Run: 2026-04-24-01KPZV3VC9R86PRYHF4CEW1EHB

Run Details

Model:: Claude Opus 4.7
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 29.3s
Cost:: $0.065675
Provider:: Amazon Bedrock

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
70.09%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
100.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
72.80%	Name drop frequency	(details)
0.00%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
3.92%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
95.65%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
94.00%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
73.91%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
61.73%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
61.85%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
92.59%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Technical jargon density	(details)
100.00%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
0.00%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
77.5517%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert fiction writer.

Always keep the following rules in mind:
- Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang.
- Write in active voice
- Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle.
- Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions.
- Convey events and story through dialogue.
- Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety.
- Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech
- Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself.
- Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action.
- Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe"

When writing text:
- NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely.
- NEVER end with foreshadowing.
- NEVER write further than what I prompt you with.
- AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions.
- STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.

User/Human

Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response:
<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Continue the story using the following instructions:
<instructions>
Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
</instructions>

Model response

Rory stepped between the oak stones and the world folded sideways.

One moment she'd been crunching through autumn leaves in Richmond Park with Eva's directions burning in her pocket; the next, the air thickened around her like honey and the October cold sloughed off her skin. The park noise — distant traffic, a dog barking, the rhythmic thud of a jogger — cut off mid-beat, as though someone had shut a heavy door behind her.

"Bloody hell." Eva's voice drifted from somewhere to her left, muffled and strange. "Rory, wait for me. I can't see the—"

Then Eva was through, stumbling into her, and Nyx slipped between the stones last, their shadow-form rippling as it crossed the threshold. For an instant Nyx became almost opaque, as solid as Rory had ever seen them, before settling back into the familiar silhouette of living dusk.

"The boundary thins us," Nyx murmured, the whisper-wind voice tugging at the edges of Rory's hearing. "And it thickens me. Curious."

Rory barely heard them. She was staring.

The grove sprawled before her in colours that didn't exist in Cardiff, didn't exist in London, didn't exist, she suspected, anywhere a normal person had walked. Wildflowers spilled across the clearing in drifts — blue ones that pulsed like slow heartbeats, white ones with petals thin as spun glass, crimson bells that chimed, actually chimed, when the wind touched them. The grass underfoot was silvered at the tips, as if every blade had been dipped in moonlight, though the sky overhead was a soft midday violet shot through with gold.

"The sky's wrong," Eva breathed. She tipped her head back, red curls falling. "Rory. The sky's wrong."

"I know."

"No, but — there's two suns. There's two suns, Rory."

There weren't, exactly. There was one sun, pale and enormous, and then a smaller companion — a moon, maybe, or something pretending to be one — hanging beside it at a distance that made Rory's eyes ache when she tried to measure it. She looked away fast.

"Don't stare at the sky too long," Nyx said. "It stares back."

"Fantastic," Eva muttered. "Brilliant. Love that for us."

They moved forward together, Rory keeping Eva's elbow in her palm. Her boots pressed silver grass that sprang back without creasing. She glanced behind her and found her own footprints already fading, the grass straightening as if she'd never passed. Nyx left nothing at all. Eva's trainers left faint bruises of darker green that lingered a heartbeat longer before vanishing.

The Heartstone pendant lay cold against her sternum. That was the first strange thing — cold. It had warmed against her skin every day for three weeks, a steady small furnace. Here, it felt like a pebble pulled from a stream.

"It's quiet," Rory said.

"It's not quiet," Nyx answered. "Listen."

She listened.

Beneath the bell-chime of the red flowers there was something else — a low, continuous note, deep as a cello's bottom string, threading up from the earth. It wasn't sound exactly. It was more like the feeling of sound, a vibration in her teeth and the soles of her feet. When she held her breath, she could almost hear words in it. Almost.

"Don't try to understand it," Nyx warned. "That song is older than language. Mortal minds fray against it."

"Reassuring," Eva said. "You're a joy, you know that?"

They pressed deeper. The clearing, which had looked small from the stones, kept unfolding. Each step revealed another curve of meadow, another copse of pale-barked trees whose leaves shivered without any wind to move them. Rory spotted a stream that ran uphill in a lazy silver curl and chose, firmly, not to comment on it. Eva saw it too and made a small strangled sound, but kept walking.

A butterfly the size of Rory's hand drifted past her face. Its wings were made of what looked like stained glass — actual stained glass, leaded panes and all — and when it flapped, it made a faint musical ringing. It landed on Eva's shoulder, considered her, and took off again in a spiral.

