Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ00VKHQTB7XVPXKFA78CP1T

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Duration:
2m 27s
Cost:
$0.040299
Provider:
DeepInfra

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The boundary announced itself not with light or sound, but with the sudden death of ordinary noise. Rory’s left foot—the one that had carried her out of Cardiff and away from Evan’s temper—came down on grass that did not crunch. She froze. The small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, a souvenir from a garden gate at age seven, suddenly itched, as if the air here could irritate old wounds. Behind her, the distant thrum of Roehampton Gate traffic guttered out mid-honk, as though London had been smothered beneath a velvet cloth. In its place rose a silence so complete she heard the silver chain of her pendant shift against her collarbone. “Steady,” whispered Nyx. They stood to her right, a humanoid absence of light roughly six foot two, violet eyes guttering like embers in a draft. Today—or tonight; time felt already unmoored—Nyx had chosen a denser form, shoulders edged in matte smoke, but the grove tugged at them insistently. Rory watched their left arm bleed into a ribbon of shadow, then reknit, as if the air here could not decide whether to make them solid or memory. A strand of her straight black hair fell across her eyes; she blinked it away without raising her hand, unwilling to break her focus. Her bright blue eyes swept the scene ahead and catalogued it. Two monoliths framed the path, carved from flint-gray stone into the unmistakable silhouettes of ancient oaks—every whorl of bark, every twist of branch rendered in permanence. The boundary markers. Beyond them, wildflowers bloomed in colours that had no business existing in a London winter. Violets large as teacups nodded in a breeze she could not feel. Foxfire-orange petals seemed to generate their own warmth. Isolde waited between the stones. The Half-Fae woman looked unchanged from the Soho basement where they had met two nights prior—ethereal, ageless, silver hair spilling to her waist, lavender eyes absorbing rather than reflecting the ambient gloom—yet here she belonged. When she turned to lead them onward, her feet settled among the blossoms without bending a single stem. No footprints. The earth simply refused to record her passage. “Does the clock know the hour,” Isolde asked, her voice like water running over quartz, “or does the hour know the clock?” Rory resisted the urge to check her watch. “Which way?” “Forward is the only direction the blind compass knows.” Isolde moved into the gloom. Rory followed. She was twenty-five, a flat-above-a-bar renter, a part-time delivery girl for the Golden Empress, a Pre-Law escapee who still woke some mornings expecting the slam of Cardiff library doors. She was not equipped for ancient places. But she was cool-headed, and cool-headed people observed. Item: the air tasted of nectarines and glacier melt, a pairing her brain filed under impossible. Item: the trees flanking their path were too smooth, their bark resembling skin after a hot bath, and their leaves rustled in syllables that almost sounded like her mother’s Welsh—older, hungrier, prettier. Item: at her hip, the Fae-Forged Blade given by Isolde had turned from merely cold to surgical, a leaf-shaped sliver of moonsilver biting through the scabbard’s leather wrap and into her thigh. Nyx flickered ahead, then beside her, then overhead, a smear of darkness traversing the canopy. “The flowers remember a sun before your sun,” their wind-borne voice murmured. “They are showing off.” The grove sloped downward. Time moved strangely here; Rory knew it before she checked her cheap digital watch. The display had begun to stutter, numbers flickering between 3:17 and symbols she did not recognise, densely spiralled things that resembled no numerals on Earth. She touched the face. Her breath came harder, not from exertion but from density, the oxygen replaced by something intoxicating, heady, thick as syrup. She felt the groan of shifting earth beneath her boots, though the ground lay still. Then she saw the shimmer. It hung between two skin-barked trees, faint and coruscating, like heat rising off summer tarmac. But the air was cool, crystalline, and this distortion did not fade when she blinked. The Veil. The metaphysical barrier between Earth and the alien realms beyond it. Rory had no supernatural sight—she was human, stubbornly mundane—yet here, sensitised by the blade or the Heartstone Pendant or merely by proximity to madness, she perceived it. A membrane. A scar in geography. As they passed through it—or as it passed through them—she felt the lurch of an elevator dropping too fast, a sudden slackness behind her navel. The pendant, that deep crimson thumbnail of gemstone, pulsed once against her skin. Not the warning warmth of a Hel-portal. This was something else. Recognition. “The seam,” Nyx breathed. Their form had compacted, shoulders broadening, jawline resolving for a flickering instant into the ghost of a man—Aldric, she remembered, a sorcerer trapped in 1643, now a Shade, now almost human again in this between-place. Then the shadow reasserted itself, and Nyx was merely Nyx, a silhouette shivering with unease. Deeper in, the trees parted like a curtain pulled back by unseen hands. They entered a clearing roofed by woven branches through which no sky was visible, yet everything glowed with argent luminescence. Moonlight’s memory, Rory thought, and the idea felt borrowed. It silvered the grass and pooled in the air itself, giving the space the hush of a cathedral after service. At the centre, spiralling menhirs leaned inward like conspirators, and water flowed upward along their flanks in defiance of gravity, collecting in a hovering sphere of liquid glass above them. Within the sphere, images turned. Rory saw an amber sky she somehow knew was not Earth—Dymas, the realm of Gluttony, vineyards crawling under a warm and endless dusk. Prince Belphegor’s hunting grounds. A