Run: 2026-03-25-01KMJ7YY253YKNQVRGS4JCREWJ

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The chain clinked as the third deadbolt turned. Rory didn’t open the door fully at first—just a thin slice, the warped wood creaking against the frame. Her fingers stayed wrapped tight around the handle, shoulder braced behind it. Ptolemy hissed from the kitchen, tail flicking once before vanishing under the book-littered sofa. A leather-gloved hand rested against the doorframe. Tailored charcoal sleeve. The scent of bergamot and something darker, like embers trapped in stone, curled through the gap. “You always keep your cat so well informed,” Lucien said. She didn’t move. “Ptolemy’s smarter than most people I know.” “Higher praise than I’ve received in months.” His voice was low, smooth as poured ink. “May I come in, Rory?” The wind funneling down Brick Lane tugged at the hem of her black hoodie. The curry house below sent up a steady hum of sizzling spices and clattering pans. Somewhere, a motorbike backfired. Ptolemy reappeared, crouched now, ears pricked. “You don’t knock. You don’t call.” She kept her voice flat. “Just show up like you’ve got a key to my life.” “I’d have used it, if I had one.” Her breath caught—just once. The scar on her left wrist tingled, a phantom echo of glass and shouting. The door swung wider. He stepped through without invitation, closing it smoothly behind him. His cane tapped once on the floorboards—a single, precise note. Ivory handle, smooth as bone. The blade inside never made a sound. The flat hadn’t changed. Books stacked in leaning towers. Maps pinned above the sink. A half-drunk mug of tea fossilizing on the windowsill. His amber eye caught the lamplight; the other, black as a starless night, absorbed it. “You’ve redecorated with more chaos,” he said. “Still remember how I like my space?” “Chaos with order beneath. Like your mind.” She moved to the kitchen, turned her back. “Tea?” “No.” “You never drink tea.” “And you always offer it when you’re stalling.” She poured anyway. The kettle rattled. The silence thickened, layered with things too sharp to name. “Eva let you in.” “She didn’t have a choice. Her wards recognised me.” “She knows what you are.” “She knows what *we* are to each other.” Rory turned. “We aren’t anything.” Lucien’s fingers traced the spine of a weathered grimoire on the counter—*Sigils of the Hollow Veil*, its cover cracked with use. “You fled Cardiff. Changed your name in magical circles to Laila. Left your ex, Evan, a shattered man. All in one summer.” “That wasn’t your doing.” “No. But I know why you ran. And why you didn’t look back.” She set the cup down hard. Tea sloshed over the rim. “You followed me.” “I watched. From a distance.” “To make sure I was safe?” “To see if you’d call.” “I didn’t need you.” “You needed someone.” He stepped closer. “You chose solitude instead.” Her laugh was short, brittle. “Better than choosing someone who vanishes when things get hard.” “I didn’t vanish. I was bound.” “By what? Your precious underworld politics? Your demon father’s bloodline?” “My mother’s life. She was bait. For a month. I couldn’t risk contact. Not even with—” He stopped. She saw it—the flicker in his heterochromatic gaze. Regret, raw and unguarded. “Not even with me,” she finished. “No.” The air between them shifted. Not just memory—the weight of everything unsaid since that night in Cardiff. Rain on cobblestones. His mouth against hers, desperate and brief. Then nothing. No goodbye. No letter. Just silence. “You think I wanted that?” he said. “To walk away after—after *that*?” “You did.” “I left to keep you alive.” His voice dropped, edged with something feral. “Evan wasn’t just human. He had ties to the Hollow Pact. They were using him to get to *you*. To the bloodline your mother never told you about.” Her breath stilled. “You knew about my mother?” “I knew before you did.” “And you said nothing.” “I couldn’t. Not without putting you in the crosshairs.” “So you let me suffer instead.” “I protected you.” “Protection feels a lot like betrayal when it comes from someone you—” She cut herself off. His cane clattered to the floor. He closed the distance in two strides. One hand caught hers, thumb brushing the crescent scar on her wrist. Electric. Familiar. “I stayed away because I care,” he said, voice rough. “Not because I don’t.” Her pulse hammered under his touch. The flat blurred at the edges. All she saw was him—the sharp line of his jaw, the tension in his throat, the way his breath hitched just once. “You think one touch fixes three years of silence?” she whispered. “No.” He leaned in, close enough she felt the warmth of him, the scent of old magic clinging to his coat. “But this might.” His mouth met hers. It wasn’t gentle. It was reclaiming. A collision of want and restraint finally snapping. She tasted dark coffee and regret and the faint metallic tang of power. Her hands twisted in his shirt, pulling him closer. The world narrowed—the press of his body, the soft groan in his throat, the way his fingers threaded through her hair like he’d memorised the shape of her skull. A crash from the street below—glass shattering. A shout in Bengali. They broke apart. Ptolemy yowled, fur puffed. Lucien turned toward the noise, instincts flaring. His free hand dipped into his inner coat pocket. Rory reached beneath the sink, fingers closing around cold steel. “You keep a gun under your tea towels now?” he said. “Learned not to rely on half-demons with delayed appearances.” “Fair.” He bent, retrieved his cane. At the door, he paused. “They’ll come for you, Rory. The Hollow Pact. They’ve found your trail.” She crossed her arms. “Then let them.” “They’ll burn this city down to get to you.” “Then we burn them first.” He looked at her—really looked. Amber and black eyes holding hers. “You’ve changed.” “So have you.” She stepped forward, straightened his collar. “You used to wear your darkness like armour. Now it’s slipping.” “And you used to run from fire.” A ghost of a smile. “Now you walk into it.” “Learned from the best.” He touched her cheek, just once. Then turned the handle. The door opened. A figure stood on the landing—hooded, motionless. The smell of damp earth and crushed rue flooded the flat. Lucien moved fast, pulling Rory behind him. His cane unsheathed with a soft *shink* of steel. The hood lowered. A woman stood there. Young. Pale. Eyes wide with something like recognition. “Rory?” the woman whispered. “They said you were dead.” Rory’s blood turned to ice. Because she knew that voice. And the name on her lips wasn’t hers. It was *Laila*.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences67
