Run: 2026-03-18-01KM1GQTEWY7FDZ7DK9X4STS9R

Run Details

Duration:
1m 27s
Cost:
$0.003368
Provider:
Minimax

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The rain had a mean streak that night. It came sideways off the Thames and hammered the glass of the streetlamps, turning the light into something blurred and bleeding. Detective Harlow Quinn ran beneath it, her boots slapping the pavement in a rhythm her body remembered even when her lungs forgot how to cooperate. She had him. Three blocks ago she had him. The suspect—young, fast, dressed in a coat too thin for November—had bolted from the alley on Charing Cross where they'd cornered him. Wrong call on the warehouse. Too many of them. Quinn had picked the right moment to move and the wrong one to underestimate how fast a man could run when he thought his life depended on it. Which, given what was in that warehouse, it probably did. She could still see him. A dark shape cutting through the amber glow of Piccadilly, slipping between a taxi and a bus queue, disappearing right where the Underground entrance swallowed the crowd. Quinn checked her watch. Eleven-forty. The face was fogged with rain but the hands still moved. Morris had given her that watch. Said it ran backward on purpose because time was the one thing you couldn't get back. She'd worn it every day for three years and she still couldn't look at it without her chest tightening. She hit the steps two at a time and plunged below. The Camden Town station at midnight was a skeleton of its daytime self. A cleaner with a mop watched her pass with the dull disinterest of someone paid by the hour. The suspect was already through the turnstiles, heading for the northbound platform. Quinn showed her badge to a fare inspector who barely glanced up and kept moving. But the suspect didn't board the train. She saw him stop at the far end of the platform, near a maintenance corridor most passengers wouldn't even notice—a rusted door with a sign that said AUTHORISED PERSONNEL. He looked back once. Not at her. At something behind her, something that made his face go pale and hard in the fluorescent light. Then he did something that made no sense. He pressed his thumb into the door's rusted keyhole until something wet and red smeared across the metal. The door clicked open. He slipped through and it swung shut behind him with a sound like a held breath finally released. Quinn reached the door and pulled. It didn't move. She pulled harder. The keyhole was dry now, the blood already absorbed into the rust, and the door was sealed as if it had never been ajar. She stood there, rain dripping from her hair onto the tile floor, and felt the first real uncertainty she'd had all night. The case had been strange for weeks. The warehouse was supposed to hold counterfeit goods. Instead she'd found jars of something black and viscous, notebooks in languages that looked older than English, and a room in the back that smelled like copper and ozone where the walls had been carved with symbols she'd copied into her notebook and couldn't find in any database she had access to. Morris had died in a room like that. She was sure of it now, though she'd never been able to prove it, never been able to name what she'd actually seen in that basement three years ago. The coroner said heart failure. Morris was forty-four and had the heart of a man half that age. Something else had stopped it. Something she couldn't put in a report because the words didn't exist in any language a courtroom would accept. She pulled out her phone and took a photo of the door, the keyhole, the smear of blood. Evidence. It was evidence. She didn't know of what. The maintenance corridor stretched into blackness beyond the door, but there was air moving through the gap at the bottom. Cold air. The kind that rose from deep underground, from places the Tube didn't officially go. Quinn took out her radio. "Control, this is Quinn. Camden Town station, northbound platform. Suspect has entered a restricted area. I need backup and—" She paused. What? A locksmith? An engineer? What was on the other side of that door? "Copy that, Quinn. Units are en route. Do not engage without support." "Understood." She clipped the radio back to her belt and looked at the door. Rain pooled around her feet. Her badge was still in her hand, and she caught her own reflection in its surface—the sharp jaw, the cropped salt-and-pepper hair plastered dark against her forehead, the brown eyes that had stopped looking surprised at anything a long time ago. She thought about Morris. Not the way he died, but the way he lived. Methodical. Careful. Always checking corners. He'd gone into something alone because he'd thought she wasn't ready. Three years and she still didn't know what he'd seen that made him go in without her. The cleaner's mop hit the tile behind her. Someone sneezed. A train rattled into the station and idled, its doors open, waiting. Quinn holstered her weapon. She took a breath that tasted like metal and damp concrete and the faintest ghost of smoke from somewhere far below. She pressed her thumb into the keyhole. It wasn't blood. Not entirely. Something in the sensation told her that—a warmth that spread beyond what a simple wound should produce, a pulse that didn't match a human heart. But it didn't matter. Her skin broke against the rusted edge