flash of feasting tables groaning under meats that moved. She dragged her gaze away, but the after-image tattooed itself on her retinas. “Do not stare overlong,” Isolde said. She stood beside the structure, her pale hand hovering near the upward-water, not touching. “The eye that drinks from the deep cup forgets the shallows.” Riddletranslation: don’t get lost. Rory exhaled sharply. The Fae-Forged Blade had begun to glow, faint luminescence bleeding along its moonsilver edge, answering the sphere’s hum with a harmonic shiver she felt in her teeth. Wonder prickled up her spine, but unease chased it. Her left wrist itched beneath her sleeve. The crescent scar stood out darker against her skin, as if the grove’s silver light had inverted her shadows. She turned to gauge their path back, but the forest had closed ranks. The passage they had followed—the nodding teacup violets, the skin-barked sentinels—had vanished behind a wall of foliage packed shoulder-to-shoulder like a tribunal. “How long have we been walking?” Rory asked. Her voice sounded small, disrespectful, human. Isolde tilted her head. “The seed does not count the rings until the axe asks.” “Minutes,” Nyx whispered. They had retreated to the clearing’s edge, violet eyes downturned. “Or years. The shadow-clock does not tick here, Rory. It unravels.” As if to punctuate the warning, a glass-winged insect emerged from the upward-water, drifted toward Rory, and dissolved against the Heartstone Pendant into a breath of cinnamon warmth. The gemstone drank it, its inner glow brightening from ember to coal. The flowers at Rory’s feet had fallen silent. The grass no longer sighed. In the arrested hush, she heard the grove listening—the slow creak of tree-skin, the inverted drip of the hovering sphere, the hum of a realm inhaling. She had survived Evan’s temper, survived the Pre-Law library at Cardiff, survived London on fourteen-hour delivery shifts for a restaurant that smelled permanently of star anise. She would survive this too. But survival had never looked so hungry for her attention. She squared her shoulders and stepped closer to the sphere. The blade blazed now, brilliant and cold against her leg. “There is a door here,” Nyx said. Their voice carried an edge of lament, old as their lost humanity. “But doors require keys. And keys require a price.” “Then let’s find the lock,” Rory said. Isolde’s lavender eyes darkened. She looked almost sad. “The lock, little barrister, has already found you.” Rory looked down. In the silvered grass where her boots rested—heavy, human, indelicate—a single wildflower had wound itself around her ankle. Its petals were the same deep crimson as the Heartstone. And it was pulling her forward, gently, insistently, into the light.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences17
tagDensity0.529
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
89.38% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1412
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"sharply"
count1
2
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"sharply"
2"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
50.42% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1412
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"velvet"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"warmth"
count3
3
word"gloom"
count2
4
word"flickered"
count1
5
word"crystalline"
count1
6
word"lurch"
count1
7
word"pulsed"
count1
8
word"resolving"
count1
9
word"structure"
count1
10
word"sentinels"
count1
highlights
0"velvet"
1"silence"
2"warmth"
3"gloom"
4"flickered"
5"crystalline"
6"lurch"
7"pulsed"
8"resolving"
9"structure"
10"sentinels"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences100
matches
0"g with unease"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences100
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences107
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1393
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions68
wordCount1283
uniqueNames27
maxNameDensity1.09
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Cardiff3
Evan2
Roehampton1
Gate1
London3
Nyx8
Half-Fae1
Soho1
Rory14
Golden1
Empress1
Pre-Law2
Welsh1
Fae-Forged2
Blade2
Isolde7
Earth3
Veil1
Heartstone3
Pendant2
Hel-portal1
Aldric1
Shade1
Dymas1
Gluttony1
Belphegor1
Item3
persons
0"Evan"
1"Nyx"
2"Rory"
3"Blade"
4"Isolde"
5"Earth"
6"Belphegor"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"London"
2"Soho"
globalScore0.954
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences68
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"sounded like her mother’s Welsh—older, hun"
56.42% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.436
wordCount1393
matches
0"not with light or sound, but with the sudden death of ordinary noise"
1"not from exertion but from density, the oxygen replaced by something intoxicating"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences107
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs30
mean46.43
std38.23
cv0.823
sampleLengths
0112
13
273
399
468
522
610
714
8126
931
1082
115
12126
134
1450
1513
1679
1755
1831
19104
2014
2115
2224
2340
2480
2520
2628
277
2816
2942
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences100
matches
0"been smothered"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs215
matches
0"was pulling"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount19
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences107
ratio0.131
matches
0"Rory’s left foot—the one that had carried her out of Cardiff and away from Evan’s temper—came down on grass that did not crunch."
1"Today—or tonight; time felt already unmoored—Nyx had chosen a denser form, shoulders edged in matte smoke, but the grove tugged at them insistently."
2"A strand of her straight black hair fell across her eyes; she blinked it away without raising her hand, unwilling to break her focus."
3"Two monoliths framed the path, carved from flint-gray stone into the unmistakable silhouettes of ancient oaks—every whorl of bark, every twist of branch rendered in permanence."
