Run: 2026-04-24-01KPZTZ8510TXKNZERYTSCXSXP

Run Details

Model:: Claude Opus 4.7
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 28.2s
Cost:: $0.063550
Provider:: Amazon Bedrock

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
60.78%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
70.59%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
100.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
83.33%	Name drop frequency	(details)
33.72%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
100.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
100.00%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
65.77%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
79.45%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
77.93%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
59.52%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
91.43%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
67.14%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
89.29%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
4.61%	Technical jargon density	(details)
100.00%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
0.00%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
79.4521%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

Rory stopped breathing the moment she stepped between the standing stones.

It wasn't fear — not exactly. It was the sudden, bone-deep understanding that the world she had left behind, the one with traffic and takeaway cartons and the dull grind of London rain, was only one layer of something far thicker. The oaks rose on either side of her like cathedral pillars, their bark silvered with moss, their trunks carved with spirals that seemed to shift when she wasn't looking directly at them. The air on this side of the threshold tasted different. Sweeter. Older. It sat on her tongue the way honey did, with a faint burr of something almost metallic beneath.

"Don't dawdle in the arch," came Nyx's whisper, threading past her ear like a draft. "The stones don't love hesitation."

She stepped through.

Behind her, Eva let out a soft, startled sound — half laugh, half gasp — and then there were three of them in the grove, and the November dusk of Richmond Park was gone as if someone had drawn a curtain across it. Gone the distant drone of the A307. Gone the smell of wet leaves and exhaust. In their place: a clearing that had no business existing in any city she had ever known.

Wildflowers ran riot in the long grass — bluebells in November, poppies in November, white anemones and foxgloves and things Rory couldn't name, their petals the wrong shade of pink, too deep, almost bruised. They glowed faintly, the way a phone screen glowed under a duvet. A brook muttered somewhere to her left, low and amused, as though the water were holding a private conversation she wasn't invited to.

"Is it always like this?" Eva whispered.

"No," said Nyx, resolving beside them — tall, humanoid, edges smoking gently where shadow met air. Their violet eyes had dimmed to a soft, steady glow, as if out of politeness. "It's usually worse."

Rory snorted. It came out weaker than she'd intended.

Her hand went, without her meaning it to, to the Heartstone at her throat. The pendant hung cool tonight, no pulse, no warmth — which was reassuring. Whatever this place was, it wasn't Hel. The crimson gem caught a shaft of impossible light filtering through the canopy and answered it with a small, inner ember.

"This way," Nyx said.

They moved deeper.

The grass was higher than it had looked from the threshold, brushing Rory's knees, cool and dry despite the dew glittering on every blade. Her boots left prints. Eva's boots left prints. Where Nyx walked, the grass simply stopped existing for a moment and then remembered itself, undisturbed, behind them. Rory glanced back and felt something uncanny thrum in her chest — the trail of her own passage, so ordinary, looked suddenly vulgar in this place. Like graffiti.

"I don't think we're meant to be here," Eva murmured. She had her arms wrapped around herself, though it wasn't cold. "I mean — we *are*, Isolde invited us, I know. But I can feel the ground *watching*."

"That's because it is," Nyx said, without cruelty.

They passed beneath a tree whose leaves were all the colors of autumn at once — green at the stem, gold in the middle, red at the tips, and every leaf fell and rose again in a slow, reversed cascade, as though the tree were breathing. Rory watched one leaf drift up past her shoulder and reattach itself with a faint, audible *click*.

"Oh," she heard herself say. Just that. *Oh.*

She reached out, then stopped, her fingertips hovering an inch from the bark. The crescent scar on her wrist itched — an old, familiar tell — and she drew her hand back.

"Wise," Nyx murmured.

Further in, the light changed. There was no sun in the sky here, or no sky at all — only a high, pearl-gray luminescence, like standing inside a lit lantern of opal. The trees thinned, and then the brook she had been hearing swung into view, not a brook at all but a ribbon of something that *looked* like water and moved like mercury, silver-skinned and slow. Small, pale fish hung suspended in it, motionless, facing upstream.

Eva crouched at its edge, fascinated, her red hair falling forward. "Rory, look — they're not *swimming*. They're just — "

"Don't touch it," said a new voice, soft and musical and amused.

Isolde stood on the far bank.

