Run: 2026-03-18-01KM0AQ29J4CRFG4113C989GFZ

Run Details

Duration:
39.0s
Cost:
$0.002640
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain came down like judgment—cold, relentless, turning every neon pulse from The Raven’s Nest into a shivering smear on wet pavement. Detective Harlow Quinn kept her breath shallow beneath the awning of a shuttered Thai restaurant, her brown eyes locked on the bar’s entrance. The green neon sign flickered—*The Raven, The Raven*—as if calling her out by name. She didn’t move under its glow, though. She observed. Always observed. Her leather watch glinted when she shifted her wrist, water beading against the worn brass. Seven minutes past midnight. Tomas Herrera—*Herrera*, not *Tommy*, never *Tommy*—had been inside for eleven. The kind of timing that made Quinn’s fingers twitch. Medical care, her source had said. Off-the-books. Favor for a clique. She adjusted the collar of her trench coat, thick enough to cut the wind, thin enough to let her move. No umbrella. Rain didn’t scare her. Eight years in Special Branch, another ten before that in uniform. Rain was just weather—she’d survived worse. Then he came. Herrera pushed through the door in a rush, collar pulled up, shoulders hunched against the downpour. Not a drunk stumble, not a happy drunk’s lurch. This was a man late for a train. His curly dark hair was slicked back, his olive skin glistening under the neon glare. Even from twenty paces, she saw the way his eyes flicked left then right—like a man checking for tails. Quinn stepped from the awning into the rain, keeping her distance. She didn’t want to spook him, not yet. Not on the street. Not where she could lose him. But Herrera wasn’t stupid. He walked fast—purposeful strides down Wardour Street, dodging puddles, weaving through late-night crowds of drunks and tourists in branded club wear. She stayed two lengths behind, her boots silent on the soaked pavement. When he turned abruptly into an alley near Chinatown—*Berwick Street Market closed at midnight, no one should be there*—Quinn increased her pace. The alley smelled of fried oil and damp brick. A rat skittered past her shoe. She ignored it. Herrera was already at the far end, pressing something into a keypad beside a rusted service door marked *No Access*—but the way his fingers moved, quick and practiced, spoke of familiarity. Quinn ducked behind a dumpster just in time to see the door click open. A sliver of dim light spilled out, then vanished. He was gone. She was three strides from the door when she realized: he didn’t use a keycard. Not up close, anyway. The motion was too fluid, too confident. He pressed *something* against the reader. Flat. Small. A bone token. Her breath caught. *Veil Market.* Quinn had read the case files—the black-market bazaar beneath London, moving like a parasite, living in the lungs of the city. A place where enchanted goods changed hands in hushed tones and gunpowder wasn’t the only thing that could kill you. Where the law didn’t walk. Where a detective’s badge was worse than useless. She hesitated on the threshold. Herrera was down there. A suspect. A lead. A man connected to a clique she’d been building a case on for six months. And now he was vanishing into the underworld. Quinn exhaled through her nose, a slow release of discipline. No backup. No backup meant no radio. No backup meant if something went wrong, she was on her own. And in the Veil Market, *something going wrong* wasn’t a possibility—it was an inevitability. She stepped inside. The door swung shut behind her with a hollow *clang.* The air turned thick—dank, metallic, the kind of damp that clung to lungs and left a film on the back of your throat. The darkness wasn’t total: flickering orange lanterns strung along exposed pipes cast long, shifting shadows. The walls weren’t brick or concrete. They were *alive.* She saw veins of something dark pulsing under the surface, like roots of an ancient tree. The stairs were steep, slick with something that wasn’t just water. Quinn pulled her Maglite from her belt. The beam cut through the murk, revealing worn stone steps carved generations ago—maybe Victorian, maybe older. The voices from below were muffled, layered with something like static, as if sound traveled differently here. She took a breath and descended. At the bottom, the cavern opened into a marketplace suspended in time. A Tube station frozen mid-collapse, the platform arches still intact, but the tracks buried under stalls and tables. A hundred lamps flickered. A river of smoke rose from grills where vendors roasted meats she couldn’t identify. The air was thick with incense, ozone, the copper tang of old blood. Quinn stepped onto the platform. Her shoes made almost no sound. The crowd parted for no one. She was too warm. Too pale. Too *visible.* A woman with skin like cracked porcelain eyed her from behind a stall selling vials of violet liquid that pulsed with inner light. A man with three too many fingers on one hand offered her a small green apple. Quinn didn’t touch it. *Bone token.