Run: 2026-03-25-01KMJ7W3MJ09P03KNGHCBKVB42

Run Details

Duration:
1m 33s
Cost:
$0.001932
Provider:
SiliconFlow

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain sloshed under Harlow Quinn’s boots as she sprinted downスタッフォード Street, her leather watch slipping against her wrist, the seconds ticking like a grenade hidden in her palm. Ahead, the suspect’s silhouette wavered through the curtain of water, his olive skin glistening under the flicker of a failing streetlamp. Tomás Herrera. The name clenched in her teeth. She’d read it in the file buried in her drawer, the one marked *Unexplained*—DS Morris’s final case. The one Harlow had spent three years clawing away at with both hands, bleeding her way through dead ends and whispered rumors of things that didn’t make sense. He’d missed a step, tottering on the curb like a drunkard. Good. Her fingers tightened around the baton dangling from her belt. *Two more blocks, then the maze of alleyways.* But Herrera was fast, his breath coming in ragged bursts as he veered left, disappearing into a doorway marked only by a neon raven clawing at the dark. Harlow skidded into the alcove just in time to see him slam a hand against a door panel embedded with dead ivy. The entrance swallowed him whole, a hiss of hydraulic locks echoing behind. The Raven’s Nest was a dive even for Soho—a smoky dive, if the stench of burnt incense and stale beer through the seam of the door was any indication. Harlow pressed her ear against the cold wood. Voices murmured inside, low as ruins. But Herrera’s footstep, the distinct *thud* of a scarred heel against concrete, was fading, not stopped. She pushed the door open with a growl. The bar was a nest of shadows. Black-and-white photos of long-gone streets hung like sentinels on the walls, their silvered frames reflecting the green glow of the neon sign. At the counter, a bartender with a face like a stone nut ignored her and refilled a pint of something that looked suspiciously like blood. Harlow tracked Herrera’s path through the haze—a man in a olive coat, retreating toward the shelves of ammonites and vials of liquid moonlight behind the bar. He ducked behind the bookshelf. She heard the shift in the stones, the hidden back room breathing in his wake. Harlow’s pulse hammered against her sharp jaw. The file said he was a *former paramedic*. Not a supernatural spellworker. This was no magical stalker, no wraith—*he’s fleeing like a man, not fighting like one*. She slipped into the secret room, a narrow stairwell reeking of mold and something metallic. Herrera’s silhouette was already halfway down, his Saint Christopher medallion glinting on his chest—a fool’s token given the kind of people he’d been treating off the books. The bookings analyst, the cabaret host, the violinist who played in a catacomb—quarantine, that was the term Harlow had dug up in files she wasn’t permitted to see. Files that stank of rotting roses and broken oaths. The steps led underground, past mangled IV bags hanging like chandeliers and the skeletal remains of a wasp’s nest in the rafters. Herrera’s breath echoed ahead, but the scent of rain was backing off, replaced by something older—burnt hair and rhubarb, the stink of alchemical accidents. He’d taken a left turn into a black tunnel older than the Tube. Harlow followed, her service revolver humming with a weight she wasn’t sure she could bear if it came to shooting. Her boots hit the end of the stairs in a flood. Herrera waded ahead, his shirt soaked and clinging to the scar on his forearm—a long, pale caterpillar on his skin from some knife attack last year. The scar didn’t look *healed*. Harlow’s mind snapped back to the morgue photo—DS Morris’s body cut open with a blade that’d singsed the tissue as if it were leather. The same blade had probably taken Tomás down. But he wasn’t giving her time to process. His narrow, curly-haired frame pushed into a station platform that hadn’t existed before he stumbled into it. The Veil Market. She knew its myths long before she’d tracked Herrera here. A place that slid between locations every full moon, this time anchored in the belly of an abandoned Tube station beneath Camden. No one got in without a bone token, unless they bled thick enough in the wrong places. For a heartbeat, she considered the wiser choices: radio for backup, wait this out, let the rain blur the night until he resurfaced in daylight. But no choice was made to be safe after DS Morris. Herrera was shouting now, his voice raw. “Lift won’t *wait* forever!” She stepped onto the platform. It was longer than any normal station, stretching like a serpent into the dark. The tracks didn’t have rails. They had *flesh*, thick curling tendons that twitched under her eyes. Her revolver felt heavier with every step. The bone token on the ground glinted, picked up from a delegate who’d tried to strangle her to a standstill in an evidence room. She’d kept it for the feel of it, not knowing then it was a key. Two enforcers materialized from the mist, their faces obscured by hare masks. “You can’t walk this road with your pockets full of bullets,” one growled, though the words were sanded down too smooth to be human. Harlow held up the token, a finger twitching against its jagged surface. “Tell your boss I’m here for Herrera’s *services*,” she said. A red herring, but she needed the enforcers to hesitate for *one second.