Run: 2026-03-25-01KMJ86GA8VYNN8KQEQHY09ZMA

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Duration:
1m 24s
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$0.001321
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The body hung suspended three feet above the cracked tiles, arms splayed like a crucified marionette, feet twitching in silent spasms. No rope. No wires. Just gravity refusing to do its job. Detective Harlow Quinn stepped forward, boots crunching on broken glass and something that crunched like dried bone. Her left hand twitched, index finger brushing the worn leather of her watch. Eighteen years on the force and she’d seen strangulation, exsanguination, even a bloke dissolved in a cauldron of industrial lye. But this—this was theatre. The kind that didn’t play by rules. The air tasted metallic, thick with ozone and burnt herbs. Incense, maybe. Or worse. Her nostrils flared. Not blood. Not yet. But copper hovered at the back of the throat, patient. "Eyes wide open, no ligature marks, pupils dilated to nothing," a voice came from behind a pillar. "No signs of struggle. No fingerprints. No footprints in the dust except ours. Classic Veil signature." Quinn didn’t turn. She knew that voice. Knew the smug cadence, the academic precision that masqueraded as certainty. "DS Carter. You been here long?" "Ten minutes. Arrived before forensics. Scene’s clean. Too clean." She finally looked. Carter stood with arms folded, polished shoes avoiding a puddle of iridescent slime that shimmered like oil on rain. His tie was straight. His notebook pristine. A man who treated crime scenes like lecture halls. "Clean?" Quinn circled the body. Male, mid-thirties, suited, tie knotted too tight. “You call this clean? He’s floating like a bloody balloon.” "Gravitational anomaly. Likely residual from a rift breach. They collapse energy fields—disrupt cohesion. Happened in Brixton last year. Remember? The butcher who stuck to the ceiling for six hours?" "Six hours, he stayed put. This one’s still twitching. Which means he’s alive." Carter blinked. "Impossible. Heart’s stopped. Pupils fixed. No breath." "Then why’s his left hand curling?" Both turned. The fingers, stiff with rigor, had twitched inward—once, twice—like a dying crab closing its claw. Carter cleared his throat. “Reflex arc. Spinal response." "Reflexes don’t last after death. Not at this stage. Not with this precision." She crouched, ignoring the ache in her knees, and snapped on gloves. Her eyes scanned the floor beneath him. Dust, yes. But disturbed. Not by footprints—by something finer. Like powder. She dipped a finger, rubbed it between thumb and forefinger. Gritty. Cold. "Salt? Sulphur?" "Not sea salt. Not rock. This is ritual grade. Hex inhibitor. Someone tried to contain something." “Or contain him.” Carter snorted. “Now you’re spiralling. Veil Market’s been quiet for weeks. Full moon hasn’t even risen yet. The Veil Compass in evidence hasn’t twitched.” Quinn didn’t answer. She stood, turning slowly. The station around them—forgotten, crumbling, walls scarred with peeling posters from the eighties—felt wrong. Too hollow. Too still. No rats. No distant train rumble. Even the wind outside, she realised, had gone silent. Her gaze caught on the archway behind the platform. A patch of shadow didn’t move when she shifted. Not because of the light—because it wasn’t made of shadow. It was absence. A tear in space, barely visible, like a smudge on glass. She reached into her coat. Pulled out the compass. Brass casing, verdigris creeping through the sigils. The needle spun once, twice—then locked, pointing directly at the arch. Carter followed her gaze. "That’s just a service tunnel. We checked it—nothing but rot and pigeons." "The compass says otherwise." “That thing’s unreliable. You know the lab flagged it as contaminated. Could’ve been activated remotely. Or it’s broken." Quinn’s jaw tightened. She remembered Eva Kowalski’s voice in her ear three nights ago, hushed over a payphone: *“It’s not broken. It’s afraid.”* Eva. Research assistant. Oxford. Master’s in Ancient History. And the woman who’d handed her this compass with trembling fingers, freckled face pale behind round glasses. *“It points to rifts. But only when they’re hungry.”* She tucked the compass away. Walked to the body. Studied the suit. Wool. Italian. Expensive. Pocket flap turned out. She pulled it open with her pen. A business card. *Silas Thorne, Thorne & Locke Solicitors, Mayfair.* "Know him?" Carter glanced. "Big firm. Corporate law. Nasty divorce cases. Nothing supernatural." "Nothing?" She pulled out her phone, tapped in the name. Search. One result. Local news. Headline: *Solicitor Arrested in Occult Artifact Smuggling Ring—Charges Dropped Amid Missing Evidence.