and she felt the click before she heard it. The door opened inward. She stepped through. The corridor beyond was not on any map she had ever studied. It descended at an angle that felt wrong, the walls narrowing as she moved deeper, the ceiling pressing lower until she had to duck. The light from the platform faded and was replaced by something else—a dim, shifting glow that came from no visible source, the color of a bruise just beginning to heal. The air changed. Cooler. Denser. It carried scents she couldn't place: burnt herbs, old paper, something sweet and rotting that she forced herself to ignore. She kept one hand on the wall and moved forward. The passage twisted, doubled back on itself, opened briefly into a chamber that held only a dry fountain and a statue of something with too many wings. She didn't stop. Her footsteps echoed in ways that suggested spaces far larger than the corridors allowed, as if the architecture was only hinting at what existed beyond it. Then the passage emptied out and she saw the market. Quinn stopped at the threshold and took it in slowly, the way she'd learned to take in crime scenes that didn't make sense. The space was vast—a cathedral carved from the bones of an Underground station that had been decommissioned and then, somehow, unmade. The ceiling arched high above in vaulted sections of exposed brick and something darker, something that glistened when the light touched it. Old signage hung at odd angles: the faded logos of Bakerloo and Northern Line trains, repurposed as decorations or warnings. Stalls lined the main thoroughfare, hundreds of them, their goods lit by lanterns that burned without flame. She saw jars of liquid that glowed faintly green. She saw blades arranged on velvet that seemed to drink the light around them. She saw books with covers that moved. A woman at a cloth stall unfolded fabrics that shimmered between two colors depending on the angle, and when she shook out a bolt of something silver-white, the air above it distorted like heat haze. No one looked up when she entered. That was what unnerved her most. A dozen people at least, browsing, talking in low voices, conducting transactions with the quiet focus of a farmers' market rather than the chaos she would have expected. They were used to strangers. The thought settled into her like cold water. She found the suspect near a stall selling birdcages. He was talking to someone—a man with short curly dark hair and olive skin, wearing a paramedic's green jacket stained at the cuffs. The man was shaking his head. The suspect was talking fast, gesturing at his arm. In the lantern light, Quinn could see that the suspect's left hand was wrong. The fingers were too long, the joints bending in directions that didn't correspond to human anatomy, and the skin had taken on a grayish tinge that spread past the wrist. She moved closer, staying near a stall selling bottled smoke, close enough to hear. "—don't understand," the suspect was saying. "It was fine until I cut it open. The door. It wasn't supposed to—" "It was supposed to stay closed." The curly-haired man took the suspect's wrist without flinching, turning it under the light. He spoke with an accent Quinn placed as Spanish, his tone flat and professional. "You used blood to open a seal that wasn't meant for you. The door reads intention. You wanted in. That's what you got." "Can you fix it?" "I don't know what you are anymore. That's not something I can fix." He released the wrist and stepped back. "I'll clean it. Slow the spread. But you need to leave the market and not come back. Whatever you took from that warehouse, you need to get rid of it." "I can't. They'll kill me." "Then you'll die uninfected. That's the best I can offer you." Quinn stepped out from behind the smoke stall. The curly-haired man saw her first. His eyes—warm brown, alert—flickered to her badge, then her holster, then her face. He didn't move, didn't shout, didn't warn the suspect. He just watched with an expression that was equal parts curiosity and calculation. The suspect turned. His eyes went to her gun and stayed there. "Detective," he said. His voice was steadier than his hand. "On the ground. Now." "Listen to her," the man in the green jacket said. He hadn't raised his voice, hadn't moved, but something in the room had shifted. A woman at a nearby stall closed her ledger. A man examining a row of keys put one back and straightened. The market hadn't frozen, but it had become attentive. "Where am I?" Quinn asked. "That depends," the man said. He reached into his jacket and produced a small silver disc from his breast pocket. He set it on the stall's counter between them. "On what you came here looking for." The suspect sank to his knees. Whether from the wound or the gun or the sheer exhaustion of the night, Quinn couldn't tell. His wrong hand rested on the stone floor and left a faint damp mark where the gray skin touched the ground. The market waited. Lanterns without flame. Goods that defied naming. A man who looked at police presence the way a librarian looked at a overdue fine—troublesome, but manageable. Quinn's radio crackled against her hip. She ignored it. Her thumb was still bleeding. She could feel it now, a slow warmth that had soaked through the bandage she'd pressed against it without thinking. She looked at the man in the green