Run: 2026-03-25-01KMJ85RJMZNF38BPRV8MR7QSH

Run Details

Model:: Qwen 3 32B
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 37.7s
Cost:: $0.001669
Provider:: AtlasCloud

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
78.26%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
18.48%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
100.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
53.97%	Name drop frequency	(details)
60.71%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
90.35%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
96.03%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
94.00%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
63.14%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
100.00%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
43.33%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
43.65%	Technical jargon density	(details)
79.55%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
0.00%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
77.3823%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert fiction writer.

Always keep the following rules in mind:
- Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang.
- Write in active voice
- Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle.
- Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions.
- Convey events and story through dialogue.
- Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety.
- Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech
- Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself.
- Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action.
- Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe"

When writing text:
- NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely.
- NEVER end with foreshadowing.
- NEVER write further than what I prompt you with.
- AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions.
- STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.

User/Human

Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response:
<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Continue the story using the following instructions:
<instructions>
Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
</instructions>

Model response

Aurora stepped into the clearing with a careful footfall, her boots crunching softly over frost-tipped underbrush. Beside her, Nyx loomed at the boundary of solidity and shadow, their violet eyes glowering in the muted light. Isolde stood motionless, her silver hair catching the low slant of winter sunbeams that filtered through the tall oaks.

The Fae Grove exuded an impossible stillness—like it hadn’t been touched by time in centuries. Wildflowers bloomed defiantly out of season, their petals iridescent as if dusted with starlight. No breeze stirred, no birds cried. The only sound was their labored, shallow breaths.

“This is where you showed her?” Aurora said, nodding to Isolde, who gave no answer beyond the faint quirk of her lips.

Nyx crouched near one of the standing stones, tracing a hand along its surface. Their fingers sank slightly before withdrawing, as if brushing the edge of something invisible. “There’s a pocket within the pocket,” they murmured, voice like wind sifting through reeds. “I felt it shift.”

Isolde did not react, but Aurora noted how she subtly adjusted her stance, shifting her weight forward.

“I don’t sense anything unnatural,” Aurora admitted, reaching up to touch the pendant at her throat. It pulsed warm against her skin, then grew cold. A flicker—too fast to interpret—passed across her vision. She blinked hard, and the moment vanished.

“You are not supposed to.” Isolde’s words were soft, but sharp. “Only your senses can lead you now.”

Aurora frowned but didn’t argue. Instead, she took another step forward, pushing past the trees. The grove opened gradually, revealing a path paved with dark stone, each slab etched with swirling symbols none of them recognized. The ground was covered in moss so thick and green it shimmered when disturbed.

“Watch where you walk,” Nyx warned. They knelt beside the first slab, whispering something under their breath in a language that made Aurora’s ear hairs twitch.

She ignored the warning. The deeper they went, the more the air changed—it smelled like earth after rain and something sweet, unfamiliar, almost like nectar or burnt sugar. The silence had grown denser too, pressing down on them like velvet.

Then Aurra noticed the walls closing in.

It wasn’t visible movement, but there it was: the trees, the moss, the stones, all leaning inward, as if the grove itself were alive and curious about them. Her fingers brushed the hilt of the Fae blade at her waist. Cold radiated from beneath her palm, steady and comforting.

Isolde walked ahead of them, barely touching the stones with her feet. When a squirrel darted across the path, it paused, regarded them with intelligent brown eyes, then vanished into the roots without a sound. No tracks remained.

They reached a chamber unlike the rest. A dome of ivy-covered stone rose above them, supported by six pillars carved with faces frozen in eternal hunger. The air here was warmer, almost sticky. A basin sat in the center, filled with water that gleamed with an inner fire, like molten copper. Its surface never moved.

Aurora knelt. The reflection she saw was wrong—not distorted, but misaligned. Her hair was longer, her eyes darker, and for a terrible heartbeat, she looked back at someone else. She pulled away hard, breathing quick.

“What is this place?” she asked, her voice rough.

“There are many names for what lies between realms,” Isolde said, circling the basin. “Here, some secrets do not need to be spoken aloud.”

Nyx drifted closer to Aurora, their form half-dissolved into the shadows cast by the pillars. “These aren’t just carvings.”

