Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ01HZAVP091P4C3M60TGNVH

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Duration:
51.8s
Cost:
$0.007712
Provider:
Xiaomi

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The gate didn't exist. Not in the way gates usually did. It was a suggestion of light between two of the old oaks in Richmond Park, a shimmer that wasn't quite a trick of the evening sun. Rory stopped, her delivery bag slung over one shoulder, its contents forgotten. "This is the place?" Eva whispered, her hand tightening on Rory's arm. "That's what the address said." Rory didn't take her eyes off the shimmer. The Heartstone pendant lay cold against her chest, a stark contrast to its usual faint warmth. It felt like a lump of ice. Nyx materialized from the shadow of a nearby oak, their form a deep purple in the gathering dusk. "The Veil is thin here. A wound that never fully closed." "Comforting," Eva muttered. Rory took a breath, the scent of damp earth and something sweeter, like honey and old leaves, filling her lungs. She stepped forward. The shimmer didn't break or part. It simply stopped being there, and the world beyond it unfolded. The air changed first. It grew still, thick, and tasted of ancient pollen. The sounds of the park—the distant drone of traffic, the rustle of other walkers—vanished, replaced by a profound silence that hummed in her ears. They stood in a grove, but not of the park. The trees were oaks, impossibly vast, their trunks wider than cars, their bark carved with spiraling patterns that glowed with a faint, silver light. A soft, diffused luminescence came from everywhere and nowhere, casting no shadows. "Whoa," Eva breathed, her voice swallowed by the stillness. The ground beneath their feet was moss, a carpet of emerald so thick it swallowed their steps. Tiny, luminous flowers dotted its surface, pulsing with gentle blues and purples. They grew in deliberate patterns, pathways leading deeper into the grove. Wildflowers bloomed in defiance of season—white moonflowers unfurling beside scarlet blooms that had no name, their petals edged in gold. Rory knelt, touching a flower. It was cool and smooth as porcelain. When she lifted her hand, a faint dusting of luminous pollen clung to her fingertips. "Time is... wrong here," Nyx said, their whispery voice holding a new note of unease. They gestured with a smoky hand. "The sun. Look." Rory looked up. Through the canopy, the sky was not the deepening blue of London evening. It was a pale, milky lavender, streaked with clouds of rose-gold. The sun, or what stood for it, was a hazy orb of white fire, neither rising nor setting. It hung fixed in the sky. "How long have we been here?" Eva asked, her eyes wide. "Minutes," Rory said. But the light felt like it had been constant for hours. They moved along a mossy path, drawn by a low, resonant hum that vibrated up through the soles of their shoes. The air grew warmer, carrying the scent of ozone and growing things. The spiraling patterns on the trees grew more intricate, depicting not just shapes but what looked like constellations, or maps of impossible cities. Rory ran her fingers over one carving. It felt warm. "Look at this." Eva pointed to the base of a tree. A ring of pale mushrooms circled its trunk, each cap glowing with a soft, internal pulse. As they watched, the pulses synchronized, a slow, rhythmic throb like a heartbeat. A flicker of movement. Rory’s hand went to the Fae-Forged Blade tucked into her belt. Isolde's gift. It was always cold, a point of sharp reality against the overwhelming strangeness. From behind a curtain of weeping willows—whose fronds were silver and chimed softly as they brushed together—a figure emerged. She moved without sound, her bare feet leaving no mark on the luminous moss. Silver hair fell to her waist, and her eyes were the color of pale lavender, holding a depth that made Rory's head swim. Isolde Varga. The Seer. "You walk a path that walks back," Isolde said. Her voice was a melody, each word distinct yet part of a riddle. She tilted her head, her gaze landing on Rory. "The stone of hearts grows cold. The shadow clings like a second skin. And the little chef carries a kitchen knife made of moonlight." "I..." Rory began. "Questions are stones thrown into still water," Isolde interrupted, not harshly, but with a finality that closed the subject. "They make ripples. But the water seeks its own level again. Come." She turned and glided deeper into the grove. They followed, passing under arches of woven branches where flowers bloomed that smelled of vanilla and rain. They crossed a stream whose water was clear as glass and flowed over smooth, rainbow-hued stones. Rory saw her reflection—her black hair, her blue eyes—and for a terrifying second, the reflection stared back with violet eyes and a shadow for a face. She blinked, and it was gone. Unease prickled at the base of her skull. This place was beautiful, but it was not safe. The wonder was a veneer over something vast and alien. Isolde stopped in a clearing. In its center stood a single standing stone, not carved from rock, but from a single piece of dark, polished wood. It pulsed with the same silver light as the tree carvings, and at its base, a pool of water lay perfectly still. "This is the memory," Isolde said. "The first lie told under an oak. The first promise broken to the wind. It remembers. And it judges." Rory approached the pool. She didn't see her reflection. Instead, she saw a stormy sky over a dark ocean. A ship. A woman on the deck, her face contorted in grief, slamming her hands against the railing. The image shifted. A boy in a field of poppies, laughing, then dissolving into a cloud of golden dust. "It shows you your threads," Isolde whispered from behind her. "The ones you've cut. The ones you've tangled." Rory pulled back, shaking. The pendant against her chest gave a single, weak throb of warmth, then went cold again. "Why bring us here?" Eva asked, her usual bravado gone, replaced by a raw, genuine curiosity. Isolde's lavender eyes fixed on Eva. "The little baker asks for the recipe before she tastes the bread. Some loaves are not for eating. They are for remembering." She looked at Rory. "A door is opening in the city of sin. Gluttony's prince grows bored with his feasts. He seeks a new spice." Dymas. The word hung unspoken. "What does that have to do with us?" Rory asked, her voice steady. "The spice he seeks is not from his gardens. It is from the cracks. From the thin places. From the woman