tagDensity0.224
leniency0.448
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.56% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1126
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
42.27% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1126
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"echo"
count1
1
word"silence"
count3
2
word"traced"
count1
3
word"shattered"
count1
4
word"flicker"
count1
5
word"weight"
count1
6
word"electric"
count1
7
word"familiar"
count1
8
word"pulse"
count1
9
word"tension"
count1
10
word"warmth"
count1
highlights
0"echo"
1"silence"
2"traced"
3"shattered"
4"flicker"
5"weight"
6"electric"
7"familiar"
8"pulse"
9"tension"
10"warmth"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences104
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences104
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences154
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans6
markdownWords10
totalWords1115
ratio0.009
matches
0"we"
1"Sigils of the Hollow Veil"
2"that"
3"you"
4"shink"
5"Laila"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions17
wordCount686
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.73
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Brick1
Lane1
Hollow1
Cardiff1
Bengali1
Rory5
Ptolemy3
Lucien4
persons
0"Rory"
1"Ptolemy"
2"Lucien"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
2"Hollow"
3"Cardiff"
4"Bengali"
globalScore1
windowScore1
97.92% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences48
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"something like recognition"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1115
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences154
matches
0"knew that voice"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs90
mean12.39
std11.58
cv0.934
sampleLengths
08
144
226
310
410
520
639
722
88
918
104
1132
1238
137
147
157
169
171
184
198
2016
214
229
235
248
255
2643
274
2813
2914
305
316
325
334
3410
3515
366
3710
3818
3912
406
411
4235
4312
442
4541
463
475
485
494
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences104
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs129
matches
0"was reclaiming"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences154
ratio0.078
matches
0"Rory didn’t open the door fully at first—just a thin slice, the warped wood creaking against the frame."
1"Her breath caught—just once."
2"His cane tapped once on the floorboards—a single, precise note."
3"His amber eye caught the lamplight; the other, black as a starless night, absorbed it."
4"Lucien’s fingers traced the spine of a weathered grimoire on the counter—*Sigils of the Hollow Veil*, its cover cracked with use."
5"She saw it—the flicker in his heterochromatic gaze."
6"Not just memory—the weight of everything unsaid since that night in Cardiff."
7"All she saw was him—the sharp line of his jaw, the tension in his throat, the way his breath hitched just once."
8"The world narrowed—the press of his body, the soft groan in his throat, the way his fingers threaded through her hair like he’d memorised the shape of her skull."
9"A crash from the street below—glass shattering."
10"He looked at her—really looked."
11"A figure stood on the landing—hooded, motionless."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount699
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.034334763948497854
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.005722460658082976
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences154
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences154
mean7.24
std5.07
cv0.7
sampleLengths
08
118
212
314
47
53
616
710
83
97
1015
115
1214
1315
144
156
1611
1711
188
194
2014
214
2210
2310
245
257
264
275
285
299
3015
317
327
337
348
351
361
374
388
393
403
4110
424
439
445
458
462
473
4821
4922
51.30% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.35064935064935066
totalSentences154
uniqueOpeners54
75.76% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences88
matches
0"Somewhere, a motorbike backfired."
1"Then turned the handle."
ratio0.023
51.82% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences88
matches
0"Her fingers stayed wrapped tight"
1"She didn’t move."
2"His voice was low, smooth"
3"She kept her voice flat"
4"Her breath caught—just once."
5"He stepped through without invitation,"
6"His cane tapped once on"
7"His amber eye caught the"
8"She moved to the kitchen,"
9"She poured anyway."
10"She set the cup down"
11"He stepped closer"
12"Her laugh was short, brittle."
13"She saw it—the flicker in"
14"His mouth against hers, desperate"
15"His voice dropped, edged with"
16"Her breath stilled."
17"She cut herself off"
18"His cane clattered to the"
19"He closed the distance in"
ratio0.42
22.50% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount77
totalSentences88
matches
0"The chain clinked as the"
1"Rory didn’t open the door"
2"Her fingers stayed wrapped tight"
3"Ptolemy hissed from the kitchen,"
4"A leather-gloved hand rested against"
5"The scent of bergamot and"
6"She didn’t move."
7"His voice was low, smooth"
8"The wind funneling down Brick"
9"The curry house below sent"
10"Ptolemy reappeared, crouched now, ears"
11"She kept her voice flat"
12"Her breath caught—just once."
13"The scar on her left"
14"The door swung wider."
15"He stepped through without invitation,"
16"His cane tapped once on"
17"Ivory handle, smooth as bone."
18"The blade inside never made"
19"The flat hadn’t changed."
ratio0.875
56.82% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences88
matches
0"Because she knew that voice."
ratio0.011
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences20
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
91.67% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"he said, voice rough"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
1"the woman whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences67
tagDensity0.104
leniency0.209
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.06
86.1870%