Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ01EJYC2XM8K5KV9EF2F17R

Run Details

Duration:
16.3s
Cost:
$0.002571
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The neon green sign flickered above the battered wooden door, bathing the rainy street in an unsteady glow. Inside, the dim light fell in amber pools across the scarred mahogany bar, stitching shadows between the framed maps and the black‑and‑white photographs that lined the walls. A low hum of conversation mixed with the clink of glasses, the occasional cough of a smoker’s breath. The air tasted faintly of pipe tobacco and spilled whiskey. Silas Blackwood paced slowly to the back of the room, his left leg dragging just enough to remind anyone watching that the limp was not a performance. He pressed his silver signet ring against his palm, the metal cool under his thumb, and checked the empty stools. The bar’s regulars—an eclectic mix of ex‑soldiers, night‑shift workers, and the occasional poet—watched him with a wary respect that had not faded since the days when a single glance from him could settle a dispute before it began. A door swung open with a sigh of wind, and rain drummed against the threshold. A figure slipped in, shoulders hunched against the damp, hair slicked to the scalp in a dark, shoulder‑length line. The door chime tinged the room with a soft, metallic note that seemed to interrupt a thought. Silas glanced up, eyes narrowing just enough to register the shock before the habit of composure resurfaced. The newcomer’s bright blue eyes flicked past the rows of bottles, scanning the room with a mixture of curiosity and caution. A crescent-shaped scar glinted faintly on the left wrist, catching the low light as she lifted a hand to brush away a stray droplet of rain. She moved toward the bar, each step measured, the weight of a delivery bag thudding against her hip. The bag, a battered canvas, bore the logo of Yellow Empress in gold script, the emblem of Yu‑Fei Cheung’s restaurant. A faint scent of ginger and soy lingered on its surface. Silas mouthed a word, a greeting folded into an almost invisible smile. He rose from his stool, the creak of the wooden seat a quiet punctuation. “Rory,” he said, his voice low, the kind that filled the space between the clink of glasses and the distant siren wail. The name slipped from his throat like a stone dropped into water, rippling outward. She turned, eyes widening for a heartbeat, then narrowing into an expression that balanced surprise and something else—an unreadable weight that settled between them like a thick fog. Her mouth formed his name, then closed again. “Silas,” she whispered, the syllable caught by the hum of the bar, the sign of the neon sign painting the edge of her cheek pink. She slipped onto the stool opposite him, the leather cushion sighing under her weight. He placed his ringed hand on the polished surface, thumb tracing the engraving of a raven in flight, a silent nod to the bar’s namesake. “You’ve got the rain in your coat. It’s been years.” She tilted her head, the scar catching the light. “It’s been longer than I thought. I left the city thinking the rain would wash it all away. Turns out it just makes the streets shine brighter at night.” He laughed—a soft, restrained sound that seemed to come from a place deep within, as if he were remembering a joke told in a different decade. The laugh faded, replaced by the steady rhythm of his breathing. “What brings you back?” he asked, the question hanging between them, unsheathed and precise. She pulled the canvas bag from her side, setting it gently on the bar. The golden logo glinted; a small, stubborn reminder of the life she’d built in the meantime—delivery routes, night shifts, the anonymity of a city that never stopped moving. She lifted a glass of cheap red wine, the liquid catching the neon green light and turning it crimson. Her fingers knelt around the stem, nails bitten down to a short, uneven length. “Work,” she said, voice flat yet edged with something softer, a hint of regret that threatened to spill over if she weren’t careful. “I was supposed to be somewhere else. The flat above this place feels like a safe landing. The city’s not what it used to be, you know? It’s louder, more crowded, with more people pretending they’re somebody else.” His hazel eyes dimmed to a thoughtful gray. “I used to think we’d be the ones pretending.” He lifted his own glass, the amber liquid swishing as he turned it, catching the reflection of his own face—lined, the slight grey streak in his auburn hair more pronounced, the limp in his left leg evident even as he leaned forward. Silence settled, thick as the smoke that curled from the ashtray. Outside, the rain hammered the windows, each drop a metronome marking time that had slipped through their fingers. “You still own the bar?” she asked, the question more a statement, as if she were confirming a fact that had been preserved in memory. He tapped his signet ring against the rim of his glass. “The Nest’s still here. It’s become what I needed—it’s a place where secrets can hide in the wood grain, where people can disappear for a night and not be missed. I keep the doors open for… those who need a quiet