Run: 2026-04-24-01KPZV8W3KG5D41C2D8CP7PBWX

Run Details

Model:: Claude Opus 4.7
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 29.7s
Cost:: $0.065250
Provider:: Amazon Bedrock

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
85.34%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
70.67%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
100.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
68.60%	Name drop frequency	(details)
21.79%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
100.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
89.07%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
95.13%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
77.65%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
0.00%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
48.24%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
68.97%	Technical jargon density	(details)
100.00%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
32.35%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
78.5940%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert fiction writer.

Always keep the following rules in mind:
- Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang.
- Write in active voice
- Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle.
- Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions.
- Convey events and story through dialogue.
- Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety.
- Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech
- Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself.
- Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action.
- Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe"

When writing text:
- NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely.
- NEVER end with foreshadowing.
- NEVER write further than what I prompt you with.
- AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions.
- STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.

User/Human

Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response:
<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Continue the story using the following instructions:
<instructions>
Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
</instructions>

Model response

The standing stones didn't look like much from the path — seven weathered oaks twisted into pillars, bark grey as bone, roots fused into the soil like clenched knuckles. Rory had walked past this corner of Richmond Park at least a dozen times and never once registered them.

"You're sure this is it," she said.

Nyx didn't answer with words. The shadow at her heel simply lengthened, reaching toward the nearest stone, and the air between two of the oaks rippled like heat above tarmac.

"Lovely. Very subtle."

"Shades don't do subtle in daylight." Nyx's whisper came from somewhere near her left shoulder, though the silhouette itself was already three paces ahead. "Step through on the exhale. Not the inhale."

"Why?"

"Because on the inhale you might bring the wrong air with you."

Eva, behind her, made a small strangled noise. "I've changed my mind. I'll wait in the car."

"You don't have a car."

"I'll acquire one."

Rory pressed her thumb to the pendant at her collarbone — cool, for once, not that slow crimson warmth it gave off near the bad places — and walked between the stones on an exhale.

The world folded.

It wasn't a passage so much as a substitution. One step on damp November grass, the next on something that yielded like moss but glittered underneath as if spun from green glass. The grey English sky was gone. In its place hung a high cloudless vault the colour of unripe peaches, and two suns — no, one sun and its mirrored ghost, smaller, trailing a few degrees behind — crossed it with unhurried patience.

"Oh," Eva breathed, arriving at Rory's shoulder. "Oh, that's not fair."

Wildflowers grew in drifts that had no business existing together — snowdrops beside foxglove beside something star-shaped and petalled in bruised violet that Rory didn't recognise at all. The smell was almost too much, honey and cut stems and a sweetness underneath like overripe fruit, and beneath that, fainter, something closer to iron.

"Stay close to the path," Nyx said. The shadow had taken a more solid shape here, tall and narrow, edges still soft as smoke. "Time runs slant. The grove decides how much of it you spend."

"Comforting."

"You asked for comfort, you'd have gone to a hotel."

Rory moved first. The moss-glass gave under her boots with a small chiming sound, like a wine glass tapped with a fingernail, and every step left a print that slowly filled with light before fading. She glanced back. Her footprints were already gone. Eva's, too. Nyx left none at all, as if the grove had decided not to acknowledge them.

"Look up," Eva whispered.

She did. The canopy wasn't a canopy. The trees here arched impossibly, their branches meeting overhead and knotting into patterns that resembled written script — not a language Rory could read, but the shape of language, loops and stops and diacritics in pale living wood. Between the branches, birds moved that weren't quite birds; they left long afterimages behind them, and their song came before the motion, not after.

"Hear that?" Eva said.

"The birds?"

"No — underneath."

Rory stilled. Under the liquid not-quite-birdsong ran a lower note, a hum almost below hearing, the kind you felt in the back teeth. It came from everywhere and nowhere, and if she concentrated it nearly resolved into voices — many of them, speaking over each other, patient, disinterested.

"Don't listen too hard," Nyx said. "They notice when you listen."

"Who?"

"Whatever's left of the ones who stayed."

Eva crossed herself. Rory hadn't seen her do that since they were fourteen.

