Run: 2026-03-25-01KMJ7WH4W2V6629NAP1NPD285

Run Details

Duration:
40.3s
Cost:
$0.001779
Provider:
Alibaba

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The rain came down in sheets, turning Soho’s cobblestones to liquid glass. Rainwater hissed off the brim of Harlow Quinn’s flat beanie as she sprinted, boots slapping against the slick pavement. Her left wrist throbbed—*probably the old sprain acting up*, she told herself, even as the leather band of her watch pulled tight against her pulse. *Focus.* The suspect’s silhouette vanished into the neon haze of a doorway ahead; green light flickered like static across Quinn’s vision as she slammed into the green-lit bar, The Raven’s Nest, its door swinging open with a groan. Inside, the air hung heavy with wood smoke and the sour tang of damp wool. A bartender’s shadow darted behind the counter, but Quinn didn’t slow. She tracked the fleeing man through the haze—Herrera, her notes had said, *Tomás Herrera*. The paramedic’s olive skin glistened with rain, his curly hair matted to his forehead as he weaved past barstools. A medallion glinted at his neck, dull under the gloom. She saw the flash of a knife scar on his forearm as he gripped a rusted iron bookcase, shoving it aside to reveal a narrow door. Quinn’s hand was already on her holstered radio, but she didn’t bother calling in backup. The backroom door thudded shut behind Herrera, leaving her with the echo of her own breath and the creak of the bar’s ancient floorboards. She unsnapped her belt a notch tighter and stepped into the shadowed corridor beyond. The bar’s regular clientele—doorknobs, bottle washers, the occasional street preacher—watched in silence from dim alcoves, their eyes hollow as they returned to sipping amber liquor that smelled like regret. Herrera’s silhouette moved down the stairs, boots echoing on concrete. Quinn counted the steps, three short flights to a maintenance hatch marked with a peeling layer of *Private* tape. Below, a draft of moldering dampness curled up, carrying the scent of wet earth and something else. Copper. She flipped the flashlight on her phone, caught the glint of train tracks ahead. The abandoned Tube station swallowed the light, its walls weeping rust and mildew. Herrera’s boots crunched ahead, navigating debris like a man who’d walked the route a thousand times. Quinn’s gloved hand brushed the wall, finding a jagged crack in the plaster. Her partner’s voice echoed in her head—Morris, always ahead of her, once back here hunting the same ghosts. He’d died in a room like this, all rot and secrets. “Herrera!” Her shout cracked through the tunnel. “Stop, or I’ll shoot!” A dry chuckle answered. “Try it, *detective*.” The flashlight beam swept over the space where he’d stood. Empty. Quinn’s jaw tightened, the scar across his forearm a memory she couldn’t shake. She pivoted, catching the flick of a candlelit stall disappearing into the gloom. Stalls? In a derelict subway? Her beam caught a mannequin wearing moth-eaten gloves, another hawking pickled bats in glass jars. The Veil Market. The name fit, veiled and writhing in the shadows. Her phone lit the faces of the denizens—half in focus, half in distortion. A woman sold a vial of quicksilver, her eyes too white, unblinking. A teenager hunched over a stack of dog-eared journals, pages stained with something thicker than ink. Herrera stood near the center, dry-eyed now, hands clasped over the medallion. He met her glare as if it were scripted. “You don’t understand,” he said, low as a breath. Quinn’s boot heel caught a loose wire. It snapped like a taut string, and the world shifted. Flickering bulbs dangling from the ceiling brightened in a staggered pulse, illuminating frescoes of runes along the archways. The stalls multiplied, folding into the tunnel like inkblots blooming in a glass of water. The Veil Market had unfolded itself. A hand tugged her sleeve—*the teenager*, his face a smudge of pallor and inkstained fingers. “Bone token,” he rasped. “Rule of entry. Or be… entry.” Quinn stared at the boy, his words too slow, too deliberate. Herrera’s medallion glinted again. *No time*, she thought. She stepped forward, the boy’s grip tightening. Herrera’s voice cut sharp. “Let her through. The girl’s chasing monsters like it’s a marathon.” The teenager’s eyes rolled back, and for half a second, Quinn saw the blackened husk behind them. The market had him, just like it had so many others. She shouldered past, flashlight sweeping across a rack of preserved roses and a man haggling over a mirror with a serpent’s face carved into the