She hadn't been there a breath ago. Rory was certain of it. Now the Seer stood with her silver hair pooling around her feet like a spill of moonlight, lavender eyes half-lidded, and she had left no path in the grass behind her. The wildflowers simply leaned toward her, as if she were the gravity that kept them upright.

"The stream remembers what it touches," Isolde said, "and forgets what it does not. You do not wish to be forgotten, child. Not yet."

Eva stood up very quickly.

Rory found herself bowing before she'd decided to, a small, uncertain inclination of her head. "Isolde."

"Aurora." The Seer's lips quirked. "You came. The Veil is thinning. You felt it pull." It wasn't a question.

"I felt *something*," Rory admitted.

"You will feel more." Isolde lifted a hand, and across the silver ribbon something shifted — a footbridge, or the ghost of one, woven of pale wood and hanging moss, that had certainly not been there before. "Come. There is a thing I must give you, and a thing I must not tell you, and an hour here is a question the outside world will answer however it likes." Her smile deepened, private and very old. "Best not to count the minutes."

Rory glanced at Eva. Eva, pale, nodded once.

Nyx flowed ahead of them across the bridge, a long, thin shadow, and the fish in the silver stream did not move, and somewhere in the canopy a bird that was not quite a bird sang three descending notes that sounded, to Rory's ear, unnervingly like her own name.

She stepped onto the bridge, and the grove closed gently around them, and Richmond Park, and London, and everything she had ever been sure of, felt suddenly very far away.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags	14
adverbTagCount	0
adverbTags	(empty)
dialogueSentences	21
tagDensity	0.667
leniency	1
rawRatio	0
effectiveRatio	0

60.78%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1020

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"gently"
count	2

adverb	"suddenly"
count	2

adverb	"very"
count	3

adverb	"quickly"
count	1

highlights

0	"gently"
1	"suddenly"
2	"very"
3	"quickly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

70.59%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1020

totalAiIsms

found

word	"whisper"
count	1

word	"resolving"
count	1

word	"pulse"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	1

word	"uncanny"
count	1

word	"familiar"
count	1

highlights

0	"whisper"
1	"resolving"
2	"pulse"
3	"warmth"
4	"uncanny"
5	"familiar"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	68
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	74
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	49
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans

markdownWords

totalWords

1036

ratio

0.007

matches

0	"are"
1	"watching"
2	"click"
3	"Oh."
4	"looked"
5	"swimming"
6	"something"

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	12
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

83.33%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

892

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.23

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

2.5

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

London	2
Nyx	7
Eva	8
November	3
Richmond	2
Park	2
Rory	11
Heartstone	1
Hel	1
Further	1
Isolde	3
Seer	2

persons

0	"Nyx"
1	"Eva"
2	"Rory"
3	"Isolde"
4	"Seer"

places

0	"London"
1	"November"
2	"Richmond"
3	"Park"
4	"Heartstone"

globalScore

0.883

windowScore

0.833

33.72%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"spirals that seemed to shift when she wasn't looking directly at them"
1	"not quite a bird sang three descending notes that sounded, to Rory's ear, unnervingly like her own name"

100.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

0.965

wordCount

1036

matches

0	"not a brook at all but a ribbon of something"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	74
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

31.39

std

28.79

0.917

sampleLengths

0	11
1	103
2	20
3	3
4	75
5	69
6	7
7	34
8	9
9	55
10	4
11	3
12	78
13	38
14	8
15	63
16	8
17	32
18	3
19	77
20	21
21	12
22	6
23	59
24	24
25	5
26	16
27	19
28	5
29	82
30	8
31	49
32	30

100.00%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"was gone"

65.77%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

149

matches

0	"wasn't looking"
1	"were holding"
2	"were breathing"