“No,” Aurora agreed, standing. She ran her fingers along the face of the nearest pillar. The lines were softer than they appeared. She thought she heard something—whispers curling around her ears—but they scattered like smoke when she turned her head.

Isolde extended a hand toward the water. It parted, glowing brighter. The light spread into tendrils, reaching toward the sky before vanishing.

“If you listen,” she said, “the basin shows what has been.”

Aurora narrowed her eyes. “And does it show what will come?”

Isolde tilted her head, her lavender eyes glittering faintly. “Sometimes yes. But only to those who understand the cost of knowing.”

Aurora’s grip tightened on the pendant, though it had stopped reacting. Her other hand drifted to the hilt of the blade again. There was tension in the room now, tight as drawn string. The warmth coming off the basin made the back of her neck prickle.

“The Veil isn’t far,” Nyx said suddenly. “I can feel it pulling.”

Aurora turned sharply. “What do you mean?”

“The rift isn’t stable yet, but it wants to open. The magic here... shifts. The Fae Courts must have left a mark.”

Isolde didn’t reply. Instead, she stepped forward and placed her palm flat against the wall. The stone sighed, groaned, and began to tremble. A seam formed between two pillars.

Light spilled out—cold, white, humming.

“No,” Aurora breathed, taking a step backward.

From the rift, a figure began to emerge—indistinct, moving with jerky, mechanical grace. It was too tall, its limbs long and thin, its eyes hollow pits reflecting the glow of the basin. A chill crept up Aurora’s spine as the creature turned its head. It was watching them.

“Close it!” Aurora shouted, lunging toward Isolde, even as another part of her knew it wouldn’t help. Isolde had brought them here. She’d known.

But the rift kept growing. And with every second, the air grew lighter, colder—and dead.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

adverbTagCount

adverbTags

0	"Nyx said suddenly [suddenly]"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.524

leniency

rawRatio

0.091

effectiveRatio

0.091

78.26%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

920

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"softly"
count	1

adverb	"slightly"
count	1

adverb	"suddenly"
count	1

adverb	"sharply"
count	1

highlights

0	"softly"
1	"slightly"
2	"suddenly"
3	"sharply"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

18.48%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

920

totalAiIsms

found

word	"footfall"
count	1

word	"loomed"
count	1

word	"tracing"
count	1

word	"weight"
count	1

word	"pulsed"
count	1

word	"flicker"
count	1

word	"etched"
count	1

word	"shimmered"
count	1

word	"silence"
count	1

word	"velvet"
count	1

word	"comforting"
count	1

word	"tension"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	1

word	"mechanical"
count	1

word	"chill"
count	1

highlights

0	"footfall"
1	"loomed"
2	"tracing"
3	"weight"
4	"pulsed"
5	"flicker"
6	"etched"
7	"shimmered"
8	"silence"
9	"velvet"
10	"comforting"
11	"tension"
12	"warmth"
13	"mechanical"
14	"chill"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	76
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"began to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	85
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	28
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	912
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	15
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

53.97%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

781

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.92

worstName

"Aurora"

maxWindowNameDensity

worstWindowName

"Aurora"

discoveredNames

Nyx	5
Fae	2
Grove	1
Isolde	11
Aurora	15
Aurra	1

persons

0	"Nyx"
1	"Isolde"
2	"Aurora"
3	"Aurra"

places

0	"Fae"
1	"Grove"

globalScore

0.54

windowScore

0.667

60.71%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"as if brushing the edge of something invisible"
1	"smelled like earth after rain and somethin"

90.35%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

1.096

wordCount

912

matches

0	"not distorted, but misaligned"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	85
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

27.64

std

15.46

0.56

sampleLengths

0	54
1	43
2	22
3	46
4	17
5	40
6	18
7	50
8	26
9	40
10	7
11	49
12	38
13	55
14	35
15	9
16	24
17	19
18	40
19	22
20	11
21	11
22	21
23	46
24	12
25	7
26	22
27	29
28	5
29	7
30	48
31	24
32	15

96.03%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"been touched"
1	"was covered"

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

152

matches

0	"was watching"

