wall as he moved, palm flattening against cold brick, and then he slid through a gap in a chain-link fence that looked more like someone’s idea of concealment than a proper entrance. Quinn stopped short, boots grinding on gravel. Her hand went to her belt. She didn’t draw yet; she listened instead. Her hearing caught three things: rain on concrete; distant traffic; and a low scrape from beyond the fence, like wood moving against wood. Quinn climbed the fence. The wire bit through her sleeve and left a sting behind her wrist. She landed on the wet other side, steadied herself, and walked faster. Herrera kept moving—fast enough to stay in front but slow enough to make sure she saw where he went. Ahead, a bookshelf leaned against a wall that hadn’t looked like it belonged in the underpass. The rain had washed the dust off its spines. Quinn hadn’t noticed it until Herrera pushed the shelf. It pivoted with a soft grind, not the loud complaint of cheap hinges. The wall behind it gave way like it had been waiting for an excuse. Herrera slipped through first. Quinn’s chest tightened. She had the thought—sharp, unwanted—that this wasn’t a random escape route. This was a known mouth. A familiar throat. Quinn stepped forward and shoved the shelf with her shoulder. The hidden door swung farther open and cold air rolled out. It smelled wrong. Not damp stone. Something older, like dust stirred in a sealed archive. Her breath steamed as she went in. The room beyond felt like a secret someone had been maintaining. Maps covered the walls—old roads, antique borders, lines drawn in ink that bled at the edges where time had worried them. Black-and-white photographs hung beside the maps: faces blurred by age, places caught mid-change. A green neon sign glowed above a bar Quinn knew from case summaries and rumours—The Raven’s Nest. The street’s noise faded as if the walls had swallowed it. Herrera didn’t go toward the bar. He threaded past a cluster of stools toward a corridor lit by a dim strip along the floor. He moved like he didn’t want to give anyone the satisfaction of looking directly at him. Quinn followed. The corridor narrowed. The air cooled. She could hear music somewhere else in the bar, muffled and low. Someone laughed at a distance that didn’t reach her. Herrera reached the end and stopped at a door. He didn’t touch the handle at first. He looked back at Quinn. Rain still drummed behind her, but in here it sounded distant, as if trapped under glass. Quinn held her posture steady. Her jawline set. She’d dealt with men who smiled too much and men who cried without tears. Herrera didn’t offer either. He stared with a focus that looked like he had decided something. “You don’t follow people into basements,” he said, voice rough from running. “You make them come to you.” Quinn’s eyes flicked to his left forearm. The scar cut across him like a warning. Her gaze dropped to his medallion and caught on the Saint Christopher figure. Green neon reflected on the glass like a second eye. “Who gave you that token?” Quinn asked. He didn’t answer right away. His hand slid into his jacket pocket, and Quinn’s own instincts snapped her forward. She took a step closer, closing the distance. Her right hand hovered near her holster. Herrera pulled out a small object—bone, pale as paper left too long in daylight. He held it flat between thumb and forefinger, rain-slick and dry at the edges, like it belonged in a different climate. Quinn felt the shape of her case click into place. A bone token could open doors that didn’t admit they existed. She’d read the reports. She’d dismissed them as nonsense. Now she watched him hold the evidence like a key. “You don’t get to use it,” she said. Herrera’s eyes flicked past her shoulder, and Quinn sensed the change in the room before she saw it. The corridor shadows thickened along the walls. The light strip at floor level seemed dimmer, like it drank electricity. “Do you want me arrested,” Herrera asked, “or do you want what’s waiting?” Quinn didn’t like the way he framed it. He made danger sound like a choice. Like she could walk away and still keep her mind clean. “I want you,” she said. “And I want to know why you disappeared.” He smiled without warmth. “You think I ran from you?” “Someone did,” Quinn said. “And it wasn’t you.” The silence stretched, thin as thread. Somewhere in The Raven’s Nest, glasses clinked. A voice carried a phrase Quinn couldn’t catch. It felt like the bar existed outside the chase, indifferent. Herrera shifted his weight toward the door. “I’ve got to get to the Market before it moves again. If you follow, you won’t like what you find.” Quinn’s fingers tightened. Her wrist watch, worn leather, pressed against her skin. The watch ticked in her mind like a countdown. “Then come out and talk,” she said. Herrera’s shoulders lowered, tension leaving him for a second, then snapping back into place. He nodded toward the door. “You’ll have to decide right now.” Quinn moved closer to the door, ignoring the way her stomach tightened. She leaned in and listened. Beyond it, the sound wasn’t like a normal room. It held a pressure. A hum at the edges of hearing, like the city itself had a pulse beneath the streets. She looked at Herrera. His