corner.” She chuckled, a sound that seemed to belong to a younger version of herself, one who had once sat at a campus café, debating law and life with him. “You always liked the shadows, Si. Even when we were...” His smile faltered for a split second, the edges of the memory sharpening. “Even when we were kids, running the streets of Cardiff after class, trying to outwit the teachers with half‑finished essays?” A flash of a younger Silas appeared in her mind—grey‑streched hair, a mischievous grin, the way he’d argue about the last slice of pizza. She pressed her thumb against the scar on her wrist, feeling the faint raised line under her skin. “I remember that. You’d always take the longer route home, saying it gave you time to think.” He swayed forward, the limp causing a subtle shift in his posture, his eyes never leaving the glass. “Thinking turned into something else for me. I left the city, went abroad, did things that left marks not on skin but on memory.” She glanced at the hidden bookshelf against the far wall, its spines forming a secret passage that only a few knew existed. “Do you ever wish you could un‑write those things?” she asked, her voice barely above a murmur, as if the walls might be listening. He shrugged, the motion slow, deliberate. “The past is a book you can’t close without tearing the pages. I keep the pages where they are, hoping the next chapter is kinder.” Her eyes hardened for an instant, the blue turning steel. “And what about the time we wasted? The promises we made over cheap coffee that we’d never let go of the city?” A pause. He set his glass down with a soft clink. “Time, Rory, is a river that carries us downstream whether we want it to or not. We try to step onto a stone and hold our breath. Sometimes we drown.” She stared at the scar on her wrist again, the crescent like a tiny moon hung against her skin. “I left because I thought I could outrun the things that hurt me. I thought I could find a new rhythm in the city lights. I thought… I thought I could be someone else.” He reached across the bar, his fingers brushing the back of her hand for a heartbeat. The contact was brief, a fleeting spark that sent a current through the hollow between them. “You never stopped being you,” he said, his voice raw. “You just dressed yourself in different coats.” She pulled her hand back, the motion swift, as if she were closing a book too soon. “Does that mean I’ve been lying to myself?” Silas tapped his ring against his own chest, the metal echoing softly. “Perhaps you’ve just been testing the limits of what you can bear. The scar here,” he touched his own wrist where the same crescent scar had faded into a faint line, “reminds me of a boy who slipped off a railing on a playground. I thought that would be the end of it, but it was just the beginning of the pain sitting behind the bright eyes.” Her smile was faint, brittle. “You always knew how to make a metaphor out of a bruise.” He nodded, the old habit of people who have spent years calibrating words tugging at his expression. “I learned that words can be weapons or bandages. Too often, we choose the wrong one.” A patron at the far end laughed, the sound slicing through the tension, then faded. The neon sign flickered again, a brief stutter that made the green glow sputter. Rain hammered the windows, each drop a reminder that time kept moving, indifferent to human regret. She swallowed, the wine sloshing a little. “Do you ever think about the things we left unsaid? The things we pretended weren’t there?” Silas stared at the photograph on the wall—a faded image of a younger himself, a trench coat, a cigarette, his hand wrapped around a briefcase. “Every night,” he whispered, the word barely audible over the hum. “When the night’s quiet enough, the ghosts come out and sit at the table like us. They ask why we never called, why we never showed up. And I answer… because I was busy living.” She let out a breath that escaped as a soft sigh, the kind that carries both release and a lingering ache. “I was busy surviving, Si. I thought you’d understand that. I thought you’d be the one with the maps, the routes that lead away from the past.” He lifted his glass again, his fingers curled around the stem with practiced ease. “Maps are only useful if you have a destination. I’ve been treading water for years, waiting for a tide to bring me back. Looks like the tide brought you in.” She stared at the glass, the crimson reflecting the neon-green sign, the reflection broken into shards by the ripple of the wine. “I didn’t expect to see you here. I thought you’d be… somewhere else, perhaps somewhere safer.” His eyes softened, the hazel melting into a gentle amber. “Safety is a lie we tell ourselves when we’re afraid to take the next step. I made a bar because I needed a place where I could be both safe and unsafe. The shadows keep me honest.” The rain intensified, a steady drumming that rose to a crescendo, the sound of countless drops colliding with glass. It was as if the world outside pressed against the bar, seeking entry. She reached for the bag, pulling out a small envelope from within. Its edges were frayed, the paper worn thin. She placed it on the bar, sliding it toward