* They did. Argued, but the market didn’t like arguments. The doors ground open like a jaw. She stepped down onto the tracks, but Herrera had already entered the stew of the market. Stalls jutted out like necrotic teeth—blackthorned vendors hawking snake molars and vials of starlight. A woman with skin like cracked marbles limped past, her tongue a knife as she traded words. Harlow’s boots crunched over twisted stones. Herrera had vanished into the lymphatic veins of this place. Her eyes caught on a familiar shape. The bar she’d just left, *The Raven’s Nest*, was impossibly hanging in the air above a meat locker, its neon glinting like a promise. Herrera’s men. The clique. They’d etched a crossroads into this place, tethered by relics of Harlow’s city. She recognized the photograph of a beggar at Smithfield from the murder board DS Morans had compiled. Pieces clicked: the circle of hollows in the walls, the bloods on the tiles, the way Herrera’s scar pulsed like a vein when she touched it once, back when they were dancing through red tape and avoiding questions. She spotted Herrera at the far end, hunched over a patient. A young woman, her eyes rolling back like marbles in a wet sandstorm. Harlow moved fast, but the enforcers weren’t done. One lunged, fingers elongated into thumbscrews. She jammed her baton into his thigh, the force muffled by the *thud* of his unnatural flesh. The other came with a poisoner’s hands, offering a kiss to her collarbone. She ducked and fired, the bullet skimming the man’s mask and catching one of Herrera’s medical bags. Needles rained like broken glass. The Saint Christopher medallion at Herrera’s neck flared blue when Harlow grabbed his arm. He yelped—not the sound of a magician, but of a man. Good. *I can handle a man.* “You lost your license for mixing witch’s slang with medicine,” she hissed. “Any of those files in that bag have your patients’ names?” The medallion dimmed. He bared his teeth. “You don’t get here and ask questions, Quinn. You pay the price. You always pick a fight with collaborators, not with the storm.” Her watch ticked. 4:13 a.m. The deeper she sank, the more the walls bled. Herrera had that same look in his eyes—*in a hospital I once knew, in a body I watched fail*. The last word before the switchblade came in, no. Now, the watch was slipping again, its leather straps softer than she remembered. DS Morans’s face flickered in her mind. He’d lost a bullet once, in that alley off King’s Cross. Another time, a handhold against a black mirror. She’d always remembered him as methodical. Precise. Like Herrera. Like the man who’d once taught her that rain was a lousy cover for the truth. The Veil Market’s tendrils were closing around them. Herrera yanked a scalpel from a jar (its lid labeled *For Resuscitation Only*), and stood. “You want to collar me for witchcraft?” he laughed. “Then prove your London’s strong enough.” He shifted back through the crowd, his scar a red beacon in the dark. The enforcers parted for him, but this was *her* city. Even if it wasn’t the one that was. She chased Herrera into a dead-end stall, where rusted moonlight showed a narrow door. He didn’t know how to cover his tracks. Not really. Inside, the room was dedicated to one transaction. A shelf of heart-shaped pastilles. Herrera’s face was dead on arrival. “You monitor the *Artemis* case—her organs failing mid surgery?” “Do I need to remind you when we met in Eduardo’s clinic?” He gestured to the web of glass vials around him, each one a testament to some dead god’s stubbornness. “You already saw the work.” “You *transplanted human livers from unwilling donors.* Not ‘work.’ Legislation. Medicine with hands that move in the dark.” “You think *you’re* high enough on the hill to call what’s right?” Herrera’s voice dropped, his accent thick as blood from his childhood in Seville, the heat of it staining the cold market walls. “When the clique’s disease brought down half this block, who did they call? Not the Metropolitan Police. They called *me.* You want to know why?” Harlow’s hand hovered over Herrera’s neck. The file mentioned that *he’d treated a cabaret singer for a consumption that wasn’t from lungs*. She’d seen that too. The kind of illness that wins when medicine forgets it’s made for mortals. But DS Morans was still spectral in her thoughts. “Because you heal with black-market body parts.” “No. Because I *transplant* the living. The clique pays in hours. I give them chances.” His voice shivered with the weight of something else. Guilt. Or maybe *pleasure*. “The curse in *your partner’s* chest? That was bad form. But I could fix it, if that’s what you want.” The room smelled of lye soap and breaking secrets. Her left hand went for her belt, her right for the watch. DS Morans had been precise. Tomás Herrera was not. She saw the glint of Herrera’s own watch—silvery and new. *Counteracts the after effects of transplantation. Not mine to make.* All the better for a threatened barter. “I’ll give you three seconds to talk,” she growled. “Then I’ll inform your clientele you’re passing out their secrets like communion.” A hum rattled the air. Herrera tilted his head, the medallion clutched harder like it could protect the lie he was about to speak. Harlow’s boots were already turning toward the door. The market didn’t like silent witnesses. Let it come. Let it *already be coming.* She’d lost DS Morans to a question like this. Not today.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