* Article dated two weeks ago. She showed the screen. Carter paled. “That case was buried.” “Because someone didn’t want questions.” She turned back to the body. Noticed something at the base of the neck. Not a wound. A mark. Faint. Circular. Like a brand, but too soft. Like ink pressed from the inside. She peeled the collar back with gloved hands. There. Beneath the skin. Veins blackened, crawling in a spiral pattern toward the spine. Not bruising. Not necrosis. Something else. "Look." Carter leaned in. "Blood poisoning?" "No. This is containment. They tried to seal a possession. Failed." "Who’s *they*?" "The mark. It’s Enochian. Banishment sigil. Amateur attempt. But someone knew enough to try." Her eyes flicked to the salt circle. Too sloppy for a professional. But the pattern—she recognised it. Not from forensics. From the file stack on her desk. Eva’s file. The one marked *Restricted—Archaeology Division*. She’d seen that formation before. In a photo from Nineveh. Burial chamber. Same spiral. Same failed containment. Another twitch. The body’s foot kicked. Sharp. Violent. Carter stepped back. "Jesus—" "Stay back." Quinn moved fast. Kicked aside the salt line. Reached into the inner pocket of her coat. Not for cuffs. For a small vial of clear liquid. Holy water. Consecrated. From Westminster Abbey. Kept because of Morris. Because of what happened with him. The bleeding walls. The whispers in Latin. She uncorked it. Sprinkled three drops over the man’s face. The effect was instant. The body arched. A sound like breaking glass tore from his throat—no, not his throat. From the air around him. The shadow in the archway pulsed. And the eyes—wide, unblinking—moved. Locked onto Quinn. Not pleading. Not human. Grinning. Carter fumbled for his radio. "We need backup—now—" "Too late." The shadow peeled forward. Not a shape. A distortion. Like heat haze given hunger. The compass in Quinn’s coat vibrated. Then screamed—a sound no brass instrument should make. The lights died. The last thing she saw before the dark took her was the vial slipping from her hand, shattering, and the man’s mouth opening too wide—wide enough to swallow the moon.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.114
leniency0.229
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.37% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1080
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
62.96% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1080
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"shimmered"
count1
1
word"pristine"
count1
2
word"disrupt"
count1
3
word"scanned"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"pulsed"
count1
6
word"vibrated"
count1
7
word"the last thing"
count1
highlights
0"shimmered"
1"pristine"
2"disrupt"
3"scanned"
4"flicked"
5"pulsed"
6"vibrated"
7"the last thing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences151
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences151
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences182
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans6
markdownWords35
totalWords1063
ratio0.033
matches
0"“It’s not broken. It’s afraid.”"
1"“It points to rifts. But only when they’re hungry.”"
2"Silas Thorne, Thorne & Locke Solicitors, Mayfair."
3"Solicitor Arrested in Occult Artifact Smuggling Ring—Charges Dropped Amid Missing Evidence."
4"they"
5"Restricted—Archaeology Division"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
86.63% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions51
wordCount789
uniqueNames29
maxNameDensity1.27
worstName"Carter"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Carter"
discoveredNames
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Quinn8
Male1
Eva3
Kowalski1
Ancient1
History1
Thorne2
Locke1
Solicitors1
Carter10
Search1
Arrested1
Occult1
Artifact1
Smuggling1
Ring1
Charges1
Dropped1
Amid1
Missing1
Article1
Archaeology1
Nineveh1
Westminster1
Abbey1
Morris1
Latin1
Like4
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Eva"
3"Kowalski"
4"Thorne"
5"Carter"
6"Article"
7"Westminster"
8"Abbey"
9"Morris"
10"Like"
places
0"Ancient"
1"Occult"
2"Nineveh"
3"Latin"
globalScore0.866
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences48
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1063
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences182
matches
0"knew that voice"
1"seen that formation"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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std13.3
cv0.838
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231
333
418
56
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1013
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126
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148
1513
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172
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365
374
386
395
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418
4220
431
445
4511
462
4714
4834
4917
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences151
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs134
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount16
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences182
ratio0.071
matches
0"But this—this was theatre."