* She needed one. But she didn’t have one. She hadn’t planned on coming here. Herrera was across the market, weaving between a group of pale figures in long coats—*skinwalkers, maybe*—and a stall hawking "genuine cursed dolls." He glanced back once, eyes locking onto hers. Recognition flashed. He bolted. Quinn cursed under her breath and pushed forward, shoving aside a vendor’s stall draped in velvet. The canvas tore away from a cage of rattling things—young faces, no older than ten, their eyes black and vacant. They didn’t scream. They just *stared.* Quinn didn’t look back. Herrera vanished into a narrow corridor between two stalls selling jewelry that hummed when touched. She sprinted, her watch thudding against her wrist, rainwater still dripping from her sleeves. The corridor dead-ended in a brick wall—except it wasn’t a wall. It was a bookshelf. No, not just a bookshelf—a false front. A portal. Herrera had already slipped through a gap between *Bleak House* and *The Turn of the Screw.* Quinn grabbed the spines of two books, yanked them aside. Beyond was another room—small, lit by a single blue bulb. A table draped in bloodstained cloth held surgical tools arranged like a shrine. Herrera stood at the far end, a knife in his hand—long, curved, something you’d use in an abattoir. His scar ran like a river across his forearm, pale against olive skin. “Herrera!” Quinn barked, feet planted, gun hand near her holster. He didn’t flinch. Didn’t apologize. “Detective Quinn,” he said, voice rough. “You shouldn’t be here.” “You’re under arrest.” He laughed. Short. Bitter. “For what? Saving a friend? Healing a wound? Or just for knowing things you can’t handle?” She stepped forward. “That knife’s illegal in three jurisdictions.” “So’s trespassing in the Veil Market.” The air between them thrummed. Something was wrong. The room felt wrong—walls breathing, the blue bulb flickering like a dying insect. Then the lamp cracked. Light slashed across Herrera’s face. His eyes weren’t brown. Not entirely. There was a thread of gold, like molten metal, deep in the iris. Quinn froze. *What the hell are you?* Herrera lunged. She dodged, but not fast enough—his blade raked her thigh through her coat. Sharp. Hot. She hissed, rolled, came up swinging with her torch like a baton. It cracked against his wrist. The knife skittered across the tile floor. Herrera backpedaled, snatching up a glass vial from the table. He hurled it at her feet. The vial shattered. A wave of blue smoke erupted—*not smoke.* Gas. Toxic. Irritant. Her eyes burned instantly. She staggered, hand over her face, already choking. The room seemed to tilt. Herrera was moving again—toward a shadowed corner where a second door stood half-open, leading into darkness. A tunnel. A way out. Quinn blinked through tears. Her sidearm was useless now. Silver-tipped bullets wouldn’t help here. Neither would a badge. But she had her training. She lunged forward, grabbed the surgical table, and upended it. It crashed between them, sending tools skittering. Herrera cursed, kicked it aside. Quinn kicked it back. Claustrophobic now, trapped in a room shrinking with every second. The gas stung her throat. Herrera grabbed a bone saw from the floor. She had seconds. Quinn feinted right, then drove forward low—shoulder into his gut. They hit the shelves. Old leather-bound medical texts rained down. A ledger split open on the floor, its pages covered in symbols, blood, herbs. Herrera swung the saw. She blocked with her forearm—bone on bone, pain like lightning—but got his wrist pinned. The saw clattered to the floor. They grappled. He was stronger than she expected. Youth, adrenaline, maybe something else—something not human. She kneed him hard in the thigh. He grunted, staggered. Quinn went for her cuffs. Herrera’s eyes flicked to the door behind him. There was movement there. Dark figures. Three of them. Cloaked. Silent. Their faces—if they were faces—were obscured by shifting shadows. Herrera’s eyes lost their fire. He wasn’t running anymore. He was *waiting.* Quinn’s breath came in ragged bursts. The gas was thinning, but her vision still swam. She had one shot. “Herrera,” she growled, cuff in hand. “Last chance.” He looked at her. Really looked. Then past her, to the door. “You don’t understand,” he said. His voice was different now—softer. Almost sad. “No one does.” The shadowy figures stepped forward. Quinn’s fingers tightened around the cuffs. She could take one. Maybe two. But three? She couldn’t. And the room was tilting again. The fire alarm in the Veil Market had begun—a high, wailing siren, alien and dissonant, cutting through the smoke and stench. The first stall in the main chamber had gone up—flames licking across a table of enchanted jewelry. Someone had dropped a lantern. Panic erupted. Quinn made the only choice she had left. She turned and ran—not after Herrera, not into the shadowed corridor—but back through the bookshelf, back into the artery of the Veil Market, where the fire was spreading like a living thing, where panicked bodies shoved past her, where a goblin child with too many teeth screamed in a language Quinn refused to hear. She hit the stairs at a sprint, boots echoing, rain slashing her face as she burst into the alley. The service door slammed behind her. No sign of Herrera. No sirens. No backup. But in the distance, something *answered*—a low, guttural growl rising from the sewers, or maybe it was in the wind. Quinn stood in the rain, coat drenched, thigh burning, and realized she’d just lost her suspect. Worse—she’d been seen. And the Veil Market had just tasted blood. She pulled out her phone, thumbed a single contact: *DI Carter. No voice, no explanation. Just the location ping.* Then she slipped into the velvet dark of Soho’s backstreets, leaving only footprints in the rain, and the ghost of a knife-cut on her leg. The hunt wasn’t over. But for tonight—it was *hers.*