frame. Herrera led her deeper, past crates of unmarked vials and a baker’s tray of something that *pulsed* in the dark. Her fingers grazed the holster of her stiletto. Not here. The weapons in this place would laugh at steel. She slowed instead, boots sloshing in pooled water. Herrera paused at a vendor’s stall, gloved hands exchanging with the seller—a wisp of a woman whose teeth were filled with lead shot. He turned back to Quinn, the bag of whatever he'd bought cradled in his palms like a newborn. “End of the line,” he said, voice rough. “Your partner didn’t make it past the threshold. Why do you think I did?” Quinn’s eyes flicked to the watch on her wrist, its hands trembling slightly—18 years of service, 3 of them hunting things that didn’t leave fingerprints. Herrera nodded, as if he’d felt it too, the ache of a case that refused to close. Morris had been chasing Herrera’s file when he disappeared, his name smudged from the records like a spill of black oil. “You think this is about you, Quinn. It’s not. It’s about what you pull through with that badge. You ever hear the old stories about the Underground? How it’s never been the same since the *thing* tore through here in '48?” Herrera’s medallion caught the light, its silver chain a thin strand against the bruised skin of his neck. “The Market’s all that’s left of the people you’ve swept under the rug.” A bell chimed in the distance. Quinn’s flashlight beam wavered, the walls of the Market thickening, the air souring. Herrera shifted toward a corridor of hanging skins—*not real*, she told herself. *Not real*. His breath was hot when he turned back. “Turn back. Before it knows you’re here.” Her grip tightened around her flashlight. “I didn’t get this far to lose him in the dark.” The market seemed to inhale. Stalls rearranged themselves in a slow, grinding creak. Herrera’s eyes widened. “You’re not ready for—” A whisper slithered through the crowd. *Not ready. Not ready. Not reeeeady.* The woman in lead-shot teeth leaned in from her stall, voice syrup-thick. “This ain’t no museum, love. You pay your respects, or you don’t come back.” She pressed a small key into Quinn’s hand, the iron cold enough to sting. “Use this. On the third door left from the steps.” Quinn’s boots carried her forward before her thoughts could. The Market throbbed, a hive of malice and need. Herrera watched her, still, as if he’d already seen the moment she cracked. The third door. She passed two: one hung with coats that moved even as no breeze stirred, another where a pair of dentures glittered on a velvet pillow. The third stood open, the frame blackened with smoke. Beyond it, a spiral of treads plunged into the dark. Her flashlight barely skimmed the surface of the steps, revealing a carved stone arch at the bottom. A symbol. Not English. Not Latin. Her hand hovered over the holster of her stiletto. Morris had faced this. She could feel it in the bones of the station, the way the Market had *arranged* itself to her pace. Herrera’s voice came from behind her, steady. “The same god that took your partner? He’s down there. And the Market’s feeding on his story too.” *Enough.* Quinn turned, eyes locked on the medallion. “Where do you get the vials, Herrera? The blood-pressure stuff in the clinic. The ones that don’t work on the regulars.” He didn’t move. “You don’t want to ask that question down here.” She took a step toward him, light glancing off the scar on his arm. “Then I’ll ask it up there.” She pointed to the ceiling, her voice low, even. “When I’ve got you in cuffs, and your supplier’s sweating in an interview room.” Herrera tilted his head. “You don’t read the newspapers. The Underground’s growing. Tunnels bursting like a nest of rats. You think that’s natural?” The steps groaned. A presence thickened in the void below. Quinn checked the key’s weight in her palm, the watch on her wrist. She remembered the last radio transmission from Morris—*Quinn, the kid’s lying. Get out of the…* The rest was static. “Morris knew about this place?” she asked. Herrera shrugged. “He paid with it. You will too. But maybe you want to see what it looks like? The Market’s very… generous with visitors.” Quinn turned back to the stairs. Herrera called after her, “Morris didn’t run like you’re doing now! He *charged*!” A lie. A lure. She swallowed and descended. The lower chamber smelled of burning hair and wet fur. Her flashlight trembled between two worlds: the remains of a Victorian archway, and beyond it a maze of iron scaffolding. Stalls here sold whispers in glass jars—*three silver coins, or a memory for one*. A merchant offered Quinn a scalpel, blade wet with something black. “You can’t buy your way out,” the woman rasped. Quinn kept moving. Herrera’s key pressed against her palm, a compass in the dark. Her wristwatch glowed faintly, a relic from another life. The Market twisted around her, stalls blinking in and out, but the treads spiraled in only one direction. Deeper. She found the third door left from the steps. It hung open, revealing a vaulted chamber. The light didn’t work here. Quinn flipped on her flashlight. A body lay draped across a surgical table—*not a body.