Run: 2026-03-25-01KMJ8XAMPSG7MZRHWEWTD8VNH

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Duration:
1m 29s
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$0.001349
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SiliconFlow

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The knife clattered into the sink, still slick with soy sauce and ginger. Rory wiped her hands on her apron, the fluorescent light above the kitchen counter flickering once, twice, then holding. She peeled off the stained fabric, folded it with ritual precision, and hung it on the hook behind the door. Outside, Soho was thick with the kind of damp that climbed into your bones. She pulled her leather jacket tighter and cut through the alley behind Golden Empress, boots splashing through shallow puddles pooled between cracked cobbles. The neon from The Raven’s Nest bled through the fog—green, steady, a beacon in the grime. She pushed the door open. Warm air, smoke, the low hum of jazz. The usual crowd—lifelong regulars nursing pints, a couple whispering in the corner booth, a tourist who clearly thought this was just another dive bar. It wasn’t. The Raven’s Nest didn’t serve tourists. Silas stood behind the bar, polishing a glass with the same quiet focus he once used to dismantle encrypted radios in safe houses across Eastern Europe. He didn’t look up. Rory slid onto her usual stool. “Yu-Fei kept me late. Sauce boiler exploded.” “Again?” His voice was low, gravel wrapped in velvet. “Tell him to replace it before he burns the building down.” “He says it’s sentimental.” “Everything with him is sentimental. That’s why he still uses glass bottles for takeaway.” She smiled, but it didn’t reach her eyes. “You sound like my dad.” Silas finally looked at her. Not the full inspection, not tonight—but the quick sweep of a man who still noticed pulse points, stance shifts, micro-tremors in the breath. “You’re holding tension in your shoulders.” “I’m fine.” “No, you’re not.” She opened her mouth to argue, then stopped. Instead, she reached into her jacket pocket and placed an envelope on the bar. Plain white. No stamp. No name. “Came by the flat this afternoon. Slip under the door.” Silas set the glass down. Didn’t touch the envelope. Waited. Rory exhaled. “It’s addressed to me. Handwritten. But the postmark’s from Dublin.” Now he picked it up, turned it between his fingers. “Dublin.” “Father’s last known address.” “And?” “I haven’t opened it.” His fingers stilled. “That’s unlike you.” Her nails tapped once against the bar. Short, practical. Not like the girl who used to wear glitter on her eyelids and talk about running for Parliament. “It feels like a trap.” “Or a reckoning.” She looked away. At the old map of Prague behind the shelf. The one with red pins still marking embassy locations, safe houses, the bridge where a sniper missed his shot. Before she could speak, the door opened again. A woman stepped in. Tall. Sharp-shouldered. Hair dyed ash blonde, pulled back so tight her forehead looked stretched. She wore a tailored coat the colour of dried blood, and her boots clicked like clockwork on the wooden floor. Rory froze. The woman scanned the room. Her eyes—still bright blue, still unnervingly direct—landed on Rory. Stopped. No smile. No gasp. Just stillness. Then she walked over. “Hello, Rory.” Her voice was different. Flatter. Less Welsh lilt, more steelcore. Rory didn’t move. “You’re late.” “I’ve been in Reykjavik. Negotiating mining rights.” “You?” Rory tilted her head. “Since when do you care about mining?” “Since I stopped caring about justice.” A beat. The jazz record changed. Something slower. Cello-heavy. Silas moved, silent, to the other end of the bar. Left them space. Rory studied the woman. The chipped front tooth she never had. The scar now slicing through her right eyebrow. The way she stood—balanced on the balls of her feet, like she expected a fight. “You look like someone tried to erase you,” Rory said. “And you look like you’re still running.” “I left that life behind.” “Did you?” The woman—Eva—leaned in. “Or did you just find a quieter corner to hide in?” Rory’s hand curled around the edge of the bar. “I’m not hiding.” “You’re working delivery for a Chinese takeaway. You live above a bar no one knows is a spy den. You’re twenty-five and you haven’t opened a letter from your father in ten days.” “How do you—” “I know things.” Eva smiled. It didn’t touch her eyes. “I know you still keep that photo of us on Hampstead Heath in your notebook. I know you haven’t set foot in Cardiff since you left. I know you haven’t spoken to your mother since the trial.” Rory stood. “You don’t get to stand here and judge me.” “I’m not judging. I’m stating facts.” “You used to cry at cat rescue videos.” “And you used to believe the system could be fixed.” The silence that followed was thick enough to strangle with. Rory dropped back onto the stool. “Why are you here?” Eva reached into her coat. Pulled out a slim silver device—no bigger than a USB drive. Placed it on the bar. “It’s a decryption key. Belongs to a data drop in Oslo. Contains names. Locations. Black sites. The kind of thing that gets people killed.” “You’re handing it over?” “I’m retiring.” Rory laughed, short and sharp. “You don’t retire from this.” “Some do.” “Not you. You used to say you’d burn the whole damn machine down before you walked away.” Eva’s fingers brushed the scar on her eyebrow. “People change.” “No. People break.” Eva didn’t flinch. “Your name’s on the list.” Rory’s breath caught. “Not your real one. The alias. Laila. From when we were in Belfast.” “That was three years ago.” “They’ve been tracking you since.” Silas was back. Quiet. But his hand rested just above the hidden drawer beneath the bar. Rory looked at the silver key. Then at Eva. “Why tell me now?” “Because someone’s coming.” “For me?” “For anyone who touches that.” Eva nodded at the key. “You open it, you’re marked. You ignore it, thousands stay buried.” Rory stared at her oldest friend. The girl who’d held her hair back when she vomited from Evan’s fists. The one who’d forged passports at sixteen. The one who once said, *If the world’s on fire, better to be the arsonist than the ash.* And now here she was. Polished. Empty. Like a skeleton in a designer coat. “You used to have a soul,” Rory said. Eva turned. Took a step back. Then paused. “I sold it,” she said. “For silence.” She walked out. The green neon pulsed once. Rory picked up the key. Cold. Heavy. Silas finally spoke. “You know what’s in it.” She didn’t answer. But her thumb traced the edges. Smooth. Precise. The kind of machine that doesn’t ask for heroes. It just finds them.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags8