4"The Half-Fae woman looked unchanged from the Soho basement where they had met two nights prior—ethereal, ageless, silver hair spilling to her waist, lavender eyes absorbing rather than reflecting the ambient gloom—yet here she belonged."
5"Item: the trees flanking their path were too smooth, their bark resembling skin after a hot bath, and their leaves rustled in syllables that almost sounded like her mother’s Welsh—older, hungrier, prettier."
6"Time moved strangely here; Rory knew it before she checked her cheap digital watch."
7"Rory had no supernatural sight—she was human, stubbornly mundane—yet here, sensitised by the blade or the Heartstone Pendant or merely by proximity to madness, she perceived it."
8"As they passed through it—or as it passed through them—she felt the lurch of an elevator dropping too fast, a sudden slackness behind her navel."
9"Their form had compacted, shoulders broadening, jawline resolving for a flickering instant into the ghost of a man—Aldric, she remembered, a sorcerer trapped in 1643, now a Shade, now almost human again in this between-place."
10"Rory saw an amber sky she somehow knew was not Earth—Dymas, the realm of Gluttony, vineyards crawling under a warm and endless dusk."
11"The passage they had followed—the nodding teacup violets, the skin-barked sentinels—had vanished behind a wall of foliage packed shoulder-to-shoulder like a tribunal."
12"In the arrested hush, she heard the grove listening—the slow creak of tree-skin, the inverted drip of the hovering sphere, the hum of a realm inhaling."
13"In the silvered grass where her boots rested—heavy, human, indelicate—a single wildflower had wound itself around her ankle."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1332
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
1"prior—ethereal, ageless, silver hair"
adverbCount48
adverbRatio0.036036036036036036
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.010510510510510511
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences107
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences107
mean13.02
std8.83
cv0.678
sampleLengths
017
123
22
328
422
520
63
722
823
928
1024
1111
1226
133
1415
1512
168
175
1835
1918
202
218
2222
238
242
2514
262
2729
287
298
3016
3132
3232
3315
3412
354
364
3714
3825
394
4020
4115
425
4315
4415
452
4611
4727
482
494
62.62% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.4205607476635514
totalSentences107
uniqueOpeners45
76.63% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences87
matches
0"Then she saw the shimmer."
1"Then the shadow reasserted itself,"
ratio0.023
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences87
matches
0"They stood to her right,"
1"Her bright blue eyes swept"
2"She was twenty-five, a flat-above-a-bar"
3"She was not equipped for"
4"their wind-borne voice murmured"
5"She touched the face."
6"Her breath came harder, not"
7"She felt the groan of"
8"It hung between two skin-barked"
9"Their form had compacted, shoulders"
10"They entered a clearing roofed"
11"It silvered the grass and"
12"She dragged her gaze away,"
13"She stood beside the structure,"
14"Her left wrist itched beneath"
15"She turned to gauge their"
16"Her voice sounded small, disrespectful,"
17"They had retreated to the"
18"She had survived Evan’s temper,"
19"She would survive this too."
ratio0.276
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount62
totalSentences87
matches
0"The boundary announced itself not"
1"Rory’s left foot—the one that"
2"The small crescent-shaped scar on"
3"They stood to her right,"
4"Rory watched their left arm"
5"A strand of her straight"
6"Her bright blue eyes swept"
7"The boundary markers."
8"Violets large as teacups nodded"
9"Isolde waited between the stones."
10"The Half-Fae woman looked unchanged"
11"The earth simply refused to"
12"Isolde asked, her voice like"
13"Rory resisted the urge to"
14"Isolde moved into the gloom"
15"She was twenty-five, a flat-above-a-bar"
16"She was not equipped for"
17"Nyx flickered ahead, then beside"
18"their wind-borne voice murmured"
19"The grove sloped downward."
ratio0.713
57.47% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences87
matches
0"As if to punctuate the"
ratio0.011
42.61% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences57
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"The small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, a souvenir from a garden gate at age seven, suddenly itched, as if the air here could irritate old wounds."
1"Behind her, the distant thrum of Roehampton Gate traffic guttered out mid-honk, as though London had been smothered beneath a velvet cloth."
2"A strand of her straight black hair fell across her eyes; she blinked it away without raising her hand, unwilling to break her focus."
3"Item: the trees flanking their path were too smooth, their bark resembling skin after a hot bath, and their leaves rustled in syllables that almost sounded like…"
4"The display had begun to stutter, numbers flickering between 3:17 and symbols she did not recognise, densely spiralled things that resembled no numerals on Eart…"
5"The crescent scar stood out darker against her skin, as if the grove’s silver light had inverted her shadows."
6"As if to punctuate the warning, a glass-winged insect emerged from the upward-water, drifted toward Rory, and dissolved against the Heartstone Pendant into a br…"
7"She had survived Evan’s temper, survived the Pre-Law library at Cardiff, survived London on fourteen-hour delivery shifts for a restaurant that smelled permanen…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"their wind-borne voice murmured (murmur)"
1"Nyx breathed (breathe)"
2"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences17
tagDensity0.471
leniency0.941
rawRatio0.375
effectiveRatio0.353
83.5628%