Run: 2026-03-25-01KMJ8S64A4MX48QF610QMQ2FJ

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Duration:
49.4s
Cost:
$0.001323
Provider:
Novita

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The trees of Richmond Park thinned behind them as Rory stepped forward, her boots sinking slightly into dew-heavy moss that hadn’t been there a moment ago. One second, she was navigating the familiar gravel path near Sheen, the next—a breath, a blink—and the world had softened at the edges. The air tasted different: sweeter, older. Like crushed petals and cold iron beneath a spring moon. “Did we just…?” Eva started, voice hushed, her fingers tightening around Rory’s wrist. Rory didn’t answer. Her scar—the crescent on her left wrist—tingled, warm and insistent. The Heartstone Pendant at her throat pulsed in response, a slow, rhythmic warmth that matched the beat of her pulse. Amber light spilled through the canopy above, though the sky wasn't amber—hadn’t been all day. The sun, if it existed here, sat low and heavy, casting long, liquid shadows that didn't behave like natural ones. Nyx stepped beside her, their body a ripple in the air, solidifying slowly into the tall, shadowed form Rory had come to recognize. Their violet eyes glowed faintly, adjusting. “We’re past the Veil,” they whispered, the sound like wind through hollow reeds. “This isn't just the park.” Ahead, six ancient oaks stood in a perfect circle, bark blackened with age, roots fused together like clasped hands. Between them, stone pillars rose from the earth, covered in vines that shimmered with silver pollen. At the center of the ring, the air wavered—like heat off pavement, but cold, and shimmering with impossible colors. Rory touched the Fae-Forged Blade at her belt. It was colder than usual. Eva reached for the nearest pillar. “Wait,” Nyx murmured, but it was too late. The vine wound around Eva’s wrist like a serpent testing its prey. She gasped, pulling back, but the silver pollen flared—and then settled. The vine released her. Eva stared at her skin. “I… I don’t feel anything,” she whispered. “Just—peace. Like I was expected.” Rory exhaled. Maybe they were. They stepped into the circle. The world *shifted*. Not violently. No crack of thunder, no blinding light. Just a quiet realignment, as if the universe had sighed and said: *Ah. You’re here.* They stood in a grove. But not like any grove on Earth. Flowers bloomed in impossible arrangements—carnations the size of dinner plates unfurling in spirals, their centers filled with tiny, star-like pinpricks of light. Bluebells chimed when the breeze passed through them, their notes hanging in the air like frozen glass. The moss underfoot glowed faintly, a pale green pulse beneath their feet, as though the earth itself had a heartbeat. And there—half-hidden behind a curtain of willow-like branches dripping with silver leaves—stood a figure. She was tall, ageless, silver hair cascading like a waterfall down her back. Her feet hovered an inch above the moss. No prints. Rory remembered the stories: *She leaves no footprints when she walks.* Isolde turned. Her eyes—lavender, like frost on stone—settled first on Rory, then flicked to Nyx, then Eva, then back. “The keybearer,” she said, her voice layered—like wind, water, and distant bells. “And the Shadow who walks between. And the one with open eyes.” Her gaze rested on Eva. “You see more than you know.” Eva blinked. “I don’t—I didn’t mean to come here.” “You were carried on a current not of your making,” Isolde replied. “But you are here. That is what matters.” Rory stepped forward. “I felt the pendant pull us. Is this… your grove?” “This is a place between,” Isolde said, gliding forward without seeming to move. “A door that opens only when the heart is in search of truth.” Her eyes dropped to the Heartstone. “And that calls to what remains.” Rory touched it. “Who gave this to me?” “A ghost,” Isolde said simply. “A promise. A debt not yet paid.” Nyx shifted beside her. “This place… it’s thin. The Veil here is more like gauze.” Isolde inclined her head. “The winter solstice nears. The Veil weakens. Rifts open. And *they* begin to stir.” “The Wardens haven’t reported any breaches,” Rory said. “Not officially.” Isolde smiled, faint and sad. “The Wardens watch for tears. But not every passage requires a wound. Some are walked through like doors.” A silence fell. The flowers chimed again. Further in the grove, something moved—a flicker between trees. Rory’s hand went to the Fae blade. Isolde didn’t turn. “There are memories here. Old ones. The grove remembers those who have passed. Even those who should not.” Nyx stiffened. “Who?” Eva asked. “Someone from the fire,” Isolde said. “A name once known as Aldric.” Nyx didn’t move. But the shadows around them deepened, curling like ink in water. “That name was buried.” “And yet the grove speaks it,” Isolde said softly. “This place remembers every sorrow. Every ending.” Rory looked at Nyx. In the shifting light, they looked more fragile than usual—less shadow, more absence. “Is it true?” she asked. “Were you—?” “I was bound,” Nyx whispered. “In 1643. A summoning meant to open a gate. It failed. I did not die. I *unbecame*. Now I walk the spaces between. Held by regret. By unfinished things.” The Heartstone flared—warm, urgent. A path had appeared. It hadn’t been there before. Winding into the trees, lined with glowing mushrooms that pulsed in sync with the moss. Isolde stepped aside. “Some doors are meant to be opened,” she said. “But not all who wait behind them wish to be found.” Rory took the first step. The air changed. The sweetness faded. Now it was damp, tinged with something like old wine and scorched sugar. The amber light returned—but sharper, denser. The trees gave way. They stepped out of the grove. And into a vineyard. Vast rows of twisting grapevines stretched into the distance, their clusters heavy and deep purple. Beyond, terraced gardens of citrus