Run: 2026-03-25-01KMJ8DTCBH9Z59R25CE9T6R0H

Run Details

Duration:
2m 4s
Cost:
$0.002445
Provider:
SiliconFlow

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn exhaled slow breaths into the fog of her experience. The Veil Market sprawled around her like a corpse freshly tumbled from a tomb. Oil lamps hissed in their brass cages. Stalls collapsed in uneven lines, the mudded sheets littered with broken knickknacks: jars of a liquid that shimmered black and caught the light like teeth. A tattered map on the wall pointed to coordinates that had vanished into the plaster. Quinn’s boot crunched over something soft. The body lay on a disintegrating tarp, half-moon lacerations bleeding neon from its throat. DS Mel Brightwell crouched nearby, gloved hands shielding a fingerprint kit from the drift of damp air. “They tried to exsanguinate him with ritual markings,” she said. “Meaning cultists, unless you’ve seen a lot of pothead beatniks cross-stitch skin like a sewing project.” Quinn narrowed her eyes. The man’s name was Thomas Hargrove, his employer a gaming company that hadn’t filed taxes in a decade. His smartphone still vibrated with the syncopated intervals of a missing call. She crouched, prodding the wound with her watch’s knot of heavy etching. A faint copper stank clung to the tool. “No cross-stitch here,” Quinn said. She rotated her hand. The wound’s edges were smooth as glass, the pattern older than Hargrove’s blood. Her gaze swept the scene. No broken glass. No blood trail. Just the man and his laptop, a smudge of ash where it had rested against the wall. The Compass sat in her jacket, brass cold against her ribs. She’d rigged it to her clasp. Shade artisans didn’t craft failure, but today the needle trembled idle. Brightwell noticed. “Problem with the magic-radar business?” the DS muttered. “Maybe you’re right. Maybe bone tokens aren’t good for breakfast, either.” Quinn didn’t answer. The tangle of smoke from the laptop curved in straight edges, the way threads cling to string-wrapped spindles. She grabbed the satchel at her hip and dug a hand mirror from its folds. Silver flipped in her palm, rimed with condensed mist. She angled the reflection toward the byte-stained wall. A light hurtled back toward her, its form like a comma of intelligence. “Ah c’mon,” Brightwell said, her boots scuffing. “That’s just spatter—” Quinn watched the same reflection, saw the ghost of a face in the blur. A deeper layer, unbroken. “This is how they move him here. Through a shifted window, not the main archway.” She stepped over the tape to the far wall, where a pair of vertical slashes mirrored the victim’s throat. Her thumb pressed the gap. Something gave, a whispering incision. The paint peeled away with a sound like drying leaves. “Jack?” she snapped. The DS turned. “Use the bloody gloves.” The aperture behind them pulsed open like a mouth. Quinn looked through, saw the Tube ceiling tiles three stories high, the serpentine tube rails humming with mainstream transit. Her mission registered—securing evidence of the unnatural—while her mouth tasted like dry earth. Three years since a rift ate DS Morris. The Comms Head on the other side had been asleep for hours when Quinn prodded it. “Why not let the Magical Division have a look?” Jack mumbled as Quinn framed the shadow fissure with her gloves. “You’re pushing too many Mumbo Jumbo buttons, Hal.” The Compass clinked against the wall, a harmonic note shuffled beneath the hermetic vibration of the breach. Quinn flipped it open. The needle oscillated. Not missing, not alert, but a slow coil of anticipation. Shade hexes had their own language. Nature bent but never escaped. “Hargrove’s roommate says he was into gaming. Board games. The kind with rules you don’t understand till far too late.” Quinn took another mirror from the satchel, laid it down until the glass kissed the tarp. The victim’s blood pooled in a ring around the edge, but the center was clean. “He was sitting here. Looking at the laptop.” She tilted her own screen, the dormant breach opening another inch. “Then the window moved beside him.” Jack shrugged. “What if it was a cop out? Windows don’t cut throats, Hal. Maybe he slipped on a broken hologram?” The DS had been seven months on the job when Quinn first let her help close a theft case in Canary Wharf. They’d both nearly gotten eaten by a beast claiming industrial waste site. Quinn had kept the secret and trained her. Now the woman’s stubbornness felt like a blade to the throat. She aimed the satchel at the victim’s screen and pulled it open. Eva had taught her the first trick: never look at ancient documents directly. Neither did Quinn need a tutorial for what the laptop held. File folders labeled *Thorne & Ash, Dismantle the World, 5/23*. A skull grinned from the wallpaper. Quinn swiped to the last email. The signature line read *Jabberwock Ink Co*—an alchemical firm arrested four months earlier for smuggling marrow. The sender’s address had changed twice in Hargrove’s timeline, each switch tracked by his browser to a different Tube station. “Routine cross-reference, according to HR.” Quinn lifted her chin. “And he didn’t lose half his blood delivering to Broadwick Line.” Jack’s head turned, pale red curls bunched at her collar as she scanned the archives. The victim’s satchel was open, the belt missing. Quinn turned to the body again. A tattoo gleamed