medallion caught the neon glow again. He held the bone token out as if offering it. The door had no handle. It didn’t look like a door in the usual way. It had an outline in the plaster, a seam like a line drawn with a blade. Where a lock should have been, there was only a shallow indentation, the shape of his token’s bottom curve. Quinn stepped to the side so she could watch him while keeping the seam in view. She didn’t like decisions made by other people’s timing. “You go first,” she said. Herrera’s expression tightened. “That’s not how it works.” Quinn reached into her jacket and pulled out her own radio. She kept it silent, thumb covering the speaker. She keyed it to dead air anyway, listening to the static. The signal had always been bad in places like this, but she needed confirmation of one thing: she couldn’t count on backup to chase her here. She looked at Herrera again. “If you walk through, I walk through.” He studied her for a beat, then looked at the seam in the wall. “You won’t find answers in there,” he said. “You’ll find deals.” Quinn’s eyes narrowed. “Criminals always call it a deal when they’re cornered.” He swallowed. Not like fear—like respect for the weight of her words. Then he pushed the token into the indentation. The seam in the plaster brightened with a pale glow. It wasn’t neon, wasn’t flame. It looked like moonlight ground into dust and forced to behave. The glow spread thinly around the seam, then thickened into a frame. The air inside the frame rippled. Rain sound vanished completely. Music from the bar cut out. The room seemed to hold its breath. Herrera didn’t move yet. He kept his hand on the token a moment longer and then pulled free. He met Quinn’s eyes. “You’re a detective,” he said. “You know the law. So you should also know what comes after.” Quinn’s heart kicked. She forced her voice steady. “This isn’t your courtroom.” “It’s not,” he agreed. “It’s The Veil Market.” The name hit her like a door slamming. She’d heard it in whispers and half-credible files. She’d seen one photo in a dossier: a stall line of objects that shouldn’t have existed under any sun. Enchanted goods. Banned alchemical substances. Information that didn’t belong in any official record. Quinn had always wondered how anyone could move through it and come back the same. Herrera stepped into the frame. Quinn followed, shoulder first, then the rest of her body. The moment she crossed, the air changed. Her skin prickled. Her ears popped. The rain smell fell away like someone had yanked a curtain over her nose and replaced it with something sharper—ozone and old incense, mixed with damp stone. She blinked hard. The corridor blurred into a tunnel lined with stalls that didn’t fit together like normal commerce. The ceiling vanished into darkness that looked alive. Lanterns hung from chains with hooks shaped like bones. Under the lanterns, merchants stood in shadow, their faces half-hidden behind hoods and masks. Street-level Quinn’s brain wanted street logic. The Market didn’t offer it. The stalls shifted in layout every few seconds, like the space didn’t agree with geometry. Quinn caught a glimpse of metal hooks hanging from a rack, then they were gone when she looked directly at them. Herrera walked ahead with purpose that looked steadier than her own. He didn’t look at the merchants. He looked at the ground, then at signs that weren’t signs. A chalk marking on a stone that pulsed faintly, then went quiet. Quinn kept a few steps behind. Her jaw tightened until it hurt. A merchant approached the gap between stalls, a figure wrapped in layered cloth. A voice came out of the hood, thin and precise. “Bone token,” the merchant said. “Who carries the law?” Quinn stepped forward, her boots striking stone that felt colder than it should have been. “I carry it,” she said. The merchant’s head tilted. “Law doesn’t pay here.” “I don’t plan to pay,” Quinn said. “I plan to take the man you helped hide.” Herrera turned his head just enough to remind Quinn he still existed. “You don’t get to do that,” he said. Quinn swung her attention back to him. “I followed you. Now you explain.” Herrera’s gaze darted past her to a cluster of stalls. Quinn saw movement—an arm in a glove reaching out, then withdrawing. She felt eyes on her from every shadow. “You brought yourself into it,” Herrera said. “That means you’re involved now.” Quinn’s blood went hot. “I’m a detective, Herrera. I don’t become guilty because I stepped into a nightmare.” A laugh came from somewhere to her left. Not playful. Mechanical. Like the Market itself had decided to respond. The merchant in front of her lifted a hand. Something in the air tightened, and Quinn felt a pressure behind her ribs. Her watch seemed to lag for a second, leather creaking under her grip. Her tongue tasted dry. Quinn clenched her jaw and looked the merchant in the hood gap. “Don’t do anything to me.” Herrera’s shoulders rose, then fell. He looked suddenly tired, as if the Market wore him down. “Quinn,” he said, using her name like he’d stored it for later. “I told you. This place doesn’t handle cops well.” “I’m handling you,” she snapped. Herrera moved forward, cutting through the narrow space between stalls. Merchants parted with reluctant speed, as