Run: 2026-03-25-01KMJ8B3R1RS0AP6SSS3AZQZ2X

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Duration:
23.5s
Cost:
$0.000359
Provider:
WandB

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The trees ended without warning. One moment, the air was heavy with the damp musk of Richmond Park—wet leaves, distant rain, the breath of horses in the meadow—and the next, the world *shifted*. Aurora felt it before she saw it: a pressure drop behind her ears, like stepping into a sealed room with the vacuum sucked out. The scent changed too. Not gone, but *deepened*. The flowers here didn’t just bloom—they *sang*. Lavender, honeysuckle, and something else, ancient and wild, threaded with starlight. She halted, hand instinctively going to the small of her back where the Fae-Forged Blade rested beneath her coat. The blade gave no sign—no chill, no hum—but her scar tingled, the old crescent on her left wrist pulsing like a second, slower heartbeat. “Did you feel that?” Eva whispered from behind her, gripping Aurora’s elbow. Her knuckles were white. “More than feel it,” Nyx murmured. Their shadow-form elongated, stretching across the mossy ground like ink spilled in slow motion. “The air here tastes of memory. Not quite real. Not quite dream.” They stepped forward through what had been empty bracken, and the world rearranged itself. The grove unfolded in a slow, breathless revelation. Tall oaks, impossibly thick and knotted with silver bark, formed a perfect ring around a central clearing. Their trunks rose higher than any tree Aurora had ever seen—so high the crowns dissolved into a sky that was neither day nor night, but a bruised twilight shot through with ribbons of shifting silver light. Between the trees stood ancient oaken stones, moss-draped and carved with symbols that made her eyes itch if she stared too long. They pulsed faintly, as though breathing. “Standing stones,” Nyx said, hovering near one. “Older than Hel. Older than the first hunger of man.” Eva turned in a slow circle, arms wrapped around herself. “It’s not just beautiful. It’s… *off*. Like the ground is too soft, the air too sweet.” Aurora stepped forward, boots sinking slightly into moss so thick it felt like carpet. No footprints marred its velvet surface—except, she noticed, their own. Hers, Eva’s—but not Nyx’s. The shade moved without impression, trailing only a ripple in the air, like heat off pavement. And ahead—there she stood. Isolde Varga stood beneath the largest oak, silver hair unbound and pooling on the moss, stirring as though underwater. Her pale lavender eyes fixed on them, depthless. She wore a gown of woven ivy and moon-dappled silk that seemed to shift with each breath, though no wind stirred. “A guest,” Isolde said, voice like dry petals brushing stone. “Two guests. And one who walks between breaths.” “We seek answers,” Aurora said, voice steady despite the flutter in her chest. “We were told the Veil thins soon. That rifts may open.” Isolde tilted her head. “It does. It will. It always *unfolds* at the turning of the year.” Her gaze flickered to Aurora’s wrist. “You carry the mark of hunger. And the mark of blood.” Aurora’s fingers twitched toward the Heartstone Pendant beneath her shirt. It warmed suddenly, a faint, steady pulse—like a heartbeat in time with the standing stones. “The Pendant…” Isolde said, stepping forward with no sound. Eva flinched. “You do not know who left it at your door. You only know it called to you, in dreams, with the scent of spiced wine and burnt sugar.” Aurora swallowed. That was true. She’d woken each night for a week, the taste of something rich and cloying on her tongue, the pendant warm against her collarbone. “It’s connected to Dymas,” she said. “Isn’t it?” “The realm of Gluttony,” Nyx said softly. “Hel’s second course. Excess served warm.” Isolde smiled, a ghost of movement on her lips. “Dymas *hungers*. It always does. It sends tendrils through thinning places—through the hunger in men’s hearts, through feasts eaten without gratitude, through the longing for more than any soul should hold.” Her eyes narrowed. “You’ve been followed.” Aurora turned. The grove seemed larger now, the edges blurred. Shadows pooled deeper between the trees—not just natural shade, but something *active*. One puddle stretched, then withdrew like a breath. Then the pendant flared. Heat bloomed beneath Aurora’s shirt. She yanked it free. The crimson gemstone pulsed once, twice—bright as a coal pulled from fire—then pointed, like a compass, toward the northwest arc of the circle. “There,” Nyx said, already shifting into a sleek, low form, nearly flat against the moss. “A rift. Small. Fresh. It wasn’t here before.” Eva backed up. “We shouldn’t be here. It’s not right. I can feel it—like someone’s watching from inside my ribs.” “You’re right,” Aurora said. “But we came to find what’s coming for us. Not run from it.” She moved toward the rift, Nyx gliding beside her like ink in water. The air thickened as they neared a break between two stones. The moss here was darker, clotted, and the light from the standing stone nearby flickered like a dying bulb. The rift was no larger than a handspan, a jagged tear in the air. Through it—brief, nauseating flashes. Amber sky. Rolling vineyards heavy with fruit. A banquet hall lit by chandeliers of meat and bone. A man in golden robes laughing, his teeth too white, too sharp. *Dymas.