beneath the torn skin: a spiraling labyrinth with a dot inside. She pressed a finger into the mark and pulled. Flesh peeled back. The ink hadn’t been touched. “Nothing physical got close,” Quinn said. “And that’s not a fresh clench.” The DS crouched beside her, white fingertip brushing the victim’s neck. Quinn held the Compass steady, stared through it, and anything less metal-adjacent in her vocal adjectives would have spoiled the moment. “These are clean. The real weapon wasn’t here.” Jack snorted. “So, what, the victim summoned a ghost union worker?” Quinn didn’t respond. She’d learned to wait for the unspoken to solidify. Her mind replayed the scene through her partner’s last footage. Morris had stood in Cairo Tunnels, face lit by light no blue. His report had gone missing. The Compass in his pocket had gone silent for 37 seconds. Then the light shifted black, and he was gone. She shifted back to the present. A line of dust extended from the victim’s core to Jack’s elbow. Quinn’s hand snatched the DS and spun her toward the fissure. The needle began to dip. “See that?” Jack pulled free, but the motion sent her glasses askew. Her nose brushed a fallen lacquered scroll. The recording from the laptop began to play through its speakers, a gilded video of a sale. The seller wore a mask of yak and brass coat, the set pieces mutating at intervals: skin sizzling to ash between breaths, the compass shaking as though recoiling. Quinn watched as the needle in her hand beat in time with the shriek of wood. The sigils on the face of the tool doubled, flickered as though two energies discorded. The video paused. Jack mouthed *what* but didn’t ask. Quinn didn’t stop pulling back the bag. “The others left a token to shut the window. Hargrove had his right in front of him, but he took his off before the seller agreed to the payment.” Jack leaned in. “Where’d he put it?” “Gone. And the belt’s gone. Both could mean something, but together they’re a call to action. Hargrove knew where the next window would open. He booked it here.” She turned to the DS. “You haven’t cleared a hundred people yet, have you?” Jack shook her head. “You think it’s still here?” The Compass needle stilled. Then, a slow circle. The tarp. The torn skin. The body’s postural rigidity suggested a clenched grasp—on what? Quinn rifled through the satchel at her hip again, found a steel probe she’d smuggled in under a mundane mantel. She tilted the device toward the corpse’s hand. Jack arched an eyebrow. “Are you—” Quinn jammed the rod into the T-shaped crevice between the victim’s fingers. The needle screamed again, a high wail like an iron reaper. Jack flinched, but the detective didn’t budge. The probe moved in the hand over the catchphrase—the one who’d died not once but thrice. Split-second, the satchel material tore. A hinge of bone flicked outward. Jack grabbed at it, but Quinn caught the flake midair. The token was warm. Checking this against her pad, its terne gleamed an unfamiliar shade, albeit similar to the one from her partner’s final pocket. “Not another station,” Quinn said. “The VX had modified tokens for passing through scaffolding. This one’s for something older. Underground older.” Lightning scarred the Compass etchings. Quinn turned it to face the DS. Jack blinked. “It’s supposed to point to rifts. But it’s not pointing now.” “Exactly.” Quinn sheathed the tool and watched its arrested reflection on the laptop screen. “Hargrove found a back way into Old London. A tunnel the Metropolitan Police gave up on years ago. He came here with the token, expecting to sell it, but—” The satchel catwailed. Quinn tore it off her hip, recognized the speed and sinew of a Shroudbeast in its tens. They were huge, their scales bioluminescent and shunted with veins from forgotten catacombs. Hargrove must have glimpsed one. But where to? The Compass shuddered to life, needle nosed southwest. Jack reached for her radio. “We need to shut this down. Secure the area for the Hazmat crew—” Quinn blocked her. “They sweep openings. Not trace. That token’s residue isn’t from this window. It’s from their path. A trail from Clink Road.” The DS pointed to the scattered tarp. “Why not now, then? Why would it shut for good after he—” “After they clued in.” Quinn turned the token in her palm. “Sellers here know value. Hargrove’s miscalculated. Said something to someone. They chased him through the right tunnel.” Jack exhaled. “Who?” Quinn looked at her, wondering which line would be more offensive. “Either you’ve been here so long you know the old names, or you won’t believe me when I say *old family*.” The DS rolled her eyes. “You mean like the Royal Society of Occult—” Quinn lifted the Compass, let its shadow blur on the pavement. “Three stations from here. Three decades from now. They don’t need you. They want him.” Jack reached for a form but stopped herself. “So,” she finally said. “It’s a modern day, ancient murder.” Quinn looked past her back. The Compass had gone still again. A bead of flicker from the recording—there. Transformation. The seller’s face melting from visible to vermilion as Hargrove said something. The DS twisted to follow the motion, but Quinn was already at the archive map. She flexed it flat and traced the lost station with her boot. “I’ve seen this before.” She yanked out a cloth pouch from the satchel, turned the token so the DS saw the carved