94.74% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"He shifted back [back]"
dialogueSentences19
tagDensity0.474
leniency0.947
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.105
97.30% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1849
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
43.21% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1849
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"wavered"
count1
1
word"glistening"
count1
2
word"flicker"
count1
3
word"echoing"
count1
4
word"sentinels"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count1
6
word"glinting"
count2
7
word"echoed"
count1
8
word"weight"
count2
9
word"familiar"
count1
10
word"etched"
count1
11
word"pulsed"
count1
12
word"dancing"
count1
13
word"flickered"
count1
14
word"methodical"
count1
15
word"beacon"
count1
16
word"testament"
count1
17
word"spectral"
count1
18
word"glint"
count1
highlights
0"wavered"
1"glistening"
2"flicker"
3"echoing"
4"sentinels"
5"pulse"
6"glinting"
7"echoed"
8"weight"
9"familiar"
10"etched"
11"pulsed"
12"dancing"
13"flickered"
14"methodical"
15"beacon"
16"testament"
17"spectral"
18"glint"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences140
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences140
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
98.85% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences150
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0.007
matches
0"Rain sloshed under Harlow Quinn’s boots as she sprinted downスタッフォード Street, her leather watch slipping against her wrist, the seconds ticking like a grenade hidden in her palm."
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans26
markdownWords90
totalWords1838
ratio0.049
matches
0"Unexplained"
1"Two more blocks, then the maze of alleyways."
2"thud"
3"former paramedic"
4"he’s fleeing like a man, not fighting like one"
5"healed"
6"wait"
7"flesh"
8"services"
9"one second."
10"The Raven’s Nest"
11"thud"
12"I can handle a man."
13"in a hospital I once knew, in a body I watched fail"
14"For Resuscitation Only"
15"her"
16"Artemis"
17"transplanted human livers from unwilling donors."
18"you’re"
19"me."
20"he’d treated a cabaret singer for a consumption that wasn’t from lungs"
21"transplant"
22"pleasure"
23"your partner’s"
24"Counteracts the after effects of transplantation. Not mine to make."
25"already be coming."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions77
wordCount1616
uniqueNames22
maxNameDensity1.61
worstName"Herrera"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Herrera"
discoveredNames
Harlow16
Quinn1
Street1
Herrera26
Morris3
Raven2
Nest2
Soho1
Saint2
Christopher2
Tube2
Tomás3
Veil2
Market2
Camden1
Smithfield1
Morans5
King1
Cross1
Resuscitation1
Seville1
Guilt1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Herrera"
3"Morris"
4"Raven"
5"Saint"
6"Christopher"
7"Tomás"
8"Market"
9"Morans"
10"King"
11"Cross"
places
0"Soho"
1"Smithfield"
2"Seville"
globalScore0.696
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences108
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.544
wordCount1838
matches
0"not the sound of a magician, but of a man"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences150
matches
0"mentioned that *he’d"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs31
mean59.29
std31.96
cv0.539
sampleLengths
0102
192
267
380
4133
579
699
73
885
911
1081
1136
1251
1363
14103
1590
1654
1730
18106
1952
2042
2128
2236
2318
2459
2555
2648
2757
2821
2946
3011
95.24% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences140
matches
0"was made"
1"were sanded"
2"was dedicated"
3"made"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount8
totalVerbs260
matches
0"was backing"
1"wasn’t giving"
2"was shouting"
3"was impossibly hanging"
4"were dancing"
5"was slipping"
6"were closing"
7"were already turning"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences150
ratio0.087
matches
0"She’d read it in the file buried in her drawer, the one marked *Unexplained*—DS Morris’s final case."
1"The Raven’s Nest was a dive even for Soho—a smoky dive, if the stench of burnt incense and stale beer through the seam of the door was any indication."
2"Harlow tracked Herrera’s path through the haze—a man in a olive coat, retreating toward the shelves of ammonites and vials of liquid moonlight behind the bar."
3"This was no magical stalker, no wraith—*he’s fleeing like a man, not fighting like one*."