1"The fingers, stiff with rigor, had twitched inward—once, twice—like a dying crab closing its claw."
2"Not by footprints—by something finer."
3"The station around them—forgotten, crumbling, walls scarred with peeling posters from the eighties—felt wrong."
4"Not because of the light—because it wasn’t made of shadow."
5"The needle spun once, twice—then locked, pointing directly at the arch."
6"Headline: *Solicitor Arrested in Occult Artifact Smuggling Ring—Charges Dropped Amid Missing Evidence.*"
7"But the pattern—she recognised it."
8"The one marked *Restricted—Archaeology Division*."
9"A sound like breaking glass tore from his throat—no, not his throat."
10"And the eyes—wide, unblinking—moved."
11"Then screamed—a sound no brass instrument should make."
12"The last thing she saw before the dark took her was the vial slipping from her hand, shattering, and the man’s mouth opening too wide—wide enough to swallow the moon."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount804
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount30
adverbRatio0.03731343283582089
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.006218905472636816
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences182
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences182
mean5.84
std5.25
cv0.899
sampleLengths
021
12
22
37
417
513
620
74
87
910
102
112
123
132
142
1510
1617
1716
183
194
2011
216
229
233
2419
254
263
279
285
297
3010
3129
3213
332
347
356
362
3715
384
394
4013
4112
427
432
442
455
462
4710
481
491
76.19% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.5
totalSentences182
uniqueOpeners91
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences104
matches
0"Just gravity refusing to do"
1"Even the wind outside, she"
2"Too sloppy for a professional."
3"Then screamed—a sound no brass"
ratio0.038
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences104
matches
0"Her left hand twitched, index"
1"Her nostrils flared."
2"She knew that voice."
3"She finally looked."
4"His tie was straight."
5"His notebook pristine."
6"She crouched, ignoring the ache"
7"Her eyes scanned the floor"
8"She dipped a finger, rubbed"
9"She stood, turning slowly."
10"Her gaze caught on the"
11"It was absence."
12"She reached into her coat."
13"She remembered Eva Kowalski’s voice"
14"She tucked the compass away."
15"She pulled it open with"
16"She pulled out her phone,"
17"She showed the screen."
18"She turned back to the"
19"She peeled the collar back"
ratio0.221
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount64
totalSentences104
matches
0"The body hung suspended three"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn stepped forward,"
2"Her left hand twitched, index"
3"The kind that didn’t play"
4"The air tasted metallic, thick"
5"Her nostrils flared."
6"a voice came from behind"
7"Quinn didn’t turn."
8"She knew that voice."
9"She finally looked."
10"Carter stood with arms folded,"
11"His tie was straight."
12"His notebook pristine."
13"A man who treated crime"
14"Quinn circled the body"
15"The fingers, stiff with rigor,"
16"Carter cleared his throat."
17"She crouched, ignoring the ache"
18"Her eyes scanned the floor"
19"She dipped a finger, rubbed"
ratio0.615
48.08% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences104
matches
0"Because of what happened with"
ratio0.01
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences20
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn stepped forward, boots crunching on broken glass and something that crunched like dried bone."
1"Knew the smug cadence, the academic precision that masqueraded as certainty."
2"Carter stood with arms folded, polished shoes avoiding a puddle of iridescent slime that shimmered like oil on rain."
3"And the woman who’d handed her this compass with trembling fingers, freckled face pale behind round glasses."
4"The last thing she saw before the dark took her was the vial slipping from her hand, shattering, and the man’s mouth opening too wide—wide enough to swallow the…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
88.9743%