date. “He painted the same discrepancy on the map. Three weeks apart, with a pull date.” Jack stared. “Hal—” “This isn’t a ritual. It’s a clock. Someone’s correcting a timeline. You want your Hazmat team here, go ahead. But before they clean away the traces, I need to follow the token to midnight. At Clink Road next full moon.” Jack opened her mouth. Closed it. Their superior stepped out from the breach, his face whiter than the map’s northern edge. Quinn raised her chin, head at military angle. “The Crime Scene Unit’s on its way, Quinn. Sort it quickly.” He turned and left. Quinn grabbed the Compass by its closure, fastened it to the satchel like a wound. Jack’s hand brushed hers. “I’m with you on the Hill Street Blues show about this,” she said. “But I still think it’s a video game cult who got in early.” Quinn stood. “Then maybe the next victim’s on the postal list.” She slipped the digital token into her pocket. Jack shifted stiffly behind her as she exited. The miasma of the Market thinned at contact with regular air, but the Compass remained aloof in its enclosure. Eva would have seen it, naturally. Oddly, so would Jameson. Their old arguments would clog the room again. Quinn stepped toward the stairs, her mind already rewinding the seller’s video. Something about the way the token had shimmered at the end. The creature’s eyes—green, like a number of people in this city. The Compass buzzed as she climbed. She paused, fingers tight on the railing. The needle’s pivot was slow, deliberate. Not pointing toward the Market now but the outside world. More importantly, not pointing away at all. Her partner’s report had gone missing. Quinn wanted it found. A hand holding the token, a face with features less fluid than DS Morris’s, but all the same played into the Scheme. Scheme had no spaces in it. Jack joined her on the top stair. “You really think it was a creature?” Quinn looked at her. Then down. The breach twitched closed. “If it isn’t a creature when you run up, you’ll recognize it too late.” The DS muttered a curse. Quinn left her there, balancing between world and relic. The Compass still buzzed. She’d need to return. But for now, it was alive in her pocket. And she’d take whatever window showed her how to stop another rift.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences55
tagDensity0.291
leniency0.582
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.49% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2217
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
68.43% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2217
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"shimmered"
count2
1
word"vibrated"
count1
2
word"etching"
count1
3
word"trembled"
count1
4
word"pulsed"
count1
5
word"anticipation"
count1
6
word"scanned"
count1
7
word"unspoken"
count1
8
word"flickered"
count1
9
word"eyebrow"
count1
10
word"flicked"
count1
11
word"flicker"
count1
12
word"traced"
count1
highlights
0"shimmered"
1"vibrated"
2"etching"
3"trembled"
4"pulsed"
5"anticipation"
6"scanned"
7"unspoken"
8"flickered"
9"eyebrow"
10"flicked"
11"flicker"
12"traced"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences188
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences188
filterMatches
0"watch’s"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences225
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords13
totalWords2211
ratio0.006
matches
0"Thorne & Ash, Dismantle the World, 5/23"
1"Jabberwock Ink Co"
2"what"
3"old family"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions22
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions112
wordCount1647
uniqueNames26
maxNameDensity2.61
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn43
Veil1
Market3
Mel1
Brightwell3
Thomas1
Hargrove5
Compass13
Tube2
Morris3
Comms1
Head1
Jack21
Canary1
Wharf1
Ash1
Dismantle1
World1
Ink1
Cairo1
Tunnels1
Lightning1
Shroudbeast1
Jameson1
Scheme2
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Market"
3"Mel"
4"Brightwell"
5"Thomas"
6"Hargrove"
7"Compass"
8"Morris"
9"Head"
10"Jack"
11"Ink"
12"Lightning"
13"Jameson"
places
0"Canary"
1"Ash"
2"World"
3"Cairo"
globalScore0.195
windowScore0
88.02% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences121
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"tasted like dry earth"
1"felt like a blade to the throat"
2"as though recoiling"
19.09% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords1.809
wordCount2211
matches
0"Not missing, not alert, but a slow coil of anticipation"
1"not alert, but a slow coil of anticipation"
2"not once but thrice"
3"Not pointing toward the Market now but the outside world"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences225
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs63
mean35.1
std19.62
cv0.559
sampleLengths
079
157
254
350
430
519
666
710
833
939
1010
1165
1228
1345
1476
1521
1678
1769
1820
1960
2012
2140
2211
2359
2434
252
2634
2759
2845
297
3042
319
3250
336
3446
3546
3621
3725
3843
3941
4026
4124
4219
4328
443
4532
4613
4726
4818
4958
99.66% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences188
matches
0"been seven"
1"been touched"
2"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs296
matches(empty)
66.67% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences225
ratio0.027
matches
0"Her mission registered—securing evidence of the unnatural—while her mouth tasted like dry earth."