and figs, orchards of trees bearing fruit no Earth orchard could produce—pomegranates split open to reveal tiny pulsing flames inside, peaches with skins like polished opals. The sky was amber. Always amber. The sun hung, motionless. “This isn’t Earth,” Eva breathed. “No,” Rory said, dread pooling in her stomach. “This is Hel.” “Dymas,” Nyx corrected, voice tight. “The realm of Gluttony.” “And the Heartstone brought us *here*?” “It’s not just a compass,” Nyx said. “It’s a key. Or a beacon.” Ahead, stone steps rose to a terrace where long tables had been set. Crystal goblets, silver platters piled with food that steamed with its own light. Roasted meat basted in gold-leaf sauce. Fruits that glistened like gemstones. The scent was overwhelming—rich, intoxicating, and beneath it, just slightly, the tang of something *alive* still. And at the end of the hall, a figure slumped at the head of the table. Human-looking. Male. Dressed in stained robes the color of dried blood. His face was gaunt, hollowed by hunger he could never satisfy. He looked up. His eyes were black. Not dark—*black*, like pits. “Ah,” he said, voice a croak. “Fresh meat.” Nyx stepped in front of Rory and Eva. “Belphegor.” The prince of Gluttony smiled, slow, revealing teeth too sharp, too numerous. “A Shade. How long has it been since one of your kind wandered into a feast?” “We’re not here to stay,” Nyx said, voice like gravel. “We’re leaving.” Belphegor chuckled. “Everyone says that.” His gaze slid to Rory. To the pendant. “But the Heartstone doesn’t lie. It brings only those who are *called*.” Rory’s fingers closed around the crimson gem. It was burning now. Then she felt it—the tug. Not in her chest. In her *memory*. A kitchen. A red coat burning on the stove. A scream. Her own. And a voice, not heard but *remembered*: *You are needed. You are chosen.* The prince leaned forward. “You’ve already tasted it, haven’t you? The hunger. Not for food. For more. For power. For justice. For revenge.” Rory stepped back. “We’re leaving.” She turned, grabbing Eva’s hand, Nyx at her side. The vineyard shimmered. And with a sound like glass breaking, the world folded. They were back in the grove. Isolde stood where she had, watching. “The first door opens,” she said, “by accident. The second, by choice. But the third… the third requires sacrifice.” Rory looked down at the Heartstone. It no longer glowed. But her scar still burned. And deep in the dark, something remembered her name.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags25
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Isolde said simply [simply]"
1"Isolde said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.446
leniency0.893
rawRatio0.08
effectiveRatio0.071
85.69% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1398
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"slowly"
2"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
28.47% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1398
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"navigating"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count1
2
word"pulsed"
count2
3
word"rhythmic"
count1
4
word"warmth"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count2
6
word"perfect"
count1
7
word"shimmered"
count2
8
word"wavered"
count1
9
word"cascading"
count1
10
word"flicked"
count1
11
word"silence"
count1
12
word"flicker"
count1
13
word"tinged"
count1
14
word"stomach"
count1
15
word"beacon"
count1
16
word"crystal"
count1
highlights
0"navigating"
1"familiar"
2"pulsed"
3"rhythmic"
4"warmth"
5"pulse"
6"perfect"
7"shimmered"
8"wavered"
9"cascading"
10"flicked"
11"silence"
12"flicker"
13"tinged"
14"stomach"
15"beacon"
16"crystal"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences139
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences139
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences170
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans12
markdownWords25
totalWords1380
ratio0.018
matches
0"shifted"
1"Ah. You’re here."
2"She leaves no footprints when she walks."
3"they"
4"unbecame"
5"here"
6"alive"
7"black"
8"called"
9"memory"
10"remembered"
11"You are needed. You are chosen."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions22
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions73
wordCount1003
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity1.99
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Isolde"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Rory20
Sheen1
Heartstone4
Pendant1
Ahead2
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Eva11
Earth2
Isolde11
Nyx13
Fae2
Gluttony1
Belphegor1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Heartstone"
2"Eva"
3"Isolde"
4"Nyx"
5"Gluttony"
6"Belphegor"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Sheen"
3"Pendant"
4"Fae"
globalScore0.503
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences63
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"something like old wine and scorched sugar"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.725
wordCount1380
matches
0"not heard but *remembered*: *You are needed"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences170
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs82
mean16.83
std15.13
cv0.899
sampleLengths
065
113
268
347
454
513
614
744
85
95
103
1124
125
137
1459
1514
1634
172
1817
1935
209
2120
2213
2338
248
2512
2615
2718
2810
2923
3023
3121
322
333
3412
3518
3616
3724
3834
394
404
415
4215
4323
445
4529
466
474
4846
4910
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences139
matches
0"are chosen"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs189
matches
0"was navigating"
1"was burning"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount22
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences170
ratio0.1
matches
0"One second, she was navigating the familiar gravel path near Sheen, the next—a breath, a blink—and the world had softened at the edges."