him. “I found this in the back of a delivery box. It wasn’t for me, but I thought you’d want to see it.” Silas lifted the envelope, his fingers unwrapping it carefully. Inside lay a photograph—a black‑and‑white snapshot of a crowded protest in London, a sea of raised fists, a banner reading “No More Silence.” In the corner, a younger Rory stood, hair wild, eyes alight with fire. He stared at the image, his breath hitching. “We were...” He trailed off, lost in the memory, the picture a portal. She leaned forward, her elbows resting on the bar, palms flat. “We were reckless. We thought we could change everything with a chant and a megaphone.” He closed the envelope with a soft snap. “And we learned that the world doesn’t bend to noise. It bends to quiet—people who listen in the dark.” The bartender, a gaunt man with a scarred hand, polished a glass, his eyes flicking between them, sensing the unspoken current. He placed a fresh glass of whisky in front of Silas, the amber catching the green neon, a silent offering. Silas lifted the new glass, the liquid swirling, and took a sip. The burn of the whisky seemed to cut through the lingering frost between them. He set the glass down, the clink resonating like a small bell. “Do you ever think about what could have been?” she asked, the question now a steady drumbeat, matching the rain. He stared at his hands, the ring glinting. “I think about the road that led here. About the people who walked beside me and those who fell away. I think about the weight of silence, the weight of spoken words that never reached you.” She glanced to the hidden bookshelf, the secret door that few remembered. “You kept the room hidden, Si. The place where deals were made in whispers. Do you ever wonder if you could have used it for something else? Something kinder?” He tilted his head, the limp shifting his weight. “I built it as a sanctuary for the broken. If you think that’s not kinder, perhaps you’ve never needed sanctuary.” She laughed, a short, sharp sound that turned into a sigh. “I think I’ve needed sanctuary for a long time, and I thought I could build my own. Turns out all roads lead back to the same place, whether you want them to or not.” He stared at the three‑dimensional map of the world hanging on the wall, the pins marking places where his recruitment had taken him. He lifted his hand, the signet ring catching the dim light. “You left, Rory. And for a while, I thought the world would keep turning without you. It did. It didn’t matter.” She stared at the scar on her wrist, the crescent now a part of her skin as much as the memories etched into it. “I carried that scar until I could’t feel it anymore. Then I tried to pretend it wasn’t there. Now… I think I’m learning to see it again.” Silas placed his glass down, the sound punctuating the conversation. “Regret is a quiet companion. It sits beside you at the table, sips the same wine, never leaving. But it also tells you when you’re about to make a mistake.” She looked up, her bright blue eyes catching the neon’s glow, turning the green into a shade of envy she could not name. “Do you ever regret staying here? Keeping this place alive?” He knocked the bar gently with his knuckles, the wood resonating. “Sometimes I wonder if my old life would have been better had I never opened this place. But then I see faces—people who need a place to disappear for a night. And I remember why I built it. I remember you.” A pause stretched between them, the sound of rain pattering on the windows filling the space. Their breaths intertwined, a rhythm that echoed the pulse of the city outside. She stood, the chair scraping gently against the floor. “I have to go,” she said, gathering the delivery bag, the weight of it a reminder that she still had a life beyond the bar. He rose with a creak from his knee, his silhouette framed by the green sign as he moved toward the back door. He opened it a crack, letting a rush of cold, rain‑laden air sweep in. The sound of thunder rolled low, a distant rumble that seemed to underline the unspoken words hanging between them. She paused at the threshold, the rain soaking through her coat, droplets splattering across the bar’s wooden floor. “Will you… ever leave your own shadows behind?” she asked, voice soft, almost a whisper against the storm. Silas watched her, his eyes reflecting both the neon light and the storm outside. He lifted his hand, the ring catching the glow, and placed it gently on the bar, a silent promise. “Maybe the shadows are where I belong.” She turned, her steps echoing on the wet tiles, the scar on her wrist glinting in the flickering light one last time. The rain swallowed her silhouette as she disappeared into the night, the green sign blinking, the bar holding its breath as the door closed. Silas leaned against the counter, his hand resting on the cold wood, the ring still warm from his touch. He let the night settle around him, the distant hum of the city mingling with the rhythm of the rain, each drop a reminder that time moved forward, relentless and indifferent. The weight of unspoken regret settled in his chest, not as a burden but as a quiet, steady hum, waiting for a later conversation that never seemed to come.