if they didn’t want to risk angering whoever Herrera belonged to. The sight irritated Quinn more than it should have. It meant she had been walking into a web she didn’t understand. Quinn followed anyway. She shoved her hand into her jacket and drew her sidearm. The cold metal grounded her. The noise echoed strangely in the underground market, swallowed then returned a heartbeat later. Several merchants froze. One of them leaned back as if the gun had offended gravity. Herrera didn’t flinch. He looked ahead, toward a corridor that split off behind a tapestry of stitched maps. The same kind of maps she’d seen on the walls of The Raven’s Nest, except these moved. Ink lines crawled over paper like veins. Quinn marched after him. “You’re not leaving,” she said. Herrera’s voice lowered as he pushed aside the tapestry. “If you come into the back corridors, you’ll face the part of it you don’t get to explain away.” Quinn shoved the tapestry too. It brushed her cheek, damp and cold. Behind it, the space narrowed into a passage that looked less like a market and more like a throat leading to something else. The corridor’s walls weren’t brick. They were something smoother, almost veined. Light from hanging lanterns shifted along them in patterns that reminded Quinn of dried ink bleeding again. Herrera stopped at a second seam in the wall. This one didn’t glow. It looked normal until he lifted his hand and pressed his scarred left forearm against it. Quinn watched the scar flare with heat beneath the skin. It wasn’t fire. It was warmth like skin remembering it had once been injured. The seam opened. Inside, a room waited with tables lined up like confessionals. Bottles sat in rows. Labels didn’t read any language Quinn knew. Some bottles moved when she looked at them; others stayed still, as if they understood the difference between observation and interference. A smell hit her—chemicals, herbs, and something like bruised flowers. Quinn stopped at the threshold. Her gun dipped slightly without her permission. She felt the choice in her gut like a physical ache. She could turn back. She could yank Herrera out of this without knowing what he’d seen. She could protect herself by insisting the danger stayed outside her jurisdiction. Or she could follow him in and risk the Market rewriting what she thought reality was. Herrera turned back to her, eyes bright with urgency that didn’t match his earlier calm. “See what I meant?” Quinn took one step into the room. The floor beneath her boots looked solid and still looked like it might ripple if she shifted too hard. She scanned the shelves, fast. Her mind went for evidence: components, substances, anything that connected to the cases that had pulled her into this. A bottle on the nearest table caught her eye. The liquid inside moved against the glass like it had a pulse. A faint symbol clung to the label, and she recognised it from an old report—one she’d been told was a hoax. Harlow Quinn’s throat tightened. The report had mentioned supernatural origins in the disappearance of a detective’s partner three years ago. Her partner. DS Morris. The case she still couldn’t talk about without her hands going cold. Herrera’s medallion hung against his chest, swinging slightly. “You’re looking at what you came for,” he said. Quinn didn’t answer. She kept her gun up, but her focus sharpened on the bottle. The symbol. The substance. The connection. Behind her, the corridor noise deepened, as if the Market had turned toward them. Quinn heard cloth shifting, steps that didn’t belong to merchants, and a soft scrape like something being pulled out from a pocket that was too deep. She didn’t turn yet. She kept her eyes on Herrera. “Who did you meet to get that?” Herrera’s lips parted. He looked toward the room’s far wall where a narrow doorway sat half-hidden behind hanging chains of glass beads. “I didn’t meet them,” he said. “They met me.” Quinn’s anger flared. “Then you bring me to them.” Herrera’s gaze flicked to the doorway and then back to her. His voice dropped again. “No. I bring you here to stop you from walking in alone.” Quinn couldn’t decide if it sounded like guilt or control. She shifted her weight and aimed slightly past Herrera’s shoulder, toward the doorway. Her gun’s barrel reflected the room’s strange light, and for a second the reflection looked wrong—like the muzzle belonged to someone else’s hand. The scraping sound behind her grew louder. The air in the room tightened around her like a net. Quinn stood her ground at the threshold of the trap-room, rain gone, bar music absent, the Market’s hum pressing into her teeth. “Pick a side,” she told Herrera, voice low enough to cut through the pressure. “Now.” Herrera’s face tightened with a decision he’d been holding back. He stepped closer, medallion brushing his jacket, and lowered his voice to keep it from the room. “I can’t promise you’ll survive the answer,” he said. “But you already followed me.” Quinn’s grip didn’t loosen. Her eyes stayed on the hidden doorway, on the chains of glass beads trembling like they sensed her heartbeat. Then Herrera moved—one sharp step toward the doorway, hand raised toward the chain as if he knew exactly where to touch. Quinn pulled her gun up higher, jaw locked. The room behind her filled with new shadows. A hooded figure leaned into view from the corridor, and Quinn heard a voice that carried the weight of the Market. “Detective,” it said, sound like dry paper. “You walked in with a hunter’s eyes.” Quinn didn’t turn her head all the way. She kept Herrera in her sight while the hooded figure’s presence tightened the air. Herrera stared at the chain beads, then at Quinn, and the space between them held all the danger and all the choice. He didn’t stop his hand. Quinn made her decision with her feet, not her words—she stepped forward into the room, closing the distance between herself and the doorway, and the hooded figure’s shadow lunged closer as the Market shifted around them.