The path — if it was a path, it was more an idea of one, a slightly paler ribbon of moss-glass winding between the stands of wildflower — dipped down into a hollow. Rory followed it, one hand brushing the hilt of the Fae blade at her hip. The moonsilver was cold through her jeans. It had been cold since Isolde handed it to her three nights ago in a flat in Hackney, and Rory had begun to suspect it would never be anything else.

"There." Eva pointed.

At the bottom of the hollow stood a pool. No stream fed it, no outlet drained it, and its surface was so still that the peach sky reflected in it without a single ripple. Around its edge, small stones had been placed — dozens of them, some quite old, moss-furred, others startlingly new. Each bore a scratch of writing.

Rory crouched at the rim. The nearest stone read, in English: *I am sorry for the dog.*

The next, in a hand she didn't know: *Take what you took back.*

The one beyond that wasn't in any alphabet she recognised, but it pulled at her eye the way a splinter pulled at skin, and she looked away before it could finish whatever it was doing.

"Apologies," she murmured. "They're apologies."

"To whom?" Eva asked.

"I don't think it's a whom."

Something moved on the far side of the pool. Not toward them — across. A shape the size of a fox, but longer, its coat the exact same peach-gold as the sky, so that it ran along the edge of the water as a kind of absence, a fox-shaped hole in the world. It paused. Turned its head. It had no face that Rory could make out, only a suggestion of attention, and then it was gone between two stands of foxglove without disturbing a petal.

Eva exhaled slow. "I want to go home."

"No you don't."

"No," she admitted, "I don't. That's the frightening part."

Nyx's whisper came from directly behind them both now, though Rory hadn't heard a footfall. "Isolde's hollow is further in. Past the pool, left at the white tree, under the arch. Don't drink the water. Don't answer if anything calls you by a name you haven't given it."

"Anything else?"

"Try not to bleed."

Rory touched the pendant again. Still cool. Whatever waited at the end of this path, it wasn't Hel — not yet. She straightened, drew a slow breath of that honey-iron air, and stepped around the pool of apologies.

The grove closed behind them like a page turning.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags	11
adverbTagCount	0
adverbTags	(empty)
dialogueSentences	34
tagDensity	0.324
leniency	0.647
rawRatio	0
effectiveRatio	0

85.34%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1023

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"very"
count	1

adverb	"slowly"
count	1

adverb	"slightly"
count	1

highlights

0	"very"
1	"slowly"
2	"slightly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

70.67%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1023

totalAiIsms

found

word	"whisper"
count	2

word	"warmth"
count	1

word	"comforting"
count	1

word	"resolved"
count	1

word	"footfall"
count	1

highlights

0	"whisper"
1	"warmth"
2	"comforting"
3	"resolved"
4	"footfall"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	65
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount	0
hedgeCount	0
narrationSentences	65
filterMatches	(empty)
hedgeMatches	(empty)

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	88
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	41
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans

markdownWords

totalWords

1037

ratio

0.011

matches

0	"I am sorry for the dog."
1	"Take what you took back."

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	11
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

68.60%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

860

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.63

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

2.5

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

Richmond	1
Park	1
Nyx	6
Eva	9
November	1
English	2
Rory	14
Wildflowers	1
Fae	1
Isolde	1
Hackney	1
Hel	1

persons

0	"Nyx"
1	"Eva"
2	"Rory"
3	"Wildflowers"
4	"Isolde"

places

0	"Richmond"
1	"Park"
2	"English"
3	"Hackney"

globalScore

0.686

windowScore

0.833

21.79%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"quite birds; they left long afterimages behind them, and their song came before the motion, not after"
1	"not-quite birdsong ran a lower note, a hum almost below hearing, the kind you felt in the back teeth"

100.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

0.964

wordCount

1037

matches

0	"not a language Rory could read, but the shape of language, loops"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	88
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

22.06

std

24.34

1.103

sampleLengths

0	48
1	7
2	30
3	3
4	32
5	1
6	12
7	17
8	5
9	3
10	35
11	3
12	74
13	11
14	53
15	36
16	1
17	10
18	60
19	4
20	69
21	4
22	2
23	3
24	48
25	11
26	1
27	7
28	13
29	85
30	3
31	59
32	17
33	13
34	35
35	5
36	4
37	6
38	86
39	8
40	3
41	9
42	48
43	2
44	4
45	38
46	9