created_at"2026-04-24T15:24:05.466Z" 4/24/2026, 3:24:05 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.3
leniency0.6
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.51% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2803
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"gently"
count4
2
adverb"softly"
count1
3
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"gently"
2"softly"
3"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
26.86% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2803
totalAiIsms41
found
0
word"flickered"
count2
1
word"tinged"
count1
2
word"flicked"
count1
3
word"scanning"
count1
4
word"measured"
count1
5
word"weight"
count8
6
word"unreadable"
count1
7
word"tracing"
count1
8
word"restrained"
count1
9
word"reminder"
count4
10
word"silence"
count3
11
word"fleeting"
count1
12
word"echoing"
count2
13
word"tension"
count1
14
word"practiced ease"
count1
15
word"unspoken"
count3
16
word"glinting"
count2
17
word"sanctuary"
count3
18
word"etched"
count1
19
word"echoed"
count1
20
word"pulse"
count1
21
word"whisper"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"tinged"
2"flicked"
3"scanning"
4"measured"
5"weight"
6"unreadable"
7"tracing"
8"restrained"
9"reminder"
10"silence"
11"fleeting"
12"echoing"
13"tension"
14"practiced ease"
15"unspoken"
16"glinting"
17"sanctuary"
18"etched"
19"echoed"
20"pulse"
21"whisper"
33.33% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow3
found
0
label"let out a breath"
count1
1
label"weight of words/silence"
count2
highlights
0"let out a breath"
1"the weight of silence"
2"the weight of spoken words"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences113
matches(empty)
67.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences113
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences148
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen67
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2791
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions19
wordCount1861
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.64
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Blackwood1
Yellow1
Empress1
Cheung1
Silence1
Silas12
London1
Rory1
persons
0"Blackwood"
1"Cheung"
2"Silence"
3"Silas"
4"Rory"
places
0"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
36.36% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences110
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"note that seemed to interrupt a thought"
1"sound that seemed to come from a place deep within, as if he were remembering a joke told in a different decade"
2"sound that seemed to belong to a younger version of herself, one who had once sat at a campus café, debating law and life with him"
3"It was as if the world outside pressed against the bar, seeking entry"
4"rumble that seemed to underline the unspoken words hanging between them"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.717
wordCount2791
matches
0"not on skin but on memory"
1"not as a burden but as a quiet, steady hum, waiting for a later conversation"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences148
matches
0"watching that the"
59.62% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs65
mean42.94
std15.4
cv0.359
sampleLengths
073
185
251
364
449
526
636
736
839
935
1038
1137
1214
1375
1461
1559
1629
1725
1853
1939
2033
2159
2242
2346
2431
2532
2641
2753
2849
2925
3079
3117
3233
3345
3423
3571
3648
3744
3838
3947
4032
4152
4245
4321
4426
4527
4641
4738
4820
4944
99.05% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences113
matches
0"been preserved"
1"were frayed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs292
matches
0"were remembering"
1"were confirming"
2"were closing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount9
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences148
ratio0.054
matches
0"The bar’s regulars—an eclectic mix of ex‑soldiers, night‑shift workers, and the occasional poet—watched him with a wary respect that had not faded since the days when a single glance from him could settle a dispute before it began."
1"She turned, eyes widening for a heartbeat, then narrowing into an expression that balanced surprise and something else—an unreadable weight that settled between them like a thick fog."
2"He laughed—a soft, restrained sound that seemed to come from a place deep within, as if he were remembering a joke told in a different decade."
3"The golden logo glinted; a small, stubborn reminder of the life she’d built in the meantime—delivery routes, night shifts, the anonymity of a city that never stopped moving."