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags24
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.444
leniency0.889
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.26% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3230
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"completely"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count3
highlights
0"completely"
1"suddenly"
2"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
61.30% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3230
totalAiIsms25
found
0
word"familiar"
count2
1
word"calculated"
count1
2
word"thundered"
count1
3
word"flicked"
count3
4
word"warmth"
count2
5
word"silence"
count1
6
word"weight"
count3
7
word"tension"
count1
8
word"stomach"
count1
9
word"pulse"
count2
10
word"pulsed"
count1
11
word"mechanical"
count1
12
word"echoed"
count1
13
word"tapestry"
count3
14
word"scanned"
count1
15
word"carried the weight"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"calculated"
2"thundered"
3"flicked"
4"warmth"
5"silence"
6"weight"
7"tension"
8"stomach"
9"pulse"
10"pulsed"
11"mechanical"
12"echoed"
13"tapestry"
14"scanned"
15"carried the weight"
33.33% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow3
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
2
label"weight of words/silence"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"clenched her jaw"
2"the weight of her words"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences314
matches
0"t with urgency"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences314
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seemed to"
2"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences344
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3214
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions41
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions128
wordCount2898
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity2.21
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn64
Herrera41
Saint2
Christopher2
Raven3
Nest3
Market8
Morris1
Rain4
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Herrera"
2"Saint"
3"Christopher"
4"Raven"
5"Market"
6"Morris"
7"Rain"
places(empty)
globalScore0.396
windowScore0.167
16.50% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences206
glossingSentenceCount11
matches
0"looked like a map with all the roads cut"
1"smelled like damp plaster and old tyres"
2"looked like it belonged in the underpass"
3"felt like a secret someone had been mai"
4"looked like he had decided something"
5"felt like the bar existed outside the c"
6"as if offering it"
7"looked like moonlight ground into dust an"
8"something like bruised flowers"
9"looked like it might ripple if she shifte"
10"sounded like guilt or control"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount3214
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences344
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs120
mean26.78
std15.79
cv0.589
sampleLengths
066
174
237
313
460
537
638
756
820
923
1048
1161
1226
1336
147
1573
1640
1729
1837
1938
2018
2138
227
2334
2435
2540
268
2737
2813
2926
3013
3110
328
3331
3427
3521
367
3725
3847
3921
4050
4125
425
438
4456
4512
4625
4712
4820
4938
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences314
matches
0"were gone"
1"been injured"
2"been told"
3"being pulled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs565
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount18
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences19
totalSentences344
ratio0.055
matches
0"Tomás Herrera had vanished hours earlier—vanished in a way that didn’t match his usual routine."
1"The suspect—Herrera—darted around a closed shopfront with a bent sign and disappeared for two seconds between parked cars."
2"Herrera’s medallion flashed at the corner of her vision—Saint Christopher, tarnished metal turning rain into streaks of silver."
3"She didn’t draw yet; she listened instead."
4"Her hearing caught three things: rain on concrete; distant traffic; and a low scrape from beyond the fence, like wood moving against wood."
5"Herrera kept moving—fast enough to stay in front but slow enough to make sure she saw where he went."
6"She had the thought—sharp, unwanted—that this wasn’t a random escape route."
7"Maps covered the walls—old roads, antique borders, lines drawn in ink that bled at the edges where time had worried them."
8"A green neon sign glowed above a bar Quinn knew from case summaries and rumours—The Raven’s Nest."