89.07%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"was gone"
1	"been placed "
2	"was gone"

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

138

matches

0	"was doing"

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.125

matches

0	"The standing stones didn't look like much from the path — seven weathered oaks twisted into pillars, bark grey as bone, roots fused into the soil like clenched knuckles."
1	"Rory pressed her thumb to the pendant at her collarbone — cool, for once, not that slow crimson warmth it gave off near the bad places — and walked between the stones on an exhale."
2	"In its place hung a high cloudless vault the colour of unripe peaches, and two suns — no, one sun and its mirrored ghost, smaller, trailing a few degrees behind — crossed it with unhurried patience."
3	"Wildflowers grew in drifts that had no business existing together — snowdrops beside foxglove beside something star-shaped and petalled in bruised violet that Rory didn't recognise at all."
4	"The trees here arched impossibly, their branches meeting overhead and knotting into patterns that resembled written script — not a language Rory could read, but the shape of language, loops and stops and diacritics in pale living wood."
5	"Between the branches, birds moved that weren't quite birds; they left long afterimages behind them, and their song came before the motion, not after."
6	"It came from everywhere and nowhere, and if she concentrated it nearly resolved into voices — many of them, speaking over each other, patient, disinterested."
7	"The path — if it was a path, it was more an idea of one, a slightly paler ribbon of moss-glass winding between the stands of wildflower — dipped down into a hollow."
8	"Around its edge, small stones had been placed — dozens of them, some quite old, moss-furred, others startlingly new."
9	"Not toward them — across."
10	"Whatever waited at the end of this path, it wasn't Hel — not yet."

95.13%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount	856
adjectiveStacks	0
stackExamples	(empty)
adverbCount	39
adverbRatio	0.0455607476635514
lyAdverbCount	8
lyAdverbRatio	0.009345794392523364

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	88
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

11.78

std

10.69

0.907

sampleLengths

0	29
1	19
2	7
3	5
4	25
5	3
6	24
7	8
8	1
9	12
10	8
11	9
12	5
13	3
14	35
15	3
16	9
17	23
18	6
19	36
20	7
21	4
22	28
23	25
24	7
25	17
26	12
27	1
28	10
29	3
30	32
31	3
32	5
33	2
34	15
35	4
36	2
37	5
38	38
39	24
40	4
41	2
42	3
43	2
44	21
45	25
46	6
47	5
48	1
49	7

77.65%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	5
diversityRatio	0.5
totalSentences	88
uniqueOpeners	44

0.00%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount	0
totalSentences	51
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"It wasn't a passage so"
1	"She glanced back."
2	"Her footprints were already gone."
3	"It came from everywhere and"
4	"It had been cold since"
5	"It had no face that"
6	"She straightened, drew a slow"

ratio

0.137

48.24%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The standing stones didn't look"
1	"Rory had walked past this"
2	"Nyx didn't answer with words."
3	"The shadow at her heel"
4	"Nyx's whisper came from somewhere"
5	"Eva, behind her, made a"
6	"Rory pressed her thumb to"
7	"The world folded."
8	"It wasn't a passage so"
9	"The grey English sky was"
10	"Eva breathed, arriving at Rory's"
11	"Wildflowers grew in drifts that"
12	"The smell was almost too"
13	"The shadow had taken a"
14	"Rory moved first."
15	"The moss-glass gave under her"
16	"She glanced back."
17	"Her footprints were already gone."
18	"Nyx left none at all,"
19	"The canopy wasn't a canopy."

ratio

0.824

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	51
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

68.97%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"One step on damp November grass, the next on something that yielded like moss but glittered underneath as if spun from green glass."
1	"Wildflowers grew in drifts that had no business existing together — snowdrops beside foxglove beside something star-shaped and petalled in bruised violet that R…"
2	"The trees here arched impossibly, their branches meeting overhead and knotting into patterns that resembled written script — not a language Rory could read, but…"

100.00%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags	11
uselessAdditionCount	0
matches	(empty)

32.35%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Eva breathed (breathe)"
1	"Eva whispered (whisper)"
2	"she murmured (murmur)"
3	"she admitted (admit)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.265

leniency

0.529

rawRatio

0.444

effectiveRatio

0.235

78.5940%