jacket. "You know what this is," she said. It wasn't a question. "I know what it isn't. It isn't a place for armed officers with questions." He tilted his head, studying her the way she studied a crime scene. "You're not here for him, are you. Not really." She didn't answer. The suspect made a sound that was half laugh and half sob. The man—Herrera, she would learn later, Tomás Herrera, the one whose name appeared in Morris's notebook in handwriting that wasn't Morris's—picked up the silver disc and turned it over in his fingers. "Detective Quinn," he said quietly. She didn't ask how he knew her name. "Your friend was here," he said. "Three years ago. He asked me almost exactly what you're asking me now." He set the disc down again. "I told him the same thing I'll tell you. You can have an answer. But answers in this place have a cost, and the currency isn't money." Somewhere deeper in the market, a bell rang twice. The light from the lanterns dimmed, then steadied. The air tasted like the moment before a thunderstorm breaks. Quinn holstered her weapon. The suspect stayed on the ground. Herrera watched her with the calm patience of a man who had seen this decision made before and who knew, as she did, that the night was far from over.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"he said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.56
leniency1
rawRatio0.071
effectiveRatio0.071
95.24% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2101
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
71.44% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2101
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"database"
count1
1
word"methodical"
count1
2
word"warmth"
count2
3
word"pulse"
count1
4
word"footsteps"
count1
5
word"echoed"
count1
6
word"velvet"
count1
7
word"shimmered"
count1
8
word"tinge"
count1
9
word"flickered"
count1
10
word"could feel"
count1
highlights
0"database"
1"methodical"
2"warmth"
3"pulse"
4"footsteps"
5"echoed"
6"velvet"
7"shimmered"
8"tinge"
9"flickered"
10"could feel"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences165
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences165
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences177
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen52
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2087
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions41
wordCount1840
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity0.82
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Thames1
Harlow1
Quinn15
November1
Charing1
Cross1
Piccadilly1
Underground2
Camden1
Town1
English1
Tube1
Morris6
Bakerloo1
Northern1
Line1
Spanish1
Herrera3
Tomás1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"November"
3"Piccadilly"
4"Tube"
5"Morris"
6"Line"
7"Herrera"
8"Tomás"
places
0"Thames"
1"Camden"
2"Town"
globalScore1
windowScore1
59.09% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences110
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"smelled like copper and ozone where the wa"
1"tasted like metal and damp concrete and t"
2"velvet that seemed to drink the light around them"
3"tasted like the moment before a thunderst"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.479
wordCount2087
matches
0"Not the way he died, but the way he lived"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences177
matches
0"see that the"
1"did, that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs62
mean33.66
std24.98
cv0.742
sampleLengths
054
19
269
332
457
511
658
77
853
98
1040
1136
1289
1379
1427
1536
1640
1712
181
1959
2047
2122
2232
2350
244
253
2666
2725
2866
2910
3086
3182
3254
3391
3414
3520
3657
374
3850
395
4011
418
4241
4312
4410
454
4654
475
4836
4944
90.38% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount7
totalSentences165
matches
0"was fogged"
1"was sealed"
2"was supposed"
3"been carved"
4"was replaced"
5"been decommissioned"
6"were used"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs335
matches
0"was only hinting"
1"was talking"
2"was shaking"
3"was talking"
4"was still bleeding"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount14
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences177
ratio0.062
matches
0"The suspect—young, fast, dressed in a coat too thin for November—had bolted from the alley on Charing Cross where they'd cornered him."
1"She saw him stop at the far end of the platform, near a maintenance corridor most passengers wouldn't even notice—a rusted door with a sign that said AUTHORISED PERSONNEL."
2"Her badge was still in her hand, and she caught her own reflection in its surface—the sharp jaw, the cropped salt-and-pepper hair plastered dark against her forehead, the brown eyes that had stopped looking surprised at anything a long time ago."
3"Something in the sensation told her that—a warmth that spread beyond what a simple wound should produce, a pulse that didn't match a human heart."
4"The light from the platform faded and was replaced by something else—a dim, shifting glow that came from no visible source, the color of a bruise just beginning to heal."
5"The space was vast—a cathedral carved from the bones of an Underground station that had been decommissioned and then, somehow, unmade."
6"He was talking to someone—a man with short curly dark hair and olive skin, wearing a paramedic's green jacket stained at the cuffs."