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.133
leniency0.267
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1113
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
46.09% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1113
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"beacon"
count1
1
word"velvet"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count1
3
word"tension"
count1
4
word"scanned"
count1
5
word"lilt"
count1
6
word"eyebrow"
count2
7
word"silence"
count2
8
word"pulsed"
count1
9
word"traced"
count1
highlights
0"beacon"
1"velvet"
2"pulse"
3"tension"
4"scanned"
5"lilt"
6"eyebrow"
7"silence"
8"pulsed"
9"traced"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences110
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences110
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences162
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords13
totalWords1104
ratio0.012
matches
0"If the world’s on fire, better to be the arsonist than the ash."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions45
wordCount708
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity2.54
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity6
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Golden1
Empress1
Raven2
Nest2
Eastern1
Europe1
Parliament1
Prague1
Rory18
Welsh1
Eva8
Evan1
Silas6
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Rory"
3"Eva"
4"Evan"
5"Silas"
places
0"Soho"
1"Eastern"
2"Europe"
3"Prague"
globalScore0.229
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences43
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1104
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences162
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs87
mean12.69
std12.12
cv0.955
sampleLengths
052
153
245
330
413
520
64
714
813
928
106
112
123
1328
1410
1510
1612
1711
184
191
204
216
2232
233
2431
258
2638
272
2814
291
306
314
322
3310
345
357
3612
376
389
3913
4034
4110
427
435
4416
4512
4633
473
4847
4911
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences110
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs124
matches(empty)
19.40% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount9
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences162
ratio0.043
matches
0"The neon from The Raven’s Nest bled through the fog—green, steady, a beacon in the grime."
1"The usual crowd—lifelong regulars nursing pints, a couple whispering in the corner booth, a tourist who clearly thought this was just another dive bar."
2"Not the full inspection, not tonight—but the quick sweep of a man who still noticed pulse points, stance shifts, micro-tremors in the breath."
3"Her eyes—still bright blue, still unnervingly direct—landed on Rory."
4"The way she stood—balanced on the balls of her feet, like she expected a fight."
5"“Did you?” The woman—Eva—leaned in."
6"Pulled out a slim silver device—no bigger than a USB drive."
92.41% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount719
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount35
adverbRatio0.048678720445062586
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.005563282336578581
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences162
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences162
mean6.81
std6.21
cv0.911
sampleLengths
013
119
220
314
423
516
65
78
824
92
106
1126
124
136
147
159
1611
174
1814
198
205
215
2223
236
242
253
268
2714
282
292
302
3110
325
334
341
352
3610
3710
381
394
401
414
423
433
447
452
4618
475
483
493
65.02% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.41975308641975306
totalSentences162
uniqueOpeners68
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences78
matches
0"Instead, she reached into her"
1"Then she walked over."
2"Then at Eva."
ratio0.038
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount17
totalSentences78
matches
0"She peeled off the stained"
1"She pulled her leather jacket"
2"She pushed the door open."
3"He didn’t look up."
4"His voice was low, gravel"
5"She smiled, but it didn’t"
6"She opened her mouth to"
7"His fingers stilled."
8"Her nails tapped once against"
9"She looked away."
10"She wore a tailored coat"
11"Her eyes—still bright blue, still"
12"Her voice was different."
13"It didn’t touch her eyes."
14"She walked out."
15"She didn’t answer."
16"It just finds them."
ratio0.218
81.79% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount59
totalSentences78
matches
0"The knife clattered into the"
1"Rory wiped her hands on"
2"She peeled off the stained"
3"She pulled her leather jacket"
4"The neon from The Raven’s"
5"She pushed the door open."
6"The usual crowd—lifelong regulars nursing"
7"The Raven’s Nest didn’t serve"
8"Silas stood behind the bar,"
9"He didn’t look up."
10"Rory slid onto her usual"
11"His voice was low, gravel"
12"She smiled, but it didn’t"
13"Silas finally looked at her."
14"She opened her mouth to"
15"Silas set the glass down."
16"His fingers stilled."
17"Her nails tapped once against"
18"She looked away."
19"The one with red pins"
ratio0.756
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences78
matches
0"Now he picked it up,"
1"Before she could speak, the"
ratio0.026
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences23
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"The girl who’d held her hair back when she vomited from Evan’s fists."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags8
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.05
leniency0.1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.1571%