who carries a stone that warms near his gates." Isolde smiled, a slow, unsettling curve of her lips. "He is curious. Curiosity is a hungry mouth." Nyx stirred, their shadow-form thickening. "We are being watched." "Everything is watched here," Isolde said. "The trees have eyes. The moss has ears. The silence is full of whispers." She walked to the standing stone and touched it. A low hum filled the clearing, and a section of the moss near her feet depressed, revealing a small, hollow cavity. Inside lay a slender, leaf-shaped dagger. It was made of a pale, silvery metal that seemed to drink the ambient light. Isolde picked it up. It shone, a cold, pure luminescence. "This is a truth. It cuts through glamour and deceit. It remembers the taste of demon blood." She held it out to Rory, hilt first. "Me?" Rory took a step back. "You walked in. You saw the wrong sky. You looked into the memory pool and did not scream." Isolde's gaze was relentless. "You are the one in the thread. The little chef, delivering more than food. Take it." Rory looked at the dagger. It was beautiful, deadly, and radiated a cold that had nothing to do with temperature. The pendant on her chest remained inert, a dead weight. Slowly, she reached out and took the Fae-Forged Blade. It was colder than ice, a shock that traveled up her arm and settled in her bones. But in her hand, it felt right. Balanced. A tool made for her grasp. "The feasts in the amber sky have courses," Isolde said, her voice dropping to a murmur. "Each more exquisite. But the final course is never served to the guests. It is served to the host." She began to fade, her edges blurring into the silvery light of the grove. "Watch for the invitations. They will be written in smoke and hunger." And she was gone. Only the scent of moonflowers and the lingering chill of the dagger in Rory's hand proved she'd been there. The grove was silent again, but a different kind of silence now. Not peaceful, but waiting. The hum of the standing stone faded. The lavender sky began to deepen, the fixed sun finally starting to sink. "We need to go," Nyx said, their form already dissolving at the edges. "The path back is closing." They turned, following the mossy trails back toward the shimmering gate. The wildflowers pulsed as they passed, a silent, luminous farewell. Rory clutched the dagger, its cold a constant reminder. The grove had given them a weapon. It hadn't said what they were supposed to fight. As they stepped back through the shimmer, the rush of London's sounds, the smell of car exhaust, and the chill of the evening air hit them like a physical blow. Eva gasped, stumbling. The sun was gone, replaced by city lights and a deep purple twilight. They had been in the grove for what felt like an hour. Outside, barely ten minutes had passed. Rory stood on the grass, the Fae blade hidden in her jacket, the Heartstone a cold lump against her skin. The wonders of the grove were already fading, becoming dreamlike. But the unease remained, solid and real. The Seer's words echoed. *The final course is never served to the guests.*
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.622
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.01% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1668
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"perfectly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"perfectly"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
25.06% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1668
totalAiIsms25
found
0
word"stark"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count2
2
word"comforting"
count1
3
word"profound"
count1
4
word"silence"
count3
5
word"porcelain"
count1
6
word"vibrated"
count1
7
word"intricate"
count1
8
word"pulse"
count1
9
word"synchronized"
count1
10
word"rhythmic"
count1
11
word"throb"
count2
12
word"flicker"
count1
13
word"pulsed"
count2
14
word"unspoken"
count1
15
word"weight"
count1
16
word"chill"
count2
17
word"reminder"
count1
18
word"echoed"
count1
highlights
0"stark"
1"warmth"
2"comforting"
3"profound"
4"silence"
5"porcelain"
6"vibrated"
7"intricate"
8"pulse"
9"synchronized"
10"rhythmic"
11"throb"
12"flicker"
13"pulsed"
14"unspoken"
15"weight"
16"chill"
17"reminder"
18"echoed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences132
matches
0"d in grief"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences132
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences145
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords9
totalWords1661
ratio0.005
matches
0"The final course is never served to the guests."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
62.88% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions65
wordCount1320
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.74
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Rory23
Heartstone2
London2
Fae-Forged2
Blade2
Varga1
Seer2
Isolde13
Eva8
Dymas1
Nyx4
Fae3
persons
0"Rory"
1"Blade"
2"Seer"
3"Isolde"
4"Eva"
5"Dymas"
6"Nyx"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Fae-Forged"
4"Fae"
globalScore0.629
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences94
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"quite a trick of the evening sun"
1"felt like a lump of ice"
2"felt like it had been constant for hour"
3"looked like constellations, or maps of im"
4"metal that seemed to drink the ambient light"
5"felt like an hour"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches5
per1kWords3.01
wordCount1661
matches
0"neither rising nor"
1"not just shapes but what looked like constellations"
2"not harshly, but with a finality"
3"not carved from rock, but from a single piece of dark, polished wood"
4"Not peaceful, but waiting"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences145
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs49
mean33.9
std21.78
cv0.642
sampleLengths
049
112
236
329
43
540
683
79
860
927
1024
1151
1211
1314
1466
1540
1630
1756
184
1955
203
2131
2273
2327
2448
2525
2656
2718
2820
2916
3053
315
3213
3347
349
3571
3627
378
386
3938
4070
4161
4223
4336
4418
4546
4664
4741
489
91.97% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences132
matches
0"was gone"
1"was made"
2"was gone"
3"were supposed"
4"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs225
matches
0"were already fading"
64.04% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences145
ratio0.028
matches
0"The sounds of the park—the distant drone of traffic, the rustle of other walkers—vanished, replaced by a profound silence that hummed in her ears."