"I think it liked me," Eva whispered.

"I think it was deciding whether to eat you," Nyx said.

"Oh, piss off."

Rory laughed, and the sound carried wrong — it bounced back to her from the trees a half-second late, as though the grove had to think about whether to return it. She went quiet after that.

The grove tilted, the land sloping down toward a hollow ringed by white birches. Something deeper in her chest than the pendant started to hum. Not warning. Recognition, maybe. As if she'd been here before in a dream she hadn't bothered remembering.

"Nyx." She stopped. "Time. How long have we been walking?"

Nyx's violet eyes flickered. "Hard to say. Here, a minute may be an hour, or an hour a minute. The Veil is thin and time runs like spilled wine."

"Helpful."

"I am being helpful. That is the answer."

Eva wrapped her arms around herself. Her breath didn't fog, though the air felt neither warm nor cold — it felt like the temperature of skin, of bathwater exactly the temperature of blood. "Rory, I don't — I'm not scared exactly, but something in here doesn't want us. You feel that?"

Rory did. Under the wonder, beneath the ache of beauty that had crept up on her without permission, was a low pressure against her sternum. The grove was watching them. Not hostile. Not welcoming. Measuring.

"We've been invited," she reminded Eva. Reminded herself. "The seer said to come."

"Invited isn't the same as wanted."

Through the birches, movement. Not a figure — not yet — just a suggestion of one. A ripple of silver where the trees leaned together. The low note under the earth shifted, rose a half-step, and every bell-flower in the grove chimed at once.

Nyx's shadow rippled. "She knows we're here."

Rory's hand went to the hilt of the Fae blade at her hip — cold through her palm, colder than the air, steady as a held breath — and she started down toward the hollow.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags	13
adverbTagCount	0
adverbTags	(empty)
dialogueSentences	32
tagDensity	0.406
leniency	0.813
rawRatio	0
effectiveRatio	0

100.00%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount	1003
totalAiIsmAdverbs	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

70.09%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1003

totalAiIsms

found

word	"rhythmic"
count	1

word	"familiar"
count	1

word	"whisper"
count	1

word	"pulsed"
count	1

word	"firmly"
count	1

word	"flickered"
count	1

highlights

0	"rhythmic"
1	"familiar"
2	"whisper"
3	"pulsed"
4	"firmly"
5	"flickered"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	73
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"tried to"
1	"started to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	92
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	38
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1020
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	11
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

72.80%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

842

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.54

worstName

"Eva"

maxWindowNameDensity

2.5

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

Richmond	1
Park	1
Eva	13
October	1
Nyx	10
Rory	12
Cardiff	1
London	1
Heartstone	1
Reminded	1
Fae	1

persons

0	"Eva"
1	"Nyx"
2	"Rory"
3	"Reminded"

places

0	"Richmond"
1	"Park"
2	"Cardiff"
3	"London"

globalScore

0.728

windowScore

0.833

0.00%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"felt like a pebble pulled from a stream"
1	"looked like stained glass — actual staine"
2	"felt like the temperature of skin, of b"

3.92%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

1.961

wordCount

1020

matches

0	"neither warm nor"
1	"not scared exactly, but something in here doesn't want us"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	92
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

26.15

std

22.83

0.873

sampleLengths

0	11
1	64
2	21
3	47
4	21
5	7
6	90
7	17
8	2
9	10
10	47
11	12
12	8
13	60
14	41
15	4
16	6
17	2
18	63
19	18
20	9
21	68
22	54
23	7
24	11
25	3
26	36
27	42
28	10
29	29
30	1
31	8
32	51
33	35
34	13
35	6
36	44
37	7
38	35

95.65%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"was silvered"
1	"been dipped"
2	"were made"

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

147

matches

0	"was staring"
1	"was watching"