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.135

matches

0	"It wasn't fear — not exactly."
1	"Behind her, Eva let out a soft, startled sound — half laugh, half gasp — and then there were three of them in the grove, and the November dusk of Richmond Park was gone as if someone had drawn a curtain across it."
2	"Wildflowers ran riot in the long grass — bluebells in November, poppies in November, white anemones and foxgloves and things Rory couldn't name, their petals the wrong shade of pink, too deep, almost bruised."
3	"\"No,\" said Nyx, resolving beside them — tall, humanoid, edges smoking gently where shadow met air."
4	"The pendant hung cool tonight, no pulse, no warmth — which was reassuring."
5	"Rory glanced back and felt something uncanny thrum in her chest — the trail of her own passage, so ordinary, looked suddenly vulgar in this place."
6	"They passed beneath a tree whose leaves were all the colors of autumn at once — green at the stem, gold in the middle, red at the tips, and every leaf fell and rose again in a slow, reversed cascade, as though the tree were breathing."
7	"The crescent scar on her wrist itched — an old, familiar tell — and she drew her hand back."
8	"There was no sun in the sky here, or no sky at all — only a high, pearl-gray luminescence, like standing inside a lit lantern of opal."
9	"\"You will feel more.\" Isolde lifted a hand, and across the silver ribbon something shifted — a footbridge, or the ghost of one, woven of pale wood and hanging moss, that had certainly not been there before."

79.45%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount

884

adjectiveStacks

stackExamples

0	"sudden, bone-deep understanding"
1	"high, pearl-gray luminescence,"

adverbCount

adverbRatio

0.049773755656108594

lyAdverbCount

lyAdverbRatio

0.01583710407239819

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	74
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

std

11.86

0.847

sampleLengths

0	11
1	6
2	35
3	32
4	10
5	1
6	1
7	18
8	15
9	5
10	3
11	43
12	7
13	8
14	17
15	34
16	12
17	23
18	7
19	16
20	15
21	3
22	2
23	7
24	14
25	13
26	7
27	21
28	4
29	3
30	24
31	4
32	4
33	18
34	26
35	2
36	10
37	11
38	17
39	8
40	46
41	17
42	5
43	2
44	1
45	13
46	19
47	3
48	5
49	27

77.93%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	4
diversityRatio	0.5
totalSentences	74
uniqueOpeners	37

59.52%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Further in, the light changed."

ratio

0.018

91.43%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"It wasn't fear — not"
1	"It was the sudden, bone-deep"
2	"It sat on her tongue"
3	"She stepped through."
4	"They glowed faintly, the way"
5	"Their violet eyes had dimmed"
6	"It came out weaker than"
7	"Her hand went, without her"
8	"They moved deeper."
9	"Her boots left prints."
10	"She had her arms wrapped"
11	"They passed beneath a tree"
12	"she heard herself say"
13	"She reached out, then stopped,"
14	"She hadn't been there a"
15	"It wasn't a question"
16	"Her smile deepened, private and"
17	"She stepped onto the bridge,"

ratio

0.321

67.14%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Rory stopped breathing the moment"
1	"It wasn't fear — not"
2	"It was the sudden, bone-deep"
3	"The oaks rose on either"
4	"The air on this side"
5	"It sat on her tongue"
6	"She stepped through."
7	"Wildflowers ran riot in the"
8	"They glowed faintly, the way"
9	"A brook muttered somewhere to"
10	"Their violet eyes had dimmed"
11	"It came out weaker than"
12	"Her hand went, without her"
13	"The pendant hung cool tonight,"
14	"Whatever this place was, it"
15	"The crimson gem caught a"
16	"They moved deeper."
17	"The grass was higher than"
18	"Her boots left prints."
19	"Eva's boots left prints."

ratio

0.786

89.29%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Now the Seer stood with"

ratio

0.018

4.61%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"The oaks rose on either side of her like cathedral pillars, their bark silvered with moss, their trunks carved with spirals that seemed to shift when she wasn't…"
1	"Behind her, Eva let out a soft, startled sound — half laugh, half gasp — and then there were three of them in the grove, and the November dusk of Richmond Park …"
2	"A brook muttered somewhere to her left, low and amused, as though the water were holding a private conversation she wasn't invited to."
3	"They passed beneath a tree whose leaves were all the colors of autumn at once — green at the stem, gold in the middle, red at the tips, and every leaf fell and …"
4	"The trees thinned, and then the brook she had been hearing swung into view, not a brook at all but a ribbon of something that looked like water and moved like…"
5	"Nyx flowed ahead of them across the bridge, a long, thin shadow, and the fish in the silver stream did not move, and somewhere in the canopy a bird that was not…"

100.00%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags	14
uselessAdditionCount	0
matches	(empty)

0.00%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Eva whispered (whisper)"
1	"Eva murmured (murmur)"
2	"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
3	"Rory admitted (admit)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.429

leniency

0.857

rawRatio

0.444

effectiveRatio

0.381

79.4521%