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences12
tagDensity0.417
leniency0.833
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
97.28% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1840
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
64.67% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1840
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"pulse"
count1
1
word"flickered"
count2
2
word"lurch"
count1
3
word"glistening"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count2
5
word"porcelain"
count1
6
word"pulsed"
count1
7
word"velvet"
count2
8
word"shattered"
count1
9
word"echoing"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"flickered"
2"lurch"
3"glistening"
4"flicked"
5"porcelain"
6"pulsed"
7"velvet"
8"shattered"
9"echoing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"air was thick with"
count1
highlights
0"The air was thick with"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences219
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences219
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences226
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen56
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans23
markdownWords61
totalWords1812
ratio0.034
matches
0"The Raven, The Raven"
1"Herrera"
2"Tommy"
3"Tommy"
4"Berwick Street Market closed at midnight, no one should be there"
5"No Access"
6"something"
7"Veil Market."
8"something going wrong"
9"clang."
10"alive."
11"visible."
12"Bone token."
13"skinwalkers, maybe"
14"stared."
15"Bleak House"
16"The Turn of the Screw."
17"What the hell are you?"
18"not smoke."
19"waiting."
20"answered"
21"DI Carter. No voice, no explanation. Just the location ping."
22"hers."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
81.90% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions76
wordCount1762
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity1.36
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Herrera"
discoveredNames
Raven3
Nest1
Harlow1
Quinn24
Thai1
Herrera21
Special1
Branch1
Wardour1
Street2
Chinatown1
Market6
London1
Veil5
Maglite1
Victorian1
Tube1
Turn1
Gas1
Carter1
Soho1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Herrera"
3"Market"
4"Gas"
5"Carter"
places
0"Raven"
1"Special"
2"Wardour"
3"Street"
4"London"
5"Veil"
6"Soho"
globalScore0.819
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences110
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"something like static, as if sound traveled"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1812
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences226
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs86
mean21.07
std18.83
cv0.894
sampleLengths
070
149
243
33
467
529
64
755
849
926
1034
113
125
1354
145
1531
1643
173
1873
1951
206
2161
2225
2343
2416
2530
262
272
2846
2944
309
3126
3254
3310
3415
353
3620
379
386
3921
404
4124
422
435
442
4539
4616
473
4827
4921
97.25% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences219
matches
0"was slicked"
1"was gone"
2"were muffled"
3"were obscured"
4"been seen"
73.42% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs316
matches
0"was vanishing"
1"wasn’t running"
2"was *waiting"
3"was thinning"
4"was tilting"
5"was spreading"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount40
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences33
totalSentences226
ratio0.146
matches
0"The rain came down like judgment—cold, relentless, turning every neon pulse from The Raven’s Nest into a shivering smear on wet pavement."
1"The green neon sign flickered—*The Raven, The Raven*—as if calling her out by name."
2"Tomas Herrera—*Herrera*, not *Tommy*, never *Tommy*—had been inside for eleven."
3"Rain was just weather—she’d survived worse."
4"Even from twenty paces, she saw the way his eyes flicked left then right—like a man checking for tails."
5"He walked fast—purposeful strides down Wardour Street, dodging puddles, weaving through late-night crowds of drunks and tourists in branded club wear."
6"When he turned abruptly into an alley near Chinatown—*Berwick Street Market closed at midnight, no one should be there*—Quinn increased her pace."
7"Herrera was already at the far end, pressing something into a keypad beside a rusted service door marked *No Access*—but the way his fingers moved, quick and practiced, spoke of familiarity."
8"Quinn had read the case files—the black-market bazaar beneath London, moving like a parasite, living in the lungs of the city."
9"And in the Veil Market, *something going wrong* wasn’t a possibility—it was an inevitability."