* Something had peeled its skin back into a net of capillaries and sinew, as if a butcher had laid it out for study. Morris’s face stared back, half-rotted, half-preserved. The air hissed with laughter from the stalls. Quinn’s hands didn’t shake as she holstered the light, drew the stiletto instead. The blade felt lighter, smaller than it had in her apartment. Useless, maybe. But she’d never been good at retreating. Her voice cut the dark. “Not here to trade.” A figure emerged from the shadows. Herrera, unflinching, holding a fresh vial of mercury. “You think he’s your enemy. But he’s your bridge to the thing that killed Morris. To *it*.” The walls pulsed with a heartbeat. Quinn’s eyes stayed on Herrera’s face. “Who did this to him?” He tossed the vial. A woman in a bloodstained lab coat caught it, her fingers moving like she’d done it all before. “The god that’s waking up. The one Morris brought through. Uninvited.” Quinn’s boot found the remains of a stair rail. She vaulted upward, toward Herrera, knife raised. The Market roared—light exploded in the walls as Herrera flicked his medallion. A barrier of liquid smoke rose between them. “Turn back!” he yelled. “He’ll take you in pieces!” She lunged, slashing through the smoke. It parted like a curtain—not smoke, she realized, but a crowd. Spectators. The Market’s version of *witnesses*, eyes all watching from within the mist. She reached Herrera. His scar bled faintly where the knife-light had grazed it. “You don’t even know what you’re hunting,” he whispered. “The price’s already paid. You just—” A hand clamped her shoulder. Quinn pivoted, blade out, striking the wrist of a vendor with a missing thumb. His blood spattered Herrera’s face, who flinched but didn’t move. “He’s waiting for you up here,” Herrera said, spitting a drop to the floor. It hissed. “You don’t have to stand there like a dog in the rain.” Quinn’s watch band had soaked through, the leather black and sticky. She unfastened it, dropped it to the floor. Let the Market take what it needed. She stepped past Herrera into the vaulted room, where Morris’s body was being folded back into itself, a writhing mass of veins. A voice echoed, deep and spongy, as if spoken through a lungful of water. *“You carry the weight, Quinn.”* The surgical table *moved*—capillaries flexing, tendons knitting. *“Tell me why I shouldn’t take you next.”* Herrera stood silent behind her, hands limp at his sides. The Market didn’t offer exits. Only options. Quinn turned toward the god—Morris’s face now half-healed, half-rotted—and whispered, “Because I’ve got your pulse in my sights.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.385
leniency0.769
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.20% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2085
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
32.85% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2085
totalAiIsms28
found
0
word"throbbed"
count2
1
word"pulse"
count3
2
word"flickered"
count1
3
word"gloom"
count2
4
word"echo"
count1
5
word"silence"
count1
6
word"echoing"
count1
7
word"glint"
count1
8
word"navigating"
count1
9
word"echoed"
count2
10
word"scripted"
count1
11
word"pulsed"
count2
12
word"flicked"
count2
13
word"wavered"
count1
14
word"whisper"
count1
15
word"velvet"
count1
16
word"could feel"
count1
17
word"weight"
count2
18
word"charged"
count1
19
word"trembled"
count1
highlights
0"throbbed"
1"pulse"
2"flickered"
3"gloom"
4"echo"
5"silence"
6"echoing"
7"glint"
8"navigating"
9"echoed"
10"scripted"
11"pulsed"
12"flicked"
13"wavered"
14"whisper"
15"velvet"
16"could feel"
17"weight"
18"charged"
19"trembled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences170
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences170
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences194
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen59
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans23
markdownWords65
totalWords2075
ratio0.031
matches
0"probably the old sprain acting up"
1"Focus."