4"Herrera’s silhouette was already halfway down, his Saint Christopher medallion glinting on his chest—a fool’s token given the kind of people he’d been treating off the books."
5"The bookings analyst, the cabaret host, the violinist who played in a catacomb—quarantine, that was the term Harlow had dug up in files she wasn’t permitted to see."
6"Herrera’s breath echoed ahead, but the scent of rain was backing off, replaced by something older—burnt hair and rhubarb, the stink of alchemical accidents."
7"Herrera waded ahead, his shirt soaked and clinging to the scar on his forearm—a long, pale caterpillar on his skin from some knife attack last year."
8"Harlow’s mind snapped back to the morgue photo—DS Morris’s body cut open with a blade that’d singsed the tissue as if it were leather."
9"Stalls jutted out like necrotic teeth—blackthorned vendors hawking snake molars and vials of starlight."
10"He yelped—not the sound of a magician, but of a man."
11"Herrera had that same look in his eyes—*in a hospital I once knew, in a body I watched fail*."
12"She saw the glint of Herrera’s own watch—silvery and new."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1632
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"narrow, curly-haired frame"
adverbCount38
adverbRatio0.023284313725490197
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.004901960784313725
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences150
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences150
mean12.25
std8.02
cv0.655
sampleLengths
028
121
22
36
417
528
611
71
810
936
1022
1112
1229
138
146
1516
168
177
1822
1925
2026
215
2215
237
248
254
2615
2715
2827
2928
309
3122
3224
3313
3420
3511
3626
375
3824
398
408
4117
423
4310
4422
4517
4625
4711
487
494
50.44% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.32666666666666666
totalSentences150
uniqueOpeners49
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences126
matches(empty)
ratio0
99.37% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences126
matches
0"She’d read it in the"
1"He’d missed a step, tottering"
2"Her fingers tightened around the"
3"She pushed the door open"
4"He ducked behind the bookshelf."
5"She heard the shift in"
6"She slipped into the secret"
7"He’d taken a left turn"
8"Her boots hit the end"
9"His narrow, curly-haired frame pushed"
10"She knew its myths long"
11"She stepped onto the platform."
12"It was longer than any"
13"They had *flesh*, thick curling"
14"Her revolver felt heavier with"
15"She’d kept it for the"
16"She stepped down onto the"
17"Her eyes caught on a"
18"They’d etched a crossroads into"
19"She recognized the photograph of"
ratio0.302
51.27% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount103
totalSentences126
matches
0"Rain sloshed under Harlow Quinn’s"
1"The name clenched in her"
2"She’d read it in the"
3"The one Harlow had spent"
4"He’d missed a step, tottering"
5"Her fingers tightened around the"
6"Harlow skidded into the alcove"
7"The entrance swallowed him whole,"
8"The Raven’s Nest was a"
9"Harlow pressed her ear against"
10"Voices murmured inside, low as"
11"She pushed the door open"
12"The bar was a nest"
13"Harlow tracked Herrera’s path through"
14"He ducked behind the bookshelf."
15"She heard the shift in"
16"Harlow’s pulse hammered against her"
17"The file said he was"
18"This was no magical stalker,"
19"She slipped into the secret"
ratio0.817
79.37% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences126
matches
0"Now, the watch was slipping"
1"Even if it wasn’t the"
ratio0.016
57.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences67
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"The one Harlow had spent three years clawing away at with both hands, bleeding her way through dead ends and whispered rumors of things that didn’t make sense."
1"*Two more blocks, then the maze of alleyways.* But Herrera was fast, his breath coming in ragged bursts as he veered left, disappearing into a doorway marked on…"
2"The bookings analyst, the cabaret host, the violinist who played in a catacomb—quarantine, that was the term Harlow had dug up in files she wasn’t permitted to …"
3"Harlow’s mind snapped back to the morgue photo—DS Morris’s body cut open with a blade that’d singsed the tissue as if it were leather."
4"His narrow, curly-haired frame pushed into a station platform that hadn’t existed before he stumbled into it."
5"A place that slid between locations every full moon, this time anchored in the belly of an abandoned Tube station beneath Camden."
6"They had *flesh*, thick curling tendons that twitched under her eyes."
7"The bar she’d just left, *The Raven’s Nest*, was impossibly hanging in the air above a meat locker, its neon glinting like a promise."
13.89% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"one growled, though the words were sanded down too smooth to be human"
1"He shifted back, his scar a red beacon in the dark"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"one growled (growl)"
1"he laughed (laugh)"
2"she growled (growl)"
dialogueSentences19
tagDensity0.211
leniency0.421
rawRatio0.75
effectiveRatio0.316
74.7301%