7"\"—don't understand,\" the suspect was saying."
8"His eyes—warm brown, alert—flickered to her badge, then her holster, then her face."
9"A man who looked at police presence the way a librarian looked at a overdue fine—troublesome, but manageable."
10"The man—Herrera, she would learn later, Tomás Herrera, the one whose name appeared in Morris's notebook in handwriting that wasn't Morris's—picked up the silver disc and turned it over in his fingers."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1744
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount53
adverbRatio0.030389908256880736
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.008600917431192661
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences177
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences177
mean11.79
std9.06
cv0.769
sampleLengths
08
121
225
33
46
522
65
74
828
910
105
1127
124
131
1411
156
1616
1719
1811
1913
2018
2112
2215
237
2429
254
263
2717
288
2918
304
3118
326
333
343
3524
3622
377
388
3952
408
4129
425
4313
445
4519
4618
471
483
495
41.62% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats18
diversityRatio0.3107344632768362
totalSentences177
uniqueOpeners55
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences147
matches
0"Too many of them."
1"Then he did something that"
2"Instead she'd found jars of"
3"Always checking corners."
4"Then the passage emptied out"
5"Somewhere deeper in the market,"
ratio0.041
62.18% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount58
totalSentences147
matches
0"It came sideways off the"
1"She had him."
2"She could still see him."
3"She'd worn it every day"
4"She hit the steps two"
5"She saw him stop at"
6"He looked back once."
7"He pressed his thumb into"
8"He slipped through and it"
9"It didn't move."
10"She pulled harder."
11"She stood there, rain dripping"
12"She was sure of it"
13"She pulled out her phone"
14"It was evidence."
15"She didn't know of what."
16"She clipped the radio back"
17"Her badge was still in"
18"She thought about Morris."
19"He'd gone into something alone"
ratio0.395
31.43% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount126
totalSentences147
matches
0"The rain had a mean"
1"It came sideways off the"
2"Detective Harlow Quinn ran beneath"
3"She had him."
4"The suspect—young, fast, dressed in"
5"Quinn had picked the right"
6"She could still see him."
7"A dark shape cutting through"
8"Quinn checked her watch."
9"The face was fogged with"
10"Morris had given her that"
11"She'd worn it every day"
12"She hit the steps two"
13"The Camden Town station at"
14"A cleaner with a mop"
15"The suspect was already through"
16"Quinn showed her badge to"
17"She saw him stop at"
18"He looked back once."
19"He pressed his thumb into"
ratio0.857
34.01% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences147
matches
0"Whether from the wound or"
ratio0.007
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences69
technicalSentenceCount15
matches
0"She saw him stop at the far end of the platform, near a maintenance corridor most passengers wouldn't even notice—a rusted door with a sign that said AUTHORISED…"
1"At something behind her, something that made his face go pale and hard in the fluorescent light."
2"Instead she'd found jars of something black and viscous, notebooks in languages that looked older than English, and a room in the back that smelled like copper …"
3"Her badge was still in her hand, and she caught her own reflection in its surface—the sharp jaw, the cropped salt-and-pepper hair plastered dark against her for…"
4"She took a breath that tasted like metal and damp concrete and the faintest ghost of smoke from somewhere far below."
5"Something in the sensation told her that—a warmth that spread beyond what a simple wound should produce, a pulse that didn't match a human heart."
6"It descended at an angle that felt wrong, the walls narrowing as she moved deeper, the ceiling pressing lower until she had to duck."
7"The light from the platform faded and was replaced by something else—a dim, shifting glow that came from no visible source, the color of a bruise just beginning…"
8"Her footsteps echoed in ways that suggested spaces far larger than the corridors allowed, as if the architecture was only hinting at what existed beyond it."
9"The space was vast—a cathedral carved from the bones of an Underground station that had been decommissioned and then, somehow, unmade."
10"The ceiling arched high above in vaulted sections of exposed brick and something darker, something that glistened when the light touched it."
11"A woman at a cloth stall unfolded fabrics that shimmered between two colors depending on the angle, and when she shook out a bolt of something silver-white, the…"
12"The fingers were too long, the joints bending in directions that didn't correspond to human anatomy, and the skin had taken on a grayish tinge that spread past …"
13"He just watched with an expression that was equal parts curiosity and calculation."
14"A man who looked at police presence the way a librarian looked at a overdue fine—troublesome, but manageable."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.28
leniency0.56
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.8463%