2"Tomás Herrera"
3"Private"
4"detective"
5"the teenager"
6"No time"
7"pulsed"
8"thing"
9"not real"
10"Not real"
11"Not ready. Not ready. Not reeeeady."
12"arranged"
13"Enough."
14"Quinn, the kid’s lying. Get out of the…"
15"charged"
16"three silver coins, or a memory for one"
17"not a body."
18"it"
19"witnesses"
20"“You carry the weight, Quinn.”"
21"moved"
22"“Tell me why I shouldn’t take you next.”"
97.22% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions2
matches
0"Her left wrist throbbed—*probably the old sprain acting up*, she told herself, even as the leather band of her watch pul…"
1"Herrera shifted toward a corridor of hanging skins—*not real*, she told herself."
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions88
wordCount1701
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.76
worstName"Herrera"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Herrera"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Harlow1
Quinn28
Raven1
Nest1
Herrera30
Tube1
Morris7
Veil2
Market10
English1
Latin1
Victorian1
Stalls3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
3"Herrera"
4"Morris"
5"Market"
6"Stalls"
places
0"Soho"
globalScore0.618
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences122
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"smelled like regret"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.482
wordCount2075
matches
0"not smoke, she realized, but a crowd"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences194
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs56
mean37.05
std23.86
cv0.644
sampleLengths
094
195
253
376
485
511
67
769
862
99
1056
1125
1241
1374
1468
1522
1663
1772
1848
1917
2020
2112
2250
2331
2470
2558
2629
2712
2843
2923
3042
317
3225
3319
348
3555
369
3742
3821
3944
4041
419
4231
4317
4433
4536
469
4730
4828
4929
99.07% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences170
matches
0"were scripted"
1"were filled"
2"being folded"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs297
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount17
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences194
ratio0.088
matches
0"Her left wrist throbbed—*probably the old sprain acting up*, she told herself, even as the leather band of her watch pulled tight against her pulse."
1"*Focus.* The suspect’s silhouette vanished into the neon haze of a doorway ahead; green light flickered like static across Quinn’s vision as she slammed into the green-lit bar, The Raven’s Nest, its door swinging open with a groan."
2"She tracked the fleeing man through the haze—Herrera, her notes had said, *Tomás Herrera*."
3"The bar’s regular clientele—doorknobs, bottle washers, the occasional street preacher—watched in silence from dim alcoves, their eyes hollow as they returned to sipping amber liquor that smelled like regret."
4"Her partner’s voice echoed in her head—Morris, always ahead of her, once back here hunting the same ghosts."
5"Her phone lit the faces of the denizens—half in focus, half in distortion."
6"A hand tugged her sleeve—*the teenager*, his face a smudge of pallor and inkstained fingers."
7"Herrera paused at a vendor’s stall, gloved hands exchanging with the seller—a wisp of a woman whose teeth were filled with lead shot."
8"Quinn’s eyes flicked to the watch on her wrist, its hands trembling slightly—18 years of service, 3 of them hunting things that didn’t leave fingerprints."