* And then—voices. Not through the rift. Around it. Whispers, layered, greedy. Words in languages Aurora didn’t know, but *felt*—*feed, more, taste, take*. Her stomach clenched. Not hunger. Revulsion. A wave of nausea rolled through her. She clapped a hand over her mouth, but what came up wasn’t bile—it was a single, perfect grape, plump and dark as blood. It fell to the moss with a wet *plip*. Nyx recoiled. “It tried to *feed* you!” Eva gasped. “What the hell was that?” Aurora stared at the grape. It trembled once, then split open. From within, a tiny worm of shadow wriggled and dissolved into mist. Isolde appeared beside them, silent as a thought. “The rift hungers. Not for blood. For *craving*. You desired knowledge. It offered sustenance. The wrong kind.” Aurora wiped her mouth with the back of her hand, the taste of wine still coating her tongue. “How do we close it?” “The Blade,” Isolde said. “Fae steel binds the Veil. But be swift. The rift is small, but Dymas has teeth.” Aurora drew the Fae-Forged Blade. The moment it cleared the sheath, the air cracked like frost spreading. The blade didn’t just glow—*the light bled from it*, pale and cold as moonlight on ice. The temperature dropped. Eva shivered. Even Nyx flinched back slightly. Aurora stepped forward, heart drumming. The rift shuddered as she approached. The whispers grew urgent. Images flickered: a feast laid for her, candles made of human fat, a crown of grapes threaded with wire. A voice, smooth as syrup: *Stay. Eat. You’ve earned it.* She raised the blade. And stabbed. The dagger pierced the rift like glass. A shriek—not from the grove, but from *elsewhere*—ripped through the air. The tear convulsed, weeping black sap, then sealed with a sound like a sigh. Silence returned. Then—slowly—the grove *settled*. The light softened. The standing stones exhaled. Nyx drifted back to their full height. “It’s closed. But it’ll open again.” “Soon,” Isolde said, turning her face up to the shifting sky. “The solstice comes. The Veil thins. And Dymas *always* finds a way in.” Aurora sheathed the blade. Her hands were steady, but her pulse still thrummed in her throat. The pendant had cooled, but the echo of that *hunger*, that deep, gnawing pull—it lingered. She looked at Isolde. “What do we do?” The seer smiled, faint and sad. “You already know. You walk toward the feast. Not to eat. To break the table.” And then she was gone—no movement, no vanish. Just—*gone*. Only the moss, the stones, and the scent of wildflowers remained. Eva exhaled shakily. “Okay. That—was way worse than I thought.” Aurora tucked the pendant away. Her voice was quiet. Certain. “We’re not done.” Nyx stepped beside her. “No. The hunger has tasted you now. And it *remembers*.” Above them, the twilight sky pulsed once—like a slow, dark heart. And then, step by silent step, they walked back through the trees—into the world that remembered how to be real.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Nyx said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.359
leniency0.718
rawRatio0.071
effectiveRatio0.051
81.94% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1384
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"suddenly"
2"softly"
3"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
38.58% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1384
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"perfect"
count2
2
word"pulsed"
count3
3
word"velvet"
count1
4
word"silk"
count1
5
word"flickered"
count3
6
word"pulse"
count2
7
word"stomach"
count1
8
word"trembled"
count1
9
word"silence"
count1
10
word"echo"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"perfect"
2"pulsed"
3"velvet"
4"silk"
5"flickered"
6"pulse"
7"stomach"
8"trembled"
9"silence"
10"echo"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"air was thick with"
count1
2
label"wave of emotion"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"the air was heavy with"
2"A wave of nausea"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences123
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences123
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences148
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans21
markdownWords32
totalWords1362
ratio0.023
matches
0"shifted"
1"deepened"
2"sang"
3"off"
4"unfolds"
5"hungers"
6"active"
7"Dymas."
8"felt"
9"feed, more, taste, take"
10"plip"
11"feed"
12"craving"
13"the light bled from it"
14"Stay. Eat. You’ve earned it."
15"elsewhere"
16"settled"
17"always"
18"hunger"
19"gone"
20"remembers"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions54
wordCount1036
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.74
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Fae-Forged2
Blade2
Aurora18
Eva8
Nyx10
Varga1
Isolde9
Heartstone1
Pendant1
persons
0"Blade"
1"Aurora"
2"Eva"
3"Nyx"
4"Varga"
5"Isolde"
6"Pendant"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Heartstone"
globalScore0.631
windowScore0.5
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences65
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"as though breathing"
1"felt like carpet"
2"silk that seemed to shift with each breath, though no wind stirred"
3"seemed larger now, the edges blurred"
4"appeared beside them, silent as a thought"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords2.937
wordCount1362
matches
0"Not gone, but *deepened*"
1"neither day nor"
2"not just natural shade, but something *active*"
3"not from the grove, but from *elsewhere*"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences148
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs56
mean24.32
std17.9
cv0.736
sampleLengths
05
178
243
316
432
514
689
717
826
944
104
1148
1218
1324
1434
1525
1639
1736
1813
1946
2030
214
2232
2323
2420
2517
2661
2729
281
298
3014
3145
327
337
3423
3525
3623
3720
3843
3944
404
412
4232
432
4410
4513
4624
4731
488
4921
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences123
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs187
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount27
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences22
totalSentences148
ratio0.149
matches
0"One moment, the air was heavy with the damp musk of Richmond Park—wet leaves, distant rain, the breath of horses in the meadow—and the next, the world *shifted*."