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.12

matches

0	"One moment she'd been crunching through autumn leaves in Richmond Park with Eva's directions burning in her pocket; the next, the air thickened around her like honey and the October cold sloughed off her skin."
1	"The park noise — distant traffic, a dog barking, the rhythmic thud of a jogger — cut off mid-beat, as though someone had shut a heavy door behind her."
2	"Wildflowers spilled across the clearing in drifts — blue ones that pulsed like slow heartbeats, white ones with petals thin as spun glass, crimson bells that chimed, actually chimed, when the wind touched them."
3	"There was one sun, pale and enormous, and then a smaller companion — a moon, maybe, or something pretending to be one — hanging beside it at a distance that made Rory's eyes ache when she tried to measure it."
4	"That was the first strange thing — cold."
5	"Beneath the bell-chime of the red flowers there was something else — a low, continuous note, deep as a cello's bottom string, threading up from the earth."
6	"Its wings were made of what looked like stained glass — actual stained glass, leaded panes and all — and when it flapped, it made a faint musical ringing."
7	"Rory laughed, and the sound carried wrong — it bounced back to her from the trees a half-second late, as though the grove had to think about whether to return it."
8	"Her breath didn't fog, though the air felt neither warm nor cold — it felt like the temperature of skin, of bathwater exactly the temperature of blood."
9	"Not a figure — not yet — just a suggestion of one."
10	"Rory's hand went to the hilt of the Fae blade at her hip — cold through her palm, colder than the air, steady as a held breath — and she started down toward the hollow."

94.00%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount

835

adjectiveStacks

stackExamples

0	"lay cold against her"

adverbCount

adverbRatio

0.03592814371257485

lyAdverbCount

lyAdverbRatio

0.008383233532934131

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	92
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

11.09

std

9.52

0.859

sampleLengths

0	11
1	35
2	29
3	13
4	8
5	22
6	25
7	16
8	5
9	4
10	3
11	26
12	34
13	30
14	5
15	8
16	4
17	2
18	10
19	3
20	40
21	4
22	9
23	3
24	3
25	5
26	11
27	10
28	19
29	5
30	15
31	8
32	8
33	15
34	10
35	4
36	5
37	1
38	2
39	27
40	4
41	19
42	12
43	1
44	7
45	11
46	3
47	6
48	3
49	11

73.91%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	7
diversityRatio	0.4891304347826087
totalSentences	92
uniqueOpeners	45

61.73%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Then Eva was through, stumbling"

ratio

0.019

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"She was staring."
1	"She tipped her head back,"
2	"She looked away fast."
3	"They moved forward together, Rory"
4	"Her boots pressed silver grass"
5	"She glanced behind her and"
6	"It had warmed against her"
7	"It wasn't sound exactly."
8	"It was more like the"
9	"They pressed deeper."
10	"Its wings were made of"
11	"It landed on Eva's shoulder,"
12	"She went quiet after that."
13	"Her breath didn't fog, though"
14	"she reminded Eva"

ratio

0.278

61.85%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Rory stepped between the oak"
1	"The park noise — distant"
2	"Eva's voice drifted from somewhere"
3	"Nyx murmured, the whisper-wind voice"
4	"Rory barely heard them."
5	"She was staring."
6	"The grove sprawled before her"
7	"Wildflowers spilled across the clearing"
8	"The grass underfoot was silvered"
9	"She tipped her head back,"
10	"She looked away fast."
11	"They moved forward together, Rory"
12	"Her boots pressed silver grass"
13	"She glanced behind her and"
14	"Nyx left nothing at all."
15	"Eva's trainers left faint bruises"
16	"The Heartstone pendant lay cold"
17	"That was the first strange"
18	"It had warmed against her"
19	"Here, it felt like a"

ratio

0.796

92.59%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"As if she'd been here"

ratio

0.019

0.00%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"One moment she'd been crunching through autumn leaves in Richmond Park with Eva's directions burning in her pocket; the next, the air thickened around her like …"
1	"The park noise — distant traffic, a dog barking, the rhythmic thud of a jogger — cut off mid-beat, as though someone had shut a heavy door behind her."
2	"Wildflowers spilled across the clearing in drifts — blue ones that pulsed like slow heartbeats, white ones with petals thin as spun glass, crimson bells that ch…"
3	"There was one sun, pale and enormous, and then a smaller companion — a moon, maybe, or something pretending to be one — hanging beside it at a distance that mad…"
4	"She glanced behind her and found her own footprints already fading, the grass straightening as if she'd never passed."
5	"Rory laughed, and the sound carried wrong — it bounced back to her from the trees a half-second late, as though the grove had to think about whether to return i…"
6	"Under the wonder, beneath the ache of beauty that had crept up on her without permission, was a low pressure against her sternum."

100.00%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags	13
uselessAdditionCount	0
matches	(empty)

0.00%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
1	"Eva breathed (breathe)"
2	"Eva muttered (mutter)"
3	"Nyx warned (warn)"
4	"Eva whispered (whisper)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.313

leniency

0.625

rawRatio

0.5

effectiveRatio

0.313

77.5517%