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.094

matches

0	"The Fae Grove exuded an impossible stillness—like it hadn’t been touched by time in centuries."
1	"A flicker—too fast to interpret—passed across her vision."
2	"The deeper they went, the more the air changed—it smelled like earth after rain and something sweet, unfamiliar, almost like nectar or burnt sugar."
3	"The reflection she saw was wrong—not distorted, but misaligned."
4	"She thought she heard something—whispers curling around her ears—but they scattered like smoke when she turned her head."
5	"Light spilled out—cold, white, humming."
6	"From the rift, a figure began to emerge—indistinct, moving with jerky, mechanical grace."
7	"And with every second, the air grew lighter, colder—and dead."

94.00%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount

792

adjectiveStacks

stackExamples

0	"over frost-tipped underbrush."

adverbCount

adverbRatio

0.039141414141414144

lyAdverbCount

lyAdverbRatio

0.013888888888888888

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	85
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

10.73

std

5.87

0.547

sampleLengths

0	16
1	19
2	19
3	15
4	14
5	6
6	8
7	22
8	14
9	14
10	14
11	4
12	17
13	16
14	9
15	8
16	7
17	11
18	7
19	5
20	10
21	21
22	14
23	6
24	20
25	4
26	24
27	12
28	7
29	28
30	12
31	9
32	12
33	23
34	3
35	7
36	19
37	7
38	18
39	4
40	2
41	9
42	18
43	6
44	9
45	14
46	10
47	15
48	4
49	4

63.14%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	3
diversityRatio	0.4
totalSentences	85
uniqueOpeners	34

100.00%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Instead, she took another step"
1	"Then Aurra noticed the walls"
2	"Instead, she stepped forward and"

ratio

0.042

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Their fingers sank slightly before"
1	"they murmured, voice like wind"
2	"It pulsed warm against her"
3	"She blinked hard, and the"
4	"They knelt beside the first"
5	"She ignored the warning."
6	"It wasn’t visible movement, but"
7	"Her fingers brushed the hilt"
8	"They reached a chamber unlike"
9	"Its surface never moved."
10	"Her hair was longer, her"
11	"She pulled away hard, breathing"
12	"she asked, her voice rough"
13	"She ran her fingers along"
14	"She thought she heard something—whispers"
15	"It parted, glowing brighter."
16	"Her other hand drifted to"
17	"It was too tall, its"
18	"It was watching them."

ratio

0.264

43.33%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Aurora stepped into the clearing"
1	"Isolde stood motionless, her silver"
2	"The Fae Grove exuded an"
3	"Wildflowers bloomed defiantly out of"
4	"The only sound was their"
5	"Aurora said, nodding to Isolde,"
6	"Nyx crouched near one of"
7	"Their fingers sank slightly before"
8	"they murmured, voice like wind"
9	"Isolde did not react, but"
10	"Aurora admitted, reaching up to"
11	"It pulsed warm against her"
12	"A flicker—too fast to interpret—passed"
13	"She blinked hard, and the"
14	"Isolde’s words were soft, but"
15	"Aurora frowned but didn’t argue."
16	"The grove opened gradually, revealing"
17	"The ground was covered in"
18	"They knelt beside the first"
19	"She ignored the warning."

ratio

0.833

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	72
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

43.65%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"Isolde stood motionless, her silver hair catching the low slant of winter sunbeams that filtered through the tall oaks."
1	"Wildflowers bloomed defiantly out of season, their petals iridescent as if dusted with starlight."
2	"Their fingers sank slightly before withdrawing, as if brushing the edge of something invisible."
3	"They knelt beside the first slab, whispering something under their breath in a language that made Aurora’s ear hairs twitch."
4	"It wasn’t visible movement, but there it was: the trees, the moss, the stones, all leaning inward, as if the grove itself were alive and curious about them."

79.55%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"she asked, her voice rough"

0.00%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"they murmured (murmur)"
1	"Aurora admitted (admit)"
2	"Nyx warned (warn)"
3	"Aurora agreed (agree)"
4	"Aurora breathed (breathe)"
5	"Aurora shouted (shout)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.524

leniency

rawRatio

0.545

effectiveRatio

0.545

77.3823%