1"Wildflowers bloomed in defiance of season—white moonflowers unfurling beside scarlet blooms that had no name, their petals edged in gold."
2"From behind a curtain of weeping willows—whose fronds were silver and chimed softly as they brushed together—a figure emerged."
3"Rory saw her reflection—her black hair, her blue eyes—and for a terrifying second, the reflection stared back with violet eyes and a shadow for a face."
82.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1333
adjectiveStacks3
stackExamples
0"lay cold against her"
1"over smooth, rainbow-hued stones."
2"slender, leaf-shaped dagger."
adverbCount36
adverbRatio0.02700675168792198
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.008252063015753939
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences145
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences145
mean11.46
std7.1
cv0.62
sampleLengths
04
17
226
312
412
513
616
77
818
911
103
1120
123
136
1411
154
169
1724
1810
1924
2012
219
2217
2312
2411
2520
265
277
2815
2915
306
313
323
3313
3411
3518
366
3711
383
3911
4021
4112
4223
437
443
4511
4616
4713
484
4911
51.03% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.3310344827586207
totalSentences145
uniqueOpeners48
83.33% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences120
matches
0"Instead, she saw a stormy"
1"Slowly, she reached out and"
2"Only the scent of moonflowers"
ratio0.025
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences120
matches
0"It was a suggestion of"
1"It felt like a lump"
2"She stepped forward."
3"It simply stopped being there,"
4"It grew still, thick, and"
5"They stood in a grove,"
6"They grew in deliberate patterns,"
7"It was cool and smooth"
8"They gestured with a smoky"
9"It was a pale, milky"
10"It hung fixed in the"
11"They moved along a mossy"
12"It felt warm."
13"It was always cold, a"
14"She moved without sound, her"
15"Her voice was a melody,"
16"She tilted her head, her"
17"She turned and glided deeper"
18"They followed, passing under arches"
19"They crossed a stream whose"
ratio0.283
39.17% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount101
totalSentences120
matches
0"The gate didn't exist."
1"It was a suggestion of"
2"Rory stopped, her delivery bag"
3"Eva whispered, her hand tightening"
4"Rory didn't take her eyes"
5"The Heartstone pendant lay cold"
6"It felt like a lump"
7"Nyx materialized from the shadow"
8"Rory took a breath, the"
9"She stepped forward."
10"The shimmer didn't break or"
11"It simply stopped being there,"
12"The air changed first."
13"It grew still, thick, and"
14"The sounds of the park—the"
15"They stood in a grove,"
16"The trees were oaks, impossibly"
17"A soft, diffused luminescence came"
18"Eva breathed, her voice swallowed"
19"The ground beneath their feet"
ratio0.842
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences120
matches(empty)
ratio0
91.84% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The trees were oaks, impossibly vast, their trunks wider than cars, their bark carved with spiraling patterns that glowed with a faint, silver light."
1"Wildflowers bloomed in defiance of season—white moonflowers unfurling beside scarlet blooms that had no name, their petals edged in gold."
2"Silver hair fell to her waist, and her eyes were the color of pale lavender, holding a depth that made Rory's head swim."
3"It was beautiful, deadly, and radiated a cold that had nothing to do with temperature."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags23
uselessAdditionCount8
matches
0"Eva whispered, her hand tightening on Rory's arm"
1"Eva asked, her eyes wide"
2"Isolde interrupted, not harshly, but with a finality that closed the subject"
3"Eva asked, her usual bravado gone, replaced by a raw, genuine curiosity"
4"Rory asked, her voice steady"
5"Isolde said, her voice dropping to a murmur"
6"She began, her edges blurring into the silvery light of the grove"
7"Nyx said, their form already dissolving at the edges"
14.86% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Eva whispered (whisper)"
1"Eva muttered (mutter)"
2"Eva breathed (breathe)"
3"Isolde interrupted (interrupt)"
4"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.405
leniency0.811
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.27
73.2398%