10"The door swung shut behind her with a hollow *clang.* The air turned thick—dank, metallic, the kind of damp that clung to lungs and left a film on the back of your throat."
11"The beam cut through the murk, revealing worn stone steps carved generations ago—maybe Victorian, maybe older."
12"Herrera was across the market, weaving between a group of pale figures in long coats—*skinwalkers, maybe*—and a stall hawking \"genuine cursed dolls.\" He glanced back once, eyes locking onto hers."
13"The canvas tore away from a cage of rattling things—young faces, no older than ten, their eyes black and vacant."
14"The corridor dead-ended in a brick wall—except it wasn’t a wall."
15"No, not just a bookshelf—a false front."
16"Beyond was another room—small, lit by a single blue bulb."
17"Herrera stood at the far end, a knife in his hand—long, curved, something you’d use in an abattoir."
18"The room felt wrong—walls breathing, the blue bulb flickering like a dying insect."
19"She dodged, but not fast enough—his blade raked her thigh through her coat."
20"A wave of blue smoke erupted—*not smoke.* Gas."
21"Herrera was moving again—toward a shadowed corner where a second door stood half-open, leading into darkness."
22"Quinn feinted right, then drove forward low—shoulder into his gut."
23"She blocked with her forearm—bone on bone, pain like lightning—but got his wrist pinned."
24"Youth, adrenaline, maybe something else—something not human."
25"Their faces—if they were faces—were obscured by shifting shadows."
26"His voice was different now—softer."
27"The fire alarm in the Veil Market had begun—a high, wailing siren, alien and dissonant, cutting through the smoke and stench."
28"The first stall in the main chamber had gone up—flames licking across a table of enchanted jewelry."
29"She turned and ran—not after Herrera, not into the shadowed corridor—but back through the bookshelf, back into the artery of the Veil Market, where the fire was spreading like a living thing, where panicked bodies shoved past her, where a goblin child with too many teeth screamed in a language Quinn refused to hear."
30"But in the distance, something *answered*—a low, guttural growl rising from the sewers, or maybe it was in the wind."
31"Worse—she’d been seen."
32"But for tonight—it was *hers.*"
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1800
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount66
adverbRatio0.03666666666666667
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.005
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences226
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences226
mean8.02
std7.02
cv0.876
sampleLengths
022
123
214
37
42
52
615
74
810
99
106
111
124
1320
142
154
1611
176
183
1916
209
218
2215
2319
2411
258
264
276
284
2921
3012
3122
329
336
343
3531
3614
379
383
3915
404
417
426
431
441
453
463
472
4821
4920
41.15% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats22
diversityRatio0.3053097345132743
totalSentences226
uniqueOpeners69
93.11% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences179
matches
0"Then he came."
1"Then the lamp cracked."
2"Then past her, to the"
3"Just the location ping.*"
4"Then she slipped into the"
ratio0.028
99.33% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount54
totalSentences179
matches
0"She didn’t move under its"
1"Her leather watch glinted when"
2"She adjusted the collar of"
3"His curly dark hair was"
4"She didn’t want to spook"
5"He walked fast—purposeful strides down"
6"She stayed two lengths behind,"
7"She ignored it."
8"He was gone."
9"She was three strides from"
10"He pressed *something* against the"
11"Her breath caught."
12"She hesitated on the threshold."
13"She stepped inside."
14"They were *alive.* She saw"
15"She took a breath and"
16"Her shoes made almost no"
17"She was too warm."
18"She hadn’t planned on coming"
19"They didn’t scream."
ratio0.302
74.53% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount138
totalSentences179
matches
0"The rain came down like"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn kept her"
2"The green neon sign flickered—*The"
3"She didn’t move under its"
4"Her leather watch glinted when"
5"Tomas Herrera—*Herrera*, not *Tommy*, never"
6"The kind of timing that"
7"Favor for a clique."
8"She adjusted the collar of"
9"Rain didn’t scare her."
10"Rain was just weather—she’d survived"
11"Herrera pushed through the door"
12"This was a man late"
13"His curly dark hair was"
14"Quinn stepped from the awning"
15"She didn’t want to spook"
16"He walked fast—purposeful strides down"
17"She stayed two lengths behind,"
18"The alley smelled of fried"
19"A rat skittered past her"
ratio0.771
27.93% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences179
matches
0"Even from twenty paces, she"
ratio0.006
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences65
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The voices from below were muffled, layered with something like static, as if sound traveled differently here."
1"She sprinted, her watch thudding against her wrist, rainwater still dripping from her sleeves."
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"he said, voice rough"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Quinn barked (bark)"
1"she growled (growl)"
dialogueSentences12
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.333
82.5190%