1"Her scar—the crescent on her left wrist—tingled, warm and insistent."
2"Amber light spilled through the canopy above, though the sky wasn't amber—hadn’t been all day."
3"At the center of the ring, the air wavered—like heat off pavement, but cold, and shimmering with impossible colors."
4"She gasped, pulling back, but the silver pollen flared—and then settled."
5"Flowers bloomed in impossible arrangements—carnations the size of dinner plates unfurling in spirals, their centers filled with tiny, star-like pinpricks of light."
6"And there—half-hidden behind a curtain of willow-like branches dripping with silver leaves—stood a figure."
7"Her eyes—lavender, like frost on stone—settled first on Rory, then flicked to Nyx, then Eva, then back."
8"“The keybearer,” she said, her voice layered—like wind, water, and distant bells."
9"Further in the grove, something moved—a flicker between trees."
10"In the shifting light, they looked more fragile than usual—less shadow, more absence."
11"The Heartstone flared—warm, urgent."
12"The amber light returned—but sharper, denser."
13"Beyond, terraced gardens of citrus and figs, orchards of trees bearing fruit no Earth orchard could produce—pomegranates split open to reveal tiny pulsing flames inside, peaches with skins like polished opals."
14"The scent was overwhelming—rich, intoxicating, and beneath it, just slightly, the tang of something *alive* still."
15"Not dark—*black*, like pits."
16"Then she felt it—the tug."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1025
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"tall, ageless, silver hair"
adverbCount36
adverbRatio0.0351219512195122
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.007804878048780488
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences170
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences170
mean8.12
std5.97
cv0.735
sampleLengths
026
123
26
310
413
53
610
720
815
920
1023
116
1213
135
1419
1516
1619
178
185
196
208
2112
2211
234
245
257
265
272
283
295
303
312
327
3313
342
355
367
3722
3817
3920
4014
4113
428
432
4411
452
4617
4712
4817
496
54.12% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.35294117647058826
totalSentences170
uniqueOpeners60
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences114
matches
0"Maybe they were."
1"Just a quiet realignment, as"
2"Further in the grove, something"
3"Then she felt it—the tug."
ratio0.035
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences114
matches
0"Her scar—the crescent on her"
1"Their violet eyes glowed faintly,"
2"they whispered, the sound like"
3"It was colder than usual."
4"She gasped, pulling back, but"
5"They stepped into the circle."
6"They stood in a grove."
7"She was tall, ageless, silver"
8"Her feet hovered an inch"
9"Her eyes—lavender, like frost on"
10"she said, her voice layered—like"
11"Her gaze rested on Eva"
12"Her eyes dropped to the"
13"It hadn’t been there before."
14"They stepped out of the"
15"His face was gaunt, hollowed"
16"He looked up."
17"His eyes were black."
18"he said, voice a croak"
19"His gaze slid to Rory"
ratio0.219
91.58% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount84
totalSentences114
matches
0"The trees of Richmond Park"
1"One second, she was navigating"
2"The air tasted different: sweeter,"
3"Eva started, voice hushed, her"
4"Rory didn’t answer."
5"Her scar—the crescent on her"
6"The Heartstone Pendant at her"
7"Amber light spilled through the"
8"The sun, if it existed"
9"Nyx stepped beside her, their"
10"Their violet eyes glowed faintly,"
11"they whispered, the sound like"
12"Rory touched the Fae-Forged Blade"
13"It was colder than usual."
14"Eva reached for the nearest"
15"Nyx murmured, but it was"
16"The vine wound around Eva’s"
17"She gasped, pulling back, but"
18"The vine released her."
19"Eva stared at her skin."
ratio0.737
87.72% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences114
matches
0"Now it was damp, tinged"
1"To the pendant."
ratio0.018
23.81% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences36
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"The trees of Richmond Park thinned behind them as Rory stepped forward, her boots sinking slightly into dew-heavy moss that hadn’t been there a moment ago."
1"The Heartstone Pendant at her throat pulsed in response, a slow, rhythmic warmth that matched the beat of her pulse."
2"The sun, if it existed here, sat low and heavy, casting long, liquid shadows that didn't behave like natural ones."
3"Between them, stone pillars rose from the earth, covered in vines that shimmered with silver pollen."
4"The moss underfoot glowed faintly, a pale green pulse beneath their feet, as though the earth itself had a heartbeat."
5"Crystal goblets, silver platters piled with food that steamed with its own light."
65.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags25
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Eva started, voice hushed, her fingers tightening around Rory’s wrist"
1"Rory said, dread pooling in her stomach"
2"Nyx corrected, voice tight"
42.86% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags21
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"they whispered (whisper)"
1"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
2"she whispered (whisper)"
3"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
4"Eva breathed (breathe)"
5"Nyx corrected (correct)"
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.375
leniency0.75
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.214
82.4415%