9"Herrera shifted toward a corridor of hanging skins—*not real*, she told herself."
10"She remembered the last radio transmission from Morris—*Quinn, the kid’s lying."
11"Stalls here sold whispers in glass jars—*three silver coins, or a memory for one*."
12"A body lay draped across a surgical table—*not a body.* Something had peeled its skin back into a net of capillaries and sinew, as if a butcher had laid it out for study."
13"The Market roared—light exploded in the walls as Herrera flicked his medallion."
14"It parted like a curtain—not smoke, she realized, but a crowd."
15"*“You carry the weight, Quinn.”* The surgical table *moved*—capillaries flexing, tendons knitting."
16"Quinn turned toward the god—Morris’s face now half-healed, half-rotted—and whispered, “Because I’ve got your pulse in my sights.”"
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1723
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount39
adverbRatio0.022634939059779455
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.0046430644225188625
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences194
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences194
mean10.7
std7.53
cv0.704
sampleLengths
012
119
225
338
415
511
614
719
810
926
1015
1124
1214
1329
1410
1519
1617
171
1814
1913
2016
2113
2218
2311
247
254
264
273
2810
291
3013
3113
321
334
3415
353
369
3713
3812
3916
4012
419
429
437
4410
4518
4615
476
4815
494
45.88% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.23711340206185566
totalSentences194
uniqueOpeners46
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences147
matches(empty)
ratio0
94.83% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount46
totalSentences147
matches
0"Her left wrist throbbed—*probably the"
1"She tracked the fleeing man"
2"She saw the flash of"
3"She unsnapped her belt a"
4"She flipped the flashlight on"
5"Her partner’s voice echoed in"
6"He’d died in a room"
7"Her shout cracked through the"
8"She pivoted, catching the flick"
9"Her beam caught a mannequin"
10"Her phone lit the faces"
11"He met her glare as"
12"he said, low as a"
13"It snapped like a taut"
14"She stepped forward, the boy’s"
15"She shouldered past, flashlight sweeping"
16"Her fingers grazed the holster"
17"She slowed instead, boots sloshing"
18"He turned back to Quinn,"
19"he said, voice rough"
ratio0.313
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount136
totalSentences147
matches
0"The rain came down in"
1"Rainwater hissed off the brim"
2"Her left wrist throbbed—*probably the"
3"A bartender’s shadow darted behind"
4"She tracked the fleeing man"
5"The paramedic’s olive skin glistened"
6"A medallion glinted at his"
7"She saw the flash of"
8"Quinn’s hand was already on"
9"The backroom door thudded shut"
10"She unsnapped her belt a"
11"The bar’s regular clientele—doorknobs, bottle"
12"Herrera’s silhouette moved down the"
13"Quinn counted the steps, three"
14"She flipped the flashlight on"
15"The abandoned Tube station swallowed"
16"Herrera’s boots crunched ahead, navigating"
17"Quinn’s gloved hand brushed the"
18"Her partner’s voice echoed in"
19"He’d died in a room"
ratio0.925
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences147
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences76
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The bar’s regular clientele—doorknobs, bottle washers, the occasional street preacher—watched in silence from dim alcoves, their eyes hollow as they returned to…"
1"Herrera’s boots crunched ahead, navigating debris like a man who’d walked the route a thousand times."
2"Quinn’s eyes flicked to the watch on her wrist, its hands trembling slightly—18 years of service, 3 of them hunting things that didn’t leave fingerprints."
3"A body lay draped across a surgical table—*not a body.* Something had peeled its skin back into a net of capillaries and sinew, as if a butcher had laid it out …"
58.33% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"he said, voice rough"
1"She pointed, her voice low, even"
47.44% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Her shout (shout)"
1"She pressed (press)"
2"he yelled (yell)"
3"he whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.231
leniency0.462
rawRatio0.444
effectiveRatio0.205
76.8053%