9"Herrera pulled out a small object—bone, pale as paper left too long in daylight."
10"Not like fear—like respect for the weight of her words."
11"The rain smell fell away like someone had yanked a curtain over her nose and replaced it with something sharper—ozone and old incense, mixed with damp stone."
12"Quinn saw movement—an arm in a glove reaching out, then withdrawing."
13"Some bottles moved when she looked at them; others stayed still, as if they understood the difference between observation and interference."
14"A smell hit her—chemicals, herbs, and something like bruised flowers."
15"A faint symbol clung to the label, and she recognised it from an old report—one she’d been told was a hoax."
16"Her gun’s barrel reflected the room’s strange light, and for a second the reflection looked wrong—like the muzzle belonged to someone else’s hand."
17"Then Herrera moved—one sharp step toward the doorway, hand raised toward the chain as if he knew exactly where to touch."
18"Quinn made her decision with her feet, not her words—she stepped forward into the room, closing the distance between herself and the doorway, and the hooded figure’s shadow lunged closer as the Market shifted around them."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2927
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount90
adverbRatio0.030748206354629312
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.004099760847283909
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences344
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences344
mean9.34
std5.87
cv0.628
sampleLengths
018
14
216
314
414
515
67
724
82
92
102
118
1214
1313
146
153
162
1713
185
193
205
2118
2231
234
244
253
2613
276
2811
297
3012
3110
324
333
349
3518
3638
377
386
397
4023
414
4213
4312
4419
4516
469
479
4813
4914
39.53% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats36
diversityRatio0.19186046511627908
totalSentences344
uniqueOpeners66
35.59% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences281
matches
0"Somewhere in The Raven’s Nest,"
1"Then he pushed the token"
2"Then Herrera moved—one sharp step"
ratio0.011
80.50% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount98
totalSentences281
matches
0"Her boots slapped through shallow"
1"She cut across a taxi"
2"He ran with a kind"
3"He moved like he understood"
4"She didn’t answer."
5"He looked back once."
6"She didn’t carry it for"
7"She carried it to remind"
8"He turned down a set"
9"He caught the edge of"
10"Her hand went to her"
11"She didn’t draw yet; she"
12"Her hearing caught three things:"
13"She landed on the wet"
14"It pivoted with a soft"
15"She had the thought—sharp, unwanted—that"
16"It smelled wrong."
17"Her breath steamed as she"
18"He threaded past a cluster"
19"He moved like he didn’t"
ratio0.349
4.48% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount256
totalSentences281
matches
0"Rain came down in hard"
1"Harlow Quinn ran anyway."
2"Her boots slapped through shallow"
3"The smell of wet stone"
4"She cut across a taxi"
5"Tomás Herrera had vanished hours"
6"That was what kept the"
7"Quinn had followed leads all"
8"A medallion catching flashes of"
9"A left-forearm scar that looked"
10"He ran with a kind"
11"That detail had nagged at"
12"Hunters wasted energy."
13"He moved like he understood"
14"Quinn’s radio hissed with static."
15"She didn’t answer."
16"The street swallowed the sound."
17"The suspect—Herrera—darted around a closed"
18"Quinn hit the same gap"
19"He looked back once."
ratio0.911
17.79% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences281
matches
0"Now she watched him hold"
ratio0.004
94.52% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences133
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"Quinn had followed leads all night, and the last one had come wrapped in a witness statement that tried to sound casual and failed."
1"He caught the edge of the wall as he moved, palm flattening against cold brick, and then he slid through a gap in a chain-link fence that looked more like someo…"
2"Ahead, a bookshelf leaned against a wall that hadn’t looked like it belonged in the underpass."
3"Rain still drummed behind her, but in here it sounded distant, as if trapped under glass."
4"Merchants parted with reluctant speed, as if they didn’t want to risk angering whoever Herrera belonged to."
5"Light from hanging lanterns shifted along them in patterns that reminded Quinn of dried ink bleeding again."
6"Some bottles moved when she looked at them; others stayed still, as if they understood the difference between observation and interference."
7"Her mind went for evidence: components, substances, anything that connected to the cases that had pulled her into this."
8"Quinn heard cloth shifting, steps that didn’t belong to merchants, and a soft scrape like something being pulled out from a pocket that was too deep."
83.33% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags24
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"he said, voice rough from running"
1"she told, voice low enough to cut through the pressure"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags24
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"he agreed (agree)"
1"she snapped (snap)"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.444
leniency0.889
rawRatio0.083
effectiveRatio0.074
75.8606%