1"The signature line read *Jabberwock Ink Co*—an alchemical firm arrested four months earlier for smuggling marrow."
2"The body’s postural rigidity suggested a clenched grasp—on what?"
3"The probe moved in the hand over the catchphrase—the one who’d died not once but thrice."
4"A bead of flicker from the recording—there."
5"The creature’s eyes—green, like a number of people in this city."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1658
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount37
adverbRatio0.022316043425814235
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.0048250904704463205
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences225
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences225
mean9.83
std6.54
cv0.666
sampleLengths
012
114
27
325
415
56
614
717
810
916
104
1118
1212
1312
148
155
164
1713
185
193
203
2117
2211
236
2411
252
268
2711
283
2918
3015
319
328
3313
347
353
3614
374
3815
3919
405
415
4210
433
443
454
469
4719
4813
498
47.56% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.30666666666666664
totalSentences225
uniqueOpeners69
97.47% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences171
matches
0"Just the man and his"
1"Then the light shifted black,"
2"Then, a slow circle."
3"Oddly, so would Jameson."
4"More importantly, not pointing away"
ratio0.029
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences171
matches
0"His smartphone still vibrated with"
1"She crouched, prodding the wound"
2"She rotated her hand."
3"Her gaze swept the scene."
4"She’d rigged it to her"
5"She grabbed the satchel at"
6"She angled the reflection toward"
7"She stepped over the tape"
8"Her thumb pressed the gap."
9"Her mission registered—securing evidence of"
10"She tilted her own screen,"
11"They’d both nearly gotten eaten"
12"She aimed the satchel at"
13"She pressed a finger into"
14"She’d learned to wait for"
15"Her mind replayed the scene"
16"His report had gone missing."
17"She shifted back to the"
18"Her nose brushed a fallen"
19"She turned to the DS"
ratio0.187
3.86% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount156
totalSentences171
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn exhaled slow"
1"The Veil Market sprawled around"
2"Oil lamps hissed in their"
3"Stalls collapsed in uneven lines,"
4"A tattered map on the"
5"Quinn’s boot crunched over something"
6"The body lay on a"
7"DS Mel Brightwell crouched nearby,"
8"Quinn narrowed her eyes."
9"The man’s name was Thomas"
10"His smartphone still vibrated with"
11"She crouched, prodding the wound"
12"A faint copper stank clung"
13"She rotated her hand."
14"The wound’s edges were smooth"
15"Her gaze swept the scene."
16"The Compass sat in her"
17"She’d rigged it to her"
18"Shade artisans didn’t craft failure,"
19"the DS muttered"
ratio0.912
29.24% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences171
matches
0"Now the woman’s stubbornness felt"
ratio0.006
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences71
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Stalls collapsed in uneven lines, the mudded sheets littered with broken knickknacks: jars of a liquid that shimmered black and caught the light like teeth."
1"The man’s name was Thomas Hargrove, his employer a gaming company that hadn’t filed taxes in a decade."
2"The seller wore a mask of yak and brass coat, the set pieces mutating at intervals: skin sizzling to ash between breaths, the compass shaking as though recoilin…"
93.75% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Brightwell said, her boots scuffing"
95.45% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"the DS muttered (mutter)"
1"she snapped (snap)"
2"Jack mumbled (mumble)"
dialogueSentences55
tagDensity0.164
leniency0.327
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.109
83.4891%