1"The flowers here didn’t just bloom—they *sang*."
2"The blade gave no sign—no chill, no hum—but her scar tingled, the old crescent on her left wrist pulsing like a second, slower heartbeat."
3"Their trunks rose higher than any tree Aurora had ever seen—so high the crowns dissolved into a sky that was neither day nor night, but a bruised twilight shot through with ribbons of shifting silver light."
4"No footprints marred its velvet surface—except, she noticed, their own."
5"Hers, Eva’s—but not Nyx’s."
6"And ahead—there she stood."
7"It warmed suddenly, a faint, steady pulse—like a heartbeat in time with the standing stones."
8"Shadows pooled deeper between the trees—not just natural shade, but something *active*."
9"The crimson gemstone pulsed once, twice—bright as a coal pulled from fire—then pointed, like a compass, toward the northwest arc of the circle."
10"Through it—brief, nauseating flashes."
11"And then—voices."
12"Words in languages Aurora didn’t know, but *felt*—*feed, more, taste, take*."
13"She clapped a hand over her mouth, but what came up wasn’t bile—it was a single, perfect grape, plump and dark as blood."
14"The blade didn’t just glow—*the light bled from it*, pale and cold as moonlight on ice."
15"A shriek—not from the grove, but from *elsewhere*—ripped through the air."
16"Then—slowly—the grove *settled*."
17"The pendant had cooled, but the echo of that *hunger*, that deep, gnawing pull—it lingered."
18"And then she was gone—no movement, no vanish."
19"Just—*gone*."
20"Above them, the twilight sky pulsed once—like a slow, dark heart."
21"And then, step by silent step, they walked back through the trees—into the world that remembered how to be real."
93.77% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1061
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount50
adverbRatio0.0471253534401508
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.011310084825636193
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences148
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences148
mean9.2
std6.92
cv0.752
sampleLengths
05
128
224
34
44
57
611
719
824
912
104
116
1214
1312
1414
158
1617
1736
1822
196
207
2110
2210
2316
2414
2510
264
2716
284
2919
308
3121
3210
338
3413
3511
364
3719
3811
3910
4015
419
422
4328
442
453
4623
476
482
497
57.66% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.3783783783783784
totalSentences148
uniqueOpeners56
98.04% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences102
matches
0"Then the pendant flared."
1"Then—slowly—the grove *settled*."
2"Only the moss, the stones,"
ratio0.029
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences102
matches
0"She halted, hand instinctively going"
1"Her knuckles were white."
2"Their shadow-form elongated, stretching across"
3"They stepped forward through what"
4"Their trunks rose higher than"
5"They pulsed faintly, as though"
6"Hers, Eva’s—but not Nyx’s."
7"Her pale lavender eyes fixed"
8"She wore a gown of"
9"Her gaze flickered to Aurora’s"
10"It warmed suddenly, a faint,"
11"She’d woken each night for"
12"Her eyes narrowed"
13"She yanked it free."
14"She moved toward the rift,"
15"Her stomach clenched."
16"She clapped a hand over"
17"It fell to the moss"
18"It trembled once, then split"
19"You’ve earned it.*"
ratio0.235
53.14% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount83
totalSentences102
matches
0"The trees ended without warning."
1"Aurora felt it before she"
2"The scent changed too."
3"The flowers here didn’t just"
4"Lavender, honeysuckle, and something else,"
5"She halted, hand instinctively going"
6"The blade gave no sign—no"
7"Eva whispered from behind her,"
8"Her knuckles were white."
9"Their shadow-form elongated, stretching across"
10"They stepped forward through what"
11"The grove unfolded in a"
12"Their trunks rose higher than"
13"They pulsed faintly, as though"
14"Nyx said, hovering near one"
15"Eva turned in a slow"
16"Aurora stepped forward, boots sinking"
17"Hers, Eva’s—but not Nyx’s."
18"The shade moved without impression,"
19"Isolde Varga stood beneath the"
ratio0.814
49.02% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences102
matches
0"Even Nyx flinched back slightly."
ratio0.01
73.17% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences41
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Their trunks rose higher than any tree Aurora had ever seen—so high the crowns dissolved into a sky that was neither day nor night, but a bruised twilight shot …"
1"Between the trees stood ancient oaken stones, moss-draped and carved with symbols that made her eyes itch if she stared too long."
2"Isolde Varga stood beneath the largest oak, silver hair unbound and pooling on the moss, stirring as though underwater."
3"She wore a gown of woven ivy and moon-dappled silk that seemed to shift with each breath, though no wind stirred."
89.29% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Aurora said, voice steady despite the flutter in her chest"
98.72% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Eva whispered (whisper)"
1"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.308
leniency0.615
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.103
78.3327%