4"“I used to think we’d be the ones pretending.” He lifted his own glass, the amber liquid swishing as he turned it, catching the reflection of his own face—lined, the slight grey streak in his auburn hair more pronounced, the limp in his left leg evident even as he leaned forward."
5"A flash of a younger Silas appeared in her mind—grey‑streched hair, a mischievous grin, the way he’d argue about the last slice of pizza."
6"Silas stared at the photograph on the wall—a faded image of a younger himself, a trench coat, a cigarette, his hand wrapped around a briefcase."
7"Inside lay a photograph—a black‑and‑white snapshot of a crowded protest in London, a sea of raised fists, a banner reading “No More Silence.” In the corner, a younger Rory stood, hair wild, eyes alight with fire."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1872
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount38
adverbRatio0.0202991452991453
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.00641025641025641
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences148
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences148
mean18.86
std9.45
cv0.501
sampleLengths
018
127
218
310
427
520
638
715
819
917
1017
1121
1226
1318
1420
1511
1612
1714
1822
1914
2028
218
2225
2314
2425
2510
269
2729
2826
2911
3014
3114
3228
3319
3414
3523
3638
378
3851
3911
4018
4125
4211
4342
4429
4510
4613
4720
4824
4918
47.30% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.23648648648648649
totalSentences148
uniqueOpeners35
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences112
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount72
totalSentences112
matches
0"He pressed his silver signet"
1"She moved toward the bar,"
2"He rose from his stool,"
3"he said, his voice low,"
4"She turned, eyes widening for"
5"Her mouth formed his name,"
6"she whispered, the syllable caught"
7"She slipped onto the stool"
8"He placed his ringed hand"
9"She tilted her head, the"
10"He laughed—a soft, restrained sound"
11"he asked, the question hanging"
12"She pulled the canvas bag"
13"She lifted a glass of"
14"Her fingers knelt around the"
15"she said, voice flat yet"
16"His hazel eyes dimmed to"
17"He lifted his own glass,"
18"she asked, the question more"
19"He tapped his signet ring"
ratio0.643
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount107
totalSentences112
matches
0"The neon green sign flickered"
1"A low hum of conversation"
2"The air tasted faintly of"
3"Silas Blackwood paced slowly to"
4"He pressed his silver signet"
5"The bar’s regulars—an eclectic mix"
6"A door swung open with"
7"A figure slipped in, shoulders"
8"The door chime tinged the"
9"Silas glanced up, eyes narrowing"
10"The newcomer’s bright blue eyes"
11"A crescent-shaped scar glinted faintly"
12"She moved toward the bar,"
13"The bag, a battered canvas,"
14"A faint scent of ginger"
15"Silas mouthed a word, a"
16"He rose from his stool,"
17"he said, his voice low,"
18"The name slipped from his"
19"She turned, eyes widening for"
ratio0.955
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences112
matches(empty)
ratio0
56.80% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences83
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"Inside, the dim light fell in amber pools across the scarred mahogany bar, stitching shadows between the framed maps and the black‑and‑white photographs that li…"
1"The bar’s regulars—an eclectic mix of ex‑soldiers, night‑shift workers, and the occasional poet—watched him with a wary respect that had not faded since the day…"
2"She turned, eyes widening for a heartbeat, then narrowing into an expression that balanced surprise and something else—an unreadable weight that settled between…"
3"He laughed—a soft, restrained sound that seemed to come from a place deep within, as if he were remembering a joke told in a different decade."
4"He nodded, the old habit of people who have spent years calibrating words tugging at his expression."
5"It was as if the world outside pressed against the bar, seeking entry."
6"The bartender, a gaunt man with a scarred hand, polished a glass, his eyes flicking between them, sensing the unspoken current."
7"She looked up, her bright blue eyes catching the neon’s glow, turning the green into a shade of envy she could not name."
8"The sound of thunder rolled low, a distant rumble that seemed to underline the unspoken words hanging between them."
9"She turned, her steps echoing on the wet tiles, the scar on her wrist glinting in the flickering light one last time."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"he asked, the question hanging between them, unsheathed and precise"
1"he said, his voice raw"
2"he whispered, the word barely audible over the hum"
3"she asked, voice soft, almost a whisper against the storm"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
1"he whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.22
leniency0.44
